Guest
home
beatmaps
rankings
community
store
help
forum
  1. Forums
  2. Beatmaps
  3. Ranked Beatmaps (Archived)

Shiraishi Ryoko - Taiyou no Kakera

posted
Total Posts
39
ztrot
osu! Alumni
4,378 posts
Joined February 2008
Topic Starter
ztrot
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Monday, March 16, 2009 at 2:35:11 AM

Artist: Shiraishi Ryoko
Title: Taiyou no Kakera
Source: Himawari!!
BPM: 166.05
Filesize: 14064kb
Play Time: 01:28
Difficulties Available:
  1. Hard (4.77 stars, 202 notes)
  2. Sushi971's Normal (3.71 stars, 116 notes)
Download: Shiraishi Ryoko - Taiyou no Kakera
Download: Shiraishi Ryoko - Taiyou no Kakera (no video)
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
---------------
From himawari! enjoy the opening theme Taiyou no kakera :)
Last edited by Gens , edited 94 times in total.
Sir Minelli
524 posts
Joined September 2008
Sir Minelli
All i can say to you is this: http://osu.ppy.sh/?p=faq&n=5

Good luck doing it again, i saw you had the "rythm" (at least). But still you have ALOT to learn.

Timing = Wrong
Spacing = Wrong

Too many mistakes to mod.

Once you learn a bit more about beatmapping by reading carefully the link i posted, THEN and only THEN, start asking for a modder.


-Standing for what you believe in is right, even if you are standing alone-

Download: Kagamine Rin - Melancholic (eldnl) [Normal].osu
Last edited by Sir Minelli , edited 1 time in total.
Jarby
2,963 posts
Joined August 2008
Jarby

Sir Minelli wrote:

Nothing important, anyway
Don't be an elitist bitch. At least try and give the correct timing and offset.

BPM: 168
Offset: 1112 (This is probably wrong, but is better than no offset.)

Resnap all notes after changing this (From the drop down menus at the top, Timing>Resnap All Notes)
Use the distance snap tool to ensure your notes have correct spacing.

Good Luck!

EDIT: Use Distance Snap. It's at the bottom right of the editor screen.
Drezus
47 posts
Joined January 2008
Drezus
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
CheeseWarlock
osu! Alumni
1,185 posts
Joined May 2008
CheeseWarlock
The timing isn't right, and that's going to cause a lot of problems. Try this:

BPM: 166
Offset: 1,076

And then resnap all notes and recalculate slider lengths.

You're starting to get the hang of it. Places like 00:21:31 - In Normal are actually pretty fun, though hard to play unless you expect the spacing changes. That's the main problem here (aside from the timing): the spacing is really inconsistent, and that usually makes a map hard to play (in a bad way). Try mapping with Distance snap on; it'll make the distance between notes relative to the time between them.
Sushi
osu! Alumni
2,989 posts
Joined October 2008
Sushi
Same BPM, offset 403

There are still some timing problems :

00:09:168 (1) -> (5) : Move the notes 1/4 Beat earlier (they have to be on red and white Ticks)
00:34:921 (8) : Move to 00:35:101 (White Tick)
00:37:902 (5) : Move to 00:37:812 (Red Tick)
00:38:083 (6) : Move to 00:37:992 (White Tick)
00:38:354 (7) : Move to 00:38:263 (Blue Tick, 1/4 Beat snap divisor)
00:38:625 (8) : Move to 00:38:535 (Red Tick)
00:38:806 (9) : Move to 00:38:715 (White Tick)
00:39:348 (11) : Move to 00:39:257 (Red Tick)
00:39:528 (12) : Move to 00:39:438 (White Tick)
00:45:312 (1) : Move to 00:45:221 (White Tick)
00:45:854 (2) : Move to 00:45:763 (Red Tick)
00:46:939 (5) : Move to 00:46:848 (Red Tick)
00:47:299 (6) : Move to 00:47:209 (Red Tick)
00:54:257 (2) : would sound better 1/4 beat earlier
00:54:980 (5) : would sound better 1/4 beat earlier
01:00:854 (4) : Move to 01:00:763 (White Tick)
01:01:035 (5) : Move to 01:00:944 (Red Tick)
01:07:541 (1) : Move to 01:07:450 (Red Tick)
01:08:083 (2) : Move to 01:07:992 (White Tick)
01:10:251 (spin) : Starts at 01:10:341 (Red Tick), Finishes at 01:13:233 (Red Tick)
01:14:227 (1) to 01:18:925 (7) : Move all the notes 1/4 Beat earlier (they have to be on red and white Ticks)

After correcting those errors, use the distance snap tool on all notes and resubmit.

EDIT : Starred
Last edited by Sushi , edited 1 time in total.
Sir Minelli
524 posts
Joined September 2008
Sir Minelli
JarJarJacobs,

Worry about your modding and ill worry about mine.



-Standing for what you believe in is right, even if you are standing alone-
Sushi
osu! Alumni
2,989 posts
Joined October 2008
Sushi
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.

vytalibus
osu! Alumni
870 posts
Joined May 2008
vytalibus
Hard:

00:21:00 (3) - Too far-spaced.
00:21:90 (3) - ^
00:27:42 (1) - Put this forward by one blue tick. It should be in the white tick afterwards. Then, adjust the spacing.
00:29:04 (7) - ^
00:35:10 (8) - Kind of too close. Readjust this so that the starting point is spaced right, and make the end point closer to the next hitcircle.
00:41:42 (7) - Space this right.
00:56:78 (1) - Whoa, cornered. Put this somewhere else.
01:27:87 (4) - Ugh, ugly spacing.

When I nazi-mod like this, it's certain that you're on the right track. Keep it up.
whymeman
osu! Alumni
3,432 posts
Joined November 2008
whymeman
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
Jarby
2,963 posts
Joined August 2008
Jarby
Look at this.

Download: Shiraishi Ryoko - Taiyou no Kakera (ztrot) [EXAMPLE].osu
Sushi
osu! Alumni
2,989 posts
Joined October 2008
Sushi
As i promised, i mapped a Normal Diff.

It may not be perfect, so feel free to mod it.

Your map is becoming great ^^ keep up the good work!

Download: Shiraishi Ryoko - Taiyou no Kakera (ztrot) [Sushi971's Normal].osu
Sleep Powder
1,540 posts
Joined October 2008
Sleep Powder
The timing looks awesome~! :)
Just a little suggestion though...try making the sliders cool looking instead of sloppy (like use a design of some sort) :P
vytalibus
osu! Alumni
870 posts
Joined May 2008
vytalibus
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
Sleep Powder
1,540 posts
Joined October 2008
Sleep Powder
Okay I finally have the beatmap ready for you~!
http://www.mediafire.com/?ib5nmngww2j
burialserge
5 posts
Joined March 2009
burialserge
i' give a star for the help xD
Eleeleth
4 posts
Joined February 2009
Eleeleth
Fun stuff when I played it :D

Spacing etc seemed fine to me.
heintsi
1,126 posts
Joined January 2009
heintsi
yush! liked the map :> here comes the star
kast_old
2 posts
Joined October 2008
kast_old
this song is so good !! i like it !!! need be ranked!!
Doomsday
Featured Artist
1,961 posts
Joined July 2008
Doomsday
nice map you got here. good job so far.

+1 star from me
Im_Lost_old
2 posts
Joined February 2009
Im_Lost_old
it's good better than what i can do at this game.
pete2528
412 posts
Joined March 2009
pete2528
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
RemmyX25
osu! Alumni
3,087 posts
Here since the beginning
RemmyX25
Sushi971's Normal:
No problems here.

Hard:
00:52:26 (4) - Extend this slider to 00:53:350
01:06:89 (9) - fix the end of this slider, to either the left or right, but off of the blue tick none the less.


Excellent map, definitely starring this.
Yuukari-Banteki
1,534 posts
Joined June 2008
Yuukari-Banteki
[Sushi's Normal]
00:13:61 (5) - stack the endpoints
00:29:14 (4) - move this so that it is symmetrical and not covered by 2
00:53:89 (1) - move this out from under 4
01:04:72 (1) - ^
01:18:09 (4,5) - stack the endpoints


[Hard]
00:14:15 (8) - move out from under 6
00:22:28 (1,2,3,4) - this just seems a kinda awkward pattern to me
00:24:63 (1) - move out from under 7
00:33:66 (3) - stack on the fading end of 6
00:56:78 (9) - new combo, and make it symmetrical
01:22:79 (1) - move out from under 7
01:26:58 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6) - overlap looks sloppy
Mogsy
osu! Alumni
3,450 posts
Here since the beginning
Mogsy
The BPM and offset needs to be the same for all difficulties.

BPM: 166.050
Offset: 9,072

Fix and I'll get back to modding.

EDIT:

Normal:
-00:10:87 (5) - Make this exactly symmetrical.
-00:23:52 (1) - ^
-00:32:10 (3) - Nudge back 1/4 a beat.
-00:55:23 (3) - Nudge forward 1/4 a beat.
-01:00:74 (4) - Make this exactly symmetrical.
-01:05:44 (2) - Stack this directly on the endpoint of 1. If 2 is exactly where you want it, match up the endpoint of 1 with 2.
-01:07:51 (1) - Nudge back 1/4 a beat.
-01:10:40 (1) - ^

Hard:
-00:23:52 (7) - New Combo mark goes here.
-00:46:65 (4) - ^
-00:50:98 (7) - ^
-00:51:70 (1) - Remove the New Combo mark.
-00:58:75 (4) - Finish goes here.
-01:06:88 (9) - Shorten by 1/4 a beat if you're trying to sync to the vocals.

EDIT: Fixed = bubble.
Sleep Powder
1,540 posts
Joined October 2008
Sleep Powder
http://www.mediafire.com/?ydgmyhdhayf
Hope I fixed it right
ztrot
osu! Alumni
4,378 posts
Joined February 2008
Topic Starter
ztrot
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
Sleep Powder
1,540 posts
Joined October 2008
Sleep Powder

ztrot wrote:

animask heres my 1st real mod
00:13:79 add a beat it will be 8 in the combo
00:14:06 (9) - move to white tick
00:14:42 (10) - ^
thats all i can see ^^ nice job but you put in your name so i cant post it
silly...just change the name of the creator to yours then submit it again
Last edited by Sleep Powder , edited 1 time in total.
Sushi
osu! Alumni
2,989 posts
Joined October 2008
Sushi
Fixes from My diff, here it is.

Download: Shiraishi Ryoko - Taiyou no Kakera (ztrot) [Sushi971's Normal].osu
CheeseWarlock
osu! Alumni
1,185 posts
Joined May 2008
CheeseWarlock
Hmm.

*pop*

Hard is fine.

[Sushi971's Normal]
00:24:79 (2,3,4,5) - Sections like this have somewhat tricky timing. The spacing is sort of inconsistent in this map, and though it works a lot of the time it makes this section hard to read.
00:28:40 (2,3,4) - This one too.
00:32:01 (3) - Make this 1/2 longer.
00:48:09 - Maybe put a beat here?
01:00:38 (3,4) - Unnecessary jump.
Sushi
osu! Alumni
2,989 posts
Joined October 2008
Sushi
Edited my Difficulty

Changing the *tricky* timing was quite difficult, i let it and tried make it more readable

i deleted one note for the first one (number 2) and modified something for the second

Some slider were messed up with bpm change ad so sounded weird

It may still need some corrections

Download: Shiraishi Ryoko - Taiyou no Kakera (ztrot) [Sushi971's Normal].osu
DawnII
osu! Alumni
558 posts
Joined April 2008
DawnII
I didn't find anything. Bubble for you.
Mogsy
osu! Alumni
3,450 posts
Here since the beginning
Mogsy
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
Narutofoe
37 posts
Joined December 2008
Narutofoe
I think you should add an insane mode and make it longer it's a good song otherwise I think your being somewhat lazy about it :|
vytalibus
osu! Alumni
870 posts
Joined May 2008
vytalibus
Starred, as promised. Don't give me kudos for this; I don't need it.
m980
Elite Mapper
1,234 posts
Here since the beginning
m980
>:(
Sleep Powder
1,540 posts
Joined October 2008
Sleep Powder
I'm still a little upset you didn't add my difficulty :P
ztrot
osu! Alumni
4,378 posts
Joined February 2008
Topic Starter
ztrot
this is insane mode for those who wanted it i don't know if insane enough but plz add to ranked set













EDITED* fixed combos and spacing awaiting approval

Download: Shiraishi Ryoko - Taiyou no Kakera (ztrot) [Insane].osu
Last edited by ztrot , edited 1 time in total.
whymeman
osu! Alumni
3,432 posts
Joined November 2008
whymeman
I'll do my best to help out :)

[Insane]

00:31:29 (5) - Maybe you can line this up with (4)?
00:41:41 (7) - You can try to line this up with the end of (6).
00:46:65 (1,2,3) - Try to line up this row between (3) and (4) to make it look more neat.
01:20:61 (3,4) - The distance between these two notes is different from 01:20:25 (2,3) even though they are evenly timed.

The rest doesn't seem too bad. the stacks like 00:20:09 (9,10,11,12,13) for example are a bit over wheliming, but is reasonable since its within the beat and managable within the "insane" level so that should be fine. :)
Please sign in to reply.

New reply

0
1 / 39