This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on sábado, 22 de enero de 2011 at 19:54:33

Artist: Xi-on
Title: Fall of Fall ~ Autumnal Waterfall
Source: Touhou
Tags: inubashiri momiji Mountain of Faith
BPM: 164
Filesize: 6676kb
Play Time: 02:30
Difficulties Available:

1. Easy (2,81 stars, 183 notes)
2. Hard (4,6 stars, 323 notes)
3. Lunatic (5 stars, 762 notes)

Download: Xi-on - Fall of Fall ~ Autumnal Waterfall
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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1st Beatmap

Remaking all the maps =/ (depressing) - Insane Done

01/01/2011 (change SB) / Need re-download

03/01/2011 (New distance snap)

Use BPM 164 and Offset 1485 roughly. Make sure you have Beatsnap divisor set to 1/2, you shouldn't really have any notes on blue ticks. After you change the offset click up top, Timing > Resnap all notes, then go through the song and make sure the notes fall on the right beat aka 'tick'.

You're going to have to re-do a lot of note's positioning and slider lengths. When you're repositioning or mapping, make sure you have 'Distance Spacing' set to on. You can turn it on by pressing 'Y' and adjusting it by holding Alt and scrolling your mouse wheel. This makes sure notes are evenly spaced and not confusing to play.

You should probably read the Beatmapping FAQ located here. http://osu.ppy.sh/p/faq#

me gusto el mapa :3
tienes un don wn xd
para ser el primer mapa ta la raja

+1 por que es del Touhou
+1 me gustó
+1 vas por buen camino
estrellado

Red: You must fix this.
Blue: You'd better do sth with this imo.
Green: Just suggestions.

[General]
delete .osb file and re full-submit it.

mod [Insane] as your request.

"you must use hitsounds." (i tried to add some)
this is... really a little crazy lol.
00:07:338 (8) - remap this slider, it is stacking on itself, means unrankable.
00:11:911 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - very strange beats to me. i suggest a remap.
00:24:533 (1) - unrankable slider.
00:53:802 (5) - new combo?
01:14:289 (1) - 1 grid down.
01:22:338 (4,3,6) - new combo since this is 1/3 parts.
01:22:460 (1) - remove new combo.
01:33:314 - add a note?
01:42:643 (1,2,3) - not perfect stacked.
02:27:826 (1) - end 1/4 later plz.
02:51:241 (6) - new combo?
03:03:864 (1) - remove new combo?
03:25:082 (1,2,3) - not perfect stacked.
03:30:021 (10) - 2 grid right.

Download: Xi-on - Fall of Fall ~ Autumnal Waterfall (Art-FzTT) [Insane hitsounds].osu

wow thx u n the for the suggest i made great changes

[General]

1. El timing no es el mismo en todas las dificultades, específicamente en [Hard]. Cambia todas las líneas rojas por verdes.
2. El preview point no es el mismo en todas las dificultades.
3. Borra el .osb de la carpeta y haz un Full Submit.
4. Elimina "Touhou" de source ya que está en las tags. Es redundante escribirlo dos veces.
5. 4 minutos es... demasiado largo para un mapa. Aunque tal vez si pueda ser rankeado.
6. Un consejo general para todas las dificultades... trata de hacer que los combos se guíen por la música, con todo eso de la Time Signature 4/4.
7. Estás seguro que el artista es "Xi-on"? Algo me dice que necesita una corrección, pero lo único que encuentro es "~xi-on~".

[Easy]

1. La dificultad en Song Setup está demasiado alta para un Easy. O_o
2. Trata de espaciar adecuadamente los beats, al menos en un mismo combo. Hay veces donde los círculos cubren tantito el siguiente y en otras no, lo cual hace ver el mapa un tanto desorganizado.

~ ~ ~

Dándole un vistazo al mapa veo que está bien hecho.
Voy a moddear el mapa en sí cuando arregles todo esto. Por el momento te doy la estrella.

si le cambio a ~xi-on~ se me crea 1 nuevo post .. y hay una cancion de xi-on
http://osu.ppy.sh/s/11940

sobre tags y source no se si se me cree 1 nuevo post asi q mejor lo dejo asi ..como ves arriba en la cancion q puse tb tiene 2 touhou

y el preview es necesario dejarlos iguales ? " si es necesario lo cambio "

luego me aplico con hard y easy porq tengo mucho trabajo =D y lo unico q le e tomado tiempo es a insane


gracias por los datos =) y por la estrellita :3

IRC mod.
Star!

[insane]
0:19:228 (1) Spacing 1/2 x should be started from (6,1).
0:57:790 (7) Suggestion: move right 1/2 grid so that (6,7,1) makes a stright line?
1:11:088 (1) Suggestion: Don't make the stream spacing too small here...
1:21:424 (5) Up 1 grid such that (1,5) are on the same level?
2:19:317 (2-) Down 1 grid such that the streams are on the same level with (1)?
3:00:021 (6) Down/left 1 grid
3:06:789 (2) Too near to the margin?
3:29:930 (8) left 1 grid

[hard]
0:21:789 (1,2,3) Suggestion: Either put all of them at the same place or larger spacing distance?
1:53:984 (2,3) right 1 grid?
2:07:246 (1) Put back into the grid (left/up)
2:57:167 (4) down 1 grid?

[Easy]
That's "easy" so reduce HP drain and overall difficulty.
In this difficulty, different spacing distance is used in different combos like 0:16:850's combo and 0:20:143's combo. Advised to unique and resnap this one.

Star~

awesome map&song
star:333

star

Easy;

OD - lower by 3
HP drain - lower by 2
00:04:045 (6) - In line with 2 & 4.
00:09:167 (3,4,5,6) - Spacing.
00:16:118 (8) - In line with 4 & 6.
00:20:143 (1,2) - Spacing.
00:50:874 (5) - ^
01:36:972 (3,4) - Hard to read.
01:38:435 (1,2,3,4,5) - Spacing.
01:45:203 (2) - ^
01:48:679 (5,7) - ^
01:49:777 (1) - ^
01:53:801 (1) - ^
01:55:264 (5) - ^
01:57:826 (3,4) - ^
02:00:021 (2) - ^
02:05:509 (4,5,6,7) - ^
02:12:094 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - ^
02:23:802 (1) - ^
02:35:143 (3) - ^
02:38:070 (1) - ^
02:45:387 to 02:49:777 - ^
02:57:094 (6) - ^
02:58:558 (2) - ^
03:01:119 (3,4) - ^
03:05:875 to 03:08:070 - ^
03:17:216 to 03:20:509 - ^
03:27:460 (1,2,3,4) - Stack these.

Hard;

00:55:630 (7,8,9) - Spacing.
01:08:985 (1) - ^

Yeah, OK.

This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.

ty kurai

I ♥ Jump ~

-IRC Mod

[Hard]
-01:40:081 Los slider no puden salir de la pantalla y tampoco quedar debajo de la barra de hp.

[Insane]
-Me parece haberte dicho q borraras los timing points despues de usarlos para hacer saltos u_u
-01:41:545 (6) no escondas mucho los sliders, a menos que se note un borde (más de lo que se ve ahora) o algo para distinguirlo y tambien poder ver que tiene repeticion.

Mmm sobre los hitsounds, quiza un poco repetitivos los claps pero creo que esta bn.

Esop saludos.
StaR

PD: Recuerda dar kudosus a los que te han posteado algun mod y has usado algo de el. (para dar el kudosu solo tienes q apretar "Give Kudos" que esta un poco mas abajo del avatar del usuario, en el post obviamente).

Bivuendo

[General]
Delete "Touhou" in tags, since that word in Source

[Easy]
00:07:338 (1) - Add a finish at the start of slider
00:10:264 (6) - Add a finish
00:18:313 (3) - Add a finish at the end of slider
00:36:606 (2) - Add a finish at the start of slider
00:42:459 (1) - Add a finish
00:45:387 (1) - ^
00:54:167 (2) - ^
01:04:228 (1) - ^
01:10:997 (7) - Add a finish at the end of slider
01:17:581 (1) - Add a finish
01:20:508 (6) - ^
01:29:289 (1) - ^
01:46:850 (4) - New combo?
01:46:484 (3) - Add a finish
01:49:777 (1) - Add a finish at the start of slider
01:52:703 (5) - ^
01:53:801 (1) - Move the new combo to 01:52:703 (5)?
02:13:192 (1) - Add a finish at the start of slider
02:16:119 (2) - Add a finish
02:21:972 (2) - Add a finish at the start of slider
02:27:826 (4) - ^
02:33:680 (1) - Add a finish
02:39:533 (1) - ^
02:57:094 (1) - Add a finish at the start of slider
03:02:948 (1) - Add a finish
03:11:728 (5) - Add a finish at the start of slider
03:14:655 (2) - Add a finish
03:17:582 (4) - ^
03:19:045 (1) - ^
03:20:509 (5) - ^
03:26:363 (3) - Add a finish at the start of slider
03:27:826 (2) - I think this so confuse for beginner player, when overlapped by previous slider, IMO
03:29:289 (4) - Add a finish at the start of slider
03:30:387 (1) - Add a finish
03:37:704 (1) - Add a finish at the end of slider
03:48:131 (2) - Add a finish
03:48:863 (4) - Add a finish at the start of slider
03:49:777 (5) - Add a finish at the end of slider

[Hard]
Timing Section :
00:01:48 4/4 164,00bpm N
00:08:61 4/4 164,00bpm N <- Useless, delete this
00:09:53 4/4 164,00bpm N <- Useless, delete this
00:14:65 4/4 164,00bpm N <- Useless, delete this
01:08:98 4/4 164,00bpm N <- Useless, delete this
01:10:08 4/4 164,00bpm N <- This make, timing is off, delete this
^ 01:13:74 4/4 1x bpm N
02:54:28 4/4 164,00bpm N <- Useless, delete this
02:55:26 4/4 164,00bpm N <- Useless, delete this
^ 03:28:74 4/4 2x bpm N
^ 03:32:81 4/4 1x bpm N

00:04:411 (1) - Move backward to white tick
00:07:338 (1) - Unrankable slider LOL (Don't let the slider overlap themself, it could be confusing other people)
00:10:265 (3) - Add a finish
00:13:192 (3) - Add a finish at the start of slider
00:18:314 (6) - Add a finish at the end of slider
00:36:606 (4) - Add a finish at the start of slider
00:42:460 (1) - ^
00:48:313 (1) - Add a finish
00:54:167 (3) - ^
00:56:911 (1) - ^
00:59:289 (1) - ^
01:00:021 (2) - ^ and new combo?
01:05:875 (1) - Add a finish
01:11:179 (5) - Add a finish at the end of slider
01:17:582 (8) - Add a finish and new combo
01:18:496 (1) - No New combo
01:20:508 (5) - Add a finish
01:29:289 (1) - ^
01:35:143 (9) - ^
01:39:350 (3) - ^
01:40:081 (5) - Add a finish at the start of slider
01:41:363 (1) - ^
01:46:485 (5) - Add a finish
02:10:265 (1) - Add a finish at the start of slider
02:13:192 (7) - ^
02:16:119 (3) - Add a finish
02:21:972 (4) - Add a finish at the start of slider
02:24:899 (10) - Unrankable slider LOL (Don't let the slider overlap themself, it could be confusing other people)
02:27:826 (11) - Add a finish
02:33:680 (7) - ^
02:39:533 (3) - ^
02:42:277 (1) - ^
02:45:387 (2) - ^
02:51:240 (2) - ^
02:56:545 (5) - Add a finish at the end of slider
03:02:948 (8) - Add a finish
03:08:253 (2) - Unrankable slider LOL (Don't let the slider overlap themself, it could be confusing other people)
03:26:362 (7) - Add a finish at the start of slider
03:29:655 (1) - Add a finish
03:38:070 (1) - Add a finish at the start of slider
03:48:131 (6) - Add a finish

[Insane]
00:36:606 (4) - New combo
02:19:137 (2) - ^
02:33:680 (7) - ^

Good rock song
STAR

Hai :3

Easy
Where is hitsounds (?) :3 (this are example for first part, hitsound's rhythm) v
00:04:411 (1) - Hitsound finish
00:12:825 (1,2) - Hitsound finish
00:19:045 (3) - Hitsound finish
00:21:972 (4) - Hitsound finish
00:22:155 (1) - Hitsound finish
00:45:387 (1) - Hitsound finish
00:49:777 (3) - Hitsound finish
00:51:240 (6) - Hitsound finish
00:54:167 (2) - Hitsound finish
00:55:630 (5) - Hitsound finish
01:04:228 (1) - Hitsound finish
01:11:728 (7) - Hitsound finish
01:18:862 (3) - Hitsound finish
01:20:142 (4,5,6) - Hitsound finish (or only 6)
01:29:289 (1) - Hitsound finish

BTW i can't mod map not finished >< i'm sorry

starr**

sorry for the delay i m trying to fix but i m a bit tired xD gonna do it tomorrow :3~

ty a lot for the hitsound i really needed that (L)

Halo Art-FzTT

[General]
Delete touhou in tags cause it's already on source
Well because this is still in WIP so I guess you still don't put any Kiai
I suggest you put first kiai in 01:11:728 until 01:23:436 and the second kiai in 02:45:387 until 03:08:802. You can use your own idea of course just don't abuse it

[Easy]
Kinda long for an easy imo, maybe shorten it until 01:23:436 ?
The breaks are kinda inconsistent, there's a break in 00:24:716, but then the same place in 02:12:094 is mapped, makes me kinda confuse
03:54:899 (1) - better put this in the previous red tick or use a spinner, either way you really should use fade out on them

[Hard]
You really don't need those multiple offsets, better delete those. Then don't forget to re-snap all notes
The light red and dark red combo colors is similar try changing them
00:08:619 (2) - this jump is too sudden and out of place
02:08:619 (3) - spacing problem
02:17:948 (2) - ^
03:08:253 (2) - this slider is confusing. I don't know where is the direction it'll go
03:29:655 (1) - move it backward to 03:29:289 then lengthen it too 03:32:216

[Insane]
There are some unintuitive spacing, like this one 00:19:228 (2,3,4,5,6,7), the space is to similar with stream it's very confusing >.<
The spacing change is kinda hard too follow, well for me it is

Good luck with your map
Star

Also Please give kudosu for those mod post

Greetings
Sorry for takin' so long
Requested mod session go

General
Offset +18 ms?

[Easy]
Plays more like Normal
I suggest to rename it, or shorten it

[Hard]
03:08:252 (2) - don't overlap sliders, it's unranked option
03:11:362 (4,5,6,7) - it must be kinda 1/8 earlier. Recheck offset of following timing section

[Insane]
16.8kk is over the ranking limits. Try to find a way to solve it (~14.5kk must be enough i think)
Ok, it's insane, but don't change spacing mid-combo. If you want to space jump, just "new combo" it.
Recheck whole the map, spacing in ~60% of it is confusing

i really like to give kudos but i dont have any =(
its my first map and a new player (noob) here sorry bout that T.T

i make some changes .. n read all the comments about some parts .. i dont like same breaks on same parts if i have 2 or more parts with the same rythm i wanna use at least 1 =) and the spacing .. gonna take a looong time to fix

ty =)

Art-FzTT wrote:

i really like to give kudos but i dont have any =(

You don't need have a kudosu to give a kudosu to modder. However, if you give kudosu, the amount of kudosu won't be decrease. So you don't need a kudosu to give the kudosu if the mod was helpful. Now click the "Give Kudosu" under the avatar, but don't click "Shoot the kudosu" in the Star Priority

[Insane] :
I feel that the difficulty is overmapped *.*
01:52:704 (8) - remove clap ?
02:28:558 (3) - ^
02:39:899 (5) - really odd to play. make this finished on the previous white tick ?
03:08:802 - you might remap this part with 0.5x timing and make it calmer :3
with 03:17:216 - 1.0x here and 03:20:509 - kiai here
(03:13:558 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - really overmapped imo )

[Hard] :
00:39:533 (6) - o.o a bit limit ... you should let a little margin
01:06:424 (2) - ^
01:00:021 (2,1) - new combo on 2, not on 1
01:21:972 (3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - 1/3 is really awful
02:07:247 (1) - move without grid and distance snap to be at the same distance of the 2 sliders

[Easy] :
a bit long for an easy ... maybe rename it "Normal" and make a true easy diff ~1:30 long

sorry for the delay...

Revived!

star~~^^

[General]
offset -40~45?(1445~1440)

[Insane]
there is part not much 2stream ex.01:20:509 (~4) - removed? @w@
01:22:064 (1) - so hard D:

easy Mod sorry, star☆

gonna refix all the distances =) and make it a bit more easy and less "random" jumps ... but not gonna delete it just making more easy to follow =)

Hola

Sugerencias que puedes seguir

~General~
Pues , porque todas las diffies tiene los colores diferentes ? ME GUSTAN LOS COLORES DE EASY como para las 3 diffies .


~Easy~

01:00:021 (1,2) : podrias reemplazar eso por un slider , acuerdate qe es easy para los noobs
01:01:667 (1,2) : ^
01:18:863 : porque no lo mueves al lado del final del slider ?
02:29:106 : un slider aca mejor ? que termine en 02:29:655
03:02:948 - 03:04:228 : que hacen esos 2 timings points hay siendo que el mapa ya termino ? BORRALOS

~Normal~

00:45:021 : subelo 2 grids (hacia arriba :B)
01:00:021 : agrega new combo
01:00:204 : remueve new combo
01:11:911 (1) : arregla el spacing de esto ponlo mas al lado del slider nose arreglalo esta muy irregular.
02:03:680 (10) : prueba con esto

~Insane~
03:17:200 : new combo
muy buena diffie (Y)


te dejo star por dedicacion , suerte!!

Buen mapa

(L)
me encanta la cancion y el mapeo. Sigue asi wn!
STAR!!!

nice map~

Me gustó tu map ~

~STAR~

Hi,sorry for delay.

Remove Touhou from Tags,it's already in Source.

Resize your BG to 800 x 600,if you could.It'd be better.
Also,map is really old,yeah,but still I'm not sure if MP3's bitrate is rankable.
Probably you should re-encode it to 256 kbps at least.

[Easy]
00:12:825 (1) - Remove Finish,it's already in (2).
00:36:058 (1,2) - Increase distance between them,I clicked too early.
00:42:459 (1,2,3,4,5) - Fix distance of this pattern,why it had increased by 2x? Distance should be all the same during whole map,in Easy.
01:02:582 (1,2,3) - Same,fix distance,but increase now,as in previous combo pattern.
01:46:850 (1) - Finish.
01:56:728 (2,3,4) - Objects are too far from each other,reduce distance.
Well,fine in general,the only thing that bother me is distance,it should be equal,your one is different on almost each combo pattern.
I really hope you will correct it.

[Hard]
Technically fine,good job!
01:21:972 (3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - It was hard to follow,cause I wasn't expecting 1/3 stream,but,well,maybe I'm just not that good.
01:29:655 (1) - Remove NC.
01:46:850 (1) - Finish.
02:33:680 - Add a note with finish.
Ah,and those slowdown sliders - some of them were random,but it's not really neccesary.

[Insane]
00:20:859 (1) - Oh,too far,it should be closer to 00:20:493 (7),cause it's not right place for jumping.
01:35:493 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - Strange pattern,make something more creative,at least notes should be symmetrical.
01:53:785 (2,3,4) - Make equal distance between them,please.
03:57:444 - Silence spinner.

You've got potential!
Make more maps,good luck!
Star~

[Insane]
0:02:749 (3) right 1 grid
0:11:347 (7) right 1 grid
0:39:151 (5) right 1 grid
0:54:151 (6) up 1 grid
1:04:395 (2) up 1 grid
3:19:029 (11) up 1 grid
3:19:212 (12) left 1 grid

[Hard]
0:38:603 (2,3,4) (2,4) left 1 grid, (3) left 2 grids?
1:14:273 (1) right 1 grid
1:47:932 (2,3,4) not symmetrical

[Easy] ok

nice, star~

Here my mod..mod request by wmfchris
-------------------------------------------------
BluE=suggestion only
Red=I thnik you should fix this
*Major issue are in Bold

[General]
Probabaly try offset 1461? (Remember re-snap all note after you change your offset and please correct it before read my mod)

[Easy]
00:10:241(6)-If me..I will make a reverse slider..I decide to reverse at 00:10:790
00:16:905(7)-hairlike spacing mistake and finish here?
00:18:290(3)-spacing
00:19:753(x)-add a note here?
00:20:485(2)-spacing
00:22:131(x)-this spinner is too close..Maybe you can move to 00:22:314
00:36:034(1)-Feel weird..add a reverse?and Remember correct the spacing after you fix this
00:53:412(8)-Remove finish and add a clap
01:04:204(x)-Move to 01:04:387
01:12:070(x)-weird break
02:07:171(1)-aviod to use 3/4 beat in easy
02:21:773(x)- sames as 00:36:034(1)
02:23:786(1~5)-Too difficult of easy!!
You should fis the weird break of this diff..I mean the sudden break that not fit the music
Pay attention to the spacing..too many hairlike spacing mistake.So I won't nazi them

[Hard]
You can range more beautiful...
and you should fix the sudden x0.5
00:21:582(x)-add a note here
00:39:509-(1~3)sudden x0.5 BPM?
00:49:204(2)-spacing
01:21:948(2~7)What happen to this?It feel strange
01:52:680(1)-ugly slider
02:04:753(11)-New combo

[Insane]
Sorry..I can't mod it because it has too much spacing problem and random jump
Make sure you must fix this stuff

Blue: Sugestion. Not necessary, but should take good effects.
Green: Notification or cosmetic thing. May, but don't have to be fixed.
Orange: Should be fixed.
Red: Have to be fixed.

General

1. Why preview points are different for every stage? o.o I'd make the same for every difficulty.

[Easy]

1. 02:13:168 (1) - Remove new combo
2. Some stacked notes looks ugly. Decrease stack leniency to second bar. (Song Setup > Advanced > Stack Leniency)

[Hard]

1. 00:09:509 (1) - Remove new combo.
2. 00:14:997 (1) - ^
3. 00:50:485 (1) - ^
4. 00:50:851 (2) - Add new combo.
5. 00:55:606 (1) - Remove new combo.
6. 00:59:997 (2) - Add new combo.
7. 01:00:180 (1) - Remove new combo.
8. 01:10:789 (4) - Add new combo.
9. 01:22:314 (1) - Remove new combo.
10. 01:21:948 (2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - This stream is litte confusing. It's 1/3 but it really looks like 1/4 hmm. But i don't have an idea how to make it different.
11. 01:39:326 (1) - Remove new combo.
12. Same thing with Stack Leniency.

[Insane]

1. 00:08:412 (1) - Remove new combo.
2. 03:51:400 (7) - Add new combo.

Your first map. And it's cool. ^_^ Starrr'd

fixed all ATM =) ty guys

i m gonna try to create some kind of warning for the 1/3 stream :3

Pruebalo a ver como quedo, no es algo muy espectacular como digamos.

Download: SB_Warning.rar

(^u-)

Astom wrote:

Pruebalo a ver como quedo, no es algo muy espectacular como digamos.

[attachment=0:f5f58]SB_Warning.rar[/attachment:f5f58]

era pal hard mas ke nah ... pero = valep :3

Hello there o/

[General]

The tags are not the same on every diffs
Also, delete "aya shameimaru" and add "Momiji Inubashiri"
(yes, it's Momiji's theme :3)

You can also add "Mountain of Faith" if you want

Try to find another 1024x768 BG, your bg is 875x625

Also, your mp3 is not rankable (320kbps)
Here is a new mp3 just for you !

http://www.mediafire.com/?3yf8wzsuw3r3z06

The new offset is 1535

[Insane]

Maybe rename it "Lunatic" ?
Looks better for a Touhou song

00:24:579 (4) - Finish at the end of this slider ?
02:39:875 (5) - This slider should finish at 02:40:241
03:22:131 (1) - No new combo
03:23:229 (4) - 1 grid left
03:23:046 (3,4,5,6) - Make this pattern like that : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/42420
03:23:046 (3) - New combo
03:54:875 (1) - Make this spinner silent ?

[Hard]

00:55:972 (8) - A bit hidden by 00:54:509 (5), move it somewhere else
02:05:485 (1) - No new combo
02:32:192 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - A bit hard to read :/

[Easy]

00:20:851 (3,4) - Make this pattern : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/42422
00:54:875 - Add a circle ?
02:04:021 (2,3) - Make this pattern : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/42423
02:30:729 (1) - End this spinner at 02:33:656 (also, add a Finish hitsound)

I've pointed a lot of things, but it's not really bad
~Starz'd !

Hard
Insane
Very good for your first beatmap.

I'm pretty sure the offset is fine. I can't help you too much as I can't accurately full combo the map (maybe you can). I was getting anywhere from 20 ms early to 20 ms late. It think it's somewhere around 2-5 ms early, and that's nothing to worry about.

[insane]
Insane is 16 million. 10 million is supposed to be the "max" for ranked maps. I think there should be a break somewhere in the second half as well. it's a pretty long song and both breaks are in the first half.
I'm thinking 02:33:720 would be a decent place for a rest (until the kiai time).
03:08:018 (5-10) I don't like these. If you change all of the notes like this into sliders, it will take out a lot of points (if indeed there's a problem with points and not with the length of the song).

this is an excellent map. Not too hard, but not that easy either.

Normal and Easy look good too. Your sounds, especially the claps, seem to be a bit random. It's a tedious process to go through them all, but usually there's a clap on beats 2 and 4 in the kiai sections. I think there should really only be a clap on the snare beats from the background (which are plentiful), or just during the kiai.

star~

kawaii desu

estrellita

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