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Fujita Saki - Golden Day (TV Size)

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yanlu

-Bakari- wrote:

[Easy]
  1. Nazi - I'd recommend you to use distance spacing x1.1, so circles will not touch each other and it will look the way better. (In other words, it will make your patterns neater :arrow: it's okay now >.<...
  2. 00:02:366 (2,1) - this kind of overlap (overlap with previous slider's hitburst) will confuse some beginners. example (00:05:597 (2) - is stacked with 00:02:366 (2) - ) :arrow: fix~
  3. 00:21:289 (3) - for calm song and Easy diff this slider is TOO short. It will stress beginners, I STRONGLY recommend you to avoid using 1/2 sliders here. :arrow: fix
  4. 00:37:674 (1,2) - why don't you re-arrange this part a bit to follow vocals closer? Just swap (2) and (3) this way :arrow: fix
  5. 00:43:674 (3) - nazi - why don't you create better (softer) shape for this slider? Curent one may confuse some beginners and it doesn't look good, imo. :arrow: i want it..keep
  6. 00:54:981 (4,1) - Swap New Combos to follow Storyboard and music? Current combo placement here feels weird. :arrow: fix
[Normal]
  1. 00:09:751 (3) - uh.. It seems like you can follow vocals closer and make pattern more consistent. Make slider end at 00:10:212 - and put circle at 00:10:443 - you did the same with 00:13:904 (4,5), so it's ok to do it here as well. :arrow: no..it's consistent with 00:01:904 (2,3) -
  2. 00:17:135 - I'm sure you've missed some vocals here. It really feels wrong to me without circle here. :arrow: fix but change to slider
  3. 00:43:674 (2,3) - how about removing (3) and adding repeat to 00:43:674 (2) - it will follow vocals better.example (personally, I feel like vocals here should end at 00:44:597 - that's why I want you to end slider here) :arrow: fix and snap too.
  4. 00:54:981 (5)/00:56:597 (1) - - same as Easy? Swap new combos to follow vocals and storyboard? It feels weird the way it is now, imo. :arrow: fix
  5. 00:58:443 - don't you feel like this beat sould have louder slider-tick? It feels REALLY loud, simple slider-tick is not enough here, make it louder, please! :arrow: okay"
  6. 01:02:135 (4) - New combo for vocals and storyboard? I'd place NC here, to be honest. :arrow: fix
[Hard]
  1. Song is calm, but your patterns are not calm. Use AR8 to make them easier to read. It will fit with your slider velocity better, too! :arrow: okay
  2. 00:39:058 (6) - end it 1/2 earlier, please! There's no ANY beat at 00:39:404. :cry: okay..
  3. 00:46:674 (7) - nazi - it feels like NC here will fit good enough. It will make your comboing more consistent + long combos don't look good. :arrow: fix
  4. 01:10:916 - ultimate-nazi - pointless green line, remove it, please! :arrow: fix too
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Pretty nice map, good luck.
also add new tags~
thanks again! :)
No_Gu
Request from The Lazy Queue@がんばらない

[General/All diffs]
好像缺个black.png
我觉得可以找custom clap..因为这首我觉得真的不适合默认的
00:40:212这边出来这张在16:9里看是这样的。。 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/615900 ..看了下 00:26:597 这边这张也是。。改完版我就没做过SB了所以hhh
为啥EN不做完
hhh我原来开过这首
然后这首不是伊波的吗!

[Easy]
其实不用tick调音的话我觉得tick1在easy里够够的
00:41:366 (1) - 把5包住?

[Normal]
00:40:674 (2,3) - 不得不说这边好像被挡的挺厉害

[Hard]
00:13:212 (3,4) - 我觉得这边还是跟前面弄个三角形比较好。不过个人习惯问题
我觉得可以一条长白线1NC.或者看看超过10的comboNC一下。。

整体还不错。。感觉好像remap过?。。原来看好像没这么整齐。EN补全了我叫pokie来看看
Topic Starter
yanlu

No_Gu wrote:

Request from The Lazy Queue@がんばらない

[General/All diffs]
好像缺个black.png :arrow: 欸..有阿"
我觉得可以找custom clap..因为这首我觉得真的不适合默认的 :arrow: okay
00:40:212这边出来这张在16:9里看是这样的。。 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/615900 ..看了下 00:26:597 这边这张也是。。改完版我就没做过SB了所以hhh :arrow: 我不知道怎麼解決寬屏問題;w;
为啥EN不做完
hhh我原来开过这首
然后这首不是伊波的吗!..其實我沒看過..不知道lol

[Easy]
其实不用tick调音的话我觉得tick1在easy里够够的
00:41:366 (1) - 把5包住? :arrow: 已修改

[Normal]
00:40:674 (2,3) - 不得不说这边好像被挡的挺厉害 :arrow: 恩...現在應該好一點了

[Hard]
00:13:212 (3,4) - 我觉得这边还是跟前面弄个三角形比较好。不过个人习惯问题 :arrow: 好吧 改了
我觉得可以一条长白线1NC.或者看看超过10的comboNC一下。。 :arrow: 都沒有超過10combo呀

整体还不错。。感觉好像remap过?。。原来看好像没这么整齐。EN补全了我叫pokie来看看
謝謝~
只有remapSB過~ 好吧我來把它做完...

Edit: 難度已補齊~ >-<
Pokie
Request from The Lazy Queue@がんばらない

Hello yanlu! A further modding here:

 General

  1. Is that adding a tag for lovely song necessary? If not, I'd recommend to remove that. There's no need to have a customized tag for yourself.
  2. Timing is totally off'd on 01:07:903 - . Please apply rEdo's timing. And remind that don't forget a resnap after changes.

    rEdo wrote:

    751, 130.00 BPM
    67904, 120.00 BPM
    69137, 110.00 BPM
  3. Pretty weird that you only have a silenced sliderslide for Normal set, please consider adding one for Soft set too.

 Storyboard

  1. Storyboard部份用中文說明好了(汗
  2. 優化(?)了一下代碼… http://puu.sh/24Vwa 用這個代替現有的osb, SB Load應該不會有超過5.00的地方了… (替代後請刪除BLACK.png)
  3. 製作Storyboard時請避免使用Black覆蓋無需使用的背景, 這樣會佔用2.00的SB Load.
    • - 在背景layer加一條這樣的代碼可以去掉背景, 需要使用到背景的時候再另外加進去
Sprite,Background,TopLeft,"BG.jpg",0,0

  1. 唔…為何Light -2.png的代碼裡會有一行Rotate效果? 建議刪除 (目前使用Rotate會導致在寬屏的位置也顯示出storyboard元件…)
  2. 00:59:827 - 這裡明明是同一句歌詞, 但卻fade out了 orz …將lyrics 12.png分成will reveal our / golden day 兩張圖?

 Easy

  1. Slider tick rate 1 should be enough for Easy difficulty.
    00:03:981 (3,1) - Adding a whistle on downbeat wasn't nice, please swap the whistle just like how you did on 00:07:674 (4,1) -
    00:09:751 (3) - (slider's head) To keep the consistency with 00:02:366 (2) - and 00:06:058 (3) - , add a whistle here?
    00:11:366 - Consider adding a circle/slider with whistle, instead of leave it blank?


    01:03:520 (1) - I-I tried to shape this but it took over 15 minutes Dx
266,187,63520,6,4,P|311:164|331:140|360:95|342:40|288:36|254:75|254:75|224:36|171:40|150:100|189:147|197:149,1,400,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

 Normal

  • 00:28:443 (5) - For the slider's end, seems there's no point for ending this slider at such timing point. Please extend it by 1/2 beat (00:29:366 - )
    01:03:520 (1) - Wha- again?! Well thanks god that we've a scale tool.
265,187,63520,6,4,P|305:166|323:145|349:104|333:55|284:51|254:86|254:86|227:51|179:55|160:109|195:151|202:153,1,350,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

 Hard

  • 00:27:981 (6,7,8) - If you ever wanted to add triples here, please don't leave 00:27:404 (4) - blank.
    00:31:674 (5) - Just to let you know that rhythms aren't even according with the music, I could say it's totally off'd here...Please use this rhythm instead of the current one.

    00:35:827 (1) - If you're trying to follow vocal, please move this slider to 00:35:597 - . (I've fixed the pattern for you until 00:38:135 (4) - )
320,300,35597,6,0,P|304:264|328:228|328:228|356:192|340:148,1,160,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
213,53,36289,1,8,0:0:0
256,176,36520,1,0,0:0:0
293,51,36751,1,0,0:0:0
189,129,36981,1,0,0:0:0
319,127,37212,1,8,0:0:0
257,176,37443,5,0,0:0:0
257,208,37558,1,0,0:0:0
253,240,37674,2,0,P|245:284|257:316,1,80,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
338,337,38135,1,8,0:0:0

  • 00:39:520 (1) - Swap the whistle to 00:39:058 (6) - 's slider's end.
    00:45:751 (5,1,3) - (slider's head) Kind of ridiculous that you've added plenty soft/normal finishs through the chorus part, but missing them here. Please add finishs to both slider's head properly.
    00:49:905 (4) - Same suggestion with 00:31:674 (fixed until 00:51:751 - )
424,236,49904,2,0,P|460:256|498:256,1,80
316,244,50366,6,0,P|240:192|172:192,1,160,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
136,296,51058,1,2,0:0:0
76,212,51289,1,2,0:0:0
48,236,51404,1,0,0:0:0
28,268,51520,1,2,0:0:0
64,349,51751,1,0,0:0:0

  • 00:53:135 (3) - ^ (fixed until 00:54:058 (1) - )
344,296,53135,2,0,P|328:236|348:184,1,120
372,160,53597,2,0,P|396:128|400:88,1,80,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
343,27,54058,6,0,P|308:55|314:101|314:101|269:178,1,160,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

That's all, good luck ;)
Topic Starter
yanlu

Pokie wrote:

Request from The Lazy Queue@がんばらない

Hello yanlu! A further modding here:

 General

  1. Is that adding a tag for lovely song necessary? If not, I'd recommend to remove that. There's no need to have a customized tag for yourself. :arrow: okay ;(
  2. Timing is totally off'd on 01:07:903 - . Please apply rEdo's timing. And remind that don't forget a resnap after changes. :arrow: :o fix

    rEdo wrote:

    751, 130.00 BPM
    67904, 120.00 BPM
    69137, 110.00 BPM
  3. Pretty weird that you only have a silenced sliderslide for Normal set, please consider adding one for Soft set too. :arrow: add

 Storyboard

  1. Storyboard部份用中文說明好了(汗
  2. 優化(?)了一下代碼… http://puu.sh/24Vwa 用這個代替現有的osb, SB Load應該不會有超過5.00的地方了… (替代後請刪除BLACK.png) :arrow: 恩~非常感謝!
  3. 製作Storyboard時請避免使用Black覆蓋無需使用的背景, 這樣會佔用2.00的SB Load.
    • - 在背景layer加一條這樣的代碼可以去掉背景, 需要使用到背景的時候再另外加進去
Sprite,Background,TopLeft,"BG.jpg",0,0
:arrow: :OO (還是不會用囧"..

  1. 唔…為何Light -2.png的代碼裡會有一行Rotate效果? 建議刪除 (目前使用Rotate會導致在寬屏的位置也顯示出storyboard元件…)
  2. 00:59:827 - 這裡明明是同一句歌詞, 但卻fade out了 orz …將lyrics 12.png分成will reveal our / golden day 兩張圖? :arrow: 恩..其實是故意的orz

 Easy

  1. Slider tick rate 1 should be enough for Easy difficulty.
    00:03:981 (3,1) - Adding a whistle on downbeat wasn't nice, please swap the whistle just like how you did on 00:07:674 (4,1) -
    00:09:751 (3) - (slider's head) To keep the consistency with 00:02:366 (2) - and 00:06:058 (3) - , add a whistle here?
    00:11:366 - Consider adding a circle/slider with whistle, instead of leave it blank?


    01:03:520 (1) - I-I tried to shape this but it took over 15 minutes Dx
266,187,63520,6,4,P|311:164|331:140|360:95|342:40|288:36|254:75|254:75|224:36|171:40|150:100|189:147|197:149,1,400,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

 Normal

  • 00:28:443 (5) - For the slider's end, seems there's no point for ending this slider at such timing point. Please extend it by 1/2 beat (00:29:366 - )
    01:03:520 (1) - Wha- again?! Well thanks god that we've a scale tool.
265,187,63520,6,4,P|305:166|323:145|349:104|333:55|284:51|254:86|254:86|227:51|179:55|160:109|195:151|202:153,1,350,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

 Hard

  • 00:27:981 (6,7,8) - If you ever wanted to add triples here, please don't leave 00:27:404 (4) - blank.
    00:31:674 (5) - Just to let you know that rhythms aren't even according with the music, I could say it's totally off'd here...Please use this rhythm instead of the current one.

    00:35:827 (1) - If you're trying to follow vocal, please move this slider to 00:35:597 - . (I've fixed the pattern for you until 00:38:135 (4) - )
320,300,35597,6,0,P|304:264|328:228|328:228|356:192|340:148,1,160,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
213,53,36289,1,8,0:0:0
256,176,36520,1,0,0:0:0
293,51,36751,1,0,0:0:0
189,129,36981,1,0,0:0:0
319,127,37212,1,8,0:0:0
257,176,37443,5,0,0:0:0
257,208,37558,1,0,0:0:0
253,240,37674,2,0,P|245:284|257:316,1,80,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
338,337,38135,1,8,0:0:0

  • 00:39:520 (1) - Swap the whistle to 00:39:058 (6) - 's slider's end.
    00:45:751 (5,1,3) - (slider's head) Kind of ridiculous that you've added plenty soft/normal finishs through the chorus part, but missing them here. Please add finishs to both slider's head properly.
    00:49:905 (4) - Same suggestion with 00:31:674 (fixed until 00:51:751 - )
424,236,49904,2,0,P|460:256|498:256,1,80
316,244,50366,6,0,P|240:192|172:192,1,160,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
136,296,51058,1,2,0:0:0
76,212,51289,1,2,0:0:0
48,236,51404,1,0,0:0:0
28,268,51520,1,2,0:0:0
64,349,51751,1,0,0:0:0

  • 00:53:135 (3) - ^ (fixed until 00:54:058 (1) - )
344,296,53135,2,0,P|328:236|348:184,1,120
372,160,53597,2,0,P|396:128|400:88,1,80,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
343,27,54058,6,0,P|308:55|314:101|314:101|269:178,1,160,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
:arrow: fix =A=
(愛心修的好漂亮喔...我都拉的不好看;w;

That's all, good luck ;)
Pokie用英文寫mod超強...有些我還看不懂(估狗大神...orz

謝謝Pokie~~幫了我好多>3< thx a lot~
neonat
Minor suggestions.

Hard

00:28:327 - add a note (you can hear in the background)
00:33:635 - add a note (I think it would be nicer rather than just starting when the vocals do)
00:39:058 (6,1) - try this rhythm? (emphasizes 00:39:289 -)


Love the song :)
Raose
Hello! This is M4M from your queue. I hope you find my mod helpful, but i'm a newbie mapper and still learning D: Take these as suggestions~

[Easy]
01:03:520 (1)- I think the heart shape could be improved

[Normal]
00:27:289 - add note
00:35:366 - ^
01:00:520 - ^
01:03:520 (1) - Heart shape could be improved

[Hard]
00:02:135 (4,5) - Consider switching these two to fit better with the music
00:10:442 (7,8) - move to the next white tick
0:26:597 (10)- NC, remove NC from 00:26:827 (1)
01:08:654 - add note

Goodluck on your maapppp
Topic Starter
yanlu

neonat wrote:

Minor suggestions.

Hard

00:28:327 - add a note (you can hear in the background) :arrow: no..
00:33:635 - add a note (I think it would be nicer rather than just starting when the vocals do) :arrow: ^
00:39:058 (6,1) - try this rhythm? (emphasizes 00:39:289 -) :arrow: better but i have another way..fix now~


Love the song :) :arrow: I love it too :)

Zhengster wrote:

Hello! This is M4M from your queue. I hope you find my mod helpful, but i'm a newbie mapper and still learning D: Take these as suggestions~

[Easy]
01:03:520 (1)- I think the heart shape could be improved :arrow: how..i think it's good enough now :/

[Normal]
00:27:289 - add note :arrow: nop..it'll be harder
00:35:366 - ^
01:00:520 - ^
01:03:520 (1) - Heart shape could be improved :arrow: same as easy :/

[Hard]
00:02:135 (4,5) - Consider switching these two to fit better with the music :arrow: hmm..it's fine i think
00:10:442 (7,8) - move to the next white tick :arrow: ..? I can't understand your mean =A=
0:26:597 (10)- NC, remove NC from 00:26:827 (1) :arrow: change nc before like now..i think no to change again ><
01:08:654 - add note :arrow: no..

Goodluck on your maapppp
sorry no change..but thank you all for modding~ :oops:

also fix something myself....
Tanzureir
Sorry for the late mod :(
The music is great~ And I like your mapping style :)

[SB]
The first picture seems to be appearing suddenly from pitch black. Consider changing to some fade-in effect.

[Easy]
01:10:227 (2) - This clap seems a bit strange... Change it to whistle and remove the whistle on the end seems better.
01:03:520 (1) - You can try this: First make a symmetry pattern of a heart with lower grid level, without considering the length. Then use "Scale by..." in the "Edit" menu to adjust its length, using the largest possible number. The shape will look better that way.

Btw, b/178353 in this map on Nogard diff, at 03:27:404 there is a good example of heart-shaped slider. You can take that as a reference.

[Normal]
00:02:366 (3) - The clap on the end is a bit inconsistent to the music... How about changing to whistle?
00:07:212 (5) - ^
00:14:597 (5) - ^
01:03:520 (1) - Same as Easy


[Hard]
OD 6? Maybe +1 would be better... (I SSed on the first try)
Flows are great.

00:10:904 (10) - Move the whistle to the beginning (optional)
00:14:135 (5) - Add a clap here
00:14:597 (8) - Remove this clap (optional)
00:18:289 (3) - Add a whistle on the beginning
01:10:227 (4) - Maybe adding a whistle sounds better...
Topic Starter
yanlu

tony8128 wrote:

Sorry for the late mod :(
The music is great~ And I like your mapping style :)

[SB]
The first picture seems to be appearing suddenly from pitch black. Consider changing to some fade-in effect.

[Easy]
01:10:227 (2) - This clap seems a bit strange... Change it to whistle and remove the whistle on the end seems better.
01:03:520 (1) - You can try this: First make a symmetry pattern of a heart with lower grid level, without considering the length. Then use "Scale by..." in the "Edit" menu to adjust its length, using the largest possible number. The shape will look better that way.

Btw, b/178353 in this map on Nogard diff, at 03:27:404 there is a good example of heart-shaped slider. You can take that as a reference.

[Normal]
00:02:366 (3) - The clap on the end is a bit inconsistent to the music... How about changing to whistle?
00:07:212 (5) - ^
00:14:597 (5) - ^
01:03:520 (1) - Same as Easy


[Hard]
OD 6? Maybe +1 would be better... (I SSed on the first try)
Flows are great.

00:10:904 (10) - Move the whistle to the beginning (optional)
00:14:135 (5) - Add a clap here
00:14:597 (8) - Remove this clap (optional)
00:18:289 (3) - Add a whistle on the beginning
01:10:227 (4) - Maybe adding a whistle sounds better...
fix some~~thank you for modding :)

update!
Frostmourne
hi

before this is going to be modded by me (asked in-game and it's fine enough for ranking)
here is the new timing you should fix beforehand

I won't check this soon because I have to mod by sequence so you better find more mods but maybe just a little would be enough
please beware moving SB, notes, green lines, preview time, etc.

good luck , star mark for now
Topic Starter
yanlu
Can't use PC now ;~;
I'll check it later!
Thank you Frost~ <3

Edit: yea,really much better now >A</

update~!
Frostmourne
ok

General
sorry for inconvenience
for the only 1st offset (751) , change it to 756(+5) since it's a bit early , don't need to touch the other offsets
don't forget to resnap all green lines, preview time,SB and notes
I'm sorry for inconvenience really ;_;

Easy
00:54:981 (1) - remove this NC and add NC here instead 00:56:135 (5) - , it makes sense better since it follows the phrase in the song

Normal
00:32:366 (1) - add clap for the head of this slider too , as you hear , it sounds the exactly same as the tail of this slider so it will work correspondingly better too
00:33:058 (2) - this finish is weird , you shouldn't let the pre-part (a part before the kiai) be the more important part than kiai part
you should emphasis the kiai part best , so what I suggest is you should lower volume this note to 30% or lower than this
so the finish at 00:33:981 (1) - will stand out and fit the song perfectly

Hard
I find AR7 play better , the thing is the way you map , you didn't put jumps everywhere + the song itself is quite calm. so AR7 fits the song much better
00:32:139 (1) - this new combo is weird , when players play on this part, they might feel a bit astonished (at least to me) so I suggest you remove NC here
and keep long combo like you did in other points in this diff
00:51:524 (5) - without this whistle sounds much better because it doubles with 00:51:293 (3) - and it feels strange
01:01:447 (7) - finish?
01:02:139 (1) - ^
as I heard from the music, and this is the very end of the song so adding them will fit better

let me know when you have fixed this

no kudosu (you gave me for the timing fixes before)
Loneight
Hi~
Request from PM but sorry for late.


  • "re" is means "remove"
    Black is just suggestion, if you don't like , you can skip it
    Blue is recommended to fix
    red is unrankable issue

[general]

  1. for SB, it is weird that sb1.jpg suddenly appear on 00:00:751 - , try to use fade to get it slowly appear

[Easy]

  1. Useless green line:
    00:33:520 -

  2. 00:00:751 (1) - re finish at start, because music should start at a quite sound, add nothing would be better for music, don't you feel weird because of the finish?>~<
  3. 00:08:135 (1) - same as ^, there also add nothing would be better, finish is too weird for there
  4. 00:21:981 (4) - I think there flow isn't comfortable, try to ctrl+j, ctrl+h, ctrl+g and move to x:168 y:288, would be much smoother. If you change, remember to fix 00:22:904 (1) - distance
  5. 00:54:981 (1,2) - swap NC, I feel there vocal is same as 00:40:443 (4,5,1) - , but NC is different.
  6. 01:03:520 (1) - slidertick is too loud for there, why don't you make there like Hard? try to reduce volume because there is quite place
  7. 01:09:404 (1) - unsnapped slider (end)
nice diff !~

[Normal]

  1. Useless green line:
    01:03:058 -
    01:03:174 -

  2. 00:00:751 (1) - same as Easy, also 00:08:135 (1) -
  3. 00:29:827 (2) - add clap to make 00:28:443 (5,1,2) - have a hierarchical sense
  4. 00:33:058 (2) - this finish is too weird for music, try to use Drum-clap, I think would be very suitable xD
  5. 00:40:212 (1,4) - swap NC, why don't you make NC like Easy? I think NC should on 00:41:366 (4) - because have stress or make 00:41:366 (4,5) - length same as 00:43:212 (1,2,3) - . also 00:54:981 (1,3) - like there (I also think it is still readable)
  6. 00:59:827 (3,1) - swap NC, I think there vocal like 00:45:058 (1,4) - 's part
  7. 01:03:520 (1) - same as Easy
good diff :3!

[Hard]

  1. AR is not suitable for this diff, it feels faster a bit. try to -1, would be much better for the diff

  2. 00:18:981 (1,3) - swap NC, stress is on 00:19:212 (3) -
  3. 00:26:597 (10,1) - same as ^, because I feel stress is on 00:26:597 (10) -
  4. 00:31:904 (6,1) - I think 00:32:135 (1) -'s start dosen't follow anything with music, only could follow approachcircle to hit, and weird rhythm for me, try this rhythm
  5. 00:33:058 (4) - same as Normal
  6. 00:33:751 (1,3) - swap NC, because 00:33:981 (3) - have a stress or kiai time's start-time
  7. 00:51:289 (3) - re whistle, because too many soft-finish sound make noisy , and 00:51:981 (7) - add whistle at start to make a new rhythm with 00:51:058 (2,3,5) -
  8. 00:58:674 - add a note, I think would be better for rhythm or more readable
  9. 01:07:904 (3) - I feel weird on 01:08:154 - , can't hear anything to follow, try this
smooth SV for this diff ~ good ! only AR is a bit fast

good luck for rank~! lulu >w<!
star~
Topic Starter
yanlu

Frostmourne wrote:

ok

SPOILER
General
sorry for inconvenience
for the only 1st offset (751) , change it to 756(+5) since it's a bit early , don't need to touch the other offsets
don't forget to resnap all green lines, preview time,SB and notes
I'm sorry for inconvenience really ;_;

Easy
00:54:981 (1) - remove this NC and add NC here instead 00:56:135 (5) - , it makes sense better since it follows the phrase in the song

Normal
00:32:366 (1) - add clap for the head of this slider too , as you hear , it sounds the exactly same as the tail of this slider so it will work correspondingly better too
00:33:058 (2) - this finish is weird , you shouldn't let the pre-part (a part before the kiai) be the more important part than kiai part
you should emphasis the kiai part best , so what I suggest is you should lower volume this note to 30% or lower than this
so the finish at 00:33:981 (1) - will stand out and fit the song perfectly

Hard
I find AR7 play better , the thing is the way you map , you didn't put jumps everywhere + the song itself is quite calm. so AR7 fits the song much better
00:32:139 (1) - this new combo is weird , when players play on this part, they might feel a bit astonished (at least to me) so I suggest you remove NC here
and keep long combo like you did in other points in this diff
00:51:524 (5) - without this whistle sounds much better because it doubles with 00:51:293 (3) - and it feels strange
01:01:447 (7) - finish?
01:02:139 (1) - ^
as I heard from the music, and this is the very end of the song so adding them will fit better

let me know when you have fixed this

no kudosu (you gave me for the timing fixes before)
okayy! all fix~ thanks you Frost >A</

Loneight wrote:

Hi~
Request from PM but sorry for late.

SPOILER

  • "re" is means "remove"
    Black is just suggestion, if you don't like , you can skip it
    Blue is recommended to fix
    red is unrankable issue

[general]

  1. for SB, it is weird that sb1.jpg suddenly appear on 00:00:751 - , try to use fade to get it slowly appear :arrow: ok

[Easy]

  1. Useless green line:
    00:33:520 -

  2. 00:00:751 (1) - re finish at start, because music should start at a quite sound, add nothing would be better for music, don't you feel weird because of the finish?>~< :arrow: nop:/
  3. 00:08:135 (1) - same as ^, there also add nothing would be better, finish is too weird for there :arrow: :/
  4. 00:21:981 (4) - I think there flow isn't comfortable, try to ctrl+j, ctrl+h, ctrl+g and move to x:168 y:288, would be much smoother. If you change, remember to fix 00:22:904 (1) - distance
  5. 00:54:981 (1,2) - swap NC, I feel there vocal is same as 00:40:443 (4,5,1) - , but NC is different.
  6. 01:03:520 (1) - slidertick is too loud for there, why don't you make there like Hard? try to reduce volume because there is quite place
  7. 01:09:404 (1) - unsnapped slider (end)
nice diff !~

[Normal]

  1. Useless green line:
    01:03:058 -
    01:03:174 -

  2. 00:00:751 (1) - same as Easy, also 00:08:135 (1) - :arrow: :/
  3. 00:29:827 (2) - add clap to make 00:28:443 (5,1,2) - have a hierarchical sense
  4. 00:33:058 (2) - this finish is too weird for music, try to use Drum-clap, I think would be very suitable xD
  5. 00:40:212 (1,4) - swap NC, why don't you make NC like Easy? I think NC should on 00:41:366 (4) - because have stress or make 00:41:366 (4,5) - length same as 00:43:212 (1,2,3) - . also 00:54:981 (1,3) - like there (I also think it is still readable)
  6. 00:59:827 (3,1) - swap NC, I think there vocal like 00:45:058 (1,4) - 's part
  7. 01:03:520 (1) - same as Easy
good diff :3!

[Hard]

  1. AR is not suitable for this diff, it feels faster a bit. try to -1, would be much better for the diff :arrow: ok

  2. 00:18:981 (1,3) - swap NC, stress is on 00:19:212 (3) -
  3. 00:26:597 (10,1) - same as ^, because I feel stress is on 00:26:597 (10) -
  4. 00:31:904 (6,1) - I think 00:32:135 (1) -'s start dosen't follow anything with music, only could follow approachcircle to hit, and weird rhythm for me, try this rhythm :arrow: want to keep ;w;
  5. 00:33:058 (4) - same as Normal
  6. 00:33:751 (1,3) - swap NC, because 00:33:981 (3) - have a stress or kiai time's start-time
  7. 00:51:289 (3) - re whistle, because too many soft-finish sound make noisy , and 00:51:981 (7) - add whistle at start to make a new rhythm with 00:51:058 (2,3,5) -
  8. 00:58:674 - add a note, I think would be better for rhythm or more readable
  9. 01:07:904 (3) - I feel weird on 01:08:154 - , can't hear anything to follow, try this
smooth SV for this diff ~ good ! only AR is a bit fast

good luck for rank~! lulu >w<!
star~
其他沒寫都是改的~謝謝飛翔mod ww
>3</


UPDATE~!
Frostmourne
Recheck
Offset 67904 (01:07:904 (3) - this note in Hard) change to 67909 , please resnap all notes in between 01:07:909 to 01:09:409 interval as well
(also snap something before 67909 such as 01:07:217 (2) - in Easy diff too


Easy
01:01:217 (2) - shorten this slider end at 01:01:448 (1/2 back) because there is no music supporting at the next 1/2 beat
also it's not too hard for the beginner I believe

Normal
00:56:602 (4) - NC
00:57:986 (1) - remove NC
00:59:832 (5) - NC
01:02:140 (1) - remove NC
^ these are for better look and you can see that it makes sense more than before (the new NC will follow the new phrase accordingly)

no kd
Topic Starter
yanlu

Frostmourne wrote:

Recheck
Offset 67904 (01:07:904 (3) - this note in Hard) change to 67909 , please resnap all notes in between 01:07:909 to 01:09:409 interval as well
(also snap something before 67909 such as 01:07:217 (2) - in Easy diff too


Easy
01:01:217 (2) - shorten this slider end at 01:01:448 (1/2 back) because there is no music supporting at the next 1/2 beat
also it's not too hard for the beginner I believe

Normal
00:56:602 (4) - NC
00:57:986 (1) - remove NC
00:59:832 (5) - NC
01:02:140 (1) - remove NC
^ these are for better look and you can see that it makes sense more than before (the new NC will follow the new phrase accordingly)

no kd

thx okay all fix~~ ></


update~
Frostmourne
done

Good Luck!
Strawberry
edited.
gratz for bub and good luck for ranking firstly.

anyway, i just found out something can improve this map i think~
yea that's really excellent storyboard~ however i think it could be better since there are some rigid places for the link between the main sb pictures.. i think you can add a new storyboard file of whole white~ take this http://puu.sh/2muna into the SB folder, and name it "Flash.png" as it is. after that trying this code.
Sprite,Foreground,Centre,"SB\Flash.png",320,240
F,0,7679,8140,0,1
M,0,8025,,320,240
S,0,8025,,1.343358
F,0,8140,8371,1,0
then also do the same thing on each place the staple picture switched (like 00:15:525 - 00:19:217 - 00:22:909 - etc.). it isn’t too much of an inconveniencewould, and would be a much more splendid effection as well~
Frostmourne
just a minor stuff so here is bubble restored
Topic Starter
yanlu
thank you Frost and Strawberry~ >w</
Kawayi Rika
Hi ~ yanlu ~ :)

No kds ~

[General]


  1. Please change AudioLeadIn to 1500 please,1000 a bit short.

Other looks all fine ~ Moe song ~

Call me back ~
;)
Kenezz
In the last part of the SB the BG appears suddenly, 01:13:053 this is intentional? (I hope not) Really don't looks good, so...I suggest remove it.
Don't kudosu, just a observation.
Yuukari-Banteki
[Easy]
00:21:294 (3) - I would shorten this by half a beat to match the piano and preserve the 1 beat between clicks. Otherwise, you would have to change 4 so that it is not half a beat's distance from this end

[Normal]
looks good

[Hard]
00:10:332 (7) - why the random note in the middle? Nothing in the music calls for it.
00:14:486 (7) - ^
00:27:409 (5,8) - ^ having random extra notes in your song isn't usually a good mapping practice.
Elinia
go go golden day XDD~!!
Topic Starter
yanlu

Saturos-fangirl wrote:

[Easy]
00:21:294 (3) - I would shorten this by half a beat to match the piano and preserve the 1 beat between clicks. Otherwise, you would have to change 4 so that it is not half a beat's distance from this end :arrow: nop

[Normal]
looks good

[Hard]
00:10:332 (7) - why the random note in the middle? Nothing in the music calls for it. :arrow: oh..dele
00:14:486 (7) - ^ :arrow: ^
00:27:409 (5,8) - ^ having random extra notes in your song isn't usually a good mapping practice. :arrow: no dele this >_<
also fix AudioLeadIn and SB~
thank you all ^^
update~!!
meiikyuu
go go ~
Kawayi Rika
OK ~ Looks much better ~

Here you go <3


Aurele
Wouldn't it needs a rebubble before? SFG modded the map too..
Kawayi Rika
No,that's small fixed ~
Yocake
Yanlu~~~
BeatofIke
Yay yanlu! :3
EmPao
恭喜!!
mintong89
共洗你啊 0.0/
UnitedWeSin
Yay! Gratz. :>
Poggo
Gratz my moe cherry pie :3 :oops:
Nichiyouki
Really moe song >w<

Congrats! ;)
Topic Starter
yanlu
Thanks to all~ c:
raririn
wow gratz :D
Loneight
恭喜的說~ lulu醬 :3
CXu
Omedetou \>w</
Topic Starter
yanlu
ありがとう~\w/
meiikyuu
\^^/
Flask
\owo/
Melan Blue
Gratz Yanlu! >w<~ Great map <3
AsprikaQ
GZZZZ

nice song and most of all, I love this couple, man <3
Loooctav
Congratz~
Quilt
Gratz!
Strawberry
恭喜啦~~
K i A i
How awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
nice SB, and all diff!

I LOVE IT HIGHLY :D
Nickelony
Happy Rank Day ! :D
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