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00:02:715 (9,1) - suggest either spacing this out a lot, or directly stacking it
00:01:881 (6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - spending so much time in the same area of the playfield isn't really something you wanna do, try to move around and use the full playfield to your advantage
00:11:048 (8) - omg jumpscare storyboard
00:17:715 (5,2,4) - maybe have the slider end of 00:18:381 (4) - continue the in straight line with 00:17:715 (5,2) - to make it more tidy
00:24:381 (1,2,3,4) - how come the rhythm is different here. i'd just make this the same as the other patterns, such as 00:21:715 (1,2,3,4,5) - or 00:27:048 (1,2,3,4,5) -, since it's the same sounds afterall
00:40:715 (2,3) - such a dramatic change in spacing without any justification in the music, suggest moving 00:40:881 (3) - up further, and rotating to maintain the blanket on 00:41:381 (5) -
00:48:715 (1,3,5) - when doing stuff like this try to keep the overlaps consistently spaced it looks much prettier
00:51:048 (6) - ctrl+g would be much better flow from previous slider. the following notes may need to be adjusted if you agree to that change
01:03:881 (1) - unnecessary nc
01:05:215 (11) - i think it would make more sense to end the stream here on the vocals. 01:05:215 (11,12) - just change these 2 notes into a 1/4 slider like 01:05:381 (13) - and space appropriately.
01:06:548 (13) - same here
01:07:465 (8,1) - this is so out of place and defies your previous spacing logic
01:20:381 (1,2) - the intensity of the music increases so much here so your spacing between 1/2 beats should increase in stead of decrease. like look how spaced you made these 01:19:548 (6,7) - compared to the spacings in the climax
01:31:215 (2,3,4) - i think it would be better to space these like the previous pattern
02:08:881 (3,4) - the spacing and flow here could be improved a lot
02:49:215 (1,1,1) - there's a lot of ncs that just don't seem to be following anything. try to choose a strong repetitive beat to nc on.
03:04:548 (2,3,4,2,3,4) - again i think these should be spaced out to match that first pattern you made in the first kiai
03:17:048 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - nice idea! i think to improve it 03:17:048 (1,2,3) - these shouldn't be stacked since that implies the intensity isn't changing which contradicts what you do with the following notes. just give them a slight spacing.
03:17:381 (5) - also i think it's best if every single note increases in spacing, since having this 5 equally spaced from it's previous and next note implies those sounds are equal in intensity, but they aren't. so yeah just ensure every note gradually increases in spacing, but I wouldn't go beyond a ds of 1.1x
03:25:715 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - 1-2 jumps here don't make sense since the rhythm is 1-2-3 1-2-3 1-2-3. you hitsounds even follow the 1-2-3 rhythm
03:39:048 (1) - there's a strong finish sound at the start of this spinner. but spinner starts don't provide any feedback. so it's best to place a circle here then start the spinner a 1/4 beat later like
03:49:381 (1) - it's good that you made this consistent with the intro, but like I said earlier i think it's a little messy, suggest just stacking it under 03:49:048 (9) -
03:54:715 (1) - i don't think it's a good idea to ignore the strong sound on the big white tick after this note. in fact i don't think this should be a break at all. since the next vocal section here 04:00:381 (1) - is pretty much same thing but isn't a break.
04:32:381 (6) - the direction of this slider is almost unpredictable, try not to stack sliderends and sliderheads. pretty sure this is unrankable
04:49:881 (4,5) - and 05:05:215 (4,5) - these stacks look a little out of place since you usually don't use stacks for these sounds in this kiai
00:01:881 (6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - spending so much time in the same area of the playfield isn't really something you wanna do, try to move around and use the full playfield to your advantage
00:11:048 (8) - omg jumpscare storyboard
00:17:715 (5,2,4) - maybe have the slider end of 00:18:381 (4) - continue the in straight line with 00:17:715 (5,2) - to make it more tidy
00:24:381 (1,2,3,4) - how come the rhythm is different here. i'd just make this the same as the other patterns, such as 00:21:715 (1,2,3,4,5) - or 00:27:048 (1,2,3,4,5) -, since it's the same sounds afterall
00:40:715 (2,3) - such a dramatic change in spacing without any justification in the music, suggest moving 00:40:881 (3) - up further, and rotating to maintain the blanket on 00:41:381 (5) -
00:48:715 (1,3,5) - when doing stuff like this try to keep the overlaps consistently spaced it looks much prettier
00:51:048 (6) - ctrl+g would be much better flow from previous slider. the following notes may need to be adjusted if you agree to that change
01:03:881 (1) - unnecessary nc
01:05:215 (11) - i think it would make more sense to end the stream here on the vocals. 01:05:215 (11,12) - just change these 2 notes into a 1/4 slider like 01:05:381 (13) - and space appropriately.
01:06:548 (13) - same here
01:07:465 (8,1) - this is so out of place and defies your previous spacing logic
01:20:381 (1,2) - the intensity of the music increases so much here so your spacing between 1/2 beats should increase in stead of decrease. like look how spaced you made these 01:19:548 (6,7) - compared to the spacings in the climax
01:31:215 (2,3,4) - i think it would be better to space these like the previous pattern
02:08:881 (3,4) - the spacing and flow here could be improved a lot
02:49:215 (1,1,1) - there's a lot of ncs that just don't seem to be following anything. try to choose a strong repetitive beat to nc on.
03:04:548 (2,3,4,2,3,4) - again i think these should be spaced out to match that first pattern you made in the first kiai
03:17:048 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - nice idea! i think to improve it 03:17:048 (1,2,3) - these shouldn't be stacked since that implies the intensity isn't changing which contradicts what you do with the following notes. just give them a slight spacing.
03:17:381 (5) - also i think it's best if every single note increases in spacing, since having this 5 equally spaced from it's previous and next note implies those sounds are equal in intensity, but they aren't. so yeah just ensure every note gradually increases in spacing, but I wouldn't go beyond a ds of 1.1x
03:25:715 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - 1-2 jumps here don't make sense since the rhythm is 1-2-3 1-2-3 1-2-3. you hitsounds even follow the 1-2-3 rhythm
03:39:048 (1) - there's a strong finish sound at the start of this spinner. but spinner starts don't provide any feedback. so it's best to place a circle here then start the spinner a 1/4 beat later like
03:49:381 (1) - it's good that you made this consistent with the intro, but like I said earlier i think it's a little messy, suggest just stacking it under 03:49:048 (9) -
03:54:715 (1) - i don't think it's a good idea to ignore the strong sound on the big white tick after this note. in fact i don't think this should be a break at all. since the next vocal section here 04:00:381 (1) - is pretty much same thing but isn't a break.
04:32:381 (6) - the direction of this slider is almost unpredictable, try not to stack sliderends and sliderheads. pretty sure this is unrankable
04:49:881 (4,5) - and 05:05:215 (4,5) - these stacks look a little out of place since you usually don't use stacks for these sounds in this kiai
good luck !