1. Dawn (6,11 stars, 1482 notes)

Urushi38 wrote:

Timing sounds bit off. offset -8? You're not first person who tells me about it. Okay, fixed.
You use very few hitsounds. You must use more if you wanna rank this map. Ikr, working on it.
As AIMod says, you should reduce KIAI time. How many I've seen ranked maps with the same "problems with kiai". For example the same ranked Brain Power

You put too many empty jumps like 01:26:725 (1,2,3,4,5,6), you must follow what the song is. Except for lengthy guitar riff (which is sometimes supplemented by something minor) and monotonous drum section, which can mapped only sliders and jumps (and since I wanted to make a high diff I decided to do more jumps (anyway its kiai)), I found nothing in music (ofc I'm not talking about vocal, I mapped it only sliders (jumps in the end when was the vocals - end of kiai)) But, if anyone else will say about what these jumps are boring, I will try to change it.

good luck thanks

havkz wrote:

Hi! o/

general

i feel like the timing is off? another one

change background no, i think that its nice bg

Dawn

00:01:225 (1,2,3,4) - bad pattern imo, how about this? changed on its own way, it had to be done

00:06:025 (1) - this slider is bended too much fixed

00:18:700 (4,5) - stack with slider fixed, but still move 00:18:917 (6,7) right in order to beautiful look

00:20:575 (1,2) - ctrl+g for better flow disagree

00:23:575 (5) - move circle a bit to the left for better spacing between (4) and (6) fixed

00:29:125 (2,3) - looks confusing, id not stack (2) with the slider end I think otherwise

00:36:625 (1,2,1,2) - remake the kicksliders, they look weeeird, and also remove the nc at 00:36:925 okay fixed

00:40:225 (1,2,3) - random triple imo, consider making this become a part of the stream coming after it changed to repeated 4 times slider, i noticed guitar sound after this triple

00:47:875 (9) - ctrl+g ugh

01:11:725 (3) - NAZI ALERT: move 1 pixel to the left fixed

01:22:825 (1) - better? better. fine

01:24:925 (4) - ctrl+g so it got worse imo

02:26:725 (2) - move down a little bit hmm

02:36:925 (3) - bad slider, remake it here I can still agree

02:41:725 (5) - ^ but here definitively not

03:00:925 (1) - remove nc I think not sorry, not change atm

03:01:675 (1) - ^ ^

03:02:125 (1) - ^^ ^^

03:07:075 (6) - maybe move the circle like this just not here

03:18:925 (1) - ctrl+g and remove nc y, i put nc in the same place (like 03:16:517 (1) ), but you're talking about they said nothing, and ctrl+g i dont like too

03:19:225 (2) - add nc ^

03:24:925 (1,2,3) - waaay too high, move somewhere else move a bit down with 03:24:767 (4)

04:05:875 (1,2,3) - move to the right a bit seems to be moved

04:36:925 (1,2) - blanket good idea

04:48:925 (1) - remove nc since I put nc in 02:54:917 (1) , and here i did it too

04:50:125 (5) - blanket with (1) move a bit up and right in order to avoid bad overlap with 04:49:217 (1)

05:03:925 (2) - ctrl+g though looks beautiful, but anyway somehow not

05:05:425 (3) - too high up, move down a bit moved all pattern

05:08:875 (2) - ugly slider, remake it (like this maybe?) if in your opinion it's radically changing the business, then let's do so, i agree

05:10:525 (1,2) - blanket with (3) looks worse, sorry man

05:12:625 (1) - move a bit to the left to make the star pattern look better moved along with 3th note

good luck! thx

Fanteer wrote:

Здаров
M4M

General
Убери некоторые киаи, у тебя их много. я так не думаю, разве что последний киаи меня несколько смущает, но это же припев
Сделай цвета кругов. К примеру такие http://puu.sh/qdNa6/970b70aa48.png вроде бы сделал

Map
00:00:467 (3,1) - я думаю что это все таки оверлап фиксед
00:01:217 (1,1) - фикс оверлап фиксед
00:09:317 (6,7,1) - тут лучше расставить биты по музыке, тоесть 00:09:467 (7) - ставь на 436 64
00:09:617 (1) - а этот ставишь на 472 284 вот так http://puu.sh/qdLPV/5d8f9c557b.jpg, так лучше Сделал потом так https://pp.vk.me/c626225/v626225907/211 ... Cqc700.jpg Охуенно, как по мне. Спасибо за хорошую идею
00:10:967 (5) - на сильный бит оканчивается слайдер, причем сильный, фикс я делал этот слайдер по звуку гитары, но в конце её(гитары) сильного звука не заметил, так что как-то нет
00:11:417 (1,2,3) - переделай, как то криво они стоят флоу плохой поменял
00:12:317 (1,2,3,4) - тут по музыке точно не джампы должны быть сделал чтобы хоть как-то своё говно карту разнообразить, так что оставлю пока
00:23:717 (6,7,8,9) - спейсинг сломался поменял местами
00:25:817 (4,2) - стакни с концом бля точно, фиксед
00:29:717 (5,3) - бланкет ок
00:33:317 (6,7) - https://puu.sh/qdM6n/2e40296ed6.jpg сделай так лучше сделал
00:37:442 (4,5) - спейсинг сломался фиксед
00:43:817 (5,1) - на 1 пиксель стак слетел странно, мне едитор показывает что всё с ним нормально, лол. Так или иначе, сейчас всё должно быть правильно
01:10:817 (7,2) - оверлап упс, переделал
01:13:667 (3,1) - бланкет окей
01:15:317 (4,5,6,1,2,3,1,2,3,2,3,4) - зачем такой спейсинг сильный, не киаи же чем ближе к киаи, тем больше становится спейсинг, очевидно же
01:22:217 (3,4,5,6) - так лучше https://puu.sh/qdMjx/38ec4ae26e.jpg мне и свой вариант нравится, соре
02:02:867 (4,1) - оверлап фиксед
02:03:167 (2,2) - ^ ^
02:03:017 (1,2,3,4) - поверни этот джамп вниз и сделай так http://puu.sh/qdMtk/c5b5862c46.jpg,
потому что в это джампе надо гонять курсор вправо влево , и так 4 раза. Это как то скучно,а в
моем варианте разнообразней. Но это твое дело менять или нет. По своему сделал, и диффа уменьшилась на семь сотых, лол
02:15:917 (1,1) - стак упс, не заметил
02:39:317 (5,2,3) - ? ладно
02:40:817 (3,4) - ровней сделай бланкет вроде бы сделал
02:50:117 (1,2) - ^ вообще здесь я не хотел бланкета, лол, но так тоже нормально
02:51:317 (4,3) - overlap из-за тебя я потерял пол часа своей жизни придумывая новый паттерн
02:53:042 (3,4) - фикс бланкет сейчас он вроде бы нормальный
03:17:567 (1,6) - бланкет сделал
03:28:817 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - переделай, плохой флоу как-то переделал
03:32:192 (2,3,5) - оверлап переместил
03:56:267 (1,2) - бланкет фикс ок
04:52:817 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - пооригинальнее звездочки придумай что то, она тут не подходит переделал звезду немного

Итог
Слайдеры красивые , но нету разных паттерном, все сделанно в одном стиле.
Мапа становится скучной с минуты 2 потому что надо какие то придумывать комбинации. Так же можно
стримы резко разворачивать/делать их более кривыми чтобы сложнее их было аимить. Работай над
картой, она довольно сырая. ок

Удачи спасибо, взаимно

Sliproads wrote:

DAWN

01:43:217 (3,4) - 4 is too curved for the blanket to look good, might want to look into that. This looks better fixed slider
01:47:717 (9,1) - Overlap these two like this i think that my variant is fine
01:55:517 (2,3) - 02:00:317 (2,3) - 02:05:117 (2,3) - 03:10:217 (1,2) - ^ ^
01:53:867 (8,1) - Imperfect blanket again. I didn't want there blanket, lol. Okay, fixed.
02:24:917 (3,2) - 03:36:317 (1,2) - ^ in the first case, I noticed the mistake and fixed, but in the second case, I didn't notice anything untoward(move a bit as a precaution)
02:52:517 (1,2) - Stack these with the beginning of 02:52:817 (3) - why
03:05:717 (2,4) - Be careful of overlaps like this. Something like this looks better. i think my variant is fine
03:39:017 (2,3,4) - This looks better IMO. hmm, good idea
04:00:317 (3) - Move to x:206 y:210 no, i want to keep the spacing between pattern
04:55:667 (2) - Move to x:180 y:200 so it looks better with 04:55:817 (3) - ok

1. Overall : You might want to nerf some streams such as 02:09:317 (4,5,6,7,1) - as they're in a verse and feel a bit overkill. You could also slow down the sliders that emphasize a guitar note such as 04:45:317 (5) -
2. 00:00:467 (3,3,2) - The middle (3) should be stacked over (2) as it's closer in time
3. 02:18:617 (3,3) - Overlap
4. 02:58:817 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Increase progressively the DS as the notes goes higher
5. 03:23:567 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Feels overkill
6. 04:08:867 (5,6,7) - Feels weird to play
7. 04:10:817 (1,2) - Put them on the same y axis
8. 04:26:417 (1,1) - Overlap
   
   

[Hiiro Sakaki] wrote:

Hey, from your M4M! hi again

[Dawn]

1. Overall : You might want to nerf some streams such as 02:09:317 (4,5,6,7,1) - as they're in a verse and feel a bit overkill. such a large spacing is due to the fact that the closer kiai time - the greater the spacing You could also slow down the sliders that emphasize a guitar note such as 04:45:317 (5) - I do not think that it is necessary in a particular place
2. 00:00:467 (3,3,2) - The middle (3) should be stacked over (2) as it's closer in time I don't quite understand your idea, but still stacked 3-rd note with 2-nd slider in order to dont have a bad overlap
3. 02:18:617 (3,3) - Overlap fixed
4. 02:58:817 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Increase progressively the DS as the notes goes higher this is still only the beginning solo + monotonous guitar riff, i do not think that it is necessary
5. 03:23:567 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Feels overkill I hear there is the strongest drum sound, therefore I made a large spacing
6. 04:08:867 (5,6,7) - Feels weird to play I do not think so, sorry man
7. 04:10:817 (1,2) - Put them on the same y axis in this case get bad overlap with 04:10:067 (5,6,7) , and I still want to make blanket here
8. 04:26:417 (1,1) - Overlap I did it on specially, not change atm

Sorry, my mod is super short np, but your map is super polished and really good!thanks! Good luck ! mutually!

• 00:01:817 (1) - Since there is no flow break or significant change in music at 00:01:667 (4,1) - , I think NC is unnecessary
  
  00:02:417 (3) - I think NC fits here more than 00:02:717 (1) -
  
  00:05:717 (6) - 00:07:217 (7) - ^
  
  I think the NC scheme you’re using is rather unconventional. Since I’m not good at being clever with NC, I won’t give any more suggestion on this. But I unless you know what you’re doing, I think it’s just better to put NC on downbeats xP
  
  00:43:817 (5,6,7,8) - Emphasis on jumps confuses me here. 00:43:817 (5,8) - has really strong vocal, 00:43:967 (6,8) - has strong drum. But the largest jump goes to 00:44:117 (7) - , which has the weakest sound in the song :3
  
  There are a lot of 1/4 streams, as well as 1/3 streams. I think it can be bit confusing for player when it switches, since a lot of them have similar distance. Doing NC on every note of 1/3 usually works, but this map has too many 1/3 beats that it might be more confusing. Using clearly different distance (i.e. make 1/3 streams more spaced) might also work. I am not sure, but something to consider /w\
  
  02:02:417 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2) - I’m grumpy how it becomes so much easier at 02:03:617 (1,2,1,2) - compared to 02:02:417 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) -. Sliders are easier than circles, and DS also decreases
  
  03:23:942 (6,1) - Sudden stop here looks rather difficult
  
  03:32:417 (1,2,3) - Is this intentional? I don’t think this looks great
  
  04:06:467 (4,5) - 04:21:317 (5,1) - 04:23:717 (1,2) - Blanket could be better
  
  04:16:367 (4,1) - I think this overlap can be avoided
  
  From my first glance, the map didn’t seem to have a solid structure. But when I looked closely, I think flow is pretty good, and there are not a lot of weird overlaps. So I’m bit confused… xD
  
  I am not familiar with this style of mapping, but I tried :3 I hope I helped a bit.
  
  Good luck!

CaffeAmericano wrote:

Dawn

• 00:01:817 (1) - Since there is no flow break or significant change in music at 00:01:667 (4,1) - , I think NC is unnecessary fixed
  
  00:02:417 (3) - I think NC fits here more than 00:02:717 (1) - disagree
  
  00:05:717 (6) - 00:07:217 (7) - ^ also somehow not
  
  I think the NC scheme you’re using is rather unconventional. Since I’m not good at being clever with NC, I won’t give any more suggestion on this. But I unless you know what you’re doing, I think it’s just better to put NC on downbeats xP
  
  00:43:817 (5,6,7,8) - Emphasis on jumps confuses me here. 00:43:817 (5,8) - has really strong vocal, 00:43:967 (6,8) - has strong drum. But the largest jump goes to 00:44:117 (7) - , which has the weakest sound in the song :3 but in (7) has strong guitar sound, besides, I like this jump
  
  There are a lot of 1/4 streams, as well as 1/3 streams. I think it can be bit confusing for player when it switches, since a lot of them have similar distance. Doing NC on every note of 1/3 usually works, but this map has too many 1/3 beats that it might be more confusing. Using clearly different distance (i.e. make 1/3 streams more spaced) might also work. I am not sure, but something to consider /w\ I specially in the beginning 1/3 part was doing a little spacing and gradually increased it
  
  02:02:417 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2) - I’m grumpy how it becomes so much easier at 02:03:617 (1,2,1,2) - compared to 02:02:417 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) -. Sliders are easier than circles, and DS also decreases a bit increased the spacing
  
  03:23:942 (6,1) - Sudden stop here looks rather difficult I think that separate the two different parties is quite reasonable
  
  03:32:417 (1,2,3) - Is this intentional? I don’t think this looks great ye
  
  04:06:467 (4,5) - 04:21:317 (5,1) - 04:23:717 (1,2) - Blanket could be better fixed all
  
  04:16:367 (4,1) - I think this overlap can be avoided fixed
  
  From my first glance, the map didn’t seem to have a solid structure. But when I looked closely, I think flow is pretty good, and there are not a lot of weird overlaps. So I’m bit confused… xD
  
  I am not familiar with this style of mapping, but I tried :3 I hope I helped a bit.
  
  Good luck! Mutually!

Mozord wrote:

Собственно, несколько мыслей таки набралось.

Мне кажется стоит немного уменьшить сложность начала, секунды до двадцатой, так, чтобы отчётливо чувствовалась разница. по моему она и в таком виде не очень сложная

00:36:017 (1) - думаю надо немного уменьшить спейсинг в первых двух стримах в этом месте. вообще я когда сделал эту карту особо не задумывался о спейсинге при стримах. но потом один человек (опустим кто) открыл мне глаза на то что стримы со спейсингом выше одной единицы лучше не использовать. В общем, уменьшил здесь спейсинг до 0.80x

02:12:242 (3) - и здесь тоже. Как-то они не вписываются, что ли. По-моему их сложность не соответствует местам композиции, в которых они расположены. В проигрыше, например, сложные лонги вполне к месту, а здесь они не должны так бросаться в глаза. тоже убавил до 0.80x

А вот концовку надо бы как-то сделать посложнее, после проигрыша она совсем не чувствуется. вот тут хз, там сама часть песни не такая сложная как в соло и других. К тому же, я спешлом попытался последнюю звезду с увеличенном спейсингом делать
Чтобы битмап не наскучивал, его сложность нужно плавно поднимать по мере приближения к завершению. Вообще это очень необъективная тема. По мне он и так играется относительно неплохо.

Жёлтый цвет комбо слишком режет глаза по-моему. Его бы по-тусклее сделать. тоже не задумывался ранее о важности комбо цветов. Сделал потусклее и поменял не вписывающийся накак синий (или какой, я дальтоник) цвет

Ещё вижу здесь много оверлапов, но они, видимо, являются частью твоего замысла, ибо не заметить их просто невозможно. да, это задумка

Больше мне ничего не бросается в глаза. Да, возможно он действительно слегка монотонен, но тоже самое можно сказать абсолютно про любой марафон, по-моему.
Ну и уж забивать на мапинг или нет — твоё дело, конечно. Вероятнее всего вдохновение работать над ним ещё посетит тебя в будущем. ага