I think I actually did mod that other map but I'm a sucker for mod4modders so let's do this.
Advanced:
00:17:331 (7) - I think this would look better with just regular spacing
00:26:205 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - This might look better as an 8 note pattern rather than 2 four note patterns
00:38:036 (1) - I don't think there's enough time from the last note to this note. Maybe have it stack under the previous note?
00:40:993 (7) - Have these go parallel from each other?
00:54:514 (1) - This might look better blanketing the end of the previous slider. I like overlaps, but it usually looks a bit weird if it's only halfway over.
01:09:726 (2,3) - These don't really follow anything. Maybe make it like a long slider or something, since you're pretty much filling ambient noise
01:24:303 (6) - Center this slider so the end of (5) is in the center of the slider
01:37:191 (9) - Add normal hitsounds
Average:
00:42:261 (6) - The angle the curve is going seems a bit odd, going upscreen and all
Easy:
00:21:557 (2) - If you lower this note, and fix the spacing of the third note so it's northeast of this one, it can make pretty pretty curves :3
I like it :3.