1. Marathon (4.98 stars, 1405 notes)

At Last

-Asagi wrote:

Go happy <3
Support as usual
oh and ...(ノ·ω·)ノ︵

Hollow Wings wrote:

as ur req

Blazing

1. HP8 OD8... 这太凶残了吧。。。前面才146bpm哎，感觉至少HP-1较好orz，而且低BPM+高OD会让人很抓狂的OVQ /_>\ HP7 now
2. 00:57:294 (2) - 放在227,355似乎比较顺手一点 好的
3. 01:02:651 (2,3,4) - 弄个正三角？好像没弄好 fixed ;w;
4. 01:17:892 (1,2,3,4) - 其实可以考虑稍微小跳一下，虽然我懂你后面要大跳到右上角，但是这样直接就stack对玩家定位会造成困难（也就是会很难，小跳一下稍微简单一点 不錯w (我自己都被坑2333
5. 01:41:051 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - 这几个如果是正三角建议做完美，如果不是打算做正三角的话那我建议变形的再厉害些，否则有点像正三角又有点随机跳的感觉有点不爽orz fixed
6. 02:22:193 (2) - 我推荐此slider ctrl+g，并且个人觉得加个nc比较好 不了, 個人覺得音樂有種往外飛的感覺, ctrl g 反而像音樂縮小的意思, 不過NC挺好的, 消了後面的NC
7. 02:24:336 (2,3) - 这里漏了个鼓点有点可惜，我看你后面这个梗放的很多，我个人建议可以把其中的一些这么改：把2改成1/2滑条+note，接到3的头上，这样切指也更丰富一些，打起来也很爽快0.0 好的, 換掉好幾個
8. 02:32:479 (1,2) - 和 02:34:193 (1,2) - 是故意不平行的吗？如果是那我建议两个slider之间的夹角再大一点，如果不是那就平行弄弄好吧 故意的, 直接扭曲他們233
9. 03:36:022 (1,2) - 故意不blanket？那1的尾巴再往下甩一点 想blanket ;w;, 嘛, 稍為調了調
10. 03:50:405 (4,5,6) - ctrl+g，前面的滑条都设置了反向跳，到了重音反而让跳的ds变小感觉有点怪，强烈建议反过来 okay
11. 04:49:435 (2,3,1) - 这个前后ds差的有点多。。。好像挺有趣的，不过好难啊，稍微再往左移一点吧0.0 ;w;連打的ds應該一樣的, 不過移了
12. 07:02:312 (5) - 总觉得这个slider可以反向后放的远一点，这里小跳感觉不太合适，但我也不太清楚你喜欢放在哪，考虑一下吧0.0 改了~
13. 07:20:329 (1) - 这个减速其实。。。虽然和之后的加速有个落差，但个人觉得这里更适合跳而不是变速滑条0.0 恩. . .先換成0.75x再看看
14. 发现你很喜欢摆反flow的obj，我个人是蛮喜欢的啦OVO 找天合作ww
15. SB挺不错啊（好大的图orz）图也挺好，送你2个星0.0 大感謝!!

你们都做app。。。我找不到6分钟以上的曲子啊OVQQQ qwq 祝你快找到

顺便这个曲子我记得好像有那个红色的的曲子已经rank了一个。。。有看到ww

good luck

Kawaiwkyik wrote:

HP-1 55
01:54:336 (4) - 中間粒點多餘左? no 本身想扭dd, 改左now
05:17:651 - whistle xD thanks
05:34:840 (3,1) - ctrl+g 或者順flow d nice!
05:55:759 (1) - 咁大聲搞到同前面好違和 -10%

-.- DX

Irreversible wrote:

good luck :3

• 
  [General]

1. 咕噜
   [Blazing]
2. 不知道现在的马拉松允不允许自创名了？好像只能用“Marathon” 具体还是找BAT问问
3. 还有我觉得NC用的太频繁了吧0n0 差不多3个就换一次
4. 02:20:479 (1,1) - 这里间距太大了吧 前面类似的地方都是3.xx 4.xx的
5. 03:54:084 (1,1,1,1) - 这几个都可以放成3/4滑条 粘连感爽ww
6. 04:18:744 (1,2) - 算是比较明显的没包好了;w;
7. 剩下的也看了找不到什么问题 ;w; 求个mu啊

Awaken wrote:

mod from request

• 
  [General]

1. 咕噜
   [Blazing]
2. 不知道现在的马拉松允不允许自创名了？好像只能用“Marathon” 具体还是找BAT问问 改了Marathon
3. 还有我觉得NC用的太频繁了吧0n0 差不多3个就换一次 嘛嘛ww 沒差的
4. 02:20:479 (1,1) - 这里间距太大了吧 前面类似的地方都是3.xx 4.xx的 我覺得還好啦ww 找人testplay也沒掉, 先留著
5. 03:54:084 (1,1,1,1) - 这几个都可以放成3/4滑条 粘连感爽ww ;w;不了
6. 04:18:744 (1,2) - 算是比较明显的没包好了;w; okay!
7. 剩下的也看了找不到什么问题 ;w; 求个mu啊

Good Luck~

[ Zzz ] wrote:

Hi~ happy623

In game m4m request!!

[ Marathon ]

01:47:051 (3,4) -

I think Better look

01:47:479 (5,6) - ^

01:50:479 (3,4) - ^

01:50:908 (5,6) - ^ hmm, alright, fixed!

02:11:908 (1) - quite nice, btw I didnt move the exactly position for here o/

Movement x112 y252

02:13:622 (1) - ^ x276 y212 okay

05:06:462 (1,2,1,2) - Ctrl + G yea done

SPOILER

05:40:191 (1) - hmm, sorry I might keep this, it is intentional to make it harder =w=

Movement x256 y192

oh... good map!!

Star!! GL~

Foreverends wrote:

(y)

Alarido wrote:

Hi Happy ~.~

Don't kd this post.

Your map feels amazing to me, and I just found nothing scary imho.
Just a few overlaps like 02:13:193 (1,1) - and 02:56:479 (1,2,3) - all of them feel intentional and belonging to your map style.

I would say I do prefer something like Lesjuh's and Larto's, and some jonathanlfj's ─ but I can't complain, your map is really AMAZING :3

And the song choices are awesome (: the same I could say about the SB ^^

1 Star for Map Quality
1 Star for the Song amazingness

Let's The Dance of the Four Maidens conquer world's heart and Pro's bodies ~.~ ─ and I could suggest the red phrase as Diff name, since there's just 1 diff, if that rule didn't exist ><

Att.

(Let's approve quickly )

-Asagi wrote:

Hello happy \o\
M4M IRC mod req LOL

smallboat wrote:

Hi,happy623,In-game PM req.

1. Red words: Should be fix it.
2. Blue words : I recommended suggestion.
3. Black words : In my personal opinion.

[General]

None.

[Marathon]

00:33:508 (1) - 這應該是放在左下那個1構成一個flow吧，還是故意放的? 恩, 是故意的
00:49:365 (3) - (390|83)? 不, 跟(1)隔太遠了
01:18:323 (3) - 感覺放在(144|276)比較帶感。 個人覺得交叉跳會比較帶感和配合音樂;w;
01:19:615 (3) - 滑條尾疊好? 好的
01:32:908 (2) - 滑條頭疊好? 不, 要平行啊 囧rz
01:38:693 (4) - (288|161)試試，感覺應該放近點。這裡的跳是故意的, 跟 01:35:265 (4) 一致0 0
02:18:336 (1) - 前面的都有疊起來，所以我想應該也能跟前面一致，放在(307|261)看看。 因為重複三次會悶啦w'', 你可以看到我之後的都沒疊
02:20:051 (1) - 同上

SPOILER

02:28:086 (3) - 稍微往上移一點。 好的, 後面都跟著上移了
03:26:997 (9) - 不NC嗎? 音樂沒漸大;w;
03:36:844 (3) - 沒疊好? 好的
04:45:381 (9) - 不NC嗎? NO, 同上原因
06:25:836 (2,3) - 應該可以放的再遠一些，像同節奏06:27:480 (2,3) 這兩個。 好的

[Other]
1.If you have any mod above problems, you can PM or in-game to me.
2.Hope to you ranked.
3.Hope my mod is useful to you.

1. tick rate 2 fits best this song
2. check wide screen support
3. well maybe it just for me but how about moving preview time to 07:13:716 - here? feels much powerful and awesome than current one
4. 01:05:008 (5) - need finish here according to the music
5. 01:57:336 - hmm is there anything special reason that you delayed break time? well not bad idea but i'd rather remove this
6. 02:23:265 (1) - i think divide this note into 2 1/8 repeat sliders fits much better with music
   
   like this

   
7. 02:41:908 (1) - delete NC for consistence
8. 02:55:622 (3,4,5,6) - reversing this rhythm feels little bit better
9. 03:15:418 (1) - delete whistle? there aren't any sounds for hitsound
10. 03:54:084 (1) - this slider end should be snapped on 1/8 beat 03:54:298 -here, it isn't on 1/3 beat imo (and add whistle on the end, not on the slider body)
11. 03:54:773 (1) - well this slider should be snapped on previous 1/8 beat 03:54:726 - here imo, you may argee about this if you here this part as 25% playback rate
12. 05:13:597 (1) - finish doesn't seem suitable even weird on this slider, try deleting it? (and 05:23:975 (1) - this too)
13. 05:30:299 (5) - try using crtl g on this (you'd be better to move 05:30:624 (6) - this slider to closer position with (5) slider as well)
    
    example

    

HelloSCV wrote:

well just did quick mod

[Marathon]

1. tick rate 2 fits best this song okay edit : no ;w; seems little bit noisy for me
2. check wide screen support yea I closed it, because I am not going to use wide screen storyboard ;w;
3. well maybe it just for me but how about moving preview time to 07:13:716 - here? feels much powerful and awesome than current one OK! thats nice B)
4. 01:05:008 (5) - need finish here according to the music added
5. 01:57:336 - hmm is there anything special reason that you delayed break time? well not bad idea but i'd rather remove this removed
6. 02:23:265 (1) - i think divide this note into 2 1/8 repeat sliders fits much better with music nice idea <3
   
   like this

   
7. 02:41:908 (1) - delete NC for consistence okay
8. 02:55:622 (3,4,5,6) - reversing this rhythm feels little bit better done
9. 03:15:418 (1) - delete whistle? there aren't any sounds for hitsound deleted
10. 03:54:084 (1) - this slider end should be snapped on 1/8 beat 03:54:298 -here, it isn't on 1/3 beat imo (and add whistle on the end, not on the slider body) moved, btw I feel whistle is quite noisy now, I deleted the whistle, thanks!
11. 03:54:773 (1) - well this slider should be snapped on previous 1/8 beat 03:54:726 - here imo, you may argee about this if you here this part as 25% playback rate I want to have your ears qwq so pro, thanks!
12. 05:13:597 (1) - finish doesn't seem suitable even weird on this slider, try deleting it? (and 05:23:975 (1) - this too) sure, both applied!
13. 05:30:299 (5) - try using crtl g on this (you'd be better to move 05:30:624 (6) - this slider to closer position with (5) slider as well) okay! flows much better now
    
    example

    

too awesome to mod gg nice map and nice song! good luck for approval~

Faust wrote:

Timing:

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I'll make another post for the OSB at a later date.

EDIT: Add in

140.20 BPM at 130,184
129.00 BPM at 141,524
140.00 BPM at 141,756

147.00 BPM at 206,158 (Get rid of the 146.50 BPM)
141.00 BPM at 209,015

That should be all.

1. 00:00:082 (1) -
   screen

   
   - I noticed the pattern of two similar sliders and one other, but imo this looks and feels more harmonical to play.
   another suggetions is
   something like this

   
   - they are kinda stacked, 1 is just placed at -5 pixels (both x und y). I just like to do that.. xD
2. 00:01:796 (3) - why don't you use a 180° rotation of 00:00:939 (2)? I'd prefer that.
   you're doin that with 00:03:510 (1,2) and 00:07:796 (2,3), too, anyway.
3. 00:02:653 (1,2) - hmmh, I like those sliders, including the others of them, but I kind of miss consistency here.
   cause those two have a linear movement, 00:06:082 (1,2) point in the same direction, but you have to move totally different and differently again here - 00:09:510 (1,2). cause I feel that this is some kind of "opening" to the rest you might want to make them more similar?
4. 00:07:796 (2,3) - maybe switch them around? I mean place 2 further up and 3 further down.
   like this

   
   imo this has a better flow from 00:06:939 (1).
5. 00:14:439 (2) and 00:17:867 (2) - these jumps are playable, personally I don't like them. I don't know why exactly, really, but imo they seem kinda unnecessary.
6. 00:27:510 (1,2) and following two combos - same here as I said above, they look a bit random, cause of the different movement.
   it's not that extreme as the others, but still.. x:
    
7. 01:05:224 (1) -
   suggestion

   
   I just added one anchor to the straight part of the slider, looks better imo, cause it's totally curvy then.. .o.
8. 01:15:329 (1,2) - preferably both curvy or straight?
   something similar here - 01:22:186 (1,2,1,2) - first two of the same kind, then two of the other?
9. 01:27:748 - I miss an object here. :c
   
   or maybe.. suggestion with halfed SV

   
10. 01:54:756 (1,2,1,2,1) - you could create such a nice pyramid with them.. why is one placed in the right bottom corner? QQ
11. 02:47:041 (2,3,1,2,1) - I smell a possible polygon pattern here..! O:
12. 02:49:184 (5) and 02:50:898 (5) - I'd like if there were placed at 152|184 and 364|272 (much closer to the 4s). Idk why.. o.o
13. 02:56:898 (2) - I know this matches with 02:56:470 (1), but it'd look better if it's a 180° rotated version of 02:57:327 (3).
    similar thing here - 03:08:470 (1,2,3)!
14. 03:13:613 (1,2,1,2,1) - looks so random.. >: think of a nice pattern?

Squirrel wrote:

mod from req. ~ c:
well.. "mod" - I'm afraid, I can't say that much. >: noo its long, it should be helpful!

first off: is it just me or are there two osb files?
I don't have a clue about storyboarding, so Idk if that's okay..
but I think there is supposed to be only one? o-o xD my bad, I forget to delete the old one, thanks for telling me!

coming to the diff - overall I liked playing it. c: glad to hear that<3!
there are some confusing parts, but I guess that's intentional.
or just me playing bad. orz

and some suggestions (100% optional ofcourse!):

1. 00:00:082 (1) -
   screen

   
   - I noticed the pattern of two similar sliders and one other, but imo this looks and feels more harmonical to play. hmm, I guess I know what you mean, fixed!
   another suggetions is
   something like this

   
   - they are kinda stacked, 1 is just placed at -5 pixels (both x und y). I just like to do that.. xD
2. 00:01:796 (3) - why don't you use a 180° rotation of 00:00:939 (2)? I'd prefer that. well, since I want the sliders fit with the music further, I changed (2) instead
   you're doin that with 00:03:510 (1,2) and 00:07:796 (2,3), too, anyway.
3. 00:02:653 (1,2) - hmmh, I like those sliders, including the others of them, but I kind of miss consistency here.
   cause those two have a linear movement, 00:06:082 (1,2) point in the same direction, but you have to move totally different and differently again here - 00:09:510 (1,2). cause I feel that this is some kind of "opening" to the rest you might want to make them more similar? hmm, I may keep these first, it is intentional for not being consistent, I feel they would be so boring if you use the same pattern for here ;w;
4. 00:07:796 (2,3) - maybe switch them around? I mean place 2 further up and 3 further down. okay
   like this

   
   imo this has a better flow from 00:06:939 (1).
5. 00:14:439 (2) and 00:17:867 (2) - these jumps are playable, personally I don't like them. I don't know why exactly, really, but imo they seem kinda unnecessary. umm, I guess it should be the flow's bad here, I tried to shorten the distance now
6. 00:27:510 (1,2) and following two combos - same here as I said above, they look a bit random, cause of the different movement.
   it's not that extreme as the others, but still.. x: hmm, I tried to changed a bit xD hope its better :>
    
7. 01:05:224 (1) -
   suggestion

   
   I just added one anchor to the straight part of the slider, looks better imo, cause it's totally curvy then.. .o. done
8. 01:15:329 (1,2) - preferably both curvy or straight?
   something similar here - 01:22:186 (1,2,1,2) - first two of the same kind, then two of the other? noo, I prefer the current one ;w; they are intentional
9. 01:27:748 - I miss an object here. :c I undermapped here, since I want to follow the drums
   
   or maybe.. suggestion with halfed SV

   
10. 01:54:756 (1,2,1,2,1) - you could create such a nice pyramid with them.. why is one placed in the right bottom corner? QQ okay xD I placed at the middle
11. 02:47:041 (2,3,1,2,1) - I smell a possible polygon pattern here..! O: I want to make a jump.. so.. anyway I stayed away from the polygon pattern now
12. 02:49:184 (5) and 02:50:898 (5) - I'd like if there were placed at 152|184 and 364|272 (much closer to the 4s). Idk why.. o.o keep this first xD, I think moving around in here is better
13. 02:56:898 (2) - I know this matches with 02:56:470 (1), but it'd look better if it's a 180° rotated version of 02:57:327 (3).
    similar thing here - 03:08:470 (1,2,3)! nice!, but I am not exactly rotated the same in the following one, its might a little bit broke the flow
14. 03:13:613 (1,2,1,2,1) - looks so random.. >: think of a nice pattern? alright

after this follows that stream-heavy part.. and I suck with streams and stuff like that, sooo.. >n<
in general I can say about that part that I'm missing some kind of structure or more repatitive patterns.
or maybe I'm just blind. lol I think I am.. xD
as for the last part (the "I BURN"-part! xD), I liked that, it's nice. owo I LOVE YAAAAAAANG!!!!!!

and with that.. I guess it's 2014 where you live.. wish you a happy new year too<3
HAPPY NEW YEAR!! and good luck getting this ranked approved!

hope I was of some help.. never looked at a marathon map before.. Dx
*squee*

1. Since this song is the extended remix version of this song ans also contain songs other than I Burn (Red like Roses, Mirror Mirror, and From Shadows), you might want to put something like a song list on the creator's word (since the tags are quite enormous already :b) It'll help people to find the other song title easier :3 don't forget to make them neat and nice to look at lol

1. 00:07:796 (2) - Well considering on how the similar song part before this, (i.e 00:03:510 (1,2) - for example) use a jump on it, havibg this one on a rather close distance feels a bit weird for me when I played it lol since I kinda expect a jump to be there too. So yeah, try ctrl g this one, so that the distance will be somewhat farther-any small jump will do the work owo and also, the pattern to 00:08:653 (3) - will add more variety to the flow too imo~
2. 01:07:834 (3) - the increasing speed of this slider is really surprising me actually o.o Since there aren't any distinct change in the background music (the BPM changed yeah, but the music is still as silent :3). So yeah, it doesn't really bothers me that much but you can try to NC here to make the readability better so that player won't stumble (like me lol). And beside, the bpm changed too so I think an NC will be better to distinguish 01:05:224 (1) - and 01:07:834 (3) - ouo
3. 01:27:748 - How about adding a note here? The harp (? xD) is still playing there, which you also followed on the last notes on 01:25:633 (1,2,3,4,1) -, so It make sense to be a not there :3 and also you can put it better by using anti jump just like you did on 00:52:796 (2,1) -, plays much better like that imo~
4. 01:39:970 (1) - Considering on how you use many circles on this part, having this one as a repeat feels a bit empty imo xD and also, as on 01:35:470 (5,6,7) - (which is a similar part with this one), I'd suggest to also make it into a triplet; that way, the play will become more inuitive and emphasize the backgrpund music better imo ouo
5. 01:47:899 (1,2,3) - I don't really like how the notes flowed on this part orz :< You see, the flow from (1)'s tail to (2) isn't really good here since you can't really use the slider leniency on (1) to reach (2), you have to move the cursor on a completely backward move to reach (2). See, unlike 01:49:613 (1,2) -, where you actually can reach (2) without moving the cursor on a completely backward as (1) slider, you can glide the cursor a bit left and you'll still reach (2) like this http://puu.sh/66tcP.jpeg I hope you do understand my point here lol sorry for being so absurd on this one :'D So yeah, my suggestion is to make 01:48:542 (2) - more reachable whlist making the flow better; Try moving it upward maybe? it'll still be a jump, but a more in a more reachable way :3 Try x168/y32 like in this pic
   
   try this one

   
6. 02:20:027 (1,2) - The flow here is a bit meh imo :b it doesn't play that good comparing to other sliders since this one uses a straight flow and therefore use smaller jumps, whilst other part (i.e 02:20:027 (1,2) - for instance) uses a circular flow, and then a small jump to the long slider. So yeah, I'd suggest to try using a circular flow here too :< You can try arranging the pattern a bit, try this one
   
   This

   
   With it, the pattern will become more creative imo, since it looked like a circular flow, but we can use the slider leniency to make a line through 02:20:455 (1) - xD but yeah, the decision is yours, but consider changing this one :3
   

   316,196,140027,70,0,L|268:180,1,40,4|0,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   252,297,140241,2,0,L|292:300,1,40,4|0,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   168,328,140455,102,0,L|88:320,1,80,4|8,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

7. 02:30:327 (4,5) - I find it a bit weird that this notes isn't a triplet imo, since you clrearly uses triplet for this similar parts like this (02:28:613 (5,6,7) - for instance). So yeah, consider using a note on 02:30:434 - to make this a triplet~
8. 02:35:041 (3,4,5,6) - Assuming you're following the drum here, (with different triplet pattern from before :b), you might also want to change the rhythm on 02:34:184 (1,2) - a bit to make them read easier owo Try changing (2) to 2 circles instead of a single slider; that way, it will emphasize that you followed the drum better than using the same slider rhythms like the thyrhm before this :3
9. 02:47:041 (2,3,1,2) - I find this jump a bit too sudden and slightly misleading to read imo o.o It mainly because of the combo division between the jumps, and another small part by how I'm still suck at playing lol So yeah, I'd suggest to change how you divide the combos here so that the jump will be easier to read. Try removing the NC at 02:47:470 (1) -, since I don't really find a reason for a NC to be there, and also with your NC pattern, there shouldn't be a NC there too right (Like how you did on 02:44:470 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - )? So yeah, the jumps'll be read better that way imo
10. 03:38:481 (3) - Feels a bit empty on this part because of the 1/2 sliders and the jumps are much smaller comparing to the others imo. You can try spice the rhythm a bit here by changing this slider to a circle + 1/4 slider just like you did on 03:36:837 (3,4) - (the part matches too lol), or you can use a complete triplet by using triple circle too here :3 Though the choice are yours~ I just feel this part can be made more harder imo xD
11. 03:47:316 - Hmm how about inserting a circle here? it will emphasize that you follow the background music better since you map the later part (on 03:47:522 (1,2,3) - ) also still following the background music :3 So yeah, consider adding a circle here that maybe stack with 03:45:878 (1) - hitburst on x192 y312; It'll look neater that way and the flow of the notes are better too since there aren't any pause there, and it fits really nicely imo
12. 03:54:439 (1,2,1,1,1) - This + SB effects = 2 awesome <3
13. 04:15:857 (2,3) - I personally didn't really like the flow from the repeat on (2) to the slider on (3) imo :< The flow uses a really sharp left turn here and the jump doesn't really help imo. Try arranging the pattern here a bit, I personally suggest to remove the jump here (doesn't go really well with how you placed the repeat slider), by using ctrl g on 04:16:679 (4) -, and then you can tidy up the pattern here by making (4) as straight slider since it goes quite well with the next slider at 04:17:090 (1) -. They should looked like this now
    
    owo

    

    378,119,256268,2,0,L|412:56,2,40,0|0|2,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
    307,155,256679,2,0,L|228:128,1,80,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
    244,260,257090,38,0,L|112:216,1,120

14. 05:13:277 - Instead of leaving this part empty, how about using a 0.5 3/4 slider here? :3 It went really well with the next slider at 05:13:602 (1) - and I think it will build a better tension from this part and the kiai, which I like owo. You can try placing them like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1219726
15. 05:14:250 - Yeeeeah love this kiai like omg <3
16. 06:26:673 (4) - How about putting a jump here by using a ctrl + g on this note? :3 I find it really fits considering the jump pattern you're using for this part (at 06:25:440 (1,2,3,4) - ), and by how the pitch are going up on 06:26:673 (4) - make the flow of the jump feels better ouo
17. Very nice map overall! Jumps and the rhythm suggestions are all making sense and the playability is great; average player can play this well;the HP 7 makes up for harder rhythm and make the map less deadly (since it's long too). So yeah, awesome job here Happy~

-Umi- wrote:

Yaho ! i'm here finally >.< hey yo

Marathon623

so colourful
- 00:01:796 (3) - use the same slider as 00:00:937 (2) - ? '-' nooo because I want to keep the flow to the next sliders
- 00:39:510 (1) - a slider until 00:40:365 - fit better imo try it :3 hmm, keep this Dx, as I think that the jump with a click is better that holding the slider, feels more comfortable with the music xD (idk
- 00:53:224 (1) - same here until 00:54:080 - same as above
- 01:16:829 (4) - move to 84,88 symmetry done
- 01:18:543 (4) - ^ move to 260,308 fixed
- 01:20:686 (2) - ^ 212,288 Umi u pro B)
- 01:22:614 (2) - ctrl g okay xD fits with music, applied to 01:23:471 (2) - as I want to keep the patten consistent
- 01:36:327 (2) - ^ then 01:36:756 (3) - ctrl g too and finally 01:37:184 (4) - ctrl g too ? >.< i prefer this pattern '-' alright
- 01:39:542 (2,3) - ctrl g done
- 02:34:613 (2) - i prefer in this way, not u ? '-' hmmm, keep this first for the consistency with 02:32:898 (2) -

SPOILER

- 02:42:327 (4) - replace by a triplet, as u did before both applied!
- 02:44:041 (4) - ^
- 03:05:898 (3) - move the tail of slider in the direction of 03:06:327 (4) - for a better flow sure
- 04:16:268 (3) - what about stack it with the tail of 04:15:447 (1) - not bad
- 04:35:494 (2) - stack on 04:35:980 (2) - head , better imo I might keep this for keeping the consistency as 04:36:629 (1,2) - , or 04:37:926 (1,2) - ..etc
- 04:54:953 (1,2) - you should put a slider instead and continu the previous pattern keep this as I heard the drums hit harder than before, so I prefer using single taps
- 06:58:199 (2) - ctrl g I think current flows better ;w;
- 07:20:326 (1,1) - improve a bit this blanket yesss
- 07:25:463 - add note we can clear hear "idk which intrument" lol okay xDD (idk too..

and that's all ! this is awesome happy >3<, i love it, good luck for approval :3 thankssssssss

And also Happy623 New year ! Umi new year for you tooo \o/

AnreFM wrote:

from the shaaaaaaaaaaaaadows weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee'll DEScend to the worlddddddd- yes blake is moe

Happyyyy sorry for the late mod, school and stuffs got in the way ;w;
nyem anyway here it is, hope this helps ouob

okay here goes

As usual, if there's anything unclear here or if the links are messed up somewhere, please state so and I'll try my best to explain it better \o/

[General]

1. Since this song is the extended remix version of this song ans also contain songs other than I Burn (Red like Roses, Mirror Mirror, and From Shadows), you might want to put something like a song list on the creator's word (since the tags are quite enormous already :b) It'll help people to find the other song title easier :3 don't forget to make them neat and nice to look at lol okay will add it

[BLAZING]

1. 00:07:796 (2) - Well considering on how the similar song part before this, (i.e 00:03:510 (1,2) - for example) use a jump on it, havibg this one on a rather close distance feels a bit weird for me when I played it lol since I kinda expect a jump to be there too. So yeah, try ctrl g this one, so that the distance will be somewhat farther-any small jump will do the work owo and also, the pattern to 00:08:653 (3) - will add more variety to the flow too imo~ hmm, did ctrl+g, but I didnt move anything to (3) xD
2. 01:07:834 (3) - the increasing speed of this slider is really surprising me actually o.o Since there aren't any distinct change in the background music (the BPM changed yeah, but the music is still as silent :3). So yeah, it doesn't really bothers me that much but you can try to NC here to make the readability better so that player won't stumble (like me lol). And beside, the bpm changed too so I think an NC will be better to distinguish 01:05:224 (1) - and 01:07:834 (3) - ouo hmm, u have a point, but I think lowering the sv is better than adding NC here
3. 01:27:748 - How about adding a note here? The harp (? xD) is still playing there, which you also followed on the last notes on 01:25:633 (1,2,3,4,1) -, so It make sense to be a not there :3 and also you can put it better by using anti jump just like you did on 00:52:796 (2,1) -, plays much better like that imo~ I understand your point but I will keep this as I am following the drums actually xD
4. 01:39:970 (1) - Considering on how you use many circles on this part, having this one as a repeat feels a bit empty imo xD and also, as on 01:35:470 (5,6,7) - (which is a similar part with this one), I'd suggest to also make it into a triplet; that way, the play will become more inuitive and emphasize the backgrpund music better imo ouo okay !!
5. 01:47:899 (1,2,3) - I don't really like how the notes flowed on this part orz :< You see, the flow from (1)'s tail to (2) isn't really good here since you can't really use the slider leniency on (1) to reach (2), you have to move the cursor on a completely backward move to reach (2). See, unlike 01:49:613 (1,2) -, where you actually can reach (2) without moving the cursor on a completely backward as (1) slider, you can glide the cursor a bit left and you'll still reach (2) like this http://puu.sh/66tcP.jpeg I hope you do understand my point here lol sorry for being so absurd on this one :'D So yeah, my suggestion is to make 01:48:542 (2) - more reachable whlist making the flow better; Try moving it upward maybe? it'll still be a jump, but a more in a more reachable way :3 Try x168/y32 like in this pic I totally understand you, fixed, thanks a lot for pointing this big thing out! <3, but I moved (2) to the right handside instead of left one in your pic, flow seems better imo
   
   try this one

   
6. 02:20:027 (1,2) - The flow here is a bit meh imo :b it doesn't play that good comparing to other sliders since this one uses a straight flow and therefore use smaller jumps, whilst other part (i.e 02:20:027 (1,2) - for instance) uses a circular flow, and then a small jump to the long slider. So yeah, I'd suggest to try using a circular flow here too :< You can try arranging the pattern a bit, try this one
   
   This

   
   With it, the pattern will become more creative imo, since it looked like a circular flow, but we can use the slider leniency to make a line through 02:20:455 (1) - xD but yeah, the decision is yours, but consider changing this one :3 okay! thanks!!
   

   316,196,140027,70,0,L|268:180,1,40,4|0,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   252,297,140241,2,0,L|292:300,1,40,4|0,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   168,328,140455,102,0,L|88:320,1,80,4|8,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

7. 02:30:327 (4,5) - I find it a bit weird that this notes isn't a triplet imo, since you clrearly uses triplet for this similar parts like this (02:28:613 (5,6,7) - for instance). So yeah, consider using a note on 02:30:434 - to make this a triplet~ done~
8. 02:35:041 (3,4,5,6) - Assuming you're following the drum here, (with different triplet pattern from before :b), you might also want to change the rhythm on 02:34:184 (1,2) - a bit to make them read easier owo Try changing (2) to 2 circles instead of a single slider; that way, it will emphasize that you followed the drum better than using the same slider rhythms like the thyrhm before this :3 fixed for this, looks nice
9. 02:47:041 (2,3,1,2) - I find this jump a bit too sudden and slightly misleading to read imo o.o It mainly because of the combo division between the jumps, and another small part by how I'm still suck at playing lol So yeah, I'd suggest to change how you divide the combos here so that the jump will be easier to read. Try removing the NC at 02:47:470 (1) -, since I don't really find a reason for a NC to be there, and also with your NC pattern, there shouldn't be a NC there too right (Like how you did on 02:44:470 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - )? So yeah, the jumps'll be read better that way imo removed
10. 03:38:481 (3) - Feels a bit empty on this part because of the 1/2 sliders and the jumps are much smaller comparing to the others imo. You can try spice the rhythm a bit here by changing this slider to a circle + 1/4 slider just like you did on 03:36:837 (3,4) - (the part matches too lol), or you can use a complete triplet by using triple circle too here :3 Though the choice are yours~ I just feel this part can be made more harder imo xD chose circle + 1/4 B)
11. 03:47:316 - Hmm how about inserting a circle here? it will emphasize that you follow the background music better since you map the later part (on 03:47:522 (1,2,3) - ) also still following the background music :3 So yeah, consider adding a circle here that maybe stack with 03:45:878 (1) - hitburst on x192 y312; It'll look neater that way and the flow of the notes are better too since there aren't any pause there, and it fits really nicely imo added, seems okay for me
12. 03:54:439 (1,2,1,1,1) - This + SB effects = 2 awesome <3 <3
13. 04:15:857 (2,3) - I personally didn't really like the flow from the repeat on (2) to the slider on (3) imo :< The flow uses a really sharp left turn here and the jump doesn't really help imo. Try arranging the pattern here a bit, I personally suggest to remove the jump here (doesn't go really well with how you placed the repeat slider), by using ctrl g on 04:16:679 (4) -, and then you can tidy up the pattern here by making (4) as straight slider since it goes quite well with the next slider at 04:17:090 (1) -. They should looked like this now applied, btw I changed position of (3) from Umi's mod, hope it won't affect much xD
    
    owo

    

    378,119,256268,2,0,L|412:56,2,40,0|0|2,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
    307,155,256679,2,0,L|228:128,1,80,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
    244,260,257090,38,0,L|112:216,1,120

14. 05:13:277 - Instead of leaving this part empty, how about using a 0.5 3/4 slider here? :3 It went really well with the next slider at 05:13:602 (1) - and I think it will build a better tension from this part and the kiai, which I like owo. You can try placing them like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1219726 quite gooooood, anyway followed 3/4 with 0.5sv slider, but curved the slider a bit xD
15. 05:14:250 - Yeeeeah love this kiai like omg <3 well I like Yang but Blake is great of coz<3
16. 06:26:673 (4) - How about putting a jump here by using a ctrl + g on this note? :3 I find it really fits considering the jump pattern you're using for this part (at 06:25:440 (1,2,3,4) - ), and by how the pitch are going up on 06:26:673 (4) - make the flow of the jump feels better ouo sure, I like jumpssss!
17. Very nice map overall! Jumps and the rhythm suggestions are all making sense and the playability is great; average player can play this well;the HP 7 makes up for harder rhythm and make the map less deadly (since it's long too). So yeah, awesome job here Happy~ \:D/ I am glad you like it!!

I feel that the mod is a bit too short considering the song is quite long; hope that helps! really like the mod, its very clear and detailed, help my map improved much!
anyway the map are amazing! It was really enjoyable! (though some streams really are a killer xp)
and even though I like the preview time at 05:14:250 - , I guess the current one fits better since it's more powerful and the song is I Burn so ;w; xD

Yeah, this is for approval right? you'll make it through; this map is lovely~
gggggooood luck Happy (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ☆☆～