try to avoid weird visual overlaps like 00:10:652 (2) and 00:10:949 (4), 00:14:355 (1) and 00:14:948 (4), and especially 00:20:576 (3) and 00:21:169 (1) and 00:21:613 (3) (just to give a few examples)
your rhythm choice in the kiai is good, follows the vocals correctly, and most of your jumps are comfortable sharp angles
00:28:278 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - is a little too hard imo, and you should try to emphasise every third note where there is a stronger drum sound
really nice circular flow on 00:47:830 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4)
(sorry if i wrote too much lmao)
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