This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2014년 8월 26일 화요일 at 오전 7:07:30

Artist: Hatsuki Yura
Title: Yoiyami Hanabi
Tags: fox Nakamura Yuri [Nakamura Yuri] Serena-
BPM: 115
Filesize: 11246kb
Play Time: 05:01
Difficulties Available:

1. Twilight (7.24 stars, 1182 notes)

Download: Hatsuki Yura - Yoiyami Hanabi
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Ranked #02
✦
葉月ゆら
✦
宵闇花火


☄ Storyboard by Serena-

● Twilight by Spectator

♥ Nominated by Krah / Minato Yukina / Deif

Star

yaoiyami

아싸

05:01:426 (1) - I know the purpose of that note, but it can be approved even without it, since the spinner ends in ~5:01. Also it's silent and therefore unrankable, so better remove it.

I'm taking a look at the timing of the last notes. It cannot be always 115 placed in random offsets :p

Gimme a few minutes and I'll find the timing there!

Who made that sb

Timorisu wrote:

Who made that sb

made by Serena- (well, it's wip now)

omg

Still working on the storyboard, my second storyboarding so don't expect so much xDD
also my first using sgl

Hope it will look nice

So... This is what I got. Should be accurate enough, but get it controlled by someone else just in case. As said via IRC, the 1st offset is perfect, so it shouldn't be touched:

• 1. Offset: -246ms - BPM: 115,00
  2. Offset: 294.535ms - BPM: 107,50
  3. Offset: 295.093ms - BPM: 100,00
  4. Offset: 295.693ms - BPM: 94,50
  5. Offset: 296.010ms - BPM: 89,00
  6. Offset: 296.347ms - BPM: 74,00
  7. Offset: 296.752ms - BPM: 67,00
  8. Offset: 297.199ms - BPM: 59,00
  9. Offset: 297.707ms - BPM: 45,00

The last spinner sounds good from 04:58:595 - (1/6 tick) till 05:01:373 - (1/4 tick).

Deif wrote:

So... This is what I got. Should be accurate enough, but get it controlled by someone else just in case. As said via IRC, the 1st offset is perfect, so it shouldn't be touched:

• 1. Offset: -246ms - BPM: 115,00
  2. Offset: 294.535ms - BPM: 107,50
  3. Offset: 295.093ms - BPM: 100,00
  4. Offset: 295.693ms - BPM: 94,50
  5. Offset: 296.010ms - BPM: 89,00
  6. Offset: 296.347ms - BPM: 74,00
  7. Offset: 296.752ms - BPM: 67,00
  8. Offset: 297.199ms - BPM: 59,00
  9. Offset: 297.707ms - BPM: 45,00

The last spinner sounds good from 04:58:595 - (1/6 tick) till 05:01:373 - (1/4 tick).

It works perfectly
thank you a lot!

sorry about double posting (posted by my fault ;w;)

updated new diff name and timing!

Mod requested. o/

[Hanabi]

I can't play chained jumps very well but I try my best.

I don't think offset can be minus. Or at least I needed to remove on my mapset too. 1840 seems fine enough to use it. You can still map before the first timing point anyways.Nvm, I saw what Deif said.

00:25:318 (3,4,1) - Its kinda hard to reach (1) after that HDash to (3). Equal distance or Hdash between (4,1) would be better.
00:27:926 (1,2) - I know you followed the music with this HDash but having it at 00:27:840 (8,1) feels better since there is a strong drum.
00:32:622 (3,4) - I think you should remove (4) and just make (3) a slider which ends at 00:32:884. Or just two circle but making (4) into a slider feels a bit overmapped since it follows nothing.
00:34:970 (4) - It would be good if there was a HDash at 00:35:232. There is a strong cymbal sound which makes it possible.
01:18:797 (3) - Just use a circle here please. It gives better feeling and this slider is follows nothing which can't be done with a circle.
01:22:971 (3) - ^
01:30:449 (9,1) - Jump here too would be good.
01:31:058 (3) - How about separating them into two circle with a jump between them? The end and the tail is following two different word from the vocal now.
01:35:493 (8,1,2,3,4) - This part seems a bit overmapped but that is just because you started it wrongly. I would like to separate (8) into a circle at 01:35:493 and a slider from 01:35:754 merging with (1) (ends at 01:36:014). (1) is seems to following nothing loud currently just a small drum at 01:36:014. This can be covered with a slider as I suggested and gives better intro for your 1/6 sliders.
01:47:493 (4,5) - How about mapping this the same way as 01:46:971 (2,3)?
02:00:536 (6) - Simple circle?
02:09:406 (2,3,4,5) - This pattern fit nicely into this song. Try to use more of this kind of jump please. q.q
02:21:667 - 02:39:927 - I think this part should be a bit more calm and just a few HDash is used. This is after the first kiai and the song sound a bit calm too at this part and since you doesn't have breaks which should be considered I think this calm part should be used as a resting place.
03:17:754 (7) - It would be good if you can add a HDash to 03:18:014. Its the start of the kiai And there is a strong cymbal sound too.

I see a clear difference is our mapping style on this song so I won't touch it more than this (and I can't test it properly either). I hope it is still helpful enough. o.o

Good luck and star because of the very nice song. Too bad I can't play your style. q.q

Kurokami wrote:

Mod requested. o/ \o

[Hanabi Twilight]


I can't play chained jumps very well but I try my best.

I don't think offset can be minus. Or at least I needed to remove on my mapset too. 1840 seems fine enough to use it. You can still map before the first timing point anyways.Nvm, I saw what Deif said.

00:25:318 (3,4,1) - Its kinda hard to reach (1) after that HDash to (3). Equal distance or Hdash between (4,1) would be better. fixed (equal distance)
00:27:926 (1,2) - I know you followed the music with this HDash but having it at 00:27:840 (8,1) feels better since there is a strong drum. not gonna fix this.. sorry
00:32:622 (3,4) - I think you should remove (4) and just make (3) a slider which ends at 00:32:884. Or just two circle but making (4) into a slider feels a bit overmapped since it follows nothing. fixed
00:34:970 (4) - It would be good if there was a HDash at 00:35:232. There is a strong cymbal sound which makes it possible. added
01:18:797 (3) - Just use a circle here please. It gives better feeling and this slider is follows nothing which can't be done with a circle. added reverse arrow on 01:18:275 (2)
01:22:971 (3) - ^ Imo this kind of sliders fit well with the vocal sound. So I'll keep this slider, sorry :l
01:30:449 (9,1) - Jump here too would be good. thank you!
01:31:058 (3) - How about separating them into two circle with a jump between them? The end and the tail is following two different word from the vocal now. Not a bad idea, but it was pretty awkward when I played this part with separated circles. I'm sorry, but no change here
01:35:493 (8,1,2,3,4) - This part seems a bit overmapped but that is just because you started it wrongly. I would like to separate (8) into a circle at 01:35:493 and a slider from 01:35:754 merging with (1) (ends at 01:36:014). (1) is seems to following nothing loud currently just a small drum at 01:36:014. This can be covered with a slider as I suggested and gives better intro for your 1/6 sliders. I'm really sorry, but I can't understand this lol, could you explain more about this with picture at a later time?
01:47:493 (4,5) - How about mapping this the same way as 01:46:971 (2,3)? If I do this, it feels weird and it does not fit well with the song
02:00:536 (6) - Simple circle? no change, sorry
02:09:406 (2,3,4,5) - This pattern fit nicely into this song. Try to use more of this kind of jump please. q.q I see
02:21:667 - 02:39:927 - I think this part should be a bit more calm and just a few HDash is used. This is after the first kiai and the song sound a bit calm too at this part and since you doesn't have breaks which should be considered I think this calm part should be used as a resting place. fixed, remove some of hdashes and jumps~
03:17:754 (7) - It would be good if you can add a HDash to 03:18:014. Its the start of the kiai And there is a strong cymbal sound too. added

I see a clear difference is our mapping style on this song so I won't touch it more than this (and I can't test it properly either). I hope it is still helpful enough. o.o

Good luck and star because of the very nice song. Too bad I can't play your style. q.q O_Q

thank you for the mod!

Hi Spec ~ Nice song btw, i really love traditional music Japanese such as this :3
As requested here






i should shoot my star because this map too awesome for me
Good Luck

Xinely wrote:

Hi Spec ~ Nice song btw, i really love traditional music Japanese such as this :3
As requested here

• 
  General

1. the size of BG is really big. you can reduce the size with change png to jpg. i made one for you here (around 400 kb only) http://puu.sh/aeW1P/a866b7a378.jpg
2. Audio lead in too fast. don't have any time to preparation. use 1000 or 1500 better

• 
  SB

1. 03:51:406 - the white flash seems inconsistent with others have, but the flash is too fast for me, you should give at least 1/2 gap to fade out the flash here
2. The flowers when falling down at kiai are nice but kinda boring since they are all have same size, make some of them smaller, example i mean like http://puu.sh/ag2yp/24a7b1915a.jpg , nicer to see :p

• 
  Twilight

1. 00:03:840 (1) - i don't hear any music at this time. i guess this is overmapped but it makes sense ;w;
2. 00:08:622 (3) - x: 420 for more movement to more fun to play? fixed
3. 00:12:274 (1) - HDash doesn't make sense with music here. x: 392 and then 00:12:535 (2) - x:252 if you agree before agree!
4. 00:18:274 (6) - x:340? the HDash is a little bit hard to catch imo moved to the x:415
5. 00:18:535 (1) - use default finish at head here (change S:C1 to S) with 75% volume, better to emphasize the crash cymbal fixed
6. 00:45:667 (1) - use default finish at head. i heard cymbal added
7. 00:50:884 (1) - this is hard to catch imo, x: 120 better x:52 is better to me, anyway fixed!
8. 01:06:449 (5) - default finish at tail. crash cymbal. custom finish doesn't emphasize it well fixed
9. 01:10:710 (1) - ^ (but at head) added
10. 01:06:449 (5) - ctrl+G this? because from it tail to next 01:06:797 (1) - is hard to catch imo. ctrl+g make it easier to catch no.. sorry, but I want to keep this
11. 01:10:710 (1) - since i heard cymbal here. would be better to make HDash here to emphasize the cymbal as well. ctrl+G and move to x:20. for 01:11:145 (2) - you can move it to x:376 no change, I don't want to add HDash here
12. 01:16:101 (5) - would be nicer if need HDash too to catch this. x:96 sorry, again
13. 01:45:667 (3) - the cymbal is crash cymbal here. custom finish doesn't fit at all. use default finish better to emphasize it fixed!
14. 01:47:232 (3) - ^ ^
15. 01:48:014 (6) - ^ (for tail) ^
16. 01:56:623 (1) - default finish since cymbal here. custom finish not enough to emphasize it fixed
17. 02:00:797 (1) - ^ (because crash cymbal here) ^
18. 02:02:884 (1) - ^ (at head) ^
19. 02:04:971 (1) - ^ + since crash cymbal here and the no HDash is hard to catch, make HDash here with ctrl+G fixed
20. 02:05:232 (2) - if you agree with above, ctrl+G this and move to x:128 also, fixed
21. 02:17:493 (1) - default finish here crash cymbal appear fixed
22. 02:17:754 (2,4) - less movement here make boring here. (2) x: 208 (4) x:212 fixed
23. 02:34:188 (1) - default finish. crash cymbal here fixed
24. 02:36:275 (1) - ^ (at head) fixed
25. 02:38:797 (2) - how about x:208? i prefer this posistion lol fixed lol
26. 02:40:449 (1) - default finish at head because crash cymbal fixed
27. 02:45:928 (5) - this is hard to catch since need nice timing to catch this. reduce the spacing maybe around x:428? nerfed
28. 02:48:798 (1) - default finish at head because crash cymbal fixed
29. 02:54:015 (1) - hard to catch too because noHDash here. make HDash on here with move 02:53:667 (3) - to x:312? fixed, but not a HDash :p
30. 03:17:754 (7) - crash cymbal at tail, use default finish please fixed
31. 03:25:840 (3) - ^ (but at head at this time) ^
32. 03:26:362 (2) - ^ (but the cymbal a little bit faint so add default finish or not both are fine here) ^
33. 03:30:536 (1) - ^ (at this time really needed) ^
34. 03:31:580 (1) - ^ ^
35. 03:32:536 (1) - ^ (at tail) ^
36. 03:33:667 (1) - ^ (at head) ^
37. 03:34:710 (1) - ^ ^
38. 03:42:536 (2) - ^ ^
39. 03:47:232 (1) - ^ ^
40. 03:48:188 (3) - ^ (at tail) ^
41. 03:49:319 (1) - ^ (at head) ^
42. 03:51:406 (1) - ^ ^
43. 03:59:754 (1) - ^ ^
44. 04:03:927 (1) - ^ ^
45. 04:04:971 (1) - ^ ^
46. 04:06:014 (1) - ^ ^
47. 04:08:101 (1) - ^ ^
48. 04:20:623 (1) - ^ ^
49. 04:22:710 (1) - ^ ^
50. 04:23:754 (1) - ^ ^
51. 04:24:797 - change with S only here to use default finish, emphasize the crash cymbal ^
52. Unsnapped your last green line, should be at 05:01:040 - fixed
53. Sorry being nazi at last, for me hitsound is important so i can't stop my body to write hitsound suggestions, but the placements are really nice here xD lol that's ok, cuz it happens to me too xD

i should shoot my star because this map too awesome for me
Good Luck

Thank you! <3

i see Lan wings from the map

awesome
star

하게해주세요

SB 관련 의견인데 효과가 은은하게 느리게 되면 좋을텐데... 라고 생각합니다.

Fast wrote:

SB 관련 의견인데 효과가 은은하게 느리게 되면 좋을텐데... 라고 생각합니다.

요즘 귀찮아서 안잡고있는데 나중에 효과 수정들을 해야겠네여 ㅋㅋ

*__*

[Storyboard]

1. "b.jpg": That file isn't necessary at all. For the code, make the BG picture fade out instead.
2. "SB.png": Wow, that file is huge. The maximum allowed by the Ranking Criteria is 800x600 pixels, and maybe you can convert that file to jpg to save a bit more of space.
3. 00:18:536 - The SB load is over the allowed rankable value. To decrease it, try to reduce the Scale effect of the upcoming picture. Maybe it gets resolved already by changing SB.png, since huge pictures need a bigger SB load.
4. 03:49:319 - Continue the flower fall a bit more? For example, until 03:50:623 - Otherwise, it'd look a bit "naked" having still a kiai time there.
5. 04:56:010 (6,1) - Let the credits start at this point, since that's the last note of the song.

Finally, you told me you wanted to change the font of the lyrics. Before adding them into the folder, add in each of them an outer glow or a contour. There were some parts where the lyrics were blending with the BG picture, so that effect would make them easier to read.

[Twilight]

1. Timeline: Oh gosh... There are some beats that doesn't match at all there, and don't represent any beat in the melody. On the other hand, there are some others that could've been added, though the complexity of the beatmap would've increased. Take a look at all of them and where possible, try to remove them:
   
   SPOILER

   1. 00:04:535 (4,5) - Nope, overmapped
   2. 00:12:883 (4,5) - Overmapped
   3. 00:19:927 - 00:20:014 - On the other hand, you could've added beats there.
   4. 00:20:536 - 00:24:710 - 00:26:797 - Optional to add
   5. 00:32:361 (2) - It's odd not to see 1/6s instead of a slider :p
   6. 00:33:058 - Optional to add.
   7. 00:34:275 - Another spot to add a note.
   8. 00:46:275 (4,5) - 00:46:536 (7) - and maybe 00:46:623 (8) - Are bound to be removed.
   9. 00:50:884 (1) - Convert it in a 1/6 slider to keep the consistency with 00:42:449 (4) - ? It should start 1/6 earlier though.
   10. 01:12:275 (5) - It could've been a 1/6 4-plet.
   11. 01:16:536 - 01:16:623 - Add notes? Totally optional, since the jump would get sacrified.
   12. 01:19:145 (2,3) - Nopenopenope.
   13. 01:19:927 (7) - No... that's also not a 4-plet and that note could be removed.
   14. 01:30:101 (5,6,7,8) - All out. The only one that could stay is (7).
   15. 01:38:797 (1,2,3,4,5) - Not a 5-plet. (3) could go away.
   16. 01:43:580 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - At least (4) and (7) out. (5) and (8) could stay.
   17. 01:48:623 (2,3) - 01:50:971 (5,6) - AAAAAA
   18. 01:56:884 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Notes to keep are (2,5,8) and maaaaybe (10).
   19. 02:00:449 - Note there?
   20. 02:03:406 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - (3) and (6) are the only worthy circles.
   21. 02:07:667 (3,4) - Out.
   22. 02:25:145 - Instead of having that slider, add another beat here too?
   23. 02:34:449 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - Oh no... The beats where those 1/6s fit the most are 02:34:971 - 02:35:058 - 02:35:145 - 02:35:232 - .
   24. 02:38:014 (3) - Convert it into a simple note, placed in 02:38:101 - .
   25. 02:38:362 (1) - On the other hand, this note sounds better as a 1/6 slider...
   26. 02:40:188 - I miss another beat there.
   27. 02:49:319 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - Not a stream...
   28. 02:56:797 - How about adding a beat there too?
   29. 03:09:145 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - Not as stream as well.
   30. 03:13:320 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^
   31. 03:18:362 (2,3) - Even though you added hitsounds there, there's no reason to map beats that don't appear in the melody.
   32. 03:20:623 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - Same happens here.
   33. 03:23:580 (4,5) - No.
   34. 03:26:623 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1) - The stream only sounds from (6) on, so (4,5) can be removed.
   35. 03:30:014 (3,4,5,6) - Those objects don't belong to 1/4 beats, and therefore they're unsnapped. (4) is removable anyway, and (6) has to go to 03:30:449 - .
   36. 03:33:232 (5,6) - 03:33:493 (8) - and probably (9) shall dissapear.
   37. 03:36:884 (2,3) - Not those two.
   38. 03:37:667 (7,8) - Not even those ones.
   39. 03:40:275 (3,4) - *sigh*
   40. 03:42:797 - Beat?
   41. 03:46:710 (3,4,5,6) - It happens the same here as in those beats you missnapped before 03:30:014 (3,4,5,6) - .
   42. 03:48:971 - Add a beat?
   43. 03:52:275 (4,5) - 03:54:101 (4,5) - 03:56:449 (5,6) - Have to be removed.
   44. 04:00:014 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - x___x
   45. 04:02:449 (4,5) - 04:02:710 (7) - and (8)? out.
   46. 04:03:406 (3,4,5,6) - Not 1/4!!!!!
   47. 04:06:623 (4,5) - 04:06:884 (7) - and (8)? out.
   48. 04:09:493 (3,4) - Awawawawawaw.
   49. 04:10:797 (4,5) - 04:11:058 (7) - and (8)? I start to feel like it's always the same =(
   50. 04:16:710 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Nuuuuuuuu.
   51. 04:17:840 (3,4) - They aren't audible.
   52. 04:19:058 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - uguugugugugu.
   53. 04:20:362 - Add a beat?
2. 00:13:318 (7,8) - The transition looks kinda hard, being the beginning of the song and one of the most calm parts.
3. 01:10:188 (3) - Move it to the right part of the screen. It's better that the big jump happens between (2,3) than (3,4).
4. 01:48:014 (6) - That slider can be splitted into 2 circles to create a double jump. Looks more epic to introduce the chorus instead of the vertical slider.
5. 01:59:754 (4,5) - Coming after the HDashes, that dash is kinda difficult to catch. What about reducing a bit the distance there?
6. 02:04:449 (3,4,1) - Can the distance of the 1/6 HDash be reduced? It's pretty much painful to catch.
7. 02:25:058 (2) - That's too much. You come after the kiai and you have to face a quite complicated pattern. At least try to reduce the distance (1,2,3).
8. 02:28:449 (2) - Instead of a slider, keep it as a simple circle. The HDash to (3) isn't needed at all, and that way you'll create a cool effect according to the melody.
9. 02:29:493 (2) - Same with this slider, if you want.
10. 03:30:449 (6,1) - As you're gonna change this anyway cos of the timeline, add a jump between those objects.
11. 04:03:840 (6,1) - You can do the same here.

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I'll keep stalking this thread, but that's all from me by now. When the timeline gets modified, some jumps would also change anyway. Can't wait to see it ranked soon!

No. Don't bubble this now

I have to mod this @.@