1. もしかしたらMAT/BATにNormalが必要と言われるかもしれません あった方が安全かもしれないです

1. 00:28:340 (1) - リピートのスライダーにチェンジ？00:28:341 - start 00:28:653 - repeat 00:28:966 - end
2. 00:57:715 (1) - スライダーのendにfinish
3. 00:59:278 (1) - ^
4. 01:47:403 (1) - オートで見てスピンボーナスが2000出てないので変えた方がいいと思います
5. 01:55:841 (1) - end finish
6. 01:57:403 (1) - ^
7. 02:18:028 (1) - 始めにFinish
8. 02:19:903 (1) - ^
9. 02:23:653 (1) - Delete finish
10. 02:25:528 (1) - はじめにFinish
11. 02:27:403 (1) - ^
12. 02:31:153 (1) - オートで見てスピンボーナスが2000出てないので変えた方がいいと思います
13. 02:32:716 (1) - end finish
14. 02:34:278 (1) - ^
15. 02:46:465 (1) - ^
16. 02:48:028 (1) - ^
17. 02:53:341 (1) - ^
18. 02:54:904 (1) - ^

1. HP,AR,OD+2
2. 00:13:340 (4) - 1grid 右(Grid Level 4)
3. 00:36:153 (1) - 1grid 上 ^
4. 00:38:028 (1) - 1grid 左 ^
5. 00:44:591 (2) - 1grid 左

Hard

02:58:653 (1) - いきなり1/6だと唐突ですし、初見だと絶対できないので1/4の連打のほうがいいかなーと感じます
最初は1/4にしてたのですが少し音が多くてうるさすぎるかなと感じたので1/3にしています。もう少しこのまま様子を見ようと思いますが、何回も指摘されるようでしたら変えると思います。
そのまま1/6の場合は03:00:528 (1) - のスペーシングを直してください。 直しました。

02:50:215 (3) -近いタイミングで少しズレているので、 02:49:278 (4) - と重ねるとプレイ中の見栄えが良くなります。（4）を動かすといいかも
重なるように調節しました。

03:08:029 (1) - わざとならいいです 一応わざとです。01:10:841と同じ感覚でこのように配置しています。

-Gamu- wrote:

Modしてもらったので　お返しという感じで　少ししますね　

[overall]

SPOILER

・コンボカラーなんですが、この色にしてみてはどうですか？ 今の暗い感じの色合いが気にっているのでこのままで

Combo1 : 62,0,62
Combo2 : 176,176,0
Combo3 : 0,0,136

こちらのコードをosu.ファイルの[Colours]のとこに上書きで出来ます。
※わからなければPMまたは　osuのチャットで聞いてください

[Easy]
・fine~

[Hard]

SPOILER

・00:49:278 (1) - このスピナーなんですが　オート先生で１０００しか回らないのは駄目だと思います。削除しました
理由は


簡単に言うと、「スピナーのボーナス点はオートで２０００は出るようにする必要がある」と書いてあります。
参考ＵＲＬ　→　http://osu.ppy.sh/forum/viewtopic.php?f=3&t=56528

・00:55:840 (5) - 1 grid 下に Fixed
・00:56:153 (6) - ^ Fixed
・00:56:465 (7) - 1 grid 左に Fixed
・00:56:778 (8) - ^ Fixed
・00:57:090 (9) - 2 grid 上に Fixed
・01:02:716 (5) - 1 grid 上に Fixed
・01:03:029 (6) - ^ Fixed
・01:03:341 (7) - 1 grid 左に Fixed
・01:03:654 (8) - ^ Fixed
・01:03:966 (9) - 2 grid 下に Fixed
・01:12:403 (1) -　 01:10:841 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - のスペーシング0.50xに合わせてみてはどうですか？ no fixed
・03:08:029 (1) -　 03:06:466 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - のスペーシング0.50xに合わせてみてはどうですか？ no fixed

もしかしたら、EasyよりもNormalのほうがいいと思います。
それか、Nomalつくるか・・・

もし、EasyをNomralに変えるのなら今のままじゃ簡単なので　いろいろとオブジェクトを追加したり　配置を変更する必要があると思います。前の人にも言われたのでNormalを作る方向で考えます


良い譜面でした～

私のModで「これは変だろ」というとこありましたら　

変更しなくてもいいです

1. Add avira0922 as tag to [Easy] and [Hard] diff.
2. Source : LeleleP? What's that? Game? I can't find that on wilipedia, could you please make a brief description about the source?

1. 00:36:153 (1) - Finish instead of whistle seems better, similarly hereinafter
2. 00:38:028 (1) - ^
3. 00:43:653 (1) - ^
4. 00:45:528 (1) - ^
5. 00:51:153 - KIAI stars here
6. 01:04:903 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
7. 01:06:778 (1) - ^
8. 01:41:778 (1,6) - Add finish
9. 01:49:278 - KIAI starts here
10. 02:18:028 (1) - Add finish
11. 02:19:903 (3) - ^
12. 02:33:028 - KIAI starts here
13. 02:39:903 (2,5) - Add finish
14. 02:53:653 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
15. 02:55:216 (3) - ^
16. 02:57:403 (1) - Spacing a bit far
17. 02:58:653 (3) - Finish instead of whistle

1. 01:33:341 (1,2,3,4,5) - Use normal hitsound here seems better, and volume grade up, 60%-80%or90%
2. 02:09:591 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - ^
3. 03:07:091 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - ^

Breeze wrote:

This is Rin? Oh my...
俺の鈴がこんなに艶かしい わけがない (ﾟ´Д｀ﾟ) Rin of the background is very magnificence (*´д`*)
Red is what you must fixed, others are just suggestions

[General]

1. Add avira0922 as tag to [Easy] and [Hard] diff. Fixed
2. Source : LeleleP? What's that? Game? I can't find that on wilipedia, could you please make a brief description about the source? LeleleP is vocaloid song creator name. Source→http://vocaloidotaku.net/index.php?/topic/13801-rin-append-%E6%9C%88%E8%99%B9%E3%81%AE%E3%83%AF%E3%83%AB%E3%83%84-by-lelelep/

[Easy]

SPOILER

1. 00:35:841 (2) - No finish here
2. 00:36:153 (1) - Use finish instead of whistle seems better
3. 00:38:028 (1) - ^
4. 00:43:341 spinner - no finish
5. 00:43:653 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
6. 00:45:528 (1) - ^
7. 00:51:153 (1) - Add finish and KIAI starts here
8. 00:57:091 (3) - Clap or finish, use only one sound would better, I suggest keep clap, remove finish
9. 00:58:028 (1) - Add finish
10. 00:59:591 (1) - ^
11. 01:03:028 (2) - ^
12. 01:03:966 (2) - Remove finish
13. 01:04:903 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
14. 01:06:778 (1) - ^
15. 01:12:403 (1) - ^
16. 01:14:278 (1) - ^
17. 01:33:966 (2) - No finish
18. 01:34:278 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
19. 01:36:153 (1) - ^
20. 01:41:466 spinner - no finish
21. 01:41:778 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
22. 01:43:653 (1) - ^
23. 01:49:278 (1) - Add finish here and KIAI starts here
24. 01:50:841 (1) - Add finish
25. 01:56:153 (1) - finish
26. 01:57:716 (1) - ^
27. 02:03:028 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
28. 02:04:903 (1) - ^
29. 02:08:966 (4) - 1 grid down?
30. 02:10:528 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
31. 02:12:403 (1) - ^
32. 02:18:028 (1) - ^
33. 02:19:903 (1) - ^
34. 02:25:216 spinner - no finish
35. 02:25:528 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
36. 02:27:403 (1) - ^
37. 02:33:028 (1) - Add finish here and starts KIAI here
38. 02:38:966 (5) - Remove finish
39. 02:39:903 (1) - Add finish
40. 02:41:466 (1) - ^
41. 02:45:841 (5) - No finish
42. 02:46:778 (1) - Add finish
43. 02:48:341 (1) - ^
44. 02:53:653 (1) - ^
45. 02:55:216 (1) - ^
46. 03:00:216 spinner - no finish
47. 03:00:528 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
48. 03:02:403 (1) - ^
49. 03:08:028 (1) - ^
50. 03:09:903 (1) - ^
51. 03:13:653 spinner - This spinner is too short as a Easy diff., I suggest use spinner starts at 03:11:778 or 03:12:716 and ends at 03:14:591

Too many repeat parts, that would make players feel boring, maybe you should try some other way to put notes

ALL adopted. Many repeat parts yet?

[avira's Normal]

1. 00:36:153 (1) - Finish instead of whistle seems better, similarly hereinafter
2. 00:38:028 (1) - ^
3. 00:43:653 (1) - ^
4. 00:45:528 (1) - ^
5. 00:51:153 - KIAI stars here
6. 01:04:903 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
7. 01:06:778 (1) - ^
8. 01:41:778 (1,6) - Add finish
9. 01:49:278 - KIAI starts here
10. 02:18:028 (1) - Add finish
11. 02:19:903 (3) - ^
12. 02:33:028 - KIAI starts here
13. 02:39:903 (2,5) - Add finish
14. 02:53:653 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
15. 02:55:216 (3) - ^
16. 02:57:403 (1) - Spacing a bit far
17. 02:58:653 (3) - Finish instead of whistle

[Hard]
Same sound suggestion to [Easy], and same KIAI start time suggestion, didn't point out in this diff.

1. 01:33:341 (1,2,3,4,5) - Use normal hitsound here seems better, and volume grade up, 60%-80%or90%
2. 02:09:591 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - ^
3. 03:07:091 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - ^

ALL adopted.

Breeze wrote:

This is Rin? Oh my...
俺の鈴がこんなに艶かしい わけがない (ﾟ´Д｀ﾟ)　<<< (*´ω｀*)

[avira's Normal]

1. 00:36:153 (1) - Finish instead of whistle seems better, similarly hereinafter
2. 00:38:028 (1) - ^
3. 00:43:653 (1) - ^
4. 00:45:528 (1) - ^
5. 00:51:153 - KIAI stars here
6. 01:04:903 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
7. 01:06:778 (1) - ^
8. 01:41:778 (1,6) - Add finish
9. 01:49:278 - KIAI starts here
10. 02:18:028 (1) - Add finish
11. 02:19:903 (3) - ^
12. 02:33:028 - KIAI starts here
13. 02:39:903 (2,5) - Add finish
14. 02:53:653 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
15. 02:55:216 (3) - ^
16. 02:57:403 (1) - Spacing a bit far
17. 02:58:653 (3) - Finish instead of whistle

thanks a lot! Breeze~~

pieguy1372 wrote:

Easy:

01:41:778 (1) - For an Easy, this note seems rather close to the spinner...　no fixed
02:00:841 (3) - remove finish? fixed
02:02:091 - add a note with finish? Fixed http://puu.sh/50cp
02:08:966 (4) - new combo? Fixed
02:51:466 (5) - new combo? Fixed

avira's Normal:

01:08:653 (3) - new combo?
01:16:153 (5) - ^
02:13:653 (4,5,6) - (nazi) down 1 level 3 grid?

Hard:

00:01:778 (1) - too close to (3) Fixed
01:09:591 (2) - too close to (1) Fixed
01:12:403 (1) - maybe space this 0.5x like the rest of the stream? Fixed
01:32:403 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - maybe lower the volume on these notes? no fixed
02:08:965 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - perhaps use soft hitsounds here? Fixed
03:06:466 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - maybe use soft histounds? Also, perhaps space (1) closer like the rest of the stream? Fixed

nice map~

pieguy1372 wrote:

Easy:

avira's Normal:

01:08:653 (3) - new combo?
01:16:153 (5) - ^
02:13:653 (4,5,6) - (nazi) down 1 level 3 grid?


nice map~

SamiPale wrote:

ハロー～Team Chunbi Modding Queueからリクエストを受けました。これはわたしの意見です。

[General]
Offsetは211のほうがいいです　Fixed

[Easy]
00:43:341(1,1) - このspinnerからcircleまでの時間ちょっと短い、初心者に難しいです。circleを削除してspinnerを00:43:653にENDどうか？ Fixed
02:25:216(1,1) - 00:43:341と同じ難しすぎます スライダーに置き換えました http://puu.sh/5bvR
03:00:216(1,1) - ^ スライダーに置き換えました http://puu.sh/5bEh

[Normal]
00:51:466(1,2,3,4) - 全体1/1後ろ移動して、もと(4)のところ新しいcircleをセットして(00:57:716のリズムのように)。あと01:49:591(1,2,3,4)もこのように
01:34:591(1,2,3,4) - (1)(2)を1/1後ろ移動して、(2)を1/1長くなって
01:42:716(4,5) - ちょっと難しいと思いますけど。。

[Hard]
00:00:216,00:01:778(1,2,3) - このリズムでどうか No Fixed
00:05:216(1) - ここのspinner 00:05:528にはじめ、00:05:216にcircle? adopted
00:52:716(1) - Finish? No Fixed
01:10:528(x) - Add circle?adopted http://puu.sh/5bAh
01:32:403(1,2,3,4,5),01:33:341(1,2,3,4,5) - 音量10~15%下がる？ Fixed
02:38:653(1,2,3) - (3)を削除して、(2)を(1)と重ねるのはもっと面白いと思います。または02:37:716(1,2,3,1,2)を星の形になってもいいです（もちろん02:39:278の(3)削除）。星にしました http://puu.sh/5bDA

3/4は珍しいからリズムの方で頑張ってね はい！がんばります

Apricot wrote:

[!] = You NEED to change.
[.] = If possible, change.
[?] = Suggestion/nazi.

[NC] = Add New Combo.
[RNC] = Remove New Combo.

You can ignore hitsound mod if you don't like it.

[Easy]
00:07:086 (1) - 00:07:398 へ移動した方が音が取りやすいと思います nazi no Fixed
00:10:523 (1) - 終点にFinish Fixed
00:13:961 (1) - ^ Fixed
00:21:461 (1) - 00:21:773 へ移動した方が音が取りやすいと思います nazi no Fixed
00:24:898 (1) - 終点にFinish Fixed
00:28:336 (1) - ^ Fixed
00:32:086 (1) - (1) を 00:32:398 へ移動（終点は00:33:336）して、 00:32:086 にサークルを追加した方がやりやすいと思います nazi adopted
00:33:961 (2) - ^ adopted
00:38:023 (3) - RNC. Fixed
00:45:523 (1) - ^ Fixed
00:50:836 (1) - 終点にFinish Fixed
00:56:148 (3) - 終点のclapを削除してfinishを追加？ Fixed
01:06:773 (1) - RNC Fixed
01:14:273 (1) - ^Fixed
01:18:961 (*) - Finishでサークルを追加？ 01:18:961~01:19:273までスライダーを足しましたFinishは終点につけました http://puu.sh/5kME
01:30:211 (1,2) - 00:32:086 (1), 00:33:961 (2) と同じ Fixed
01:36:148 (1) - RNC Fixed
01:39:898 (3) - 始点にfinish Fixed
01:43:648 (1) - RNC Fixed
02:23:648 (1) - ^? Fixed
02:25:523 (1) - add finish. Fixed
02:46:461 (1) - Health Barと重なってるので修正してください Fixed
03:02:398 (1) - RNC. Fixed
03:07:398 (4) - add whistle. Fixed
03:07:711 (5) - remove whistle. Fixed
03:09:898 (1) - RNC. Fixed

[avira's Normal]
00:00:523 (2) - 始点にwhistle
00:01:461 (3) - add finish.
00:02:086 (5) - 始点にwhistle
00:03:023 (6) - add finish.
00:03:336 (7) - NC.
00:03:648 (8) - add whistle.
00:04:586 (9) - 終点にwhistle
00:05:211 (10) - 始点にwhistle、終点にfinish
00:07:086 (1) - remove whistle.
00:27:399 (4) - 折り返し地点にwhistleを追加し、終点のwhistleを削除してfinishを追加
01:44:898 (3) - 2grid left? nazi
01:58:648 (1) - Health Barと重なってるので修正してください
02:08:961 (4) - NC.
02:36:148 (6) - ^

[Hard]
00:38:023 (1) - 前の (1,2,3) と同じDSを使った方が綺麗に見えると思います nazi Fixed
00:40:523 (3) - add clap.Fixed
00:40:836 (4) - remove clap. Fixed
00:41:148 (5) - add clap. Fixed
00:45:523 (1) - 前の (1,2,3) と同じDSを使った方が綺麗に見えると思います nazi Fixed
01:19:039 (1) - RNC. Fixed
02:17:086 (1) - ^ Fixed

Apricot wrote:

[!] = You NEED to change.

[avira's Normal]
00:00:523 (2) - 始点にwhistle
00:01:461 (3) - add finish.
00:02:086 (5) - 始点にwhistle
00:03:023 (6) - add finish.
00:03:336 (7) - NC.
00:03:648 (8) - add whistle.
00:04:586 (9) - 終点にwhistle
00:05:211 (10) - 始点にwhistle、終点にfinish
00:07:086 (1) - remove whistle.
00:27:399 (4) - 折り返し地点にwhistleを追加し、終点のwhistleを削除してfinishを追加
01:44:898 (3) - 2grid left? nazi
01:58:648 (1) - Health Barと重なってるので修正してください
02:08:961 (4) - NC.
02:36:148 (6) - ^

karenying wrote:

:) Hi~modding here
General
no break time of 3 min song@_@? Need a break time?

Easy
00:31:461 (4) - add whistle here and remove whistle of next (1) ? fixed
01:03:023 (1) - I suggest remove clap of this slider and add whistle at slider end fixed
02:23:648 (3) - add finish at slider head? fixed
02:34:273 (1) - finsh at slider end fixed

avira's Normal
fine

Hard
00:50:523 (4) - whistle? fixed
01:03:961 (9) - remove clap and add finish? fixed
01:47:398 (7) - you had newcombo of 00:49:273 (1) ,maybe newcombo here and remove newcombo01:48:336 (1) fixed
01:48:648 (3) - whistle? fixed
02:21:773 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - big jump,Crtl+Shift+S 9.000x look better Really 9.0? Did you mean 0.9? Fixed 0,9
02:29:273 (1) - finish fixed
02:32:398 (3) - whistle? fixed
02:58:648 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,17,18,1) - don't use same spacing of them please...that's hard to read for me
Fixed. sorry shifted node


nice map,and sorry for nazi modTvT
I want to shoot a star but I don't have any kds Q_Q

winber1 wrote:

sorry for the late mod

General

--Offset should be 523, so that the main beat lands on the large white tick. Looking at your map, this will probably mess up some new combos i guess, and also the placement of certain notes.
--The meter is wrong. Add red timing sections with these timing meters at:
00:00:523, 5/4
00:03:648, 3/4
00:10:835, 3/4
00:14:272, 3/4
00:25:209, 3/4
00:28:646, 3/4
00:51:146, 5/4
00:54:271, 3/4
00:58:021, 5/4
01:01:146, 3/4
01:23:333, 3/4
01:26:771, 3/4
01:49:271, 5/4
01:52:396, 3/4
01:56:146, 5/4
01:59:271, 3/4
02:33:021, 5/4
02:36:146, 3/4
02:39:896, 5/4
02:43:021, 3/4
02:46:771, 5/4
02:49:896, 3/4
02:53:646, 5/4
02:56:771, 3/4

These aren't perfect, because I'm pretty sure this song does not use 5/4 meter (i only used 5/4 to save some time and so you don't have to put as many red timing lines. In reality, The song most likely used 2/4 as a timing signature in certain measures, but osu! apparently can't use 2/4 timing signatures or i'm too stupid and can't make it work lol >_>)

i know this is really annoying to do, but idk, i would like to have the beatmap with a relatively correctly meter, instead of having the large white tick always off of the main beat.

Edit:i guess i could've just sused 4/4 or something. i guess you could skip the 5/4 timing sections too, but that may require adding a few more red lines elsewhere.

I don't think that I need to change offset. so no fixed

Hard

00:05:367 (1) - start spinner at 00:05:522? Fixed
00:50:211 (2,3,4) - this stack just looks really ugly, if you want to try to make it look nicer you can if you want. Easiest way is to just unstack them, but you probably don't want to do that. No fixed
01:18:961 (7,8) - this is weird. it would be much better if you turned combo 7 into a repeat slider and deleted combo 8. Fixed
01:38:023 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - i would actually group these into two groups of three just to follow the music, but i guess it's fine like this, since it's readable. (i would do the same with the next pattern similar to this at 01:45:521, but that's up to you) no fixed
02:17:086 (7) - i don't see why you need purple ticks for this. Use the blue ticks? (1/4 snapping) Fixed
02:58:648 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,17,18) - This stream will basically probably make anyone sight reading this die. There's almost like no way anyone could read this rhythm with the space you use. I must say that this actually sounds pretty nice, but you should really just add notes on the red ticks Fixed. sorry shifted node

Easy

--If you used the different meter and timing sections, you can readjust some notes or add some notes to make them land on the main beat. right now, some notes are on the beat, other times, they are before the main beat. idk, it just lacks consistency imo.

00:03:961 (1,2) - move 1/1 tick back? so that it's on the main beat. fixed
00:39:898 (x) - add note no fixed
00:40:523 (1) - move note 1/1 tick forward no fixed
00:47:398 (x) - add note no fixed
00:48:023 (1,2,3) - move 1/1 tick forward no fixed
02:02:086 (4,1) - no anti-spacing plz fixed
02:58:648 (1) - you should really not use this in an easy diff ok.changed long slider http://puu.sh/5zpT

karenying wrote:

General
no break time of 3 min song@_@? in spite of, add break time

winber1 wrote:

avira's

--ok, idk why are you skipping the main beat of many of the measures. It just feels awkward sometimes. Most of the time the music is playing something pretty important on the main beat of the song, so I would expect something to be there. I pointed out a few of these circumstances below, but you should use your own judgment to see whehter it's better to add notes on the main beat or not for the rest of the song. ???

00:25:211 (1,2) - even if it's normal, I'm still against using jumps like these no
00:29:273 (x) - i would add a note here. it's just really awkward without one imo no
00:30:523 (x) - ^ no
00:40:523 (x) - ^ and you can make the shape look nicer too imo :3 no
00:47:454 (x) - ^ no
00:48:336 (x) - ^ no
01:10:836 (1,2,3,1) - i am a little reluctant to do something like this in a normal. no
01:42:711 (4,5) - i would refrain from adding your own drum beats in a normal difficulty. it's adding unnecessary difficulty for beginners imo.???
02:10:211 (3) - add one more repeat became breaktime
02:32:398 (2,1) - idk, dont make a jump? new combo<3 but fixed
02:58:336 (2) - i would move closer to combo 1 and 3 fixed
03:12:398 (2,3) - move closer to combo 1 no