Bonsai wrote:

hides

Mir wrote:

Other issues:
- 00:10:708 - Shouldn't start the 1/8 at 00:10:438 - cuz here there's just 2 1/4 notes until 00:10:708 - idk man im pretty sure the 1/8 are in the right spot unless im going deaf
- 02:06:452 - From here there are a lot of jumps.. but the song is only doing 1/1 drums and the only constant 1/2 are very quiet hi-hats, so in my opinion so many jumps here (in fact a whole section of purely jumps) is pushing it a bit for intensity. What you could do instead is use a lot more sliders at higher spacing in order to represent this buildup more appropriately. i think its fine.. the 1/2 drum noise isnt really quiet either. the section here in general is pretty loud (more emphasized than the vocal kiai imo) so i think the rising spacing provides good intensity for a map that has roughly the same spacing in the other kiais

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  00:08:248 (3) - uhh, try to shape this slider better | https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612292
  00:27:914 (2) - lo l ^
  00:29:658 (1) - why am I so gay for slider shapes? | that's just an alternative, the way you mapped it is fine but uhhh https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612309
  00:31:228 (5) - NC, there's a new section
  00:34:019 (1) - you know ehh
  00:38:728 (2) - you can stack it better to 00:38:030 (3) -
  00:45:530 (3) - CTRL+G? The way you mapped it flows a bit bad :v
  01:17:274 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6) - this pattern looks weird as fuck, I can't really explain it though. Maybe you could remap it with a few kicksliders?
  01:42:042 (2) - Stack it better to 01:40:995 (1) -
  01:55:647 (3) - ^
  02:00:356 (7,8,1) - There's almost no sound for a triplet here, you should map a simply stacked triplet, it doesn't make sense this way
  02:44:484 (1) - Either remove this NC or add one in 01:20:763 (5) -
  03:00:530 (1) - l o l why this hitsound?
  03:13:088 (1) - how about changing it with this shape? | https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612360
  03:22:158 (5) - Do a complete jump, this slider here doesn't fit, the sound is the same of 03:21:460 (1,2,3,4) -
  03:22:507 (6,7) - and maybe increase the spacing between these circles
  03:23:553 (1) - yuiko♥ my sweet angel♥
  03:23:553 (1,1,1) - silence the sliderends
  03:25:647 (1) - ^
  03:27:042 (1) - ^
  03:31:228 (1) - ^ | not gonna mention them anymore, but silence every sliders like this one
  03:34:716 (3,4,5,6,7) - how about using some kicksliders? streams doesn't really fit here, imo
  03:49:019 (1) - what's the point of putting a NC here? remove it :v
  03:49:367 (1,2) - there's no sound for 2 circles, you should use a slider
  04:00:530 (1) - to 04:11:693 (1) - nice overmaps
  04:12:391 (3) - uhh, this overlap isn't that cute, try to re-arrange the pattern without making 04:11:693 (1,3) - overlap
  04:16:577 (4) - how about using 2 sliders connected with a circle? It would fit much better here | http://i.imgur.com/IGQouNN.png
  04:34:368 (2) - you're not following the vocal properly, what's the point of a 1/1 slider here?
  05:01:403 (3,4) - ugh, why did you put that circle?
  05:05:937 (4,1) - a slider would fit much better, I don't also understand why you didn't map the section after this one
  05:08:205 (5,6,7) - a bit too spaced tbh :v
  05:24:252 (1) - s i l e n c e
  05:32:799 (2,3,4) - There's almost no sound, what's the point of this spacing :v the alternation doesn't fit the song very well also
  05:31:053 (8,1) - a kickslider or a triplet between these two objects would be cool
  05:36:810 (1) - HAAAAsilence
  06:01:751 (8) - a kickslider would fit well, and if you put it don't make it overlap with 06:01:401 (6) -
  06:14:712 (1) - silence the sliderend
  06:15:922 (2) - ^
  oh and a preview point with yuiko would be sooo cute. xd.

Mark101 wrote:

fuck soraru

[The Malicious Goddess of Fate and the Blooming White lmao kys]

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  00:08:248 (3) - uhh, try to shape this slider better | https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612292 okay mom
  00:27:914 (2) - lo l ^
  00:29:658 (1) - why am I so gay for slider shapes? | that's just an alternative, the way you mapped it is fine but uhhh https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612309 naw
  00:31:228 (5) - NC, there's a new section
  00:34:019 (1) - you know ehh
  00:38:728 (2) - you can stack it better to 00:38:030 (3) -
  00:45:530 (3) - CTRL+G? The way you mapped it flows a bit bad :v i actually kind of like this flow xd
  01:17:274 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6) - this pattern looks weird as fuck, I can't really explain it though. Maybe you could remap it with a few kicksliders? well i tried to make it neater with less overlaps and such :v
  01:42:042 (2) - Stack it better to 01:40:995 (1) -
  01:55:647 (3) - ^
  02:00:356 (7,8,1) - There's almost no sound for a triplet here, you should map a simply stacked triplet, it doesn't make sense this way theres a sound + to make it the same length as 02:01:577 (5) - for aesthetics
  02:44:484 (1) - Either remove this NC or add one in 01:20:763 (5) -
  03:00:530 (1) - l o l why this hitsound? amazing
  03:13:088 (1) - how about changing it with this shape? | https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8612360
  03:22:158 (5) - Do a complete jump, this slider here doesn't fit, the sound is the same of 03:21:460 (1,2,3,4) - naw since its to add emphasis to 03:22:507 (6,7) -
  03:22:507 (6,7) - and maybe increase the spacing between these circles
  03:23:553 (1) - yuiko♥ my sweet angel♥ same ♥
  03:23:553 (1,1,1) - silence the sliderends
  03:25:647 (1) - ^
  03:27:042 (1) - ^
  03:31:228 (1) - ^ | not gonna mention them anymore, but silence every sliders like this one
  03:34:716 (3,4,5,6,7) - how about using some kicksliders? streams doesn't really fit here, imo i think its nice :v
  03:49:019 (1) - what's the point of putting a NC here? remove it :v so its easier to read cause it looks like 1/2 for a non kiai section
  03:49:367 (1,2) - there's no sound for 2 circles, you should use a slider
  04:00:530 (1) - to 04:11:693 (1) - nice overmaps thanks
  04:12:391 (3) - uhh, this overlap isn't that cute, try to re-arrange the pattern without making 04:11:693 (1,3) - overlap i think its fine minor problem
  04:16:577 (4) - how about using 2 sliders connected with a circle? It would fit much better here | http://i.imgur.com/IGQouNN.png mm ive been mapping the offbeats like this and i dont want to ruin the consistency
  04:34:368 (2) - you're not following the vocal properly, what's the point of a 1/1 slider here? i think its following the vocals fine since the vocals arent very emphasized for each beat theyre just kind of together ?_? if you get what im saying
  05:01:403 (3,4) - ugh, why did you put that circle? cuz theres a sound
  05:05:937 (4,1) - a slider would fit much better, I don't also understand why you didn't map the section after this one nah the instruments stop after this point so i think notes are more appropriate
  05:08:205 (5,6,7) - a bit too spaced tbh :v but its basically been the same xD
  05:24:252 (1) - s i l e n c e
  05:32:799 (2,3,4) - There's almost no sound, what's the point of this spacing :v the alternation doesn't fit the song very well also nah since i was following the piano pitch for these jumps so i think its kinda cool to match that twinkle sound too
  05:31:053 (8,1) - a kickslider or a triplet between these two objects would be cool
  05:36:810 (1) - HAAAAsilence
  06:01:751 (8) - a kickslider would fit well, and if you put it don't make it overlap with 06:01:401 (6) - but the sound isnt the piano D:
  06:14:712 (1) - silence the sliderend
  06:15:922 (2) - ^
  oh and a preview point with yuiko would be sooo cute. xd.

Good luck with ranking! Fuck, I'm never gonna rank Redo.

Naotoshi wrote:

is everything fixed

also fuck you soraru is good

Time Capsule wrote:

Whos soraru?
*laugh in yuikonnu*

A r M i N wrote:

to fix the timing i'd put a red point to about 203007 and 204231(sounded better for me at least) ^^

Naotoshi wrote:

ok some of ur volume settings / sample set settings are fucked, like intro shouldnt b 100%, 00:25:647 - different settings, blah blah blah
go and fix those
01:17:274 (1,2) - shd probably b a slider and also wats with the 2 combo nc

01:40:298 (2,1) - omg unrankable pixel off stack.

02:11:519 (4,1) - is kinda overspaced, move it down a row or two

god yuikonnu is so boring to listen to

rest is more or less fine lmk when u fixed

Naotoshi wrote:

is everything fixed

also fuck you soraru is good

1. Would you agree to change the diff name to a less ridiculous long one? you can be creative, but adding the full lyrics is weird
2. soft-hitfinish3.mp3 is unused, also is a mp3 format hs

1. 06:17:748 (1) - volume lvls are different
2. 00:10:410 (1,2) - I don't think it's right to use a 1/8 repeat sliders in the 1/6, since you're actually ignoring important beats, such as 00:10:770 - , tbh I'd just continue following your previous rhythm
3. 00:31:053 (3,4,1) - they do belong to the same melody in the song, that's why they should be grouped in the same combo.
4. 02:24:077 (1,2,1) - same as above, remove the last NC.
5. 02:27:042 (1) - This nc is unnecessary, 02:29:833 (1) - same
6. 02:53:553 (1) - the whistle in the slider tail sounds bad and doesn't fit the song
7. 06:07:509 (2) - missing NC
8. 06:17:748 (1) - reduce the volume at the slider ticks

Natsu wrote:

General

1. Would you agree to change the diff name to a less ridiculous long one? you can be creative, but adding the full lyrics is weird
2. soft-hitfinish3.mp3 is unused, also is a mp3 format hs

long diff name

1. 06:17:748 (1) - volume lvls are different
2. 00:10:410 (1,2) - I don't think it's right to use a 1/8 repeat sliders in the 1/6, since you're actually ignoring important beats, such as 00:10:770 - , tbh I'd just continue following your previous rhythm mm i think its fine since the 1/8 sliders are actually really audible + ive been following that flute noise from 00:06:626 - so i think its fine.
3. 00:31:053 (3,4,1) - they do belong to the same melody in the song, that's why they should be grouped in the same combo.
4. 02:24:077 (1,2,1) - same as above, remove the last NC.
5. 02:27:042 (1) - This nc is unnecessary, 02:29:833 (1) - same
6. 02:53:553 (1) - the whistle in the slider tail sounds bad and doesn't fit the song
7. 06:07:509 (2) - missing NC
8. 06:17:748 (1) - reduce the volume at the slider ticks

you can call your previous bn for rebub

Naotoshi wrote:

diffname is fine

Natsu wrote:

okkkkkkkkkkkkkk

IamKwaN wrote:

is the song edited by you?