iiko wrote:

good map

1. Add "LunarSakuya" to tags
2. Iconsistency in Combo colours (If it's on purpose, please explain to me why):
   
   SPOILER

   - [Maximum] 
   Combo1 : 255,128,0 
   Combo2 : 128,0,255 
   Combo3 : 252,14,67  
   
   - [Moderation] 
   Combo1 : 128,0,255 
   Combo2 : 223,0,79 
   Combo3 : 255,128,0  
   
   - [Sakuya's Heavy]
   Combo1 : 255,128,0
   Combo2 : 128,0,255  
   Combo3 : 252,14,67 

3. Oh and I dislike the Stack Legniency of 10. Mostly in Sakuya's Heavy it looks sometimes "ugly" imo .-.

1. 00:27:171 (2,3) - Just as a question, why are they not equal?
2. 00:28:462 (3,4) [Nazi] - Doesn't look well how they overlap... D:
3. 00:50:397 (7) - It feels like there is maybe a hitsound needed, add finish?
4. 01:03:945 (4) - Add whistle?
5. 01:06:526 (4) - ^?
6. 01:09:107 (4) - ^?
7. 01:14:913 (1,2,3) [Nazi] - D: Overlapping looks ugly. Make it like this. (At least it look quite symmetrical... or so...)
8. 01:27:816 (1) - Add clap?
9. 01:44:591 (3) [Nazi] - Move it one to the right... then it is in the middle of 1 and 2 u-u-ltra naziing xD...
10. 01:48:784 (1) - Add finish? It supports the background drum imo
11. 02:03:945 (1) - Add whistle
12. 02:33:623 (1) - Add finish?
13. 02:50:397 (1,2,3,4) - Idk why but the positions of this sliders look... scattered or kind of disarranged :/
14. 03:52:333 (1,2) [Nazi] - uhh... they're not the same ._. Maybe make them being the same? (ctrl+c, ctrl+v, ctrl+r )
    Sorry if it looks a bit picky but... yeah when I see somethign I mention it, lol

1. OD+1?
2. 00:33:945 (2,3) [Nazi] - I mention this right here, when you want to make something 100% symmetrical, copy&past it and then use ctrl+r. These two circles are as an example not symmetrical although they seem to be that.
3. 00:35:558 (7,8) [Nazi] - ^Same
4. 00:41:365 (1) - Add finish?
5. 00:53:623 - Add circle (because of 00:56:204 (7) )
6. 01:29:268 (6,7) [Nazi] - Oh well... non-symmetrical
7. 01:51:042 (2) - I suggest to make two sliders out of this one (instead of the repeats)
   That's all here~ Good hard but you should look at some more points about the symmetrie. I pointed out just a few^^

1. OD+1?
2. 00:15:236 (9,1,2) - I really dislike how 2 is covered by the hit of 9. It's really hard to see while playing IMO D: Please change that
   SPOILER

   
3. 00:23:139 (9,1) - Dis anti-jump, lol...
4. 01:18:945 (1,2) - It looks strange that all circles overlapp in this pattern except this two, please change that
5. 01:22:333 (6) - Maybe move this one to x:364 y:80?
6. 02:41:365 (5) - Idk... I would like this one more if it looked similiar 02:40:074 (1) (from the style)
   That's all here, interesting jumps ~ (although it's sometimes kind of boring when you repeat them :/)

Banana wrote:

Hi~ Banana here from my queue~

Maximum

00:15:478 - pattern suggestion, jump (9) seems more nature to me to start a new section. and it well be nice if you try to make some patterns with following sliders
00:22:010 (6) - you jump this note, and to me, the jump should at (5) for at that time have the same sound with (1), where have a jump. maybe you can use jump at both (5) and (6)
00:22:655 (8) - jump after this repeat slider? for at the end of the slider that sound show up, and be more smooth to me
00:28:784 (2) - imo, your 1/2 sliders curverd too much, here is my [urlhttp://puu.sh/wgG0]suggestion[/url]. you may not fix them in this map for they are ok now, though i think you can pay some attaintion on these issue in your next map XD
00:36:204 (1,2,3,4) - spacing here is increasing, and to me they are not suit the music well, change the place between (2) & (4)? (you may need to move (2,3,4) in next combo if you follow this)
00:38:462 (7,1) - stack these two?
00:50:236 (3) - place this circle right part of the playfield
01:13:784 (7) - jump? in consistancy with (3)
01:21:204 (5) - circle? in consistancy with 01:18:623 (4)
01:36:042 (2) - not stack well with the former (2)
01:42:171 (T) - 45% volume?
01:44:591 (5) - (6) start the music, and i suggest you jump (5)
02:06:526 - break is more than enough around here..
02:52:171 (6) - Ctrl+R? spacing here is small
03:19:752 (1) - spacing here is a bit confusing, suggestion
03:37:978 (5) - same issue as 00:22:010 (6)

Sakuya's Heavy

00:30:074 (2) - place at right top of the playfield?
00:34:268 (3) - spacing after this silder is confusing, for you use jump in this diff., and i suggest you to move (2,3) avay from the middle
00:51:687 (1) - you use soft hitsound here, and i think soft-whistle is not suit the music well, maybe you can use some clap
01:13:300 (4) -how about make these sliders like this
01:24:107 (1) - i prefer stack here
01:51:687 (3) - split this repeat slider to a circle and a repeat slider following? thus the two repeat sliders can cover the same sound
03:12:333 (1) - this stack is not plays well, maybe to use a jump here?
03:50:236 (2) - add a circle?

Moderation

00:50:074 (6,7) - as this is the easist diff. over the mapset, may be use slider would be better
03:09:752 (3) - keep the spacing?

GL~

1. 02:40:074 (1) - This spinner ends at a odd point, I think ends it at 02:43:945 or 02:45:236 would be better
2. 03:54:591 (1) - Why here new combo?

1. 01:11:365 (2) - You need to move this slider make sure it's not totally overlap under 01:10:720 (5)
2. 02:29:107 (4) - This spacing is much different from others in the same combo, I'd suggest use same spacing in a same combo, at least the spacing shouldn't have a huge difference

Breeze wrote:

[Moderation]

1. 02:40:074 (1) - This spinner ends at a odd point, I think ends it at 02:43:945 or 02:45:236 would be better
2. 03:54:591 (1) - Why here new combo?

[Maximum]

1. 01:11:365 (2) - You need to move this slider make sure it's not totally overlap under 01:10:720 (5)
2. 02:29:107 (4) - This spacing is much different from others in the same combo, I'd suggest use same spacing in a same combo, at least the spacing shouldn't have a huge difference

wmfchris wrote:

[General]
- You only used N:C1 in the song but you have NC2 and SC1 custom htisound in the song file. fixed

[Maximum]
00:15:074 (8) - the current one looks odd as the spacing change (7,8,9) is not expected. You may consider putting this at (232,260) to make a symmetrical figure.
00:33:945 (2) - made to be not symmetrical intentionally? You can copy+rotate slider to make (2,3) symetrical.
01:52:978 (2) - finish at the end like 00:40:881 (3) - ?
02:23:300 (1) - Remove NC here because there's no need to notify spacing change and it's still belonging to the last sentence in the music.
03:35:397 (5) - finish at the beginning corresponding to the accent in the music.

fixed all
[Heavy]
00:37:655 (5) - [Nazi] left 1 grid so that (5,6,7) is symmetrical fixed

[Moderation]
"Moderate" is more suitable in the sense that "moderation" is a noun...? thought about it and, guess it works
00:33:300 - sounds missed a note here especially there's an accent in the music fixed

No big problem at all.

Faust wrote:

Congratulations on your first ranked map.