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Takashi Sorimachi - Poison (Movie Mix)

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Real1
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Real1
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on den 9 mars 2011 at 22:37:20

Artist: Takashi Sorimachi
Title: Poison (Movie Mix)
Source: GTO The Movie
Tags: great teacher onizuka live action
BPM: 138,07
Filesize: 4980kb
Play Time: 04:13
Difficulties Available:
  1. Onizuka (4,87 stars, 557 notes)
  2. Teacher (4,23 stars, 369 notes)
  3. Trainee (2,23 stars, 133 notes)
Download: Takashi Sorimachi - Poison (Movie Mix)
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Beatmap number 20!

About the alignment on 00:30:231 (1) on [Onizuka], it has to be like that or it looks bad in play mode! So stop mentioning that!

I started this map a long time ago. I just couldn't nail the timing. Then Starrodkirby86 was my saviour and helped me get my final timing right. It may still be slightly off. A pro is welcomed to check it.

This is, obviously, another version of "Poison" an early map of mine. I have tried to use elements from all my previous maps in this one. It's cool to see how far I have come since the old Poison.


Enjoy.

Edit #1: Fixed most of Xgor's changes. Not all though, the HP drain,no 0.5x timing section and antijumps stays.
Edit #2: SadKangaroo's edit. I changed some of his stuff.. About the alignment on 00:30:231 (1) on [Onizuka], it has to be like that or it looks bad in play mode!
Edit #3: Some of Frill's suggestions!
Edit #4: Few of Colin Hou's suggestions.
Edit #5; Most of Leordas suggestions.
Edit #6: A few of Vass Bass's suggestions.
Edit #7: Some of VanMonky's suggestions!
Edit #8: Most of gyt's suggestions!
Edit #9: A bunch of Nivalis' suggestions!
Edit #10: As this is actually a 2009 map, I self-modded it a bit.
Last edited by Real1 , edited 18 times in total.
Xgor
Elite Mapper
2,534 posts
Joined April 2009
Xgor
[Combo colours]
The second combo colour blends a bit with the backgrounds and makes it hard to see the approach circle.

[Folder]
Remove osb.........

[All difficulties]
01:22:378 (1) - I think it sounds soo much better if you end this spinner 1/1 earlier
02:21:479 (1) - ^

[Trainee]
00:18:280 (1,1) - The jump is somewhat harsh for the easiest difficulity and it's pretty hard to know when to press the second slider if you don't know the song as it falls on a red tick.

01:17:598 (2,3,4) - Move up a grid (Level 3)
02:16:698 (2,3,4) - Move down a grid (Level 3)


[Trainer]
00:19:149 (2) - Move up two grids (Level 3)
00:19:149 (2,1) - Ughh I'm not found of anti-jumps like this even there is a new combo on the second circle.
00:30:231 - Maybe add a circle here.
00:50:438 (4) - Move one grid left and two grids down (Level 3)
00:50:655 (5) - Move two grids left and one grid down (level 3)
03:44:876 (3) - Add circle here.


[Onizuka]
Please lower the HP drain.
Why not change the BPM to 0,5x on the slow part on this, I mean the spacing is in 0,5

00:20:670 (4,5) - Move one grid to the right (level 3)
00:29:579 (3,1) - Illogical anti-jump D:
00:30:231 (1,2,3,4) - God this looks ugly.

Well. It's okay but if felt like somethings missing but I dunno what (The later parts on Teacher were great though). There is also tons of more of those move one grid, that are for aliment and symmetry but the almost feels like they are intentional because there is so many :/
Anyways there isn't so many technical problems so here's a star.
*Star*
IceBeam
osu! Alumni
1,957 posts
Joined December 2009
IceBeam
Hello Real1.

[Trainee]
00:21:322 (2) - I feel like adding a circle here.
00:24:799 (2) - ^
01:37:805 (6) - Maybe move to 01:37:588 (6)?
02:07:573 (1) - Adding some hitsound at this point? Sounds a bit obscure to me.
02:07:573 (1) - Add a circle here? and move the slider to 02:07:573?

[Teacher]
00:31:969 (3) - Adding a finish?
00:42:616 (1) - Maybe using a clap in the end of a slider instead of whistles?
00:43:485 (2) - ^
00:56:739 (1) - Remove maybe? Sounds better w/o it.
01:47:583 (2) - Something wrong with it.Maybe add a circle here and move the slider to 01:47:800?
01:55:839 (1) - Remove?

[Onizuka]
00:21:322 (6) - Adding a circle? Sounds better to me,and you could also make a jump here.
00:24:799 (4) - ^
00:30:231 (1) - Allign the whole moment,please.
01:15:642 (4) - Spacing.Move 1 grid up.
03:05:118 (6) - Oh,remove a finish from the whole slider,and add it only in the 03:05:340 point.
03:05:784 (1) - Remove?
03:16:446 (1,2,3,4) - Making jumps here?
03:50:873 (5) - Spacing.Move 1 grid up.
03:51:761 (9) - ^


Good luck with it,have a star~
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Frill
[General]

- You should cut the mp3

[Trainee]

01:24:986 - this green line move to spinner end imo(01:24:334 - )?
02:23:869 - ^ move to spinner end imo( 02:23:434 - )

[Teacher]

00:59:346 - this green line move to 00:59:998 - (1) and add a Finish?
01:54:753 (7) - New combo
01:24:986 - - this green line move to 01:24:334?
02:23:869 - ^ move to 02:23:434 - (umm.. all dif)

[Onizuka]

Fun.




Nice map~

+Star
Colin Hou
osu! Alumni
4,456 posts
Joined November 2009
Colin Hou
[General]:
  1. combo color #1 & #2 are quite alike, do some change may get things better.
[Trainee]:
  1. check the time points:
    • 1. Offset: 18,280ms BPM: 138.07 I got this by double clicking that note.
      2. Offset: 59,997ms BPM: Inhereted (1x) KIAI start here?
      3. Offset: 84,333ms BPM: Inhereted (1x) KIAI ends at the here may be better?
      4. Offset: 119,098ms BPM: Inhereted (1x) KIAI here :3
      5. Offset: 143,433ms BPM: Inhereted (1x) and ends here.
  2. Good.
[Teacher]:
  1. same timing issue exist in this diff, maybe that's caused by changing the BPM after u finished the mapping.
  2. also, all the time sections should be fixed, not only the following ones.
  3. 02:47:335 (1) - a little bit off, I'm not sure about the current BPM and tried to get one but failed X[
  4. 03:16:446 (T) - KIAI here? and end at 03:28:662.
  5. 03:41:322 (T) - start KIAI at here, and end at 04:06:198
  6. 04:13:306 (T) - let the KIAI start here.
[Onizuka]:
  1. 00:30:231 (1,2,3,4) - lol, stack them, they are a little confusing now
  2. HP -1? some blanks are a bit long and the HP drains fast
  3. 02:49:792 (8) - new combo?
notes placements are quite nice, but the timing seems not correct. I'm not good at it, maybe a pro timing help is needed.

star~
Leorda
4,416 posts
Joined June 2009
Leorda
Hej

[Timing]
In first offset, why [Trainee] offset is 18.280 and the rest is 18.281? Make sure the offset is same as other!

[Skin]
The section-fail.wav is missing

[Trainee]
01:01:301 (4) - Move 1 grid left?
01:06:298 (1,2,3) - The distance are broken, 01:06:516 (2,3) must move 1 grid down, so the spacing are same as all distance, like 00:56:086 (6,7)
02:05:399 (1,2,3) - The distance are broken too, 02:05:616 (2,3) must move 1 grid up, so that the spacing are same as all distance......

[Teacher]
00:57:825 (2) - Move 3 grid left?
03:29:994 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - Overfinish D:

[Onizuka]
Circle Size -1? Or else, I hate this diff

00:30:665 (2,3,4) - Is not stack with 1
01:37:805 (7) - Allign with 4?

Good song
STAR
Starrodkirby86
osu! Alumni
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Here since the beginning
Starrodkirby86
Revived f(o.o)
Vass_Bass
943 posts
Joined October 2009
Vass_Bass
Hi~
Thx for the interesting translate of my name xD

General
I think BG is small

[Trainee]
00:19:801 (1) - do it simmetrical
00:48:700 (3,4) - move it near the end of the slider
00:51:742 (3,4) - 1 grid down
01:00:433 (2,3,4) - 1 grid left
01:06:951 (4) - 1 grid right

[Teacher]
00:24:799 (1) - seems bad, i think you need to move is in another place
00:40:878 (6) - do it simmetrical
00:59:998 (1,2,3,4) - don't like how it seems, move (3) under (1)
01:59:099 (1,2,3,4) - like this ^
02:56:678 (1) - delete new combo?
03:41:322 (1) - 1 grid right
03:47:541 (1) - delete new combo?

[Onizuka]
00:30:231 (1) - move the begin of the slider on (2)
02:01:272 (3) - 1 grid down

Nice map, star
Real1
968 posts
Joined September 2008
Topic Starter
Real1
Thanks everyone for modding... You guys have been very helpful.

But please read the description of my map:

Real1 wrote:

About the alignment on 00:30:231 (1) on [Onizuka], it has to be like that or it looks bad in play mode! So stop mentioning that!
Vanmonky
986 posts
Joined June 2009
Vanmonky
As your request :3

Read this first for the icon explanation.
- [?] Asking for a second thought.
- [!] Fatal error. You have to fix this for sure.
- [No icon] Only a suggestion.

[General]
1. Oh, the background. Is that your graduation photo?
2. Remove "movie" from tags since source covers it. [!]
3. Capitalize the "T" of "the" word in source.
4. The kiai should be start from 00:59:998, and 01:59:099.
5. 03:15:779 - Remove this kiai.
6. 03:38:101 - Remove this kiai. Or if you still want to add a kiai here, move it to 03:41:322.
7. 04:12:640 - ^ But if you want to make burst effect, move it to 04:13:306.
8. I found some parts are empty like 01:03:692 and 01:05:430 in [Trainee] and [Teacher]. Consider adding some notes? Do not let people think you are out of idea.
9. Add more finish. There are many cymbal's sounds at the song.

[Trainee]
-- It's okay if you don't follow the combo mod.
-- I highly suggest you to remap the second kiai instead of copying from the first kiai.

00:19:801 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:23:278 (1) - ^
00:30:013 (1) - ^
00:31:317 (1) - ^
01:06:951 (4) - Add finish at the beginning.
01:14:556 (3) - Remove new combo. [?]

[Teacher]
00:23:060 (4) - Based on the combo pattern I found, you should add new combo here.
00:24:799 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:28:275 (1) - ^
00:46:092 (7,1) - Swap finish.
00:58:477 (1) - Add one more repeat.
01:57:795 (1) - Move backward one 1/2 tick. Then add 4 more repeats.
02:46:683 - Lower the volume. You may use the current volume on 03:01:342.
03:37:990 (1) - Remove new combo.
03:40:211 (1) - ^
03:44:876 - Add a note here instead of leave it blank.
03:46:208 (1) - Remove new combo.
03:47:763 (1) - ^
03:53:094 (1) - ^
03:58:424 (1) - ^
Oh I found a lot of such this combo pattern @@ Okay I think the combo pattern is fine. you may ignore the previous combo mod.
04:06:643 - Add break.
04:09:974 (1) - Remove new combo. Lol another combo mod.
04:12:417 (1) - ^

[Onizuka]
-- OD -1? This fits the song more.
-- Won't comment about the combo anymore.
-- I found a lot of sliders unstacked properly.
-- No major issue found.

04:09:530 (2,1,2,3,4) - Remove finish.
Star.
Real1
968 posts
Joined September 2008
Topic Starter
Real1
1. Oh, the background. Is that your graduation photo?
Haha, no, it's from GTO the movie! :P

Thanks for your mod and your time!
gyt
405 posts
Here since the beginning
gyt
[Trainee]
01:34:763 (1) - move it to 1/2 right (to the red line)
01:52:146 (1) - move it to 1/2 right (to the red line)

[Teacher]
00:46:092 (7) - delete clap? (and maybe delete circle)
01:32:156 (4,5,1) - strange looking - maybe move (1,2,3,4) to 11 :lol: grid left
03:19:111 (3) - delete finish at the end and add whistle (at start and end)?
03:26:441 (4) - add whistle at start
04:10:418 (3) - replace to circle?

[Onizuka]
Super-cool diff!
00:30:231 (1,2) - place it in stack :lol:
02:47:335 (1) - 02:58:233 (5) - add some whistles? For example:
--02:48:904 (4,5) - whistle?
--02:56:011 (6) - whistle (at start and end)?
--02:57:788 (3,4) - whistle?
03:19:999 (1) - delete clap?
03:24:219 (3) - add finish?
03:24:442 (4) - delete finish? (and maybe delete circle)
03:31:771 (2) - replace finish to whistle?
03:37:102 (1) - delete clap?
04:10:641 (4) - delete circle?

P.S. I help your maps without any immoral reasons. I simply love them. :)
Real1
968 posts
Joined September 2008
Topic Starter
Real1

gyt wrote:

P.S. I help your maps without any immoral reasons. I simply love them. :)
<3
I feel you make really good maps too... And unique. It's time you get your maps ranked man!

Thank you very much! Good mod!
Niva
Global Moderator
3,187 posts
Joined November 2009
Niva
Hi Real1, a random mod to waste my empty time :D
Stumbled upon this on your profile, so...

[General]
-> Background is not 4:3 (I guess...) and it's too small, also I think it's better to have a .jpg picture rather than .png
-> Start the first kiai time at 59,346ms, second kiai time at 118,447ms 119,099ms feels better to me
-> You can shorten the last spinner by 1/2, but this is optional

[Trainee]
00:51:742 (3,4) - One grid up maybe?
01:14:556 (1) - Suddenly linear curve? I don't think it's fit here
01:54:319 (6) - Unexpected change of spacing?
02:13:657 (1) - Same as 01:14

[Teacher]
00:20:888 (5) - Add whistle at start? Also I think it should be waved more.
00:40:878 (6) - Ugly slider curve in my opinion.
00:57:825 (2) - Change clap to finish?
01:06:951 (3) - Add whistle at start?
01:38:457 (1,2,3) - Place these three in a slider fan?
03:07:117 (1) - Why not place in center?
03:54:871 (1,2,3,4) - Not equally spaced

I'll mod [Onizuka] tomorrow morning Indonesian time, Here it is:
[Onizuka]
00:31:100 (4) - Add whistle at start?
01:11:080 (4,1) - Tricky spacing :(
02:14:091 (2) - One grid down (or just hold Shift while placing, just to be sure)
03:19:111 (4) - Why not make this at a same height with (2)?

Nice map, star! xD
TTTTTTTTTTTT
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Joined August 2009
TTTTTTTTTTTT
starr~
Real1
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Joined September 2008
Topic Starter
Real1

TTTTTTTTTTTT wrote:

starr~
Thank you, sir!
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