This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on March-07-10 at 1:09:11 AM

Artist: Tanaka Rie
Title: Ningyo Hime
Source: Chobits
Tags: jpop j-pop
BPM: 79
Filesize: 6058kb
Play Time: 03:32
Difficulties Available:

1. Breezing (1.2 stars, 153 notes)
2. Dreaming (3.98 stars, 334 notes)
3. Relaxing (2.38 stars, 202 notes)

Download: Tanaka Rie - Ningyo Hime
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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My first beatmap.

March-05:
Minor fixings(Thanks to osuplayer111)
Bubbled by osuplayer111

March-03:
Fixed some note placements, break times(Thanks to Lissette)

Feb-27:
Remapped [Relaxing] with 1.2x Distancer and level 3 grid
Added another kiai, fixed spacings.(Thanks to VanMoNky)
Fixed sliders, offset, hitsounds and added a custom slider sound.(Thanks to Teara)
Proto-bubbled by Teara

Feb-26:
Got rid of the .osb and resubmitted
Remapped [Dreaming] with 1.0x Distancer and level 3 grid
Fixed spacings, added some notes here and there, slider symmetries, changed some patterns (Thanks to samipale, Kytoxid and Leorda)

Feb-25:
Fixed some more spacing and hitsound issues (Thanks to kino77, Beuchi-chan and Armin)

Feb-24:
Finished [Dreaming]
Sending this to 'pending'
Fixed more mistakes (Thanks to Breeze, orioncomet, gdeath and Arusha Shuna)
Fixed offset (Thanks to xxheroxx)

Feb-23:
New level [Dreaming] in progress
Fixed a bunch of spacing mistakes

Feb-22:
Finished [Breezing]
Added hitsounds
Corrected some spacing inconsistencies and other mistakes(Thanks to Card N'FoRcE)

Feb-18:
Changed [Instrumental] to [Breezing]

Feb-16:
Started [Instrumental]

Feb-15:
Started and finished the first difficulty [Relaxing]
Fixed timing(Thanks to Kytoxid)
Made a Background

Hi.

- General:

• Not so bad for a first timer. Timing seems ok.
  You may consider adding a preview time.
  01:04:328 - KIAI should start here, instead of 01:03:758
  02:20:277 - KIAI should start here, instead of 02:19:750

- Breezing:

• .Opinions:
  You may consider decreasing HP drain a bit, more than "Normal" seems too hard for a Easy difficulty.
  There are some little spacing inconstistencies here and there, but they are mostly readable anyway. You can consider fixing them up a bit. Also, look on "Suggestions" for most important ones: try making them look better
  .Suggestions:
  00:22:556 (1) - I really don't think this spacing is a problem, because i think it's readable, but you can do something like this:
  
  00:33:948 (6) - try making it more between 00:33:189 (5) and 00:34:708 (1) to make it look better
  00:40:024 (2,3) - same as above, with 00:39:265 (1) and 00:41:543 (4)
  00:49:898 (3) - move it farther from 00:49:138 (2) -
  01:14:961 (1) - this one is really bad loking... >.<; move it closer to 01:14:201 (3)
  01:22:176 (2) - this one ends on blue tick and doesn't sound good. I suggest making this end at 01:24:834, then make the spinner start at 01:25:594.
  01:52:176 (2) - feels too close from 01:50:657 (1)
  02:07:366 (3,1) - misreadable for a 1/1 spacing, (3) and (1) should be closer a bit more
  02:24:834 (1) - same as 00:22:556 (1):
  
  02:49:00-02:58:00 - this break feel really out of place
  .Errors/Mistakes:
  02:34:708 (2) - oh no, you have to fix this one, move it farther

- Relaxing:

• .Opinions:
  Same thing as Breezing, some spacing inconsistencies et cetera
  .Suggestions:
  00:20:088 (4) - move a bit to the right.
  00:43:062 (1,2,3) - same as 00:22:556 (1) in "Breezing", but flipped vertically.
  01:06:986 (5) - move down a bit; 01:07:936 (6,7) - move down a bit and press CTRL+H
  01:08:885 (8) - new combo
  01:22:176 (4) - should end on white or red tick
  01:28:632 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - random spacing?
  01:38:885 (1) - remove new combo, 01:39:265 (2) - add new combo
  01:40:404 (1) - remove new combo, 01:40:784 (2) - add new combo
  01:43:442 (1) - remove new combo, 01:43:822 (2) - add new combo, 01:44:961 (1) - remove new combo
  01:46:480 (1) - remove new combo, 01:46:860 (2) - add new combo
  02:13:822 (1) - should end on white or red tick
  02:38:126 (4) - new combo?
  .Errors/Mistakes:
  00:14:961 (4) - new combo or move 00:14:012 (3) to have a fair spacing.
  00:23:126 (3,4,5) - no, it's unreadable. it's like 00:14:961 (4), but you can't use a new combo this time. Try moving 00:24:075 (4) to the left
  00:29:391 (4,5,6) - again... It's a shame you tried to use this pattern to make something different and you didn't succeed at doing that, because it's really unreadable D: You have to fix and make a regular spacing or try something else , I'm sorry >.<
  I'm not pointing this out these kind of spacing anymore, search them and try to fix every of them.

I think it's almost everything for now.
Please fix these, then ask other people to have a look.

Hi Didn't expect anyone to check this thread so early =o

Firstly thanks for all these suggestions, my spacings really were horribly unconsistent now that you pointed them out xD Maybe I should've use distance snap from the start

I've done most of the fixes:

Card N'FoRcE wrote:

- General:

• You may consider adding a preview time. Yup I was considering doing that eventually ^^, it's not the most important part so I'll leave that for later on
  01:04:328 - KIAI should start here, instead of 01:03:758 Done
  02:20:277 - KIAI should start here, instead of 02:19:750 Done

- Breezing:

• .Opinions:
  You may consider decreasing HP drain a bit, more than "Normal" seems too hard for a Easy difficulty. Decreased by 2 ticks
  .Suggestions:
  00:22:556 (1) - I really don't think this spacing is a problem, because i think it's readable, but you can do something like
  
  00:33:948 (6) - try making it more between 00:33:189 (5) and 00:34:708 (1) to make it look better Moved
  00:40:024 (2,3) - same as above, with 00:39:265 (1) and 00:41:543 (4) Moved
  00:49:898 (3) - move it farther from 00:49:138 (2) - Moved
  01:14:961 (1) - this one is really bad loking... >.<; move it closer to 01:14:201 (3) Moved it right below
  01:22:176 (2) - this one ends on blue tick and doesn't sound good. I suggest making this end at 01:24:834, then make the spinner start at 01:25:594. Hmm I'll see about this later
  01:52:176 (2) - feels too close from 01:50:657 (1) Moved
  02:07:366 (3,1) - misreadable for a 1/1 spacing, (3) and (1) should be closer a bit more Moved
  02:24:834 (1) - same as 00:22:556 (1)
  Moved it like this:
  02:49:00-02:58:00 - this break feel really out of place Added notes to that part
  .Errors/Mistakes:
  02:34:708 (2) - oh no, you have to fix this one, move it farther Moved

- Relaxing:

• .Opinions:
  Same thing as Breezing, some spacing inconsistencies et cetera
  .Suggestions:
  00:20:088 (4) - move a bit to the right. Stacked 00:20:088 (4) right at the end of the 00:19:328 (3)
  00:43:062 (1,2,3) - same as 00:22:556 (1) in "Breezing", but flipped vertically. I don't see the problem here ><
  01:06:986 (5) - move down a bit; 01:07:936 (6,7) - move down a bit and press CTRL+H Moved and flipped
  01:08:885 (8) - new combo Oops forgot this =x
  01:22:176 (4) - should end on white or red tick Making it end on red tick
  01:28:632 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - random spacing? I messed up that pattern :[ ,I'll redo something else
  01:38:885 (1) - remove new combo, 01:39:265 (2) - add new combo
  01:40:404 (1) - remove new combo, 01:40:784 (2) - add new combo
  01:43:442 (1) - remove new combo, 01:43:822 (2) - add new combo, 01:44:961 (1) - remove new combo
  01:46:480 (1) - remove new combo, 01:46:860 (2) - add new combo
  02:13:822 (1) - should end on white or red tick Made it end on red tick
  02:38:126 (4) - new combo? Done
  .Errors/Mistakes:
  00:14:961 (4) - new combo or move 00:14:012 (3) to have a fair spacing. Made it a new combo
  00:23:126 (3,4,5) - no, it's unreadable. it's like 00:14:961 (4), but you can't use a new combo this time. Try moving 00:24:075 (4) to the left Merged a note with the slider
  00:29:391 (4,5,6) - again... It's a shame you tried to use this pattern to make something different and you didn't succeed at doing that, because it's really unreadable D: You have to fix and make a regular spacing or try something else , I'm sorry >.< Fixed

That was really helpful =], thanks again!

[Dreaming] difficulty was fun. Here's a star! ^^

i think the spacing inconsistencies are fixed.

[General]

1. Please delete osb.file since it's not used

[Breezing] lol Saw my name

1. 00:25:594 (4) - a little spacing wrong
2. 00:27:872 (2,3,4) - Oh, this one must fix :/ it's obvious spacing wrong
3. 01:27:872 (1) - spinner ends here better imo
4. 02:11:164 (2) - a little spacing wrong

[Relaxing]

1. 00:46:480 (5), 00:46:670 (6) - Remove clap, add clap at 00:45:341 (4)
2. 00:50:657 (4) - remove clap
3. 00:57:872 (4) - spacing wrong
4. 01:03:948 (1) - minor spacing wrong
5. 01:04:328 - KIAI starts here
6. 01:08:885 (1) - ^
7. 01:10:974 (3) - ^
8. 01:41:923 (4,5) - ^
9. 01:44:961 (2) - spacing changed, so please new combo. Or changed these (2,3,4,5,6) spacing back to normal
10. 02:20:277 - KIAI starts here
11. 02:57:493 (1) - spinner ends here

[Dreaming]

1. 01:04:328 - KIAI starts here
2. 01:44:961 (2) - minor spacing wrong
3. 02:20:277 - KIAI starts here
4. 03:20:657 (6) - remove finish

good job on first map
star

[General]
- delete the .osb file, and full submit
- delete "Tanaka Rie Ningyo Hime" out of your TAG because It's already on Artist and Title
- BG Colour: Black
- make sure your TAG all the diffs are the same

[Breezing]
01:01:290 (3) - spacing?
01:24:834 (1) - end thid spinner at 01:27:872 and try sound finish
03:20:657 (6) - end this silder at 03:22:556
03:32:429 (1) - sound finish

[Relaxing]
00:29:391 (4) - remove clap at last silder
00:32:809 (6) - new combo?
01:03:948 (1) - replace clap with finish at bigin of silder
01:33:189 (7) - new combo?
02:19:898 (3) - sound finish at begin silder and maybe new combo?
02:34:708 (5) - new combo?
02:41:164 (3) - at last silder replace clap with finish
02:55:974 (1) - end this spiner at 02:57:872
03:20:847 (1) - end this spiner at 03:23:315
03:26:923 (1) - end this spiner at 03:29:391
03:32:999 (1) - try sound finish

[Dreaming]
01:24:834 (5) - new combo?
01:25:214 (6) - end this silder at 01:27:113 and try sound finish at last silder
02:05:467 (6) - new combo?
02:08:126 (1) - remove new combo
02:41:164 (1) - try sound finish
03:20:847 (1) - end this spiner at 03:23:315
03:26:923 (1) - end this spiner at 03:29:391
03:32:999 (1) - try sound finish

nice song ~ starr ~

Thanks ^^ I'll fix all when I come back from class XD

Breeze wrote:

[General]

1. Please delete osb.file since it's not used Fixed

[Breezing] lol Saw my name

1. 00:25:594 (4) - a little spacing wrong Fixed
2. 00:27:872 (2,3,4) - Oh, this one must fix :/ it's obvious spacing wrong Fixed
3. 01:27:872 (1) - spinner ends here better imo Fixed
4. 02:11:164 (2) - a little spacing wrong Fixed

[Relaxing]

1. 00:46:480 (5), 00:46:670 (6) - Remove clap, add clap at 00:45:341 (4) Fixed
2. 00:50:657 (4) - remove clap Fixed
3. 00:57:872 (4) - spacing wrong Fixed
4. 01:03:948 (1) - minor spacing wrong Fixed
5. 01:04:328 - KIAI starts here Fixed
6. 01:08:885 (1) - ^ Fixed
7. 01:10:974 (3) - ^ Fixed
8. 01:41:923 (4,5) - ^ Fixed
9. 01:44:961 (2) - spacing changed, so please new combo. Or changed these (2,3,4,5,6) spacing back to normal Fixed
10. 02:20:277 - KIAI starts here Fixed
11. 02:57:493 (1) - spinner ends here Fixed

[Dreaming]

1. 01:04:328 - KIAI starts here Fixed
2. 01:44:961 (2) - minor spacing wrong Fixed
3. 02:20:277 - KIAI starts here Fixed
4. 03:20:657 (6) - remove finish Fixed

good job on first map
star

orioncomet wrote:

[General]
- delete the .osb file, and full submit Fixed
- delete "Tanaka Rie Ningyo Hime" out of your TAG because It's already on Artist and Title Fixed
- BG Colour: Black Fixed
- make sure your TAG all the diffs are the same Fixed

[Breezing]
01:01:290 (3) - spacing? Fixed
01:24:834 (1) - end thid spinner at 01:27:872 and try sound finish Fixed spinner end, I think the finish sounds a little weird though xD
03:20:657 (6) - end this silder at 03:22:556 Fixed
03:32:429 (1) - sound finish Hmmm I think whistle sounds better here o.o

[Relaxing]
00:29:391 (4) - remove clap at last silder Fixed
00:32:809 (6) - new combo? Fixed
01:03:948 (1) - replace clap with finish at bigin of silder Fixed
01:33:189 (7) - new combo? Fixed
02:19:898 (3) - sound finish at begin silder and maybe new combo? Fixed
02:34:708 (5) - new combo? Fixed
02:41:164 (3) - at last silder replace clap with finish Fixed
02:55:974 (1) - end this spiner at 02:57:872 Fixed
03:20:847 (1) - end this spiner at 03:23:315 Fixed
03:26:923 (1) - end this spiner at 03:29:391 Fixed
03:32:999 (1) - try sound finish I still think whistle is better XD finish is a bit loud o.o

[Dreaming]
01:24:834 (5) - new combo? Fixed
01:25:214 (6) - end this silder at 01:27:113 and try sound finish at last silder Sounds good, fixed
02:05:467 (6) - new combo? Fixed
02:08:126 (1) - remove new combo Fixed
02:41:164 (1) - try sound finish Fixed
03:20:847 (1) - end this spiner at 03:23:315 Fixed
03:26:923 (1) - end this spiner at 03:29:391 Fixed
03:32:999 (1) - try sound finish Sounds loud ><

nice song ~ starr ~

Thank you for the help, kudos for both of you! ^^

[Breezing]
00:51:417 (1) - make spacing larger.the same spacing with 00:49:138 (2,3)
01:22:176 (2) - make the slider 1/4 later
02:23:695 (3,4) - replace two circles with the slider and make it start on 02:23:695 and end on 02:24:075
03:17:619 (4) - make the same spacing with 03:16:859 (2,3)
03:17:619 (4,5,6) - ^

[Relaxing]
make the slidertick decrease to 1.0
eg:00:20:088 (4) - you'll frequently sound "dadada''.Sound bad

00:45:341 (4,5,6) - spacing is different
01:06:607 (4,5) - make spacing larger.
02:58:632 (2,4) - remove clap
03:10:784 (2,4) - ^
03:16:860 (2) - ^
03:20:277 (5) - remove clap and add whistle
03:32:429 (2,3) - ^

[Dreaming]
00:16:860 (7) - make spacing larger
02:22:746 (5,6,7,8) - make the same spacing with 02:22:556 (4,5)

Star

gdeath wrote:

[Breezing]
00:51:417 (1) - make spacing larger.the same spacing with 00:49:138 (2,3) Fixed
01:22:176 (2) - make the slider 1/4 later Do you mean make it end 1/4 later or start 1/4 later?
02:23:695 (3,4) - replace two circles with the slider and make it start on 02:23:695 and end on 02:24:075 Fixed
03:17:619 (4) - make the same spacing with 03:16:859 (2,3) Fixed
03:17:619 (4,5,6) - ^ Fixed

[Relaxing]
make the slidertick decrease to 1.0
eg:00:20:088 (4) - you'll frequently sound "dadada''.Sound bad Fixed

00:45:341 (4,5,6) - spacing is different Fixed
01:06:607 (4,5) - make spacing larger. Fixed
02:58:632 (2,4) - remove clap Fixed
03:10:784 (2,4) - ^ Fixed
03:16:860 (2) - ^ Fixed
03:20:277 (5) - remove clap and add whistle Fixed
03:32:429 (2,3) - ^ Fixed

[Dreaming]
00:16:860 (7) - make spacing larger Fixed
02:22:746 (5,6,7,8) - make the same spacing with 02:22:556 (4,5) Fixed

Star

Thank you

This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.

Okay done.

Reuploaded again~

Offset: 12685

The mp3 you are using is a bit longer than the part which is mapped. Consider cropping it to reduce filesize.
Also, you should try to make the spacing more linear: it isn't wrong (becouse is intuitive) but keep "Distance Snap" active.

xxheroxx wrote:

Offset: 12685

The mp3 you are using is a bit longer than the part which is mapped. Consider cropping it to reduce filesize.
Also, you should try to make the spacing more linear: it isn't wrong (becouse is intuitive) but keep "Distance Snap" active.

Yeah I realized the last ~10 seconds could've been cropped off, but the file size is only about 6MB so I thought to just leave it be xD and yeah I'll remember to use Distance Snap more often

Is that the most accurate offset? because nobody mentioned anything wrong about my current offset =x

Request Accepted


Not bad~~ STAR!

This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.

Glasslake wrote:

xxheroxx wrote:

Offset: 12685

Is that the most accurate offset?

Indeed

Okay ^^

I'll try self-modding until someone else accepts my mod request =x

Nice one for the first map~

[General]
Add some tags?

[Breezing]
Turn down the HP drain rate 1 tick or 2?

[Relaxing]
00:14:963 (1) - Remove new combo?
00:24:457 (4) - Stack with 5?
00:27:685 (2) - Stack with 1?The spacing change among 1,2,3 is too small to notice...
00:29:393 (4,5) - Spacing?
01:05:469 (2) - Stack with 3?
I suggestion stack mostly 1/4 spacing note like 00:24:647 (5,6),make them like 00:19:330 (3,4)~
01:07:938 (7) - End here red tick?
01:12:684 (1) - Remove new combo?
01:14:963 (4,1) - Switch new combo?
01:43:064 (5) - Add clap here?
01:52:938 (4) - Remove clap?
01:54:457 (6) - ^
01:56:545 (3) - Put it right under 2?
02:04:710 (8,9) - Remove clap?
02:21:419 (1) - Remove new combo?
02:21:419 (1) ~ 03:17:241 (3) - Too many clap round here make it too noisy,try hitsound pattern?

[Dreaming]
Turn volume down to lv.5 from start to 00:55:216 (5)?
01:05:469 (1) - Remove new combo?
01:05:659 (2,3) - Spacing?
01:14:963 (7,1) - Switch new combo?
01:24:836 (1) - Remove new combo?
01:49:900 (9) - Switch new combo?
02:19:900 (3) - End here white tick?
02:27:115 (1) - Remove new combo?

Have a star~

kino77 wrote:

Nice one for the first map~

[General]
Add some tags? Fixed

[Breezing]
Turn down the HP drain rate 1 tick or 2? Decreased by 1

[Relaxing]
00:14:963 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed
00:24:457 (4) - Stack with 5? Fixed
00:27:685 (2) - Stack with 1?The spacing change among 1,2,3 is too small to notice... Fixed
00:29:393 (4,5) - Spacing? Fixed
01:05:469 (2) - Stack with 3? Fixed
I suggestion stack mostly 1/4 spacing note like 00:24:647 (5,6),make them like 00:19:330 (3,4)~ Will do
01:07:938 (7) - End here red tick? Fixed
01:12:684 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed
01:14:963 (4,1) - Switch new combo? Fixed
01:43:064 (5) - Add clap here? Fixed
01:52:938 (4) - Remove clap? Fixed
01:54:457 (6) - ^ Fixed
01:56:545 (3) - Put it right under 2? Fixed
02:04:710 (8,9) - Remove clap? Fixed
02:21:419 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed
02:21:419 (1) ~ 03:17:241 (3) - Too many clap round here make it too noisy,try hitsound pattern? Changed some claps with whistles

[Dreaming]
Turn volume down to lv.5 from start to 00:55:216 (5)? Done
01:05:469 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed
01:05:659 (2,3) - Spacing? Fixed
01:14:963 (7,1) - Switch new combo? Fixed
01:24:836 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed
01:49:900 (9) - Switch new combo? Hmm I think the combo should end on that since it's on a long tick(heavier beat)
02:19:900 (3) - End here white tick? Fixed
02:27:115 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed

Have a star~

Thank you

Hi hi!

Some sggestions for your map, you don't have to change them if you don't want
Let's go!!

~All Diffs~
- I'd change the source for Chobits 2nd ED, I've seen some people doing this and I think it looks better.
- Remove Chobits from Tags.

~Breezing~
00:57:874 (2) - Fix Spacing.
01:19:520 (2,3) - ^
01:37:748 (1,2,3,4,1) - ^
01:48:381 (2) - ^
01:49:900 (3) - ^
02:28:634 (1) - ^
03:30:153 (1) - ^

~Relaxing~
01:24:836 (5,6) - Stack properly :3
01:30:153 (3,4) - Fix Spacing.
01:33:950 (2,3) - ^
01:37:748 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Hmm... sudden spacing change... Maybe confusing but idk, better get a 2nd opinion about this ^^
01:44:963 (1,2,3,4,5) - Same as above.
02:38:128 (1) - Fix Spacing.
03:00:912 (1) - ^
03:16:482 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^

~Dreaming~
- I'd increase a bit the spacing distance on the whole map, some things could be hard to see.

00:36:229 (1,2,3,4,5) - This kind of things will look a lot prettier if you increase the spacing like I said before
01:10:976 (6) - Finish the slider 1/4 earlier (white tick)


So yeah, most are only spacing issues, really good for your first map so take a well deserved *star* ^_^

Hi =)

Beuchi-chan wrote:

Hi hi!

Some sggestions for your map, you don't have to change them if you don't want
Let's go!!

~All Diffs~
- I'd change the source for Chobits 2nd ED, I've seen some people doing this and I think it looks better. Fixed
- Remove Chobits from Tags. What should I put then? =x

~Breezing~
00:57:874 (2) - Fix Spacing. Fixed
01:19:520 (2,3) - ^ Fixed
01:37:748 (1,2,3,4,1) - ^ Fixed
01:48:381 (2) - ^ Fixed
01:49:900 (3) - ^ Fixed
02:28:634 (1) - ^ Fixed
03:30:153 (1) - ^ Fixed

~Relaxing~
01:24:836 (5,6) - Stack properly :3 Fixed
01:30:153 (3,4) - Fix Spacing. Fixed
01:33:950 (2,3) - ^ Fixed
01:37:748 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Hmm... sudden spacing change... Maybe confusing but idk, better get a 2nd opinion about this ^^ Ok I'll leave it like that for now then xD
01:44:963 (1,2,3,4,5) - Same as above.
02:38:128 (1) - Fix Spacing. Fixed
03:00:912 (1) - ^ Fixed
03:16:482 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^ Fixed

~Dreaming~
- I'd increase a bit the spacing distance on the whole map, some things could be hard to see.

00:36:229 (1,2,3,4,5) - This kind of things will look a lot prettier if you increase the spacing like I said before
01:10:976 (6) - Finish the slider 1/4 earlier (white tick)

What multiplier would you recommend? =o It's currently 0.8x


So yeah, most are only spacing issues, really good for your first map so take a well deserved *star* ^_^

Thank you for modding my map

Optimize the offset: 12.680

[Breezing]

Overall: A bit boring, but the patterns are "good". Also, the hitsounds are a bit monotonous but don't consider this as a real problem (If I were in you I'd use some custom hitsounds, like the "normal-hitnormal", on the template skin)

00:12:685 (1) Finish
00:21:039 (5) Finish at the end
00:52:178 (3) Too many repeats; consider to "split" this slider in two parts?
02:21:419 (2) As above
01:03:950 (2) Do this slider better, it's very ugly <_<
see the pic:



02:31:292 (x) Place a hitcircle here

Overall Rating: 7,5/10

Glasslake

Overall: Decrease the slidertick rate and if you want the Stack Leniency of 1-2 ticks.

00:25:406 (6) 1/4 shorter, I feel it better
01:22:178 (4,5,6) Bad symmetry, try something like in the picture please? **



02:02:431 (5) It's better if you stack this with the previous (4)
02:08:128 (1) Delete the new combo
02:09:647 (1) As above
03:03:571 (6) 1/4 back
03:11:545 (4) 1/4 shorter

Overall Rating: 7,5/10

[Dreaming]

Overall: The best diff in my opinion, well done!

No problems found. Good job on this. ^^

Overall Rating: 8,5/10

Starred!

xxheroxx said 12,685 is the most accurate o.o

(Fixed everything else though :3)

Annnd yeah I'm pretty bad at drawing sliders XD

Thanks for modding~

As your request

[General]
I've seen that you had fixed the .osb problem, but why .osb is still exist?
Just a suggestion.You can try to increase the space distance in harder diffs


[Breezing]
good


[Relaxing]
00:51:798(2,3,4,5) - OMG...IMO,slow sliders duration shouldn't be toooooo loong...unless you put them pretty
01:14:014(6) - end at 01:14:583
02:59:393(4) - end at 03:00:533
03:03:381(6) - change to a 1/2 beat long slider


[Dreaming]
IMO,let whistles be more than claps is better
00:16:292(6) - move to 00:16:482
00:49:330(6) - this slider sounds bad, IMO you can use two sliders instead
01:51:229(4) - end at 01:51:798



hmm...I think you should balance the time distance of every hit...That's why many sliders you end 1/4 later

but without this it's a nice map
star~

I think the .osb file remade itself =/, I'm sure I had deleted it.

If I increase the distance snap do I have to re-map the whole map again?

For the [Dreaming] diff I mostly used claps to emphasize the heavier beats. Fixed everything else.

Thanks for modding ^^

Darn, looks like I'm late.

The .osb regenerates itself whenever you go into the Design tab, I think. Just manually delete it every time you full upload.

[General]

For the future, I'd recommend using a 1024x748 background if you manually edit it.

01:04:330 - Kiai should start on a note, it feels weird otherwise.
01:27:874 - End kiai here instead? That doesn't seem like a very logical place to end it.

Same thing for the second kiai.

Holy those are a lot of slider points.

[Breezing]

02:32:052 (6) - Might be nicer if it wasn't stacked, since it would continue the stream you've got. Otherwise, it's a bit awkward to read the timing.
02:34:710 (2) - Feels quite empty, the sudden breaks before and after this note.
02:49:900 (6,1,2) - I thought the slider heads could have been lined up with the music better.
02:58:254 (1,2) - Might be hard to read for newer players, dunno.
03:30:153 (1) - Might as well shorten this and make it 1/2 BPM; doesn't really make sense to have a 1/2 BPM slider before it with this one at normal BPM in one phrase.

[Relaxing]

I guess a main issue I had with this map is that the stacked slider ends are placed a bit weirdly, like 01:55:596 (2,3), for example, which is followed by a properly-spaced slider. It makes it feel like their timing should be different when it's actually the same.

00:18:381 (1,2,3,4) - I know it's a pattern, but the (2-3) spacing is quite deceptive for 2.5 stars, while the other notes being stacked make it hard to read too.
00:36:229 (3) - Not really a predictable number of repeats.
00:43:064 (1) - The claps as part of the main phrase seem a bit weird, entering in this combo. (also felt like there were a few too many during kiai)
01:37:748 (1) - Spacing change is a bit random, but oh well.
02:30:912 (1) - Positioning a note partway under the slider is a bit weird.
03:02:431 (5,6) - Just reiterating the weird use of stacking; I think it'd be better if situations like these consistently used normal spacing.

[Dreaming]

The packing was a bit weird, yeah. For this map, 1.2x would probably have been nicer, since BPM is so low. (usually 0.8x would be okay with a BPM in the normal 100-200 range)

Generally, because of the level 2 grid, spacing seemed very messy. Compare: 02:33:571 (1,2,1,2), for example, the first combo is a lot closer than the second one.

As well, the flower combos would definitely look nicer at larger spacing, right now readability is a slight issue.

00:36:229 (1,2,3,4,5) - Awkward pattern, imo.
01:22:178 (4,5,6) - Looks a bit weird in play mode because of stacking.

Overall, on Dreaming and Breezing, there were some "boring sections" where it was essentially just a constant 1/2 or 1/1 pattern for a significant portion of the song. It's generally okay, but would be better if they had more creative patterns/beats, I suppose.

Star~

Hi

I think it's auto-generated when I submit o_O, but yeah I'll just delete it every time.

According to Card N'FoRcE and Breeze, the Kiai times should start on it's current positions, I dunno.

Forgot to decrease the tick rates down to 0.5 on the other 2 diffs lol my bad.

Fixed most of what you mentioned. For [Dreaming] I think I'll use 1.0x distance snap, 1.2x seems a little bit too much. I'll also use level 3 grid when I remap this and maybe come up with more patterns.

Thank you for modding~

Hello!

[General]
1) Tags?

[Kiai]
I feels there's some kiai are missing
02:59:773 ~ 03:36:229

[Breezing]
00:14:963 (4) - Make symetric?
00:21:039 (5) - ^
00:57:495 (1) - Move 1 grid down?
01:10:026 (2) - Make symetric?
01:46:862 (1) - ^
02:04:330 (1) - ^
02:25:976 (2) - Make curve?

[Relaxing]
03:26:735 (3) - Delete this object, move the spinner backward to red tick, and extend to 03:29:393
03:32:811 (3) - Delete this object, move the spinner backward to red tick, and extend to 03:36:229

[Dreaming]
02:05:469 (6) - Move backward to blue tick and extend to 02:06:609?
03:20:659 (6) - Delete this object, move the spinner backward to red tick, and extend to 03:23:317
03:26:735 (2) - Delete this object, move the spinner backward to red tick, and extend to 03:29:393

Not bad
STAR

Glasslake wrote:

If I increase the distance snap do I have to re-map the whole map again?

yes,if you decide to do.but it's just a suggestion:/,0.8x is also ok

Leorda wrote:

Hello!

[General]
1) Tags?

[Kiai]
I feels there's some kiai are missing
02:59:773 ~ 03:36:229

[Breezing]
00:14:963 (4) - Make symetric?
00:21:039 (5) - ^
00:57:495 (1) - Move 1 grid down?
01:10:026 (2) - Make symetric?
01:46:862 (1) - ^
02:04:330 (1) - ^
02:25:976 (2) - Make curve?

[Relaxing]
03:26:735 (3) - Delete this object, move the spinner backward to red tick, and extend to 03:29:393
03:32:811 (3) - Delete this object, move the spinner backward to red tick, and extend to 03:36:229

[Dreaming]
02:05:469 (6) - Move backward to blue tick and extend to 02:06:609?
03:20:659 (6) - Delete this object, move the spinner backward to red tick, and extend to 03:23:317
03:26:735 (2) - Delete this object, move the spinner backward to red tick, and extend to 03:29:393

Not bad
STAR

Hi

Yeah I don't really know what to put in the tags field, guess I'll just put jpop/j-pop lol.

3 kiais is kind of redundant isn't it? o.O

Fixed symmetries and spinners.

Thanks~

samipale wrote:

Glasslake wrote:

If I increase the distance snap do I have to re-map the whole map again?

yes,if you decide to do.but it's just a suggestion:/,0.8x is also ok

I just re-mapped it again using 1.0x distancer xD

I love the song and chobits.

As your request. Sorry for the delay.

Read this first for the icon explanation.
- [?] Asking for a second thought.
- [!] Fatal error. You have to fix this for sure.
- [No icon] Only a suggestion.

Star. PM me for proto bubble after you confirm this mod.

All done , thank you for the mod~

Here is the empty .wav

IRC Mod, Mostly minor hitsounds and some nazi'ing :3

and new offset of 12,275

~

Edit

Proto Bubbled

Download: soft-sliderslide.zip

Well, it's good now. Good luck, hardworker!

But, honestly I support the previous offset lol. Don't mind it.

:3

Bump!

General
Maybe you should only use Chobits as source?


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Yes, that's my huge list of suggestions. Sorry.

Shiny star for you~

>< I thought there would be more to fix. Thanks I'll change the tag later when I come back from class :B

I love that song

Glad people like this song :3

Popping sorry but this still need some fixes

delete .osb file and full submit

Dreaming
01:10:016 (4,5) - remove 5 and make 4 end where was 5
01:25:206 (1) - end it one beat later
02:28:624 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - a slider from 3 to 6 sounds better imo
02:41:156 (1) - end it one beat later
03:01:092 (2,3,4) - compare the spacing of these notes in the timeline and in the chart
03:32:991 (1) - start on white tick

Relaxing
why this diff have less break-time that the hardest? you should put a break time like in Dreaming
03:03:371 (6) - make it end at the next red tick
03:20:839 (1) - start on white tick

Breezing
don't use x0.5 timing section on easiest difficulty, that could be very confusing for beginners
put same breaktimes as Dreaming

Star!

Alright fixed them all, please check again and re-pubble.

Lissette wrote:

Dreaming
01:25:206 (1) - end it one beat later

IRC modding
fix this and i will repair the p-bubble

Lissette wrote:

Lissette wrote:

Dreaming
01:25:206 (1) - end it one beat later

IRC modding
fix this and i will repair the p-bubble

That means the spinner should start on 01:25:206 and end on 1:27:864. Right? Sorry I don't really remember the length of that spinner before you told me to fix it ._.

Reuploaded~

nice

P-bubble back

[Breezing]

03:26:345 (5) - New combo.
03:30:143 (1) - Remove new combo.

[Relaxing]

03:30:143 (1,2) - Too close.

[Dreaming]

01:49:890 (9) - Remove clap. Too loud.

Oh god, this song makes me sleep, awesome btw.

EDIT: Bubbled~

All fixed(before the bubble)~ Thank you

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