[_Crystal] wrote:

hi~ from my queue~

[General]
i think this song is enough for a Insane diff, don't you think so? :3 i'll just make normal and hard for now since the length of the song and my mapping skill are not good yet
hitsounds volume is a bit loud, this makes me feel noisy when playing this the volume is balance with the song already

[Normal]
00:52:404 (4) - if the slider ends at 00:53:529, it will sound better because i follow the drum here
00:55:404 (4) - ^ and try this pattern only fix the pattern

SPOILER

01:04:404 (3) - quite not look good.. red anchors are not suitable, imo (02:04:404 - 02:20:341 are the same, i highly suggest you change them) not a big problem la, but modified some of them a bit better i guess
01:08:904 (1,3) - blanket them, and it will look nicer i think it's blanketed already
01:27:466 (2) - okay

SPOILER

02:42:654 (3,4) - use a slider instead? no
02:52:029 - break? it feels really bad imo. try start break at 02:49:029 and finish at 02:52:029 idk how to xplain this but maybe it's just my personal taste
03:39:466 (2) - try this rhythm, then clap on the head the current rhythm is better

SPOILER

04:10:404 (2,1,2) - you blanket this pattern before, but why not blanket them here? for variety thing
04:15:466 (2) - same as 01:27:466 (2) done

[Hard]
00:14:716 (5,6,7,8,1) - lol... i have no idea why you did so, maybe trying a kind of flow is better LOOOOOOOOOOL MISPLACED OMGALDHKAGFLAS>w<
00:33:279 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - cancel claps at 1,2,3,5,6. and drums in the song aren't very loud, so make the volume lower (next same patterns are the same) keep everything because i thinking the opposite of yours
00:34:029 - reconsider the time line here pls :3 missed some beats on purposely ofc
00:40:029 - ^
00:46:029 - ^
00:56:529 - ^
01:14:529 - ^
01:46:029 - ^
01:52:029 - ^
01:58:029 - ^
02:02:341 (3) - cancel whistle why?
02:02:529 - add a circle with whistle no
02:05:529 - reconsider the time line here
02:08:529 - ^
02:09:279 - add a circle with clap i'll keep this blank to keep the rhythm with the others
02:34:591 (5,6,7,8,9) - starting sliders at 1/2 really feels bad, so try this why it is bad? i didn't find any problem here

SPOILER

02:52:029 - same as Normal nooooope <3
03:38:904 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - use three 1/2 sliders instead since i make this zigzag pattern so using circles is better here
04:10:591 (5,6,7,8,9) - same as 02:34:591 (5,6,7,8,9) no

:3 gl with your map~

Lunaties wrote:

loh yo harus e tetep di kasih lah. kan beda mod soal e aku ganteng. tp yo ga ero wes
btw iku deskripsi ne lho asli ngejak tawuran iki. ket tumon onok useless star --a

Vhy wrote:

btw.
Wan～椀～
椀 = Wan
so the correct romanized title is "Wan~Wan~"? looool

eeezzzeee wrote:

Hi, from modding queue.

GENERAL
Background was deleted! umm. should be fine now
Dont use pure black combo color, players who dim screen cannot see approach circle. Maybe try gray? so, using black combo color is forbidden too? alrite changed
Combo 2 and 3 are very similar color, i think you can change the order it's okay i guess
02:52:029 I think this part is strong and should not be a break, at least not on hard difficulty i can't help but leave it a break here because of some reasons

That's all! Nothing to say about the actual mapping other than very well done! Especially the bent sliders on normal difficulty matched the music perfectly! Best of luck

KSHR wrote:

If I can't find any sources, sadly yes... (It sounds kinda weird though!)

No Dap wrote:

You're missing BG (unless I'm wrong)

http://puu.sh/7kle9.png

http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1391362

1. The spinner set is lacking some elements which must be included such as “spinner-background.png”, “spinner-circle.png”, “spinner-metre.png”. Also I’ve never seen some files which your map include such as “spinner-bottom.png” “spinner-middle.png (2 also)” “spinner-top.png”. This’s surely unrankable stuff anyway. For more detail: https://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Skinning　(Check the RankingCriteria as well)
   
   SPOILER

   There are 2 ways to fix this problem.
   1: Remove all skin files which are related to the spinner.
   2: Complete the spinner skin set by removing “spinner-bottom.png” “spinner-middle.png (2 also)” “spinner-top.png” and adding “spinner-background.png”, “spinner-circle.png”, “spinner-metre.png”.
2. Another concern is the combo color because combo1 looks similar to 4. I'll ask other BATs to get opinions about this later.

1. 00:04:029 (1) - It feels like this slider is a bit too sudden after the spinner considering this’s the Normal which is the lowest diff in this mapset. What’s worse it’s a 1/2 rhythm. So some of beginners will make a combo-break or a 100. I’d remove this slider and extend the spinner by 1/1 beat like this. It should be more easier for them to play.
   
2. 00:11:716 (3) - Remove the whistle from the reverse point and add one to the end instead. Whistles are added to points where guitar sounds go such as 00:06:466 - , 00:09:466 (2) - in your whistle pattern. So this way you can make consistent with them.
3. 00:30:279 (3,4,1) - Just my taste. Ofc the current placement looks fine. But I'd rearrange them like the screenshot if I were you because I think it's more fun to give the variety of the cursor movement. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1391354
4. 00:35:716 (3) - Add a whistle to the head. It sounds kinda empty around here.
5. 00:41:716 (3) - ^
6. 00:47:716 (3,4) - You are mainly following the vocal in this difficulty but these sliders. (Maybe.. the guitar sound?) So the current rhythm is kinda strange to me. How about following the vocal like this?
   
7. 01:47:716 (3) - Same as 00:35:716 (3) - .
8. 01:54:654 (4,1) - It looks like the flow is kinda bad and a little bit hard to read imo. Try this once. It should be more clearer and flowier. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1391374
9. 01:59:716 (3,4) - Same as 00:47:716 (3,4) - .
10. 02:40:029 (1) - It feels like this slider is a bit far from the center considering this's after the spinner.
11. 02:49:029 (1) - There is no big sound to add the whistle at this volume here. How about reducing the end of this spinner to around 20% and changing the Sampleset to Normal. (Ofc without the whistle.)
12. 04:02:904 (4) - Making a blanket with the end of (3) looks nicer to me. Also missing a new combo here. If it's intentional, I'd suggest adding a new combo to make consistent with 01:14:904 (1) - , 02:26:904 (1) - and 03:38:904 (1) - .
13. 04:26:341 (2,3) - Ctrl+H should be better considering the flow from (1). http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1391432

1. 00:09:466 (7,8,9) - These whistles which were added in a row sounds kinda noisy to me. I'd remove one from (8) if I were you. Same for 00:12:466 (7,8,9) - .
2. 00:32:904 (5) - This slider will be nicer if you make it a curve like this. (This way it looks cute to me..lol) http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1396034
3. 00:48:091 (5,6,7) - Just my taste, but this placement looks a bit bad to me. How about rearranging like this? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1398966
   

   40,316,48091,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   108,364,48279,2,0,P|144:364|176:356,1,70,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   204,272,48654,2,0,P|240:272|272:280,1,70,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

4. 01:11:154 (8,9) - This may be just my taste. How about rotating them by around 25% and moving somewhat like the screenshot? This way the placement looks nicer. What's more it's supposed to be able to make the better flow. (Move 01:11:904 (1,2,3,4,5) - to fix spacings if you apply this.) http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1400133
5. 02:11:904 (1,2,5) - Just my taste again. This overlap doesn't look a good idea. Well it's not a problem though. I'd rearrange 02:11:154 (8,9,1,2,3,4) - to move (1,2) to somewhere like screenshots if I were you. This way the placement looks clearer than the current one. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1400173 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1400174
   

   56,76,131154,2,0,L|64:145,1,70,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   24,224,131529,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   168,140,131904,5,0,0:0:0:0:
   169,140,132091,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   332,188,132466,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   332,188,132654,2,0,L|324:257,1,70,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

6. 02:43:779 (1,2,3) - There is no vocal, so that it sound these whistles are emphasized more than necessary imo. How about reducing by 10% or so?
7. 02:48:841 (3) - It will sound nice if you add a whistle here to follow vocal stress.
8. 02:49:029 (1) - Same as Normal difficulty.
9. 04:14:716 (6) - Add a new combo for consistency with 01:26:716 (1) - .
10. 04:26:341 (1,2,3) - I think drum stress such as 04:26:622 - 04:26:716 - 04:26:904 - should be followed by objects. Also I prefer to place a note at 04:27:091 - where the song ends. So how about this rhythm? It should fit with the song well.
    

KSHR wrote:

Okay, the problem about the BG was solved. Then here is my mod as I promised.

[General]

1. The spinner set is lacking some elements which must be included such as “spinner-background.png”, “spinner-circle.png”, “spinner-metre.png”. Also I’ve never seen some files which your map include such as “spinner-bottom.png” “spinner-middle.png (2 also)” “spinner-top.png”. This’s surely unrankable stuff anyway. For more detail: https://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Skinning　(Check the RankingCriteria as well)
   
   SPOILER

   There are 2 ways to fix this problem.
   1: Remove all skin files which are related to the spinner.
   2: Complete the spinner skin set by removing “spinner-bottom.png” “spinner-middle.png (2 also)” “spinner-top.png” and adding “spinner-background.png”, “spinner-circle.png”, “spinner-metre.png”.
   nah this is my 1st thought about the file name lol. i'll contact the skinner about this.
2. Another concern is the combo color because combo1 looks similar to 4. I'll ask other BATs to get opinions about this later. removed the combo 4

[Normal]

1. 00:04:029 (1) - It feels like this slider is a bit too sudden after the spinner considering this’s the Normal which is the lowest diff in this mapset. What’s worse it’s a 1/2 rhythm. So some of beginners will make a combo-break or a 100. I’d remove this slider and extend the spinner by 1/1 beat like this. It should be more easier for them to play.
   that happens to me a lot when i testplay'ed this lol. i like the currently rhythm but this might the best for beginner. so fixed
2. 00:11:716 (3) - Remove the whistle from the reverse point and add one to the end instead. Whistles are added to points where guitar sounds go such as 00:06:466 - , 00:09:466 (2) - in your whistle pattern. So this way you can make consistent with them. ok
3. 00:30:279 (3,4,1) - Just my taste. Ofc the current placement looks fine. But I'd rearrange them like the screenshot if I were you because I think it's more fun to give the variety of the cursor movement. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1391354 somehow i like the current pattern
4. 00:35:716 (3) - Add a whistle to the head. It sounds kinda empty around here. i'll make the hitsound placement here consistency with each other, altought the note's rhythm is different
5. 00:41:716 (3) - ^ cheer
6. 00:47:716 (3,4) - You are mainly following the vocal in this difficulty but these sliders. (Maybe.. the guitar sound?) So the current rhythm is kinda strange to me. How about following the vocal like this?
   okay changed
7. 01:47:716 (3) - Same as 00:35:716 (3) - .
8. 01:54:654 (4,1) - It looks like the flow is kinda bad and a little bit hard to read imo. Try this once. It should be more clearer and flowier. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1391374 i'm a beginner and have no problem with reading this (ofc maybe because i'm the mapper? lol). anyway yours is better so yeah changed
9. 01:59:716 (3,4) - Same as 00:47:716 (3,4) - . okay
10. 02:40:029 (1) - It feels like this slider is a bit far from the center considering this's after the spinner. this is should be okay. since this is normal, the current delay after the spinner is just enough to catch the next note
11. 02:49:029 (1) - There is no big sound to add the whistle at this volume here. How about reducing the end of this spinner to around 20% and changing the Sampleset to Normal. (Ofc without the whistle.) removed the whis, but keep the volume and sampleset
12. 04:02:904 (4) - Making a blanket with the end of (3) looks nicer to me. Also missing a new combo here. If it's intentional, I'd suggest adding a new combo to make consistent with 01:14:904 (1) - , 02:26:904 (1) - and 03:38:904 (1) - . not making this blanketed tho because the note gap there. and yea i forgot to add NC here lol
13. 04:26:341 (2,3) - Ctrl+H should be better considering the flow from (1). http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1391432 ctrl+H'ed and moved to x:284 y:104

[Hard]

1. 00:09:466 (7,8,9) - These whistles which were added in a row sounds kinda noisy to me. I'd remove one from (8) if I were you. Same for 00:12:466 (7,8,9) - . okay
2. 00:32:904 (5) - This slider will be nicer if you make it a curve like this. (This way it looks cute to me..lol) http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1396034 sure
3. 00:48:091 (5,6,7) - Just my taste, but this placement looks a bit bad to me. How about rearranging like this? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1398966 rearranged similar to yours, and i ctrl+g'ed the slider on 00:48:654 (7)
   

   40,316,48091,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   108,364,48279,2,0,P|144:364|176:356,1,70,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   204,272,48654,2,0,P|240:272|272:280,1,70,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

4. 01:11:154 (8,9) - This may be just my taste. How about rotating them by around 25% and moving somewhat like the screenshot? This way the placement looks nicer. What's more it's supposed to be able to make the better flow. (Move 01:11:904 (1,2,3,4,5) - to fix spacings if you apply this.) http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1400133 much of personal taste, but i rotate them just a llittle because it lows better for me
5. 02:11:904 (1,2,5) - Just my taste again. This overlap doesn't look a good idea. Well it's not a problem though. I'd rearrange 02:11:154 (8,9,1,2,3,4) - to move (1,2) to somewhere like screenshots if I were you. This way the placement looks clearer than the current one. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1400173 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1400174 alright2 .__.
   

   56,76,131154,2,0,L|64:145,1,70,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   24,224,131529,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   168,140,131904,5,0,0:0:0:0:
   169,140,132091,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   332,188,132466,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   332,188,132654,2,0,L|324:257,1,70,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

6. 02:43:779 (1,2,3) - There is no vocal, so that it sound these whistles are emphasized more than necessary imo. How about reducing by 10% or so? okay
7. 02:48:841 (3) - It will sound nice if you add a whistle here to follow vocal stress. k added
8. 02:49:029 (1) - Same as Normal difficulty.
9. 04:14:716 (6) - Add a new combo for consistency with 01:26:716 (1) - ooops added
10. 04:26:341 (1,2,3) - I think drum stress such as 04:26:622 - 04:26:716 - 04:26:904 - should be followed by objects. Also I prefer to place a note at 04:27:091 - where the song ends. So how about this rhythm? It should fit with the song well. lol the rhythm much better. changed
    

Sorry to be late. You can call me back for the recheck when you're done

EDIT : My first star icon here.

neonat wrote:

Just want to clarify and ask:

Hard

00:35:904 - the vocals hear, did you intentionally overlook it? Because if you take that into account, it sounds slightly weird with nothing there and suddenly mapping to the instrumentals, when it was being mapped to vocals earlier on at this part. sorry, but from what i hear there is only a drum sound. maybe you can try 25% playback rate
01:11:529 (9) - this portion, as seen for a long part of this segment since around 48secs, is being mapped to the instrumentals, but 01:11:529 (9) - seems to be mapped to the vocals and is a sudden awkward change because like 01:08:154 (7) - it stops on the red line and has nothing on the white line after, the addition of 01:11:529 (9) - breaks this and it stood out to me being out of placed. By placing it at 01:11:716 instead I believe it fits into the map better, and the transition back to vocals is smoother (since the following part follows back to vocals) emmm nah. im intended to follow by the rhythm here (yeah it all ends on red tick), but at 01:11:529 as you can see it has a vocal there. im ever trying to keep this blank but somehow it sounds awkward to play and i just don't like it. so yeah better to add a note here
02:11:529 (9) - ^
02:23:529 (9) - ^
03:23:529 (9) - This portion is slightly different from the previous 3 in my opinion, you placed more rhythm here compared to before the break. There is some rhythm placed for the vocal as well, but because now that some of the vocals is being highlighted here as well, 03:21:279 feels empty. I would suggest maybe just placing an object at 03:21:279 to fill in the void trust me, the rhythm is still same. but the hitsound (clap) placement is far different if you compared with the before.
03:33:279 - ^
There is a mini stream at 03:57:841 - 03:57:935 and 03:58:029 - is it possible for you to highlight them and place emphasis on it? alright. adding 1/4 slider with repeat here should be good
04:09:747 - the stream also actually has a note here ah nonono. i don't want to add 4 streams in a row here


I know it's bubbled already, but just giving some of my observations, maybe you could consider

Hinsvar wrote:

Congrats for the first ranked (qualified actually lol) map! \:D/

Raging Bull wrote:

Someone make .gif now.

apaffy wrote:

all this KSHR why

[Minakami Yuki] wrote:

wow gratz for 1st rank

Cera- wrote:

grats for your 1st rank

btw... long time no see you Vhy /o/











kapan-kapan ajarin ane bikin map ya XD *SKSD mode on*

KSHR wrote: