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Hope you manage to fix your computer with no repercussions lmao
Keep in mind most of these are suggestions, feel free to reject them (with reasons of course)
It seems like you have enough mods for Muzu downwards, so I won't touch them anymore than they've already had lol
Good luck with ranking, I really like the set! :3
Hope you manage to fix your computer with no repercussions lmao
Keep in mind most of these are suggestions, feel free to reject them (with reasons of course)
Inner Oni
Map's pretty good
00:09:111 (27,28,29,30,31,32) - I like mentioned, dk k ddk would be my personal choice, but just change either 27 or 28 to k is fine too
00:14:309 (45) - k in case you didn't manage to recover the file
00:16:982 (54) - k for pitch
00:18:764 (61) - ^
00:23:071 (102) and 00:27:824 (145) - k, putting here for reference, I know you rejected the change but it just sounds better to me, and it offers a contrast to places like 00:24:259 (113,114) and 00:29:012 (156,157) where there ARE drums so the d d there makes sense.
Kiai time, I really don't like how you have k on the first beat of each bar. d would make much more sense, as firstly there's bass drums on the first beat of each measure, and secondly the pitch of the synth on those notes are all lower than the notes in the 7-plet stream before. If you accept this suggestion do modify those 7-plets btw, like for 00:32:279 (186,187,188,189,190,191,192) do something like dkkdkkd for example.
00:38:665 - this is how I'd map this part right here, it definitely matches the drums better:
00:39:853 - and this is how I'd map the stream
00:57:230 (322,323,324,325) - dddd? k at the end doesn't match the drums at all
00:57:527 (326,327,328) - perhaps change to kdk so the bell like sfx at 00:57:675 (328) is represented, and 328,332,335,339,344 all as k makes a nice structure
Pitch things again, just small details that you could choose whether to change or not
01:06:735 (368) - k
01:12:378 (390) - k
01:17:873 (414,415) - dk
01:19:804 (427,428) - dk, doesn't exactly match pitch but offers a nice kddkddkddk structure similar to before
01:24:928 - there really should be a note here for the synth imo, for places like 01:24:556 (460,461,462,463,464,465) I wouldn't do a 5-plet + single, I would do a single + 5-plet lol
Other places with the same issue: 01:27:304 - 01:29:680 - 01:34:433 - 01:36:809 -
01:31:091 (525,526,527) - d k d instead for the drums?
01:31:834 (533,534,535,536,537) - kdkkk for pitch, unless you don't want the stream to be too complicated early on
01:38:962 (606,607,608,609,610) - kdkkd works better imo, mainly because 01:39:259 really should be a d as there are clear bass drum sounds there
01:50:695 (674) - d
01:51:438 (679) - k
^ just how I see the pitch again, and I like how the k's are distributed with the two changes above, having more and more k's towards the end there.
00:09:111 (27,28,29,30,31,32) - I like mentioned, dk k ddk would be my personal choice, but just change either 27 or 28 to k is fine too
00:14:309 (45) - k in case you didn't manage to recover the file
00:16:982 (54) - k for pitch
00:18:764 (61) - ^
00:23:071 (102) and 00:27:824 (145) - k, putting here for reference, I know you rejected the change but it just sounds better to me, and it offers a contrast to places like 00:24:259 (113,114) and 00:29:012 (156,157) where there ARE drums so the d d there makes sense.
Kiai time, I really don't like how you have k on the first beat of each bar. d would make much more sense, as firstly there's bass drums on the first beat of each measure, and secondly the pitch of the synth on those notes are all lower than the notes in the 7-plet stream before. If you accept this suggestion do modify those 7-plets btw, like for 00:32:279 (186,187,188,189,190,191,192) do something like dkkdkkd for example.
00:38:665 - this is how I'd map this part right here, it definitely matches the drums better:
00:39:853 - and this is how I'd map the stream
00:57:230 (322,323,324,325) - dddd? k at the end doesn't match the drums at all
00:57:527 (326,327,328) - perhaps change to kdk so the bell like sfx at 00:57:675 (328) is represented, and 328,332,335,339,344 all as k makes a nice structure
Pitch things again, just small details that you could choose whether to change or not
01:06:735 (368) - k
01:12:378 (390) - k
01:17:873 (414,415) - dk
01:19:804 (427,428) - dk, doesn't exactly match pitch but offers a nice kddkddkddk structure similar to before
01:24:928 - there really should be a note here for the synth imo, for places like 01:24:556 (460,461,462,463,464,465) I wouldn't do a 5-plet + single, I would do a single + 5-plet lol
Other places with the same issue: 01:27:304 - 01:29:680 - 01:34:433 - 01:36:809 -
01:31:091 (525,526,527) - d k d instead for the drums?
01:31:834 (533,534,535,536,537) - kdkkk for pitch, unless you don't want the stream to be too complicated early on
01:38:962 (606,607,608,609,610) - kdkkd works better imo, mainly because 01:39:259 really should be a d as there are clear bass drum sounds there
01:50:695 (674) - d
01:51:438 (679) - k
^ just how I see the pitch again, and I like how the k's are distributed with the two changes above, having more and more k's towards the end there.
Yuri's Inner Oni
Map's pretty good too
00:17:279 (66) - k, to be consistent with 00:07:774 (25)
00:20:546 (86,87) - really don't hear the k sounds here, and I don't think having ddddk two times in a row would be too repetitive, so... ddddk?
00:23:146 (114) - dkd isn't really necessary here I don't think, ddd works good enough
00:28:863 (166) - k for snares
00:30:571 and 00:31:165 - add d for drums (00:30:868 (185) change to d as well unless you really don't like kkddk and think that's too boring lol)
00:32:873 (205) - change to d to stay consistent with this beat in other bars, like 00:31:685 - 00:34:061 - 00:35:249 etc.
00:39:111 (261) - d to match drums
00:55:745 and 00:56:042 and 00:57:824 and 00:58:269 and 00:58:715 - these gaps just feel weird when there's sounds you can map to in the music, like I really want to have the two spots like this:
00:55:299:
00:57:972:
I know you're trying to avoid mapping your Oni exactly like ptar's Oni but sorry man I don't like how you did it, especially the second part, long pauses in the midst of dense patterns are just awkward as hell to me
(and also 00:59:012 should really be a k btw)
01:01:611 (2) - I think d here for kdddk helps accentuate the two k's more, so the the noises you're matching with the k's are more distinct.
01:08:517 (25) - k to match pitch? and also to match 01:10:893 (34) for consistency
01:18:467 - instead of just being two 1/1 k's how about having like a kdkkd here so it sounds less empty?
01:22:626 - I like the doubles, but I would fit them in like this instead:
01:29:383 (56,57) - dk, k would match the snares
01:31:611 (76) - here's an idea: change to d and move to 01:31:759 so you have 3 triplets, it's a more forward moving pulse and would match the drums too.
01:40:373 (156,157) - change to dk, k is a better fit for the cymbal splash imo
01:40:447 - in fact I would do this whole part like this:
01:50:101 (14,15) - delete, would make a nice 3/2 structure that actually starts on the onbeat at 01:49:952 (13) instead of at 01:50:398 like you have it now
00:17:279 (66) - k, to be consistent with 00:07:774 (25)
00:20:546 (86,87) - really don't hear the k sounds here, and I don't think having ddddk two times in a row would be too repetitive, so... ddddk?
00:23:146 (114) - dkd isn't really necessary here I don't think, ddd works good enough
00:28:863 (166) - k for snares
00:30:571 and 00:31:165 - add d for drums (00:30:868 (185) change to d as well unless you really don't like kkddk and think that's too boring lol)
00:32:873 (205) - change to d to stay consistent with this beat in other bars, like 00:31:685 - 00:34:061 - 00:35:249 etc.
00:39:111 (261) - d to match drums
00:55:745 and 00:56:042 and 00:57:824 and 00:58:269 and 00:58:715 - these gaps just feel weird when there's sounds you can map to in the music, like I really want to have the two spots like this:
00:55:299:
00:57:972:
I know you're trying to avoid mapping your Oni exactly like ptar's Oni but sorry man I don't like how you did it, especially the second part, long pauses in the midst of dense patterns are just awkward as hell to me
(and also 00:59:012 should really be a k btw)
01:01:611 (2) - I think d here for kdddk helps accentuate the two k's more, so the the noises you're matching with the k's are more distinct.
01:08:517 (25) - k to match pitch? and also to match 01:10:893 (34) for consistency
01:18:467 - instead of just being two 1/1 k's how about having like a kdkkd here so it sounds less empty?
01:22:626 - I like the doubles, but I would fit them in like this instead:
01:29:383 (56,57) - dk, k would match the snares
01:31:611 (76) - here's an idea: change to d and move to 01:31:759 so you have 3 triplets, it's a more forward moving pulse and would match the drums too.
01:40:373 (156,157) - change to dk, k is a better fit for the cymbal splash imo
01:40:447 - in fact I would do this whole part like this:
01:50:101 (14,15) - delete, would make a nice 3/2 structure that actually starts on the onbeat at 01:49:952 (13) instead of at 01:50:398 like you have it now
Oni
00:09:111 (27,28) - like Inner Oni
00:18:616 (60,61) - ^
00:20:546 (74) - I REALLY don't hear the k here... I mean ddddk for both 5-plets isn't that boring, 2 times repeats are okay in my book
00:23:071 (98) - k for consistency with 00:25:447 (116)
00:27:824 (136) - again k for consistency with 00:30:200 (154), if you change it consider changing 00:27:527 (134) to d so you don't have 3 k's in a row
Kiai time again, this time the k's on the first note of each bar works better than in Inner Oni because you don't have those 7-plets linking them up.
00:36:438 (210) - k kdk is kinda awkward to play, how about k ddk instead? so 210 change to d?
00:38:665 - like Inner Oni, I would match the drums more like this:
01:12:378 (351) - like Inner Oni, k
01:20:398 (386,387) - here's an idea: reverse, so dk, you'll then have kd dd dk, kinda a neat structure
01:31:240 (473) - change to k to match snares
01:32:353 (484,485) - another idea: delete so you have a gap there, personally I think it plays quite nicely
01:39:259 (545) - d to match drums, and also 537,541,546,550 all as k is a nice structure
01:42:230 (575,576,577,578) - kkdd because then you'll have k on every 1/2 (kdkd) k on every 1/1 (kkdd) k on every 2/1 (kkkkd); but mainly because a whole bunch of kdkdkdkd is a bit boring :p
00:18:616 (60,61) - ^
00:20:546 (74) - I REALLY don't hear the k here... I mean ddddk for both 5-plets isn't that boring, 2 times repeats are okay in my book
00:23:071 (98) - k for consistency with 00:25:447 (116)
00:27:824 (136) - again k for consistency with 00:30:200 (154), if you change it consider changing 00:27:527 (134) to d so you don't have 3 k's in a row
Kiai time again, this time the k's on the first note of each bar works better than in Inner Oni because you don't have those 7-plets linking them up.
00:36:438 (210) - k kdk is kinda awkward to play, how about k ddk instead? so 210 change to d?
00:38:665 - like Inner Oni, I would match the drums more like this:
01:12:378 (351) - like Inner Oni, k
01:20:398 (386,387) - here's an idea: reverse, so dk, you'll then have kd dd dk, kinda a neat structure
01:31:240 (473) - change to k to match snares
01:32:353 (484,485) - another idea: delete so you have a gap there, personally I think it plays quite nicely
01:39:259 (545) - d to match drums, and also 537,541,546,550 all as k is a nice structure
01:42:230 (575,576,577,578) - kkdd because then you'll have k on every 1/2 (kdkd) k on every 1/1 (kkdd) k on every 2/1 (kkkkd); but mainly because a whole bunch of kdkdkdkd is a bit boring :p
Light Oni
Pitch change recommendations at the beginning, same as Oni and Inner
00:24:408 - no note here? imo leaving it out is quite awkward as you can clearly add a d here to match the bass drum kick, and it'll be inconsistent with places like 00:29:160 (132). And also I just don't like large gaps.
00:31:388 (148) - k so you have opposite colour with 00:31:537 (149) to make the D slightly more intuitive to play, and it would also follow the high pitch of the synth too
00:38:665 (209) - K please, be consistent with the other times you have k on the 1st beat of each bar lol
00:38:665 (209,210,211,212,213,214,215,216,217,218) - same as Oni
00:56:339 (257,258,259) - I don't really this kdk but I'll let it slide because you might have wanted to have it reflect 00:57:527 (265,266,267) dkd, so it's ok
01:06:438 (294) - delete so this entire section doesn't have any 1/2 pattern longer than 4 long
01:20:398 (346,347) - like Oni, dk for structure perhaps
00:24:408 - no note here? imo leaving it out is quite awkward as you can clearly add a d here to match the bass drum kick, and it'll be inconsistent with places like 00:29:160 (132). And also I just don't like large gaps.
00:31:388 (148) - k so you have opposite colour with 00:31:537 (149) to make the D slightly more intuitive to play, and it would also follow the high pitch of the synth too
00:38:665 (209) - K please, be consistent with the other times you have k on the 1st beat of each bar lol
00:38:665 (209,210,211,212,213,214,215,216,217,218) - same as Oni
00:56:339 (257,258,259) - I don't really this kdk but I'll let it slide because you might have wanted to have it reflect 00:57:527 (265,266,267) dkd, so it's ok
01:06:438 (294) - delete so this entire section doesn't have any 1/2 pattern longer than 4 long
01:20:398 (346,347) - like Oni, dk for structure perhaps
It seems like you have enough mods for Muzu downwards, so I won't touch them anymore than they've already had lol
Good luck with ranking, I really like the set! :3