This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Thursday, September 17, 2015 at 8:16:51 PM

Artist: Erio o Kamattechan
Title: os-Uchuujin(Asterisk Makina Remix)
Source: 電波女と青春男
Tags: dnb soundcloud nation works 3 denpa onna to seishun otoko asuka ogame shinsei
BPM: 175
Filesize: 8209kb
Play Time: 05:13
Difficulties Available:

1. Greget - 5Key (3.3 stars, 2691 notes)

Download: Erio o Kamattechan - os-Uchuujin(Asterisk Makina Remix)
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My 2nd Ranked Map

Erio o Kamattechan - os-Uchuujin(Asterisk Makina Remix) Full Version 5k mapset

Vocal : Touwa Erio (CV. Oogame, Asuka)
Title : Os-Uchuujin
Lyrics : Noko
Composition : Noko
Arrangement : Asterisk


handsome mapset

Mod placeholder . . .
i will edit this post soon

Here's my mod

General song setup : fine
Background resoulution : 1366x768 is ok
Tiiming : good
Aimod : no problem appears
Hitsounds (for below 100ms and 5 ms delayed): all fine
Metadata : since this mapset is have a latest ranked one, so i think it's no problem

Pattern Review
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  [Greget]

1. 00:10:482 - add a note, same as you do in interval 00:05:340 - 00:08:082 -
2. 00:11:168 (11168|3,11340|4) - this have 1/4 sound like 00:10:911 (10911|1,10997|0) - pls be consistent, otherwise you delete this 00:10:911 (10911|1) -
3. 00:27:625 (27625|3,27797|4) - and 00:27:968 (27968|0) - that's actually same sound, why different form . . . ?
4. 00:30:368 (30368|4) - LN should start here 00:30:454 - based on music that you followed . . . look at this 00:24:968 -
5. 00:32:940 (32940|4,33025|3,33111|4) - depend on music and pattern flow . . . this is bad at play actually, i've already test that . . . you can re arrange that a little imo . . . :3
6. 00:36:711 (36711|0) - change into single note or 1/4 note only . . . cuz there's no long sound here
7. 00:42:368 (42368|0) - move to 3 to keep the stream flow . . . don't make that retarded
8. 00:43:054 (43054|2) - delete, no need 4 notes push in one time . . . no spesific big sound or impact here
9. 01:00:368 - you put 2 (SN + LN) here . . . . but well, this have a more big sound 00:55:054 - why only 1 LN here ? try consistent
10. 01:08:682 - you've missing a note here . . . don't make this part weird, cuz you followed the same sound here 01:08:425 (68425|1,68511|2,68597|3) -
11. 01:11:682 (71682|1) - what is this ? . . . no sound (at least no piano here) so delete that
12. 01:21:625 - 01:21:797 - 01:21:968 - you hear a piano here ? . . . same as 01:20:940 -
13. 01:22:140 (82140|3) - delete this , no spesific sound here
14. 01:27:111 - again, from here is still have clear piano sound like 01:26:425 -
15. 01:51:625 (111625|4) - move to 1, more fine to play . . . and add 1 LN from here 01:51:968 - after that (for another long sound here)
16. 01:52:654 (112654|4,112654|0,112654|3,112825|0,112825|1,112825|4) - reduce 1 note on that, there is not contains a really big sound here
17. 01:52:997 - nah this need to be 3 notes, add note here . . cuz in this part is exist a big impact for intro to chorus
18. 01:58:311 (118311|2,118311|4) - why 2 notes ? for synth ? . . okay, so what is this ? 01:56:597 - 01:55:225 - 01:55:568 - and so many like that, big synth is only 1 note . . pls consistent . . . . actually the main synth is here 01:58:054 -
19. 02:03:368 (123368|1,123454|2) - delete this, the clap sound is not big as kick sound . . . its too low
20. 02:24:540 - add note here, for cymbal ==> http://puu.sh/joLId/0fe0063bc3.jpg
21. 02:25:911 - same reason as ^ you can also try this ==> http://puu.sh/joLFb/0a71180d80.jpg
22. 02:31:054 - pls add note here, you've missing on here
23. 02:37:397 - missing a sound here . . .
24. 02:39:368 - LN should start here, like 00:24:968 -
25. 02:42:368 (162368|1) - actually same sound as 02:42:025 (162025|4,162197|3) -
26. 02:42:882 - missing a sound here . . .
27. 02:44:854 - LN should start here . . like 00:24:968 -
28. 02:45:454 (165454|1) - LN is ended here 02:45:711 - (you can hear at 25% playback rate for sure) . . . and add note at 02:45:711 - after that
29. 02:48:368 - missing sound here
30. 02:50:340 - LN should start here (same reason as i mentioned in previous mod)
31. 02:52:825 - missing sound here
32. 02:52:997 - add note here, big drum . . . try this ==> http://puu.sh/joMay/7732269a29.jpg
33. 03:23:082 - you've missing here . . . add a note
34. 03:23:168 (203168|4) - i think this LN is unnecessary . . . try to change that to single note only
35. 03:45:797 (225797|2,225797|0,225968|3,225968|1,226140|4,226140|0,226311|3,226311|1,226482|2,226482|0,226654|1,226654|4,226825|0,226825|3) - and afterwards . . . why synth sound is same amount of note instead clap ? . . . i think you need make a different from here . . cuz me, as player is not feel anything of playing this part . . . and pls hear it's even not different from kick invasion on this part 04:01:911 -
    if you want to follow synth, you can try this ==> http://puu.sh/joMvO/483bff1a7f.jpg (you can do like that in afterwards too) use synth as 2 note and clap is 1 note . . . to make a different from kick invasion on this 04:01:911 -
    
36. start here 04:07:740 - until 04:17:682 - you can use 2 notes of synth and 1 notes for kick . . .to avoid boring, you need a improvisation . . . COME ON this is 5 minutes of map . . why you always put 1 2 1 2 1 2 kick continuously (it's too damn boring for marathon maps XD) . . .
    start 04:07:740 - try this ==> http://puu.sh/joMTq/f6d1336226.jpg
    
37. 04:18:368 - nah after following above . . this is be finest to follow kick hat on here, so the player get different feeling in playing this map (and not get's bored)
38. you can also can make a improvisation for every sound in this mapset, mix with synth or kick is awesome too . . . actually this music can be imrove so much in every way of pattern form

that's all from me . . .
actually this mapset is need more work
5 minutes of mapset uhh . . . Good luck !

Hi Frim~!
Here's my Mod, for M4M


[] doesn't work? ( or am I doing something wrong that I don't know? )
anyway, good luck with your map!
here's my map -> https://osu.ppy.sh/s/335318

EDIT

oh it's about the preview xD silly me

Hi Frim~

For M4M, here's my mod as requested~

Column 1|2|3|4|5

Nice map! GO RANK!~

thank you for mod from you two, i get what youre trying to tell me. but for heavy sound i'm only use 1 note is on purpouse, i dont want make this map too hard

Hi Frim!
here's my M4M

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[Greget]
- 00:03:282 (3282|1) - move to 1 for more balance pattern and also for comfortability (00:02:768 (2768|1,3025|1,3282|1) - might be too hard)
- 00:54:025 - until 00:54:368 - i suggest to ctrl + h the pattern for left-right-left flow and also to balance the left and right hand for 00:54:368 (54368|2,54368|4) - with 00:55:397 (55397|4,55397|1) -
- 01:42:025 (102025|2) - move to 1 for balance and comfortability for that special keys (01:41:682 (101682|2,102025|2) - )
- 02:09:197 (129197|4) - i think this note should be here at 02:09:282 - if you follow the sound like 02:09:025 (129025|1) -
- 04:27:968 - until here 04:28:268 (268268|3) - ctrl + h also the pattern for the balance also.... w8 (the structure seems weird, you can just ignore this) lol xD

that's all i can find, really nice pattern =w=)b
Good Luck for this!!! star *
we need more 5k marathon maps /me run

fix all from avalon and fix all from soragami expect the last

Hi! From cute queue :3
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Hope this helpful
Nice map, good luck

fix some, thanks for mod

Hi! From M4M. This is my map for M4M

Layout:

5k: |0|1|2|3|4|

That's all!

_Xenophilius_ wrote:

Hi! From M4M. This is my map for M4M

Layout:

5k: |0|1|2|3|4|

Greget

1. 00:45:797 - Maybe add a note for piano? no thanks. i already make difference by placing it in col.4
2. 00:47:168 - Same ^ ^
3. 01:51:625 - What about adding a note here? ok
4. 01:52:997 - I think that this can't be 3 notes because it's not more loud than for impact
   01:52:654 (112654|3,112654|4,112825|1,112825|0) - I suggest to delete 1 note why ?
5. 02:37:482 (157482|3,157568|3) - 02:48:368 (168368|2,168454|3,168540|3,168540|4) - Why you jacked here? I suggest to remove the jack. Maybe by moving 02:37:568 (157568|3,157740|2,157911|1) - By ctrl + Right arrow and 02:37:568 (157568|4) - to 2 ok
6. 04:27:968 - Add 2 notes like in 04:27:282 - and 04:26:597 - ? difference sound
7. 04:56:597 - Here you can use a LN like those 04:56:254 (296254|1,296940|2) -make not same on purpouse

That's all!

thanks for mod
will mod your map soon

m4m owo)/

[Greget]
no kiai? there's chorus part in this song.. _w_

probably you want to find some quiet hitsound to replace normal-hitnormal2.wav, the default one is too loud.. like really

00:34:140 (34140|2) - to 5, make anchor like 00:34:482 (34482|4) -
00:37:054 - missing synth

01:36:111 (96111|4,96197|2,96368|1,96368|0,96540|3,96540|4) - http://puu.sh/jr0PU.png the blue marked layers the synthesizer

01:50:940 (110940|4) - add something here, there's same sound in previous downbeat at 01:50:254 (110254|0) -

01:52:997 (112997|4) - in this phase until 02:08:768 (128768|4) - i feel the kick-bass-kick-bass layering is too much.. er.. not-so-variative, i highly suggest you to layer / emphasize the main beat / synthesizer like http://puu.sh/jr1LV.png ~ 01:54:540 (114540|2,114882|3,115054|4,115225|2,115397|4,115568|3) - http://puu.sh/jr1Rv.png ..
for me, its like you just missed to layer the main / primary sound to map, yet you map the secondary sound instead..

02:12:882 (132882|2) - add something here, there's same sound in previous downbeat at 02:12:197 (132197|1) -

02:37:568 (157568|2) - to 1, make anchor like 02:37:911 (157911|0) -

02:48:197 (168197|3,168197|1,168368|2,168454|3,168540|4,168540|3,168711|2,168882|1) - http://puu.sh/jr27K.png
else if you want to keep the jack, 02:48:454 (168454|3) - move to 3, this notes has same pitch to be jack-d

02:51:968 (171968|4) - you can reduce this ln until 02:52:140 -

02:53:340 (173340|1) - in this phase until 02:57:454 (177454|3) - o~o i understand you layer the clap & the bass kick only, but again, i feel its like you just missed to layer the main / primary sound to map, yet you map the secondary sound instead.. consider to layer the 1/4

03:04:140 (184140|2) - add one for clap

03:50:254 (230254|0,230254|2,230511|4,230597|1,230597|3,230768|2) - like 01:36:111 (96111|4,96197|2,96368|1,96368|0,96540|3,96540|4) - http://puu.sh/jr0PU.png but you can ctrl + h these

04:01:482 (241482|2,241482|0,241568|3,241568|1,241740|4,241740|2) - http://puu.sh/jr2zw.png imo this more fit to the beat

04:07:397 (247397|4) - until 04:23:168 (263168|4) - same problem like 01:52:997 (112997|4) - in this phase until 02:08:768 (128768|4) -

04:28:182 (268182|1,268268|3) - ghost

04:54:025 (294025|2,294025|1,294368|3,294368|2) - move 1 column to left, to remove the jack before 04:54:540 (294540|3) -

04:55:054 (295054|3) - to 1
04:55:397 (295397|0) - to 5
04:55:740 (295740|3) - to 2
04:56:082 (296082|1) - to 1
same reason above..

and so on until the end~

ok

fix all with some selfmod
(i konw what you're trying to tell me)

yuss.. thanks for the cooperation.. here's some star for ya!

i will fix this
04:07:397 (247397|4) - until 04:23:168 (263168|4) - same problem like 01:52:997 (112997|4) - in this phase until 02:08:768 (128768|4) -
later

Hi, here is my mod as requested:


Well, ga banyak, moga2 ini membantu

GL ^^

thank you for mod
fix all

Hi!
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Tornspirit wrote:

Hi! For m4m
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Greget

00:30:025 (30025|4) - I think this note should be a LN no. the sound stop right away
00:31:054 (31054|2) - Same ^ ^
00:35:511 (35511|4) - ^ ^
01:03:111 (63111|2) - Maybe move to 5? keep. for balance

I think this makes more sense than the current pattern
01:36:025 - add 2
01:36:197 (96197|2) - remove
01:36:282 - add 2 or 3
01:36:454 - add 3
^reject all. what sound you follow ?
01:47:082 (107082|2,107082|4,107168|3,107168|1,107340|1,107340|3) - Maybe use same pattern as 04:01:397 (241397|3,241397|1,241482|0,241482|2,241654|3,241654|1,241740|2,241740|4) - maybe it sound same it's obvious not

01:51:882 - add 4 for drum no drum sound

01:58:054 (118054|4,118054|2,118140|1,118140|3) - move back 1/4th to start at 01:57:968 fix
01:58:225 - add 1+3 fix
01:58:311 (118311|2,118311|0) - change to 2+4
01:58:397 - add 1+3

02:08:940 - add 4
02:09:197 - add 5
02:09:282 (129282|4) - move 3
02:09:368 - add 5

03:04:140 (184140|2,184140|3) - Not sure if this should be double... keep consistent with 04:34:654 (274654|0) - it's obvious difference sound :v. the first is clap(double) the after is hithat (single)

04:12:454 (252454|2,252454|3,252540|1,252540|0) - Move back 1/4th to start at 04:12:368
04:12:625 - add 2+4
04:12:711 (252711|1) - move to 3
04:12:797 - add 2+4

04:23:340 - add 2
04:23:597 - add 4
04:23:682 (263682|3) - move 5
04:23:768 - add 4

04:34:654 (274654|0) - If you're keeping 03:04:140 (184140|2,184140|3) - as double, change this to double as well

thanks for mod. other are ok

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