This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Thursday, September 17, 2015 at 8:16:51 PM

Artist: Erio o Kamattechan
Title: os-Uchuujin(Asterisk Makina Remix)
Source: 電波女と青春男
Tags: dnb soundcloud nation works 3 denpa onna to seishun otoko asuka ogame shinsei
BPM: 175
Filesize: 8209kb
Play Time: 05:13
Difficulties Available:

1. Greget - 5Key (3.3 stars, 2691 notes)

Download: Erio o Kamattechan - os-Uchuujin(Asterisk Makina Remix)
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Erio o Kamattechan - os-Uchuujin(Asterisk Makina Remix) Full Version 5k mapset

Vocal : Touwa Erio (CV. Oogame, Asuka)
Title : Os-Uchuujin
Lyrics : Noko
Composition : Noko
Arrangement : Asterisk


handsome mapset

Mod placeholder . . .
i will edit this post soon

Here's my mod

General song setup : fine
Background resoulution : 1366x768 is ok
Tiiming : good
Aimod : no problem appears
Hitsounds (for below 100ms and 5 ms delayed): all fine
Metadata : since this mapset is have a latest ranked one, so i think it's no problem

Pattern Review
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  [Greget]

1. 00:10:482 - add a note, same as you do in interval 00:05:340 - 00:08:082 -
2. 00:11:168 (11168|3,11340|4) - this have 1/4 sound like 00:10:911 (10911|1,10997|0) - pls be consistent, otherwise you delete this 00:10:911 (10911|1) -
3. 00:27:625 (27625|3,27797|4) - and 00:27:968 (27968|0) - that's actually same sound, why different form . . . ?
4. 00:30:368 (30368|4) - LN should start here 00:30:454 - based on music that you followed . . . look at this 00:24:968 -
5. 00:32:940 (32940|4,33025|3,33111|4) - depend on music and pattern flow . . . this is bad at play actually, i've already test that . . . you can re arrange that a little imo . . . :3
6. 00:36:711 (36711|0) - change into single note or 1/4 note only . . . cuz there's no long sound here
7. 00:42:368 (42368|0) - move to 3 to keep the stream flow . . . don't make that retarded
8. 00:43:054 (43054|2) - delete, no need 4 notes push in one time . . . no spesific big sound or impact here
9. 01:00:368 - you put 2 (SN + LN) here . . . . but well, this have a more big sound 00:55:054 - why only 1 LN here ? try consistent
10. 01:08:682 - you've missing a note here . . . don't make this part weird, cuz you followed the same sound here 01:08:425 (68425|1,68511|2,68597|3) -
11. 01:11:682 (71682|1) - what is this ? . . . no sound (at least no piano here) so delete that
12. 01:21:625 - 01:21:797 - 01:21:968 - you hear a piano here ? . . . same as 01:20:940 -
13. 01:22:140 (82140|3) - delete this , no spesific sound here
14. 01:27:111 - again, from here is still have clear piano sound like 01:26:425 -
15. 01:51:625 (111625|4) - move to 1, more fine to play . . . and add 1 LN from here 01:51:968 - after that (for another long sound here)
16. 01:52:654 (112654|4,112654|0,112654|3,112825|0,112825|1,112825|4) - reduce 1 note on that, there is not contains a really big sound here
17. 01:52:997 - nah this need to be 3 notes, add note here . . cuz in this part is exist a big impact for intro to chorus
18. 01:58:311 (118311|2,118311|4) - why 2 notes ? for synth ? . . okay, so what is this ? 01:56:597 - 01:55:225 - 01:55:568 - and so many like that, big synth is only 1 note . . pls consistent . . . . actually the main synth is here 01:58:054 -
19. 02:03:368 (123368|1,123454|2) - delete this, the clap sound is not big as kick sound . . . its too low
20. 02:24:540 - add note here, for cymbal ==> http://puu.sh/joLId/0fe0063bc3.jpg
21. 02:25:911 - same reason as ^ you can also try this ==> http://puu.sh/joLFb/0a71180d80.jpg
22. 02:31:054 - pls add note here, you've missing on here
23. 02:37:397 - missing a sound here . . .
24. 02:39:368 - LN should start here, like 00:24:968 -
25. 02:42:368 (162368|1) - actually same sound as 02:42:025 (162025|4,162197|3) -
26. 02:42:882 - missing a sound here . . .
27. 02:44:854 - LN should start here . . like 00:24:968 -
28. 02:45:454 (165454|1) - LN is ended here 02:45:711 - (you can hear at 25% playback rate for sure) . . . and add note at 02:45:711 - after that
29. 02:48:368 - missing sound here
30. 02:50:340 - LN should start here (same reason as i mentioned in previous mod)
31. 02:52:825 - missing sound here
32. 02:52:997 - add note here, big drum . . . try this ==> http://puu.sh/joMay/7732269a29.jpg
33. 03:23:082 - you've missing here . . . add a note
34. 03:23:168 (203168|4) - i think this LN is unnecessary . . . try to change that to single note only
35. 03:45:797 (225797|2,225797|0,225968|3,225968|1,226140|4,226140|0,226311|3,226311|1,226482|2,226482|0,226654|1,226654|4,226825|0,226825|3) - and afterwards . . . why synth sound is same amount of note instead clap ? . . . i think you need make a different from here . . cuz me, as player is not feel anything of playing this part . . . and pls hear it's even not different from kick invasion on this part 04:01:911 -
    if you want to follow synth, you can try this ==> http://puu.sh/joMvO/483bff1a7f.jpg (you can do like that in afterwards too) use synth as 2 note and clap is 1 note . . . to make a different from kick invasion on this 04:01:911 -
    
36. start here 04:07:740 - until 04:17:682 - you can use 2 notes of synth and 1 notes for kick . . .to avoid boring, you need a improvisation . . . COME ON this is 5 minutes of map . . why you always put 1 2 1 2 1 2 kick continuously (it's too damn boring for marathon maps XD) . . .
    start 04:07:740 - try this ==> http://puu.sh/joMTq/f6d1336226.jpg
    
37. 04:18:368 - nah after following above . . this is be finest to follow kick hat on here, so the player get different feeling in playing this map (and not get's bored)
38. you can also can make a improvisation for every sound in this mapset, mix with synth or kick is awesome too . . . actually this music can be imrove so much in every way of pattern form

that's all from me . . .
actually this mapset is need more work
5 minutes of mapset uhh . . . Good luck !

Hi Frim~!
Here's my Mod, for M4M


[] doesn't work? ( or am I doing something wrong that I don't know? )
anyway, good luck with your map!
here's my map -> https://osu.ppy.sh/s/335318

EDIT

oh it's about the preview xD silly me

Hi Frim~

For M4M, here's my mod as requested~

Column 1|2|3|4|5

Nice map! GO RANK!~

thank you for mod from you two, i get what youre trying to tell me. but for heavy sound i'm only use 1 note is on purpouse, i dont want make this map too hard

Hi Frim!
here's my M4M

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[Greget]
- 00:03:282 (3282|1) - move to 1 for more balance pattern and also for comfortability (00:02:768 (2768|1,3025|1,3282|1) - might be too hard)
- 00:54:025 - until 00:54:368 - i suggest to ctrl + h the pattern for left-right-left flow and also to balance the left and right hand for 00:54:368 (54368|2,54368|4) - with 00:55:397 (55397|4,55397|1) -
- 01:42:025 (102025|2) - move to 1 for balance and comfortability for that special keys (01:41:682 (101682|2,102025|2) - )
- 02:09:197 (129197|4) - i think this note should be here at 02:09:282 - if you follow the sound like 02:09:025 (129025|1) -
- 04:27:968 - until here 04:28:268 (268268|3) - ctrl + h also the pattern for the balance also.... w8 (the structure seems weird, you can just ignore this) lol xD

that's all i can find, really nice pattern =w=)b
Good Luck for this!!! star *
we need more 5k marathon maps /me run

fix all from avalon and fix all from soragami expect the last

Hi! From cute queue :3
1|2|3|4|5

Hope this helpful
Nice map, good luck

fix some, thanks for mod

Hi! From M4M. This is my map for M4M

Layout:

5k: |0|1|2|3|4|

That's all!

_Xenophilius_ wrote:

Hi! From M4M. This is my map for M4M

Layout:

5k: |0|1|2|3|4|

Greget

1. 00:45:797 - Maybe add a note for piano? no thanks. i already make difference by placing it in col.4
2. 00:47:168 - Same ^ ^
3. 01:51:625 - What about adding a note here? ok
4. 01:52:997 - I think that this can't be 3 notes because it's not more loud than for impact
   01:52:654 (112654|3,112654|4,112825|1,112825|0) - I suggest to delete 1 note why ?
5. 02:37:482 (157482|3,157568|3) - 02:48:368 (168368|2,168454|3,168540|3,168540|4) - Why you jacked here? I suggest to remove the jack. Maybe by moving 02:37:568 (157568|3,157740|2,157911|1) - By ctrl + Right arrow and 02:37:568 (157568|4) - to 2 ok
6. 04:27:968 - Add 2 notes like in 04:27:282 - and 04:26:597 - ? difference sound
7. 04:56:597 - Here you can use a LN like those 04:56:254 (296254|1,296940|2) -make not same on purpouse

That's all!

thanks for mod
will mod your map soon

m4m owo)/

[Greget]
no kiai? there's chorus part in this song.. _w_

probably you want to find some quiet hitsound to replace normal-hitnormal2.wav, the default one is too loud.. like really

00:34:140 (34140|2) - to 5, make anchor like 00:34:482 (34482|4) -
00:37:054 - missing synth

01:36:111 (96111|4,96197|2,96368|1,96368|0,96540|3,96540|4) - http://puu.sh/jr0PU.png the blue marked layers the synthesizer

01:50:940 (110940|4) - add something here, there's same sound in previous downbeat at 01:50:254 (110254|0) -

01:52:997 (112997|4) - in this phase until 02:08:768 (128768|4) - i feel the kick-bass-kick-bass layering is too much.. er.. not-so-variative, i highly suggest you to layer / emphasize the main beat / synthesizer like http://puu.sh/jr1LV.png ~ 01:54:540 (114540|2,114882|3,115054|4,115225|2,115397|4,115568|3) - http://puu.sh/jr1Rv.png ..
for me, its like you just missed to layer the main / primary sound to map, yet you map the secondary sound instead..

02:12:882 (132882|2) - add something here, there's same sound in previous downbeat at 02:12:197 (132197|1) -

02:37:568 (157568|2) - to 1, make anchor like 02:37:911 (157911|0) -

02:48:197 (168197|3,168197|1,168368|2,168454|3,168540|4,168540|3,168711|2,168882|1) - http://puu.sh/jr27K.png
else if you want to keep the jack, 02:48:454 (168454|3) - move to 3, this notes has same pitch to be jack-d

02:51:968 (171968|4) - you can reduce this ln until 02:52:140 -

02:53:340 (173340|1) - in this phase until 02:57:454 (177454|3) - o~o i understand you layer the clap & the bass kick only, but again, i feel its like you just missed to layer the main / primary sound to map, yet you map the secondary sound instead.. consider to layer the 1/4

03:04:140 (184140|2) - add one for clap

03:50:254 (230254|0,230254|2,230511|4,230597|1,230597|3,230768|2) - like 01:36:111 (96111|4,96197|2,96368|1,96368|0,96540|3,96540|4) - http://puu.sh/jr0PU.png but you can ctrl + h these

04:01:482 (241482|2,241482|0,241568|3,241568|1,241740|4,241740|2) - http://puu.sh/jr2zw.png imo this more fit to the beat

04:07:397 (247397|4) - until 04:23:168 (263168|4) - same problem like 01:52:997 (112997|4) - in this phase until 02:08:768 (128768|4) -

04:28:182 (268182|1,268268|3) - ghost

04:54:025 (294025|2,294025|1,294368|3,294368|2) - move 1 column to left, to remove the jack before 04:54:540 (294540|3) -

04:55:054 (295054|3) - to 1
04:55:397 (295397|0) - to 5
04:55:740 (295740|3) - to 2
04:56:082 (296082|1) - to 1
same reason above..

and so on until the end~

ok

fix all with some selfmod
(i konw what you're trying to tell me)

yuss.. thanks for the cooperation.. here's some star for ya!

i will fix this
04:07:397 (247397|4) - until 04:23:168 (263168|4) - same problem like 01:52:997 (112997|4) - in this phase until 02:08:768 (128768|4) -
later

Hi, here is my mod as requested:


Well, ga banyak, moga2 ini membantu

GL ^^

thank you for mod
fix all

Hi!
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Tornspirit wrote:

Hi! For m4m
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Greget

00:30:025 (30025|4) - I think this note should be a LN no. the sound stop right away
00:31:054 (31054|2) - Same ^ ^
00:35:511 (35511|4) - ^ ^
01:03:111 (63111|2) - Maybe move to 5? keep. for balance

I think this makes more sense than the current pattern
01:36:025 - add 2
01:36:197 (96197|2) - remove
01:36:282 - add 2 or 3
01:36:454 - add 3
^reject all. what sound you follow ?
01:47:082 (107082|2,107082|4,107168|3,107168|1,107340|1,107340|3) - Maybe use same pattern as 04:01:397 (241397|3,241397|1,241482|0,241482|2,241654|3,241654|1,241740|2,241740|4) - maybe it sound same it's obvious not

01:51:882 - add 4 for drum no drum sound

01:58:054 (118054|4,118054|2,118140|1,118140|3) - move back 1/4th to start at 01:57:968 fix
01:58:225 - add 1+3 fix
01:58:311 (118311|2,118311|0) - change to 2+4
01:58:397 - add 1+3

02:08:940 - add 4
02:09:197 - add 5
02:09:282 (129282|4) - move 3
02:09:368 - add 5

03:04:140 (184140|2,184140|3) - Not sure if this should be double... keep consistent with 04:34:654 (274654|0) - it's obvious difference sound :v. the first is clap(double) the after is hithat (single)

04:12:454 (252454|2,252454|3,252540|1,252540|0) - Move back 1/4th to start at 04:12:368
04:12:625 - add 2+4
04:12:711 (252711|1) - move to 3
04:12:797 - add 2+4

04:23:340 - add 2
04:23:597 - add 4
04:23:682 (263682|3) - move 5
04:23:768 - add 4

04:34:654 (274654|0) - If you're keeping 03:04:140 (184140|2,184140|3) - as double, change this to double as well

thanks for mod. other are ok

Language : English

Hi Juna

Mod Via PM

fix all but...

OD and HP keep for now
00:50:082 (50082|0) - you put jack pattern for low stream beat, but you not put in other red tick idk where to put it
01:50:254 - 01:51:625 - oh my.. too hard keep for now
02:30:711 (150711|4) - ??? idk know waht sound it is



thanks for mod

From the modding plaza o/
Interesting mapping style. Many people would've made this map way more difficult, with trills and whatnot.
Also, you could easily push up the *rating, by charting the unused sounds in the song, perhaps consider adding a diff spread?

General
Greget
Very short mod, since it plays really well! And I'm lazy

Hola

Sorry for long delay

Just suggestion here

5K = |1|2|3|4|5|

Cute BG. >,<)/
Well Good luck =w=)b

Han Solo wrote:

Mod level: Light

From the modding plaza o/
Interesting mapping style. Many people would've made this map way more difficult, with trills and whatnot.
Also, you could easily push up the *rating, by charting the unused sounds in the song, perhaps consider adding a diff spread?

General

1. Timing: Totally rad
2. Sound: Awesomesauce
3. SV-changes: Subtle, but nice <3
4. Metadata: Seems ok

Greget

1. 00:11:682 (11682|3,11854|0,12025|3,12197|0), etc - Alternate this a bit more keep. i like the current pattern
2. 00:14:425 (14425|0,14597|4) - ^ ^
3. 04:27:968 (267968|4) - Uhm, what? Why the 1/8's? it's 1/8. try listen it at 50% playback
4. 04:51:454 (291454|1) - Very nice! Like these LN's! thank you >.<

Very short mod, since it plays really well! And I'm lazy

idk what are you trying to do but thank you for mod.
about adding spread, i'm not going do that cuz it's 5 min song and i want to keep this map easy like my other map. so, many people can enjoy this

-[ AmiShici ]- wrote:

Hola

Sorry for long delay

Just suggestion here

5K = |1|2|3|4|5|

Click me!

[Greget]00:02:768 (2768|2,2768|1) - ini knp double? perasaan ngga ada drum/kick cuman ada clap sama synth? ada drum tapi samar"
00:05:511 (5511|0,5511|2) - ini jg. malah suaranya kayak ini 00:06:197 (6197|2,6882|4) - ^
00:08:254 (8254|2,8254|3) - ini jg dst ^
01:00:540 - missing? fix
01:11:511 (71511|4,71682|1) - ini ganti ke LN sama kayak ini 01:13:911 (73911|3) - ? ada 2 suara piano. ga kaya yg satunya ada 1 suara piano tpi panjang
01:19:397 (79397|0,79568|3,79740|1,79911|4) - ctrl + H? pitch turun ok
01:42:197 - add note? ada bass kek 01:42:540 (102540|4,102540|3,102882|4,102882|3,103225|4,103225|3) - . kalo kata ane mending part bas ini dijadiin 1/2 LN biar asik dimainin. but terserah cuman suggest :3 conside for now
04:06:025 (246025|4,246197|3) - swap colomb? karna ini beda pitchnya lho ok

Cute BG. >,<)/i know what you mean >.<
Well Good luck =w=)b

thank you for mod

Hi~ From my queue
Not much. But I hope it helps


Good Luck :3