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Tamura Yukari - MERRY MERRY MERRY MENU... Ne!

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Topic Starter
moonlightleaf
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all fix

感谢mod ^^/
OblivioN
[Normal]
00:07:067 (3) - 转个方向看着要舒服点【哪里来的强迫症;w;】看起来像这样
00:15:067 (1) - x:320 Y:320
00:20:400 (3,4,5) - 觉得排成三角形可爱一些【咦?会吗?
00:31:734 (4) - 音效用finish吧
00:36:900 (2) - 包好 2的尾巴是x:232 y:128

[Hard]
觉得cs可以大一号……

[Insane]
00:02:400 (8) - 音效用finish
00:05:734 (2) - NC一下吧
00:28:900 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - 以player的视角来说这里没必要stream啊……;w;这样就好了:
00:30:234 & 00:30:567 & 00:30:900 可配合clap
00:58:900 (1,2,3) - ^
01:19:067 finish

[615'sinsane]
00:21:067 (3,4,5,6) - 凶残…………排列顺一点吧……这么治愈的歌
00:26:400 (3,4) - ………………为何这么难orz【无视我
00:31:900 (4) - 这个音效可以去掉……
00:42:900 (8) - finish
01:00:067 (4) - NC吧……

[Other]
田村 很可爱的歌,祝rank .w.
Topic Starter
moonlightleaf
to OblivioN

[Insane]

00:28:900 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - 以player的视角来说这里没必要stream啊……;w;这样就好了 ---没改和后面是一样的 跟嘀嘀嘀嘀嘀嘀

其他都 fix

感谢mod ^^/
Momoka
Do you need an Easy diff? if so may I try GD?
Topic Starter
moonlightleaf

No Dap wrote:

Do you need an Easy diff? if so may I try GD?
oh,,,i am sorry to say Easy GD will be maped by my friend before you post ~

anyway , thanks for your GD request
Koiyuki
Easy Finished: http://puu.sh/7Ucur.osu

音效从normal复制的,应该没问题
别忘了把我和615的id加到tag里面去
Wafu
Red - Unrankable
Blue - Highly recommended
Black - Suggestion

[General]

Main thing I want to recommend here is to make the same kiai as it is in 615's Insane. He had quite good idea about it, he just used kiai only for parts where were all the instruments and removed kiai from part where were only drums and vocal. I think you should inspirate by this.
Use custom combo colors. Currently it uses default ones, meaning it depends on the skin you are using and unfortunatelly some skins might conflict with the background. I still know there is Dim function, but there are still players who prefer to use background on.
Some hitsounds are barely audiable, meaning it is near to be unrankable. Please increase volume of all green lines and take any program which can edit .wav files (for example Audacity) and use amplitude for the hitsound files.

[Insane]

00:41:067 (7) - It is just a detail but you should remake this slider to slider similar to 00:40:734 (6) with another rotation. Reason is that currently it looks quite unpolished and random, when this slider is curved a lot while the previous one is almost flat, additionally the flow was really unnatural. I suggest you to change it like this, but it's all just a detail suggestion.
00:43:484 (2,3,4) - This part is overly overmapped to be honest. There's no sound on 00:43:650, 00:43:984, 00:43:484, what is a lot. You added 3 non-existing notes on just one second. I think this is a lot more sensible.

00:44:400 (4) - I think NC on these notes is more viable than on 00:44:734 (1), mainly because there starts the kiai. Anyway your comboing here is quite weird, I'd suggest you to make it more sensible, sometimes you place NC on downbeat so it follows music, but then you change it so it follows vocal. Either make NCs related to music or related to voice, not both.

[Hard]

Well... first think that bothers me a lot... settings. CS+1, please. Currently it makes the spread just insensible, considering you've got this CS in normal and easy. However other difficulty settings are making very big gap between normal diff. Put -1 on all other settings so it makes the gap a bit lower and there is not so big difference between diffs.
00:43:567 (2,3,4,5,6) - Just a little suggestion here. Consider CTRL+G on 00:43:734 (3,5). It makes the jump progressive and you won't start with a jump so suddenly, because of pregressivity, player will detect better that there's a jump near, like this it is just sudden and he needs to know music or follow the approach circle properly. But that's not much issue.
00:48:067 (5,6) - The same issue as insane had, overmapped for no reason. Just decrease each of these two sliders by 1/4 so there will be 2 1/2 sliders to fit music well. Remember that this is not fantasy, but rhythm game.
00:54:067 - Add a circle. When playing I just feel there's something missing. Considering it is kiai, in my opinion, you shouldn't remove notes on 1/1 tick, when they are in music.
00:59:900 - Similar issue as ^
01:00:234 - Similar issue as ^, but if you put the circle on ^, this doesn't feel much needed.
01:15:900 - ^

[615's Insane]

00:30:234 (2,3) - Consider this pattern, because current flow was not correct and additionally the overlap was just like blah to be honest. Also makes a jump that imo fits more to your style.

00:33:734 (1) - CTRL+G makes a better flow, anyway just a little detail and not important suggestion.
00:50:234 (3) - Make more neat slider like your other sliders are. This is really different from others. They were sensible, but this seems like random shape that reminds me 2007 maps, but might be just presonal feeling.
01:00:067 (4,5,6,7,1) - Flowbreak in kiai is really aggressive thing. I really highly recommend to use regular spacing instead of stacking it. I hope you understand that it is really wrong when you play kiai, and you just see jump, jump, jump, jump, jump, now you have stop moving your mouse so you loose that feel of flow, and again jump, jump jump... Kiai should be lively all the time to make player enjoy that map.

[Normal]

00:03:067 (4) - New combo. There's bigger gap between NC than on Insane, so this should be definitely fixed.
00:15:067 (1) - Remove NC for consistency with other NCs. You always put NC after every 2/1 tick, but now you put it after 1/1 tick.
00:24:400 (4) - NC for consistency. It doesn't matter that it will be just one slider in this. Consistency of hitsounds is really important on easier diffs, because it gives you HP frequently, not randomly, so players are not required to play all parts pretty well, but it is enough to play just same all the time so he won't fail. All I want to say is that newbies might be stressed or confused of variable benefit of HP. Obviously swap NCs on 00:26:734 (1,2) for pretty same reason.
00:35:067 (5,1) - Swap the NCs, still same reason.
00:40:734 (4) - There also should be NC for consistency, especially when there is spinner after it, which doesn't give you HP instantly.
00:46:734 (1,2) - Also should be swapped NCs.
00:52:400 (3) - There should be NC and 00:54:234 (1,2) - Should be swapped.


[Yuki's Easy]

00:21:734 (1) - Just a little issue about symmetry. Attempt to fix the shape like this.
00:23:067 (2) - ^
00:24:400 (1) - Just fix that ugly overlap
00:38:734 (2) - CTRL+G and fix distance snap makes the flow much better, what is especially important on easier diffs.
00:47:067 (1,2) - This is easy diff, right? Try to follow music more than vocals, because the music is more consistent, so it is easier for players. Currently he has to finish the slider on red tick and start next slider on another red tick. This is nightmare for a lot of newbies, so please, increase end of 00:47:067 (1) to 00:48:067 and move 00:48:234 (2) on 00:48:400.
00:57:734 (1,2) - ^
01:11:067 (1) - Use just one point. The shape will be sure symmetric, what means much better than current one, but it's not gameplay issue anyway.

Just a short mod because map is quite good and sure ready for ranking, however I pointed out even some important stuff (NCs, flow, spread), but evne some details. If you need any help with a map or you just don't understand something I said in a mod, feel free to contact me on PM or ingame if I'm online.

Good luck!
Sakaue Nachi
好像是M4M_(:з」∠)_
[Yuki's easy]
00:05:734 (1) - 滑条尾whistle
00:07:067 (2) - ^
00:11:067 (1,2) - ^
00:08:400 (1) - 这个头也换成finish怎样,可以这个声音小点,然后2大点有个递进
00:13:734 (1) - ^
00:16:400 (1) - 尾whistle
00:16:400 (1) - 可以微调下包的好点
00:21:734 (1) - 换成finish好点?
00:24:400 (1) - 这样会不会好看点?http://puu.sh/7UrnV.jpg
00:44:400 (1) - 头finish
00:48:234 (2) - 中间whistle
00:58:900 (2) - ^
[normal]
00:12:400 (3) - 这里不知这样如何http://puu.sh/7Us0c.jpg
00:16:400 (1) - (444.180)
00:16:734 (2) - (468,104)
00:23:067 (2) - 这个是不是往下弯好点
00:36:900 (2) - 这样好看点http://puu.sh/7Usvq.jpg
00:41:484 (1) - 00:42:900 在这里结束
00:47:400 (3) - 感觉这个节奏好点http://puu.sh/7UsUP.jpg
[hard]
00:01:900 (4) - 也保持1.36x的间距好点?
00:03:234 (2) - 放在(1)右边大概(245,274)怎样?
00:11:734 (3,4,5,6) - 在hard是不是跳了点,缩小为大概0.85倍差不多感觉
00:13:734 (1,3) - 这两个平行一下
00:16:400 (1) - 这个重叠打起来不太好,建议和下一part00:17:734 (1,2,3,4) - 的排列差不多,然后旋转个角度
00:27:067 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 摆成这样打起来更好读和顺手http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1479926
00:36:234 (2) - 和这个叠00:36:400 (1) -
00:37:734 (1,2) - 和前面两个拉开点距离
00:45:734 (4) - ctrl+g
00:49:400 加个note
00:53:734 (5) - 换成一个折返slider感觉不错,然后把6删掉
01:05:234 (4,5,6,1,2) - 这里略坑,可以删掉这个01:05:567 (6) -
01:08:900 (2) - 弄成和1对称吧
[Insane]
00:10:067 (3,4,5) - 这里建议改下,我打了3次都miss了(4)感觉这样好多了 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1479952
00:07:734 (1) - 这个减速太多打起来有点怪
00:16:734 (3,4) - ctrl+g 好多了
00:24:067 (9) - 换成slider会不会好点
00:36:900 (3) - ctrl+g
00:39:400 (2) - 这个移去下一个有点不顺,这样?http://puu.sh/7VkeH.jpg 或者你想想别的吧
00:49:234 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - 这里我柑橘三连+2单点好点
01:00:400 (1) - 换滑条
01:10:484 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - 这个连打感觉换别的更好,感觉可以这样http://puu.sh/7VkMN.jpg

GL~这是我的图http://osu.ppy.sh/s/141354
[CSGA]Ar3sgice
615's Insane卡在3.49星了, 建议再加几个大跳这样就可以到达3.50星, 升级为X级
Topic Starter
moonlightleaf
to Wafu

all fix

to Sakaue Nachi

[normal]

00:12:400 (3) - 这里不知这样如何http://puu.sh/7Us0c.jpg ---没改

其他fix

thanks for modding ^^/
YoshinoSakura

OblivioN wrote:

[615'sinsane]
00:21:067 (3,4,5,6) - 凶残…………排列顺一点吧……这么治愈的歌 原来的太难了才改成这样的
00:26:400 (3,4) - ………………为何这么难orz【无视我 其实不难
00:31:900 (4) - 这个音效可以去掉…… 鼓点
00:42:900 (8) - finish
01:00:067 (4) - NC吧……柑橘没必要

Wafu wrote:

[615's Insane]

00:30:234 (2,3) - Consider this pattern, because current flow was not correct and additionally the overlap was just like blah to be honest. Also makes a jump that imo fits more to your style. fixed
collapsed text

00:33:734 (1) - CTRL+G makes a better flow, anyway just a little detail and not important suggestion. ctrlg the next slider
00:50:234 (3) - Make more neat slider like your other sliders are. This is really different from others. They were sensible, but this seems like random shape that reminds me 2007 maps, but might be just presonal feeling. I think it seems good in a happy song
01:00:067 (4,5,6,7,1) - Flowbreak in kiai is really aggressive thing. I really highly recommend to use regular spacing instead of stacking it. I hope you understand that it is really wrong when you play kiai, and you just see jump, jump, jump, jump, jump, now you have stop moving your mouse so you loose that feel of flow, and again jump, jump jump... Kiai should be lively all the time to make player enjoy that map.actually i can't understand,but will fix it

[CSGA]Ar3sgice wrote:

615's Insane卡在3.49星了, 建议再加几个大跳这样就可以到达3.50星, 升级为X级
本来是3.5啊但是有modder闲难我就降回去惹
thx for your mod

osu file format v12

[General]
AudioFilename: MARRY ME.mp3
AudioLeadIn: 2000
PreviewTime: 43184
Countdown: 0
SampleSet: Soft
StackLeniency: 0.7
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LetterboxInBreaks: 1
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[Editor]
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DistanceSpacing: 1.3
BeatDivisor: 4
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TimelineZoom: 1.4

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Title:MERRY MERRY MERRY MENU... Ne!
TitleUnicode:MERRY MERRY MERRY MENU...ね!
Artist:Tamura Yukari
ArtistUnicode:田村ゆかり
Creator:moonlightleaf
Version:615's Insane
Source:
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BeatmapID:395511
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[Difficulty]
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CircleSize:4
OverallDifficulty:8
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144,204,24400,6,0,P|136:244|132:296,1,90,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
160,116,24734,1,8,0:0:0:0:
320,40,24900,2,0,P|276:40|224:48,1,90,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
396,168,25234,2,0,P|352:168|300:176,1,90,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
456,316,25567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
304,316,25734,6,0,P|260:320|212:332,1,90,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
292,136,26067,2,0,P|317:172|351:207,1,90,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
132,232,26400,2,0,P|144:208|148:184,1,45,8|8,0:3|0:3,0:0:0:0:
152,116,26567,2,0,P|140:140|136:164,1,45,8|8,0:3|0:3,0:0:0:0:
148,192,26734,1,12,0:3:0:0:
176,216,26817,1,4,0:3:0:0:
212,232,26900,1,4,0:3:0:0:
248,232,26984,1,4,0:3:0:0:
280,223,27067,6,0,P|316:208|349:209,1,72,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
332,312,27400,1,8,0:0:0:0:
224,128,27567,2,0,P|290:101|361:100,1,144,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
332,312,28067,1,8,0:0:0:0:
92,264,28234,1,4,0:0:0:0:
92,264,28400,6,0,P|80:228|84:192,1,72,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
160,76,28734,2,0,P|172:112|168:148,1,72,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
172,300,29067,2,0,P|116:352|48:344,1,144,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
424,52,29734,6,0,P|388:88|408:184,1,144,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
456,248,30234,2,0,P|384:212|324:244,1,144,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
392,312,30734,1,8,0:0:0:0:
228,344,30900,6,0,P|208:296|192:196,1,144,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
116,124,31400,2,0,P|108:160|104:204,1,72,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
228,344,31734,1,0,0:0:0:0:
280,184,31900,1,8,0:3:0:0:
116,124,32067,1,8,0:0:0:0:
444,60,32400,6,0,P|460:104|456:152,1,90,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
344,120,32900,1,0,0:0:0:0:
344,120,33067,2,0,L|344:212,1,90,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
124,188,33734,6,0,P|120:232|136:276,1,90,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
216,216,34234,1,0,0:0:0:0:
111,189,34400,2,0,P|108:234|124:276,1,90,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
392,332,35067,6,0,P|392:288|400:232,1,90,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
364,156,35567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
312,236,35734,2,0,P|306:280|306:325,1,90,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
100,192,36400,6,0,P|80:232|80:288,1,90,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
176,260,36734,1,8,0:0:0:0:
192,160,36900,2,0,P|128:100|36:120,1,180,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
100,192,37400,2,0,L|80:240,3,45,8|0|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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376,64,39400,1,0,1:0:0:0:
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0,284,40900,2,0,P|0:236|72:172,1,144,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
180,160,41400,1,8,0:0:0:0:
292,196,41567,6,0,P|300:252|304:352,1,144,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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292,196,42234,1,8,0:0:0:0:
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292,196,42400,1,8,0:0:0:0:
336,32,42567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
460,256,42734,1,8,0:0:0:0:
160,268,42900,1,4,0:0:0:0:
160,268,43234,6,0,P|156:316|176:364,1,90,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
368,96,43734,1,0,0:0:0:0:
212,152,43900,1,0,0:0:0:0:
388,232,44067,1,8,0:0:0:0:
240,80,44234,1,0,0:0:0:0:
256,308,44400,6,0,B|304:364|336:300|336:300|396:336|452:288,1,215.999993408203,4|10,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
64,196,45067,1,0,0:0:0:0:
32,328,45234,1,0,0:0:0:0:
152,184,45400,1,8,0:0:0:0:
152,348,45567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
216,108,45734,6,0,B|256:152|236:208|236:208|244:224|244:224|292:200|332:228,1,215.999993408203,0|10,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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288,308,46567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
336,128,46734,1,8,0:0:0:0:
444,260,46900,1,0,0:0:0:0:
212,364,47067,6,0,B|184:320|204:264|204:264|152:232|96:268,1,215.999993408203,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
96,356,47567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
72,72,47734,2,0,P|88:120|88:180,1,107.999996704102,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
184,40,48067,1,8,0:0:0:0:
336,64,48234,6,0,P|392:76|376:124,1,107.999996704102,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
280,264,48567,2,0,P|230:261|229:212,1,107.999996704102,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
136,176,48900,2,0,P|120:240|216:364,1,215.999993408203,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
308,360,49400,1,8,0:0:0:0:
416,320,49567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
416,320,49650,1,0,0:0:0:0:
416,320,49734,6,0,P|404:268|404:212,1,107.999996704102,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
416,92,50067,1,8,0:0:0:0:
292,40,50234,2,0,B|240:64|265:103|265:103|297:147|223:181|288:228,1,215.999993408203,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
284,225,50734,1,8,0:0:0:0:
52,248,51067,6,0,B|56:280|56:280|88:304|84:352,1,107.999996704102,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
196,348,51400,1,8,0:0:0:0:
288,288,51567,2,0,B|232:224|160:244|160:244|144:224|144:224|136:176,1,215.999993408203,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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428,72,52400,5,0,0:0:0:0:
456,244,52567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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356,296,52900,1,0,0:0:0:0:
356,80,53067,1,0,0:0:0:0:
236,304,53234,1,0,0:0:0:0:
320,72,53400,1,8,0:0:0:0:
112,260,53567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
284,48,53734,6,0,P|236:36|184:60,2,107.999996704102,0|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
244,148,54234,2,0,B|216:208|260:248|260:248|304:296|272:356,1,215.999993408203,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
188,316,54734,1,8,0:0:0:0:
328,184,54900,1,0,0:0:0:0:
84,160,55067,6,0,B|64:116|100:76|100:76|168:128|164:28|248:96,1,215.999993408203,4|10,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
456,324,55734,1,0,0:0:0:0:
424,168,55900,1,0,0:0:0:0:
336,336,56067,1,8,0:0:0:0:
504,248,56234,1,0,0:0:0:0:
292,256,56400,6,0,B|248:284|244:336|244:336|216:352|184:332|184:332|152:312|124:328,1,215.999993408203,0|10,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
131,324,57067,1,0,0:0:0:0:
188,108,57234,1,0,0:0:0:0:
20,280,57400,1,8,0:0:0:0:
288,148,57567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
24,172,57734,6,0,B|28:120|104:116|104:116|104:52|168:24,1,215.999993408203,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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260,268,58400,1,0,0:0:0:0:
420,108,58567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
188,48,58734,1,8,0:0:0:0:
100,296,58900,6,0,B|112:348|112:348|176:368,1,107.999996704102,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
420,108,59234,2,0,B|408:56|408:56|344:36,1,107.999996704102,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
356,308,59567,2,0,P|376:259|364:208,1,107.999996704102,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
224,240,59900,1,0,0:0:0:0:
356,308,60067,1,8,0:0:0:0:
320,308,60150,1,0,0:0:0:0:
280,292,60234,1,0,0:0:0:0:
252,268,60317,1,0,0:0:0:0:
224,240,60400,6,0,P|200:200|184:136,1,107.999996704102,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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352,216,61067,1,0,0:0:0:0:
412,44,61234,2,0,P|424:92|428:156,2,107.999996704102,0|8|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
444,260,61734,6,0,B|404:316|352:316|352:316|304:364|256:344,1,215.999993408203,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
196,204,62234,1,0,0:0:0:0:
104,320,62400,2,0,P|96:352|96:380,3,53.9999983520508,0|0|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
56,176,62734,2,0,P|24:192|0:212,3,53.9999983520508,8|0|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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196,204,63734,1,0,0:0:0:0:
448,204,63900,2,0,P|395:193|341:197,2,107.999996704102,0|8|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
388,328,64400,6,0,B|344:344|312:312|312:312|280:320|280:320|248:256|188:304,1,215.999993408203,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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100,220,65067,1,0,0:0:0:0:
116,64,65234,1,0,0:0:0:0:
196,204,65400,1,8,0:0:0:0:
272,40,65567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
360,212,65734,6,0,P|384:262|376:328,1,107.999996704102,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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468,236,66234,1,0,1:0:0:0:
240,288,66567,5,2,0:0:0:0:
468,236,66734,1,2,0:0:0:0:
324,24,66900,2,0,B|256:32|232:92|232:92|180:72|140:116,1,215.999993408203,0|0,1:0|1:0,0:0:0:0:
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116,324,68067,1,2,0:0:0:0:
116,324,68234,1,2,0:0:0:0:
116,324,68400,6,0,P|116:280|128:228,1,90,4|0,0:0|1:0,0:0:0:0:
176,124,68734,1,10,0:0:0:0:
128,328,68900,6,0,P|128:284|140:232,1,90,0|0,1:0|1:0,0:0:0:0:
188,128,69234,1,2,0:0:0:0:
140,332,69400,6,0,P|140:288|152:236,1,90,0|0,1:0|1:0,0:0:0:0:
204,132,69734,1,2,0:0:0:0:
156,336,69900,6,0,P|156:292|168:240,1,90,0|0,1:0|1:0,0:0:0:0:
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360,68,70900,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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156,336,73067,1,0,1:0:0:0:
68,40,73400,1,4,0:0:0:0:
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200,136,74400,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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416,92,74734,1,8,0:0:0:0:
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412,192,75317,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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400,332,77067,5,0,0:0:0:0:
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340,300,77233,1,0,0:0:0:0:
324,268,77317,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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199,251,78234,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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256,192,79067,12,0,81734,0:0:0:0:
Rizia
[Insane]
00:13:734 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 突然就變大了 讓人有點不習慣
00:20:734 - 試試 http://puu.sh/7UvrZ.jpg
00:22:484 (6) - 試試移到00:22:650 -
00:23:817 (7) - ^一樣做法
00:36:734 (2,3) - http://puu.sh/7UvBM.jpg
00:51:400 (3) - x252 y156
00:51:567 (4) - x120 y172
00:54:734 (4,5,6) - 換成5連
00:59:900 - add note
00:51:567 (4) - 這樣NC http://puu.sh/7UvMA.jpg
01:03:984 (7) - 刪掉
01:08:400 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - 有幾個相同的節奏能用這NC梗, 自己參詳
01:10:484 (1) - remove nc
01:18:400 (5) - whistle
01:18:900 - ^

[615]
01:02:400 (3,4) - 換成3連slider http://puu.sh/7Uwd9.jpg
01:16:400 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 我不會跟你說我恨這個 建議改改 改成00:13:734 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - 一樣也好

[Hard]
00:11:734 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - http://puu.sh/7UwlW.jpg 有看不懂的話找我
00:35:734 (1) - 第三錨點 x144 y176
00:38:734 (5,6,7,8) - 可以考慮跟00:37:734 (1,2,3,4) - 對稱
00:44:400 (7,1,1) - http://puu.sh/7UwxE.jpg
00:48:567 - 這vol. 5%有點怪
- TiRaFiouS -
[General]
我愛飛球((喂
又是1kds....

[NM]
像EZ...
00:03:067 (1,2) - 抱歉...強迫症00:00:401 (1,2) -不和這個一樣接受不了_(:3JL)_
00:24:400 (1) - 縮短到00:25:400 - 加circle在00:25:567 - (NM這像EZ...)
00:32:400 (1,2,3,4) -ds 要一樣
00:27:067 (1,2) - (2)取代(1)然後,00:27:900 - 加circle
00:29:734 (1,2,3) - ^
00:36:567 - 加circle
00:40:734 (1) - 縮短到紅線,00:40:734 (1) - 加circle(原本的感覺不對)
00:47:734 (3) - 延長到00:48:734 - 結束(完全不對喔...)
00:54:234 (2) - del reveres,00:54:734 - 滑條結束位+00:55:067 - 加circle
00:58:400 (3) - end at 00:59:400 - add circle
01:11:067 (1,2) - 球繼承傳統((X ---->01:11:067 (1,2) -

[615 baka]
臥感覺太跳?((撒...我就是說說=3=還可以
感覺flow不太好?
感覺不太好

00:10:900 (4) - del
00:12:067 (4) - x:112 y:200

00:21:067 (3,4,5,6,1) - 太密了而且好難按
00:23:067 (1,2,3,4,5) - 這5角形滑條折點放中間(4)和(5)間距不一樣故意的?
00:26:400 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - 太密,(5)根本看不見2個短滑條又不是早消失能而看的見加上連打順著去停在(3)尾就像停了一樣,你讓我吐糟什麼((我在說什麼
00:28:234 (5) - 移到00:21:567 (6) - , 00:28:400 (1,2) - 移到本來(5)的位置
00:29:067 (4) - Ctrl G
00:39:734 (1) - x:152 y:176
00:40:067 (2) - x:88 y:344
00:46:400 (2) - 不在三角形中間...
00:47:734 (3) - Ctrl G? 都好像flow不好?
00:48:900 (3) - 滑條折點不在中間+不在(2)的正後方....
00:59:567 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - 同樣,滑條(不正常地)擋住連打難讀圖,還有(4)好奇怪...
01:02:400 (3,4) - 各縮小一個返回
01:13:734 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 這音樂給我的感覺是越縮越小诶
01:19:067 (1) - end at 01:21:067 -

[HD]
00:00:401 (1,2) - 不是對著的
00:01:900 (4) - 還是順著比較好
00:48:067 (5) - 感覺漏音
00:48:567 (6,7) - (7)取代(6)
00:51:067 (1,2,3) - 跟著前面比較好00:49:734 (1,2,3) -
01:07:234 (6) - NC
01:09:900 (4) - 還是順著比較好

ds像ins 但似乎只是難一點的NM.....((我感覺

[ins]
00:07:734 (5) - 0.5x把畢竟是長音
00:11:067 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - 這是在旋轉?中間沒轉啊!?
00:33:067 (3) - 彎點QAQ
00:37:650 (6) - del
00:42:067 (4) - 在三角形中間比較好

感覺所又能變難的位置都被來回滑條取代喔.....
感覺你叫我試那張好一點
節奏感覺沒問題,就是簡單了點

就醬

don't forget my kds!~
Topic Starter
moonlightleaf
to Kawaiwkyik

[Insane]

00:22:484 (6) - 試試移到00:22:650 - 之前就是这么放的 扔给几个人play 发现那边有几率掉 于是改掉的, fix
00:23:817 (7) - ^一樣做法

其他fix

to Piyoko_9796

[insane]

00:11:067 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - 這是在旋轉?中間沒轉啊!? ---没改额

其他fix

感谢mod ^^/
Topic Starter
moonlightleaf

Sakaue Nachi wrote:

好像是M4M_(:з」∠)_
[Yuki's easy]
00:05:734 (1) - 滑条尾whistle
00:07:067 (2) - ^
00:11:067 (1,2) - ^
00:08:400 (1) - 这个头也换成finish怎样,可以这个声音小点,然后2大点有个递进
00:13:734 (1) - ^
00:16:400 (1) - 尾whistle
00:16:400 (1) - 可以微调下包的好点
00:21:734 (1) - 换成finish好点?
00:24:400 (1) - 这样会不会好看点?http://puu.sh/7UrnV.jpg
00:44:400 (1) - 头finish
00:48:234 (2) - 中间whistle
00:58:900 (2) - ^

to Minakami Yuki

[hard]

00:11:734 (3,4,5,6) - 在hard是不是跳了点,缩小为大概0.85倍差不多感觉 ---没改

GL~这是我的图http://osu.ppy.sh/s/141354 --等我闲下来就摸
感谢补充H和I的摸~
Koiyuki
http://puu.sh/7Vsar.osu
Thanks for modding. Sry no time to reply.
Topic Starter
moonlightleaf
to yuki

下次贴代码到这里吧 puush的有乱码诶 arist 什么的不识别 我每次还要改一下

:?
DreaM117er
For NM from PM

這首歌是屬於很俏皮的歌,最適合頓點然後再接拍子,我會依照這個原則幫你Mod

Insane
00:18:900 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - 這裡單點太多了,顯得很沒特色,反而沒有最一開始的開頭好(00:16:067 之前 )
00:20:400 (5,6) - 擺成平行
00:21:067 (1,2,3,4) - 變形的風車!!?? 把它擺正
00:21:734 (1,2,3,4,5) - 單點太多了,大大你要知道前面的風車已經很難了,後面又接連跳,不人道啊= " =
00:22:900 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - ^
00:25:734 (2) - 這個刪掉再做跳點
00:29:067 (1,3) - 平行,有點歪了
00:29:734 (1,3,4,5) - 這四個都是直Slider,弄彎一點比較好看
00:37:234 (1,2,3,4,5) - 太彎了太彎了,圓滑一點(把DS調一下再做調整)
00:40:484 (3,4,5) - 這裡只有一個聲音,接連打好怪
00:47:067 (5,6,1) - 組成一個大Slider,不要全跳
00:50:900 (6) - 這裡沒有任何聲音,刪掉這個
00:52:234 (2) - ^
00:57:734 (5,6,1) - 組成一個大Slider
01:00:734 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,1,2,3) - 還有 01:03:400 (3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - 統一一起說比較好,跟著歌詞還有鼓,多運用點1/2 Slider,和前面一樣,不要全跳
01:07:400 (7) - 換成circle
01:18:567 (6) - 刪掉,01:18:400 (5) - 換成3/4 Slider


Hard
00:07:067 (7) - 換成1/2 Slider + 1/1 Slider
00:12:400 (7) - ^
00:15:067 (5) - 四個鼓聲,分開來吧
00:16:567 - 漏掉一個音,建議放Slider
00:17:900 (2) - ^
00:16:734 (3) - 這裡有很多分音,像00:23:067 (4,5,6) 一樣分開
00:18:067 (3) - ^
00:22:067 (2) - ^
00:28:567 (6,7) - 組成Slider
00:37:567 (5) - 刪掉
00:43:900 (4,5) - Hard照著順序來就好了,Reverse Selection
00:48:067 (5) - 中間還有一個音,不要漏掉了
00:53:734 (5) - 換成circle
00:54:234 (1,2) - 換成這樣??


※Hard記得DS從頭到尾全開,除非要跳點按著Alt在去做調整,你有些地方跳得很兇,提醒一下


Normal
00:40:734 (4,1) - 換成這樣↓

00:49:734 (1) - 換成下面這樣??

00:51:067 (2) - ^


615's Insane
00:06:900 (6) - 三角形沒有排好
00:15:734 (5) - 太遠了,Reverse Selection
00:18:900 (6) - 疊在00:19:067 (1) 頭上
00:22:900 (6,1,2,3,4) - 正五角形擺好
00:26:567 (4) - 移到x144 y68
00:37:400 (4) - 減少一次折返
00:42:567 (6,7,8) - 重新做這三個點,跳太遠了
00:43:234 (1,2) - ^
00:45:567 (5,1) - ^
00:47:567 (2,3) - ^
00:52:567 (2,4,6,8) - 網內拉近距離,同上
00:57:067 (2,3,4,5) - 太遠了
00:58:234 (2,3,4,5,1,2) - ^
01:00:734 (2,3) - ^
01:02:400 (3,4) - 這種滑條不是給你這樣擺的,你打的到就當我沒Mod過
01:10:567 (4,5,6,7,1) - 太遠了
01:13:734 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^,要求重製
01:16:400 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 重製,這裡你打的到??

歌開始前10秒我還以為是神圖,不合格 :(
BPM180跳這麼遠,除非你打的過,否則我不會要求重製

抱歉。

Easy沒有問題,有一些怪怪的地方,請別的大大幫你吧 :D
Topic Starter
moonlightleaf
to m1223961117

都fix

感谢mod ^^/
Momoka
Hi

[Yuki's Easy]
The way you mapped, I think HP OD AR should be reduced by 1 tick.
00:48:400 (2) - I couldn't figure out why you placed it here. It should be moved to 00:48:234 - to follow vocal or guitar or the music itself.
But the way you mapped, I don't know if you should make this part 1/2 beat or not.
00:59:067 (2) - This again. same opinion as above. I don't think it follows the music at all. I really don't know your intention.. Maybe you are following the drum, that that isn't the dominant beat here imo.
01:21:734 (1) - How about adding timing sections to add fade out effect like the music does.

[Normal]
Your NC needs a lot of work
00:02:400 (3,1) - this can be really confusing for inexperienced players sometimes, I strongly recommend that you unstack these.
00:27:900 (2,3) - I think this would flow better. And also, this stack might be a little too hard
00:37:734 (1,2) - shouldn't these 2 be 2/1 slider? or have circle after them
01:12:067 (2,1) - they overlap, but I guess you can keep it. I wouldn't recommend, though.

[Hard]
Same as normal. Your NC needs a lot of work
00:36:234 (2) - this stack really doesn't fit at all imo. There really isn't much of a thing going on here, so you can delete this and 00:35:734 (1,1) - spread this out.
00:38:234 (3,4) - Try crtl + g. Fits very well and flows better imo
00:43:234 (1,2) - I think you should merge these to a 1/1 slider. this vocal is holding, and 2 circles don't fit imo.
00:48:400 (6) - you can delete this note. I can't think of a reason why you would want to add a circle here. Unless you were trying to make this diff harder
01:00:400 (2,3) - How about merge thee to a 1/2 slider? according to 01:03:067 (2) -
01:01:234 (4,1,2) - you should either stack these 3 or unstack 01:01:401 (1,2) - to fit vocal more. having.
01:03:400 (3) - crtl + g please. extremely boring flow
01:04:067 (1) - ^
01:10:900 (1) - this part feels very awkward. you're starting the slider which i part of 01:10:567 (2) - this melody, which makes the vocal start from the reverse. Try this
mine
yours

01:13:734 (1,2,3,4) - to be honest, this part seems really boring. you could probably remap this section and come up with better pattern!

[Insane]
NC....
00:07:734 (1) - I don't think this SV change makes any sense at all.
00:17:067 (5) - crtl + g?
00:17:400 (6) - ^ (only if you did above)
00:25:567 (1,2,3,4) - I think you can do a better job with this distance problem here. kind of confusing imo.
00:26:067 (3,4,1) - awkward flow imo. try to bring 00:26:234 (4) - down left a little?
00:33:067 (3) - move it a bit up for smooth transition 00:32:400 (1,2,3) -
00:35:067 (8) - this 1/2 reverse doesn't fit, and is ruining the calmness of these part imo. replace it with 1/1 slider?
00:40:567 (3) - I really don't see a point with this circle. delete? if you do, don't forget distance here 00:40:067 (2,4) -
00:40:734 (4,5) - not the best flow imo.
00:55:067 (6) - I'd call this bad flow. it's completely breaking the flow from this stream 00:54:734 (2,3,4,5) -
01:10:400 (3,4,5,6) - spacing disaster, also shape
01:10:901 (6,1,2) - I think this might be a bit hard to play. but it's ok
01:18:234 (4,5) - not the best flow, but it's acceptable

Good luck!!
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