Tamura Yukari - fancy baby doll

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Asphyxia
Marked. Editing this post for the mod ^^

General thoughts
  1. There is inconsistencies in audio-lead in, others have 500 except alacat's Normal, make sure to fix that.
  2. Clean.

Insane
  1. 00:04:578 (6) - Consider moving this further away from 00:04:252 (5) - because you had jumps 00:03:925 (4,5) - here so I expect that 6 will have a larger spacing too, this isn't the case here. Although it played well, it could play better by this.
  2. 00:05:556 (1,2,3,4,5) - The whole pattern could be arranged better, now the flow is really broken here, here's 2 pictures how it could be better with a nice flow.
  3. 00:07:838 (1,2,3,4) - Make this into a curved stream instead? It'd play better and it would be consistent with 00:04:904 (1) - this stream
  4. 00:09:795 (1) - I'd move this note to somewhere around x:385 y:231, because the cursor movement gets more natural this way.
  5. 00:10:773 (1) - Your slider could be more better looking shape-wise, try this one, it'd make a nicer curve and more symmetrical:
  6. 00:12:404 (6) - Why the random spacing + broken flow here? You could move the slider somewhere to x:162 y:260 to make the jump a bit more random and fix the flow.
  7. 00:13:382 (1,2,3) - I have a suggestion for this pattern, since your flow between 1-2 isn't the best, how about doing it more like this?
    This way it plays better, flow is way better. Make sure to fix the blanket between 2-3 if you apply this one.
  8. 00:21:860 (3) - If you move the end point of the slider more downright, the flow will be waay better and the slider doesn't look so bad then. If you don't get what I mean by this, see the picture below.
  9. 00:25:447 (7,8) - See the picture below again, rearranging them like that would look way cleaner than your current one.
  10. 00:34:904 (3,1) - Please care about blankets, make this one perfect. It'd make your map more clean.
  11. 00:38:002 (5) - Could you like, reverse the blanket section in that slider? Like this:
    (and rearrange the 00:38:817 (6,7) - like that because it flows better)
  12. 00:42:404 (3) - Why the random spacing again? There's no need for that, also it plays rather bad.
  13. 00:43:545 (6,7) - And suddenly you used jumps, you decide to use normal spacing, why? You need to be consistent and this just plays weird.
  14. 00:51:045 (4) - Could you consider rearranging your slider like this, your current one is fine, it doesn't flow that well though.
    And to fix the flow with the next objects, place 00:51:860 (5) - somewhere to x:195 y:100. It'd look nice because then you would have blankets and such. >:D
  15. 00:54:306 (8) - Slider could be done better, a bit similar suggestion that I gave you above somewhere. Try to do it like this: more symmetrical that way and would fit way better:
  16. 01:04:088 (1) - Could you rotate the slider a bit that the flow would be nicer here? Like this:
  17. 01:13:056 (5,6,7,8) - The curve of this stream gets really bad from here, you had a perfect curve 01:12:730 (1,2,3,4) - here but you kind of ruined it, try this?
  18. 01:21:208 (1,2,3,4) - Could flow better, well, your placement is fine but this is just a quick suggestion to make it ''better'' I guess. See if you like my example.
  19. Your Insane difficulty needs more work, sorry. Rhythm-wise it was fine, flow-wise, not so. Sorry. :s

Cilvery's Hard
  1. I don't see the point of HP7, it makes the difficulty spread rather bad and Insane already has HP7, HP6 would make the spread way better.
  2. 00:16:969 (4) - Try ctrl + G, it plays nicely ^^
  3. 00:32:947 - There's actually no beat here that's mappable, it sounds a bit bad anyway with that note there. Could you consider removing it?
  4. 00:46:480 (5) - If you would move your sliders redpoint a bit more to the middle, it would look more symmetrical, which in this case is better than your current one.
  5. I guess this diff is almost ready to go, nice job~

alacat's Normal
  1. +1 HP for a better difficulty spread?
  2. 00:04:252 (3,5) - I like your idea here but guess what makes it look inperfect? :( The blanket isn't perfect, could you fix that?
  3. 01:00:991 (2) - I'd move this slider a bit down so the movement from 01:00:338 (1) - gets perfect.
  4. 01:12:730 (4) - Usually wavesliders that are made by redpoints have that weird bump, which you have, try to remake your slider like this: It'd give the slider a bit smoother waves I would say:
  5. 01:34:333 (1) - To be consistent, could you move this spinner 1/4 further? In Insane and Hard the spinner started in the blue tick, not in the big white tick.
  6. Yeah nice work!

Saten's Easy
  1. -1 AR +1 OD would make the diff spread more equal. :3
  2. 00:04:904 (1) - The NC on this seems to be a bit weird, I'd remove it from here and add the NC on 00:05:882 (2) - instead, would seem more logical imo
  3. 00:26:099 (1) - Could cover a bit better 00:25:447 (5) - end of the slider, I mean like this:
  4. 01:15:991 (2,3) - This would fit a bit better I guess if 01:16:643 (3) - was blanketed with 2's end, like this (i just made the blanket quickly, make perfect one yourself if you apply this one):
  5. 01:34:252 (1) - To be consistent with the Insane & Hard, you should move this spinner to the blue tick.
  6. Cool diff, liked your patterns.

Yeah, that would be the mod I guess. GL ~ 8-)
Colin Hou
frightened by muya's post.

[general]
  1. Gin no Senritsu,Kioku no Mizuoto is the album name right? you shouldn't put it in the source.
  2. and tag 銀の旋律、記憶の水音, you lost the 。mark
  3. audio lean-in: 1500ms, you can adjust this with notepad (do it with all diffs


[insane nomi]
  1. 01:25:610 (7) - till 01:31:317, all sliders cross while lines are not good in my eyes. cuz the drums are mainly i can hear and also this part should probably been mapped as the hardest part with mostly 1/2 rhythm.
  2. 00:42:730 ~ 00:47:295 - almost the same, but not so bad
  3. 01:32:784 (1,2,3,1) - dodgy timing.


other things seem good
Saten
Some changes
http://puu.sh/72N3N/a4e0b9e33e.osu

also, please add "Saten-san" to tags~
alacat
Thanks Asphyxia ~ nice modding! then, I'll think about HP Drain Rate :3

http://puu.sh/75Zuh.osu
Topic Starter
S o r d a
upload~ thanks alacat and saten!
Laura Mercier

S o a p wrote:

[Hard]
00:30:665 (5) - separate them
00:54:306 (6) - whistle fixed
01:00:012 (8) - change to a note
01:02:295 - change to slider hand
01:04:088 (4) - whistle
01:09:469 - slider tail
thanks for mod =)
Laura Mercier

Guy wrote:

[Cilvery's Hard]
  1. 00:04:904 (3,4,1) - ここのスペーシング統一したほうが読みやすく、さらに綺麗に見えると思いました。
  2. 00:32:621 (4,5) - この辺少し違和感あったのでこんな感じでnoteとスライダーを入れ替えてみてはどうでしょう? 変更しました!
  3. 00:42:730 (2) - 細かいけど1に向かって直線のスライダーにすると見栄え良いと思いました。 少し変更しました
  4. 00:51:534 (6,7) - 配置の提案です。noteが左上に寄りすぎて叩きづらいかなと思ったのでこのようにしてみてはどうでしょうか
  5. 01:00:012 (8) - リピート部分のnormal-whistleが違和感あるので削除してもいいかも? 消しましたー
モッドありがとうございました!
Laura Mercier

NewRulerNA wrote:

as your request
[Hard]
  1. 00:04:252 (1,2) - whistleをsoftからnormalに変更? このwhistleが曲の近い音に合わせるために追加されているのは分かりますが、
    00:02:947 (1) - からのwhistleが譜面から生じるヒットサウンドのリズムを形成しつつあり、ここでは曲に合わせるよりも譜面のそちらの音に合わせた方が聞こえが良くなるはずです。 変更しました
  2. 00:18:436 - ここに間を開けた理由は?ここにもボーカルも楽器もあり、ここまでを見た際にこの間を開けることが最善ではないように感じました。
    また00:20:067 - からの変化をより際立たせるためにもそこは埋めておくという見方もできます。
  3. 00:20:230 (6) - 音としてはこれでもそこそこ良く感じられ気付いてくれない人も多いと思いますが、このあとの2つのサークルが特定の音だけを拾い上げていることを考慮するとこのスライダーの終点が邪魔になります。
    00:20:230 - の音をより強調させるためにもサークルに変えることをお勧めします。
  4. 00:23:165 (7,8) - 順番を入れ替え?この流れの最後、下の方からの00:23:817 (1) - への接続が少し強引に感じたという点と、短いスライダーの間で円運動要素を付け足すことでより打ちやすくなるのではないかという点からの提案。
  5. 00:32:947 (5) - サークルとしてこのポイントに音を置くのは曲にフィットしないように感じられました。そこには伸びている音しか存在しておらず、サークルとして一つの音を拾うのには適しません。
    サークルを置くことに対して違和感があるのであって、00:32:784 - で1/2スライダーを置いたりしてそこをスライダーの終点として置く分にはありだと思います。削除にするか、スライダーを置いていくかどうかはそちらにお任せします。
  6. 00:43:219 (3,4,5) - この前後の節は全てボーカルに揃えられている中、ここはそれに正確に従ったものとはなっていません。

    1. 00:43:219 (3) - 1/2
    2. 00:43:545 (4) - ^
    3. 00:43:871 (5) - 1/1
    4. 00:44:360 (6) - circle

    多少の差はあれど大体こういった音取りになるはずです。
  7. 00:51:860 (7) - Gayさんと同じような理由です。 ちょっと変更しました

    00:51:860 (7) - x156 y24
  8. 00:58:871 (4,5,6,7,8) - このあたりdrumのヒットサウンドつけていってもいいかもしれない。 私もそう思ったので使わせていただきますw
  9. 01:02:621 (7) - イェイって音が高く尖った傾向があるのでsoftよりもnormalの方がこれに対してはフィットすると思います。
  10. 01:15:175 (5,6) - ここの部分を1/1に纏めることは出来ませんか?最初の方でその傾向が強かったのでスライダーの途中、01:15:338 - の音が少し耳障りだと感じました。
  11. 01:21:045 (1) - 完全に曲に対して余分に置かれているサークルです。聞いていても音取りに実際に違和感があり、私はこのサークルの削除を強く推奨します。
  12. 01:23:817 (1,2,3,4,5) - ここからメロディーに変化が出るので01:29:686 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - くらいに音を多くさせてリズム的にも難易度的にも今より複雑なものにして良いと思います。
  13. 01:28:219 (7) - onbeatに合わせたリズムをこれが壊しています。このスライダーはoffbeatで始まりoffbeatで終わっており、中間である01:28:382 - のonbeatの音を無視しています。
    それ以前を見てみると分かりますが、onbeatで増えた音をより意識したパートとなっているのでそれを無視したリズムはこの付近で浮き、完璧ではない音取りとなる原因になっています。

    1. 01:28:219 (7) - 1/2 slider
    2. 01:28:545 (8) - circle

    これなら今の音取りに比較的近いままそれを改善させることが出来ます。
  14. 01:31:643 - 少し極端に速度が下がりすぎているように感じました。そこまで静かになるわけでもなく、ここまでの大きなギャップは曲合わないように感じられます。0.75じゃダメなんでしょうか。 少し変更しました
  15. 01:33:599 (1) - 01:34:252まで延長orサークルに切り替え。音はそこまで伸びているので今の終了地点だと中途半端です。
    しかも今のままだと 01:34:252 がどう考えてもサークル置き忘れてるように…。
モッドありがとうございました!
音取りの事に関しては完全にマッピングスタイルだと思います・・・
Laura Mercier

Asphyxia wrote:

Marked. Editing this post for the mod ^^

Cilvery's Hard
  1. I don't see the point of HP7, it makes the difficulty spread rather bad and Insane already has HP7, HP6 would make the spread way better. changed
  2. 00:16:969 (4) - Try ctrl + G, it plays nicely ^^
  3. 00:32:947 - There's actually no beat here that's mappable, it sounds a bit bad anyway with that note there. Could you consider removing it?
  4. 00:46:480 (5) - If you would move your sliders redpoint a bit more to the middle, it would look more symmetrical, which in this case is better than your current one.
  5. I guess this diff is almost ready to go, nice job~
thanks for mod!
Ranger
Konnichiha :3

[General]

it's not full version. right? so how about change title fancy baby doll (Short ver.)?

[Saten's Easy]

only this diff checked widescreen support

  1. 00:11:752 (2) - i'm not recommend use short slider in easy diff. so i suggest this slider make to just one note
  2. 00:14:360 (3) - ^..and other short slider
  3. 00:51:045 (2) - add finish at front. i hear symbol sound at this part
  4. 00:53:654 (2) - ^
  5. 01:00:338 (1,1) - ^ at reserve


[alacat's Normal]

only this diff have wrong tags

  1. 00:42:404 (2,3) - try to make each other stare. now is already fine. but it can be improved.
    184,68,42404,2,0,P|228:43|288:49,1,110
    356,184,43219,2,0,P|272:240|160:208,1,220,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:


[Cilvery's Hard]

  1. 00:00:339 (1) - add finish at front? now a little empty
  2. 00:34:252 (1) - add finish at front. i'm hear symbol sound at this part. and i recommend add finish each symbol sounds place. like 00:38:002
  3. 00:45:175 - how about add circle here? this part quite grow strained. so i think more a hard way this part
  4. 00:51:860 (7,8) - overlap i think. recommend reduce distance a little
  5. 01:04:904 - add circle here? it hears good


[Insane]

  1. 00:00:991 (3,4,5,6) - just suggest. how about make same angle like prior two sliders
  2. 00:38:980 (7) - how about make this just straight line?
  3. 00:51:045 (4,5) - now i feel little awkward. consider make slider turn the other way.
  4. 01:18:110 (4) - divide this and make one note for good measure front(like picture).it' s more match the music i think
  5. 01:26:099 (10) - change angle like...-10 degree. now seems sticking


Best of luck!
Saten
added finish hitsounds here and there

but I kept the sliders, since I see no issues having them


http://puu.sh/guFSs/255b5343fe.osu
alacat
Thanks. added some notes for difficulty spread by myself.

http://puu.sh/gxkpr/0dc12ad4bb.zip
Topic Starter
S o r d a
thanks for mod and star Ranger
changed almost!
jonathanlfj
[General]
Saten's Easy has corrupted artist: 逕ー譚代f縺九j -> 田村ゆかり
alacat's Normal is missing the "a" in "alacat" for tags

[Saten's Easy]
00:23:491 (2) - adjust this slider a bit so it blankets 00:24:469 (3)
00:26:099 (1) - this is almost offscreen, and partially blocked by the hiterror meter. See if you can raise it a bit
00:29:034 (3) - should have NC here
00:46:643 (4) - another one that could be adjusted a bit upwards
01:23:817 (1) - this section has a lot of slider spam, it would be great if you can swap two of the sliders for a repeat slider + circle to have more variety, for example 01:27:730 (3,4) -


[alanyan's Normal]
this would look less clustered with CS3.5, which will also make the spread better
00:40:936 (4) - clap on end
00:42:893 (3) - this pattern plays a little confusing with this slider, i would delete this and add a note at 00:43:056 instead
01:31:643 (1,2) - the timing of the sliders is a little difficult to catch, i would add one more in here:


[Cilvery's Hard]
00:38:002 (5,6) - small spacing inconsistency
00:49:904 (1) - i think finish should be here instead of 00:50:230 (2)

nicely made diff, though i think for spread considerations you should add some triplets in the diff, for example:
00:44:523 (6,1) - can be redesigned to this:

00:51:860 (7,8) - this can be like this:

01:05:067 (5,6) - same change as 00:44:523 (6,1)
01:15:502 (6,7) - same change as 00:51:860 (7,8)
01:31:480 - a triplet can be added here
Its up to you, but I think this will make the transition from Hard to Insane a lot better.


[Insane]
00:11:752 (4) - add clap
00:26:099 (1) - finish intentional? Should be a clap imo
00:43:545 (6) - clap on end
00:44:360 (8,9,10,1,2,3) - clap on 00:44:360 (8), and this doesn't really flow well, try something like this:

00:45:012 (3) - clap start
00:59:360 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - how bout a pattern that decreases spacing to represent the music better?

01:18:599 (1) - finish on start
01:26:099 (10) - clap on start
01:29:034 (2) - clap on end

Thats about all, let me know afterwards
Topic Starter
S o r d a
thank you mod jonathan
fixed my diff and General
waiting guest diffs~
Laura Mercier

Ranger wrote:

[Cilvery's Hard]

  1. 00:00:339 (1) - add finish at front? now a little empty added
  2. 00:34:252 (1) - add finish at front. i'm hear symbol sound at this part. and i recommend add finish each symbol sounds place. like 00:38:002 added
  3. 00:45:175 - how about add circle here? this part quite grow strained. so i think more a hard way this part added
  4. 00:51:860 (7,8) - overlap i think. recommend reduce distance a little changed o:
  5. 01:04:904 - add circle here? it hears good um.. nope, sorry
thanks for the mod ^ ^
Laura Mercier

jonathanlfj wrote:

[Cilvery's Hard]
00:38:002 (5,6) - small spacing inconsistency fixed
00:49:904 (1) - i think finish should be here instead of 00:50:230 (2) o.. ya changed lol

nicely made diff, though i think for spread considerations you should add some triplets in the diff, for example:
00:44:523 (6,1) - can be redesigned to this:

00:51:860 (7,8) - this can be like this:

01:05:067 (5,6) - same change as 00:44:523 (6,1)
01:15:502 (6,7) - same change as 00:51:860 (7,8) uhh.. i don't wanna change these parts : (..
01:31:480 - a triplet can be added here added~
thanks for the mod ^ ^
alacat
fixed all points, Thanks jonathan :>

http://puu.sh/gE3fW/18797c955e.zip
Saten
boop


only thing I kept was the slider section at the end, keeping it like that is variation if you compare it to the rest of the map, no?

http://puu.sh/gEknp/6c15f7ac4b.zip
Topic Starter
S o r d a
all diffs update~
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