18:19 zlfence: Excause me ,Can take a little of your time？
18:19 -Bakari-: why not? :)
18:19 zlfence: It is my first time to map a beatmap but I cant do it well
18:19 zlfence: Can you give me a little help？
18:19 -Bakari-: Sure!
18:20 zlfence: tks a lot！
18:20 *zlfence is listening to [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/274239 Kugimiya Rie - Dream On]
18:20 zlfence: you can solo it first.
18:20 zlfence: i will watch you- -
18:22 zlfence: Omg i have a little change it 
18:22 zlfence: But please solo it   thanks
18:22 -Bakari-: ok :)
18:26 -Bakari-: Pretty nice [Hard], good job!
18:28 zlfence: sorry my poor net
18:28 -Bakari-: that's ok, don't worry
18:28 -Bakari-: by the way, pretty nice [Hard]!
18:30 zlfence: IF you have some Good idea , please post to my thread
18:30 -Bakari-: Can't we discuss it in-game? 
18:30 -Bakari-: I'll post the chatlog later, if you want :)
18:31 zlfence: i think it must can be improved a lot -- 
18:31 zlfence: But my net is so poor- -
18:32 zlfence: it is right all the time    but this time seems so poor
18:32 -Bakari-: Well, it's one of your first maps. Of course, it needs a lot of work 
18:32 zlfence:  IRC mod is also well
18:32 -Bakari-: But it's not bad :)
18:33 zlfence: NoNoNo  it must ne the 1st beatmap
18:33 zlfence: other beatmap have not map yet
18:33 zlfence: only upload it 
18:33 -Bakari-: oh, ok
18:33 -Bakari-: let's start
18:33 zlfence: OK
18:34 -Bakari-: 00:17:339 - 00:19:229 - I feel sad about these beats. they're louder than the beats on blue ticks. 
18:34 -Bakari-: and you're ignoring them
18:34 -Bakari-: try to emphasize them a bit, even something like [http://puu.sh/4hdqj.jpg this] would be good
18:36 -Bakari-: 00:21:590 (6) - feels like it's better to put a new combo here. It'd make your comboing consistent and it fits with music and your pattern!
18:36 zlfence: UFO！ORZ。
18:37 -Bakari-: just let me know if I'm going too fast and I'll wait for you
18:37 -Bakari-: 00:35:762 (4,6) - finishes here? c'mon, they don't really fit
18:38 -Bakari-: there're no finish hitsounds in music, therefore it's better to avoid using them here :)
18:38 -Bakari-: Try to replace them with whistles, should fit better!
18:38 zlfence: yes
18:39 -Bakari-: 00:41:785 (3,4,5) - as a player, I don't like such stacks. 1/4 and 1/2 beats are stacked together
18:39 zlfence: OK
18:39 -Bakari-: it's kinda hard to hit, try to unstack it
18:39 -Bakari-: 00:45:210 (1) - are you sure about this new combo? feels kinda extra here :<
18:40 zlfence: i can be better
18:40 zlfence: this is fixed
18:40 zlfence: so i cant watch you just now
18:41 -Bakari-: oh, ok :)
18:41 -Bakari-: 00:48:989 - 00:49:225 - usually, you follow both vocals and music. here you ignored the music for no reason
18:41 -Bakari-: it feels weird, how about mapping these beats? 
18:42 -Bakari-: 00:50:288 (2) - by the way, you can remove this circle. It follows almost nothing in music, anyway!
18:42 zlfence:   double note is better!
18:42 zlfence: it sound better than before
18:43 zlfence: follow the vocal
18:43 -Bakari-: it's better to follow rhythm of the song, there's no need to add extra circles
18:44 -Bakari-: try to use 25% playback and you'll hear it!
18:44 zlfence: you should know i am a Chinese  my English is so poor
18:44 zlfence: but i can understand what you says
18:45 -Bakari-: c'mon, my english is poor too! just try to focus on modding and ignore spelling/grammar mistakes :)
18:45 -Bakari-: 00:45:210 (1) - probably this NC is already removed, but I'll mention it, anyway
18:46 zlfence: yes
18:46 zlfence: no problems
18:47 -Bakari-: 00:59:854 (3) - minor thing - making a [http://puu.sh/4hdN5.jpg square pattern] here would be a good idea
18:48 -Bakari-: 01:10:246 (5) - actually, if you follow vocals, this circle should be removed :P
18:49 -Bakari-: 01:13:553 (3,4,5) - this stack is a little bit tricky. howver, you're free to keep it! I kinda liked it :)
18:50 -Bakari-: 01:27:724 (6) - I've already mentioned similar pattern. Be consistent and place here a new combo, too!
18:50 zlfence: i am so so sorry i shoud AFK for 5 minutes
18:50 zlfence: i will back soon  but please go no !
18:50 zlfence: *on
18:50 -Bakari-: ok :3
18:55 -Bakari-: 01:38:353 (4,4) - feels overmapped. try to use 25% playback rate and see yourself
18:58 zlfence: i am back
18:58 -Bakari-: 01:48:509 - why do you ignore some random beats? it breaks consistency and plays weird :<
18:58 -Bakari-: you may say that you're followving vocals BUT
18:58 -Bakari-: 01:49:926 (4,5,6) - why these three are mapped, then?
19:01 zlfence: let me have a thiink
19:01 zlfence: think
19:02 zlfence:  i will take your advice
19:02 -Bakari-: 01:57:721 (7) - well, and maybe new combo here to emphasize vocals
19:02 -Bakari-: well, there's noneed to change your rhythm right now
19:02 -Bakari-: get more opinions, think about it yourself :)
19:03 -Bakari-: 02:22:757 (5) - pretty much the same, as above. NC here would work great!
19:06 zlfence: uhh- -
19:06 -Bakari-: 02:41:416 - here and untill 02:43:306 - you could place a spinner, it'd fit 
19:07 zlfence: sound good
19:09 -Bakari-: 03:09:760 (4,5,6,7) - feels too fast, you didn't place similar jumps before
19:10 -Bakari-: try to reduce distance of your jumps, that'd make sense with your patterns
19:10 -Bakari-: and maybe a new combo on 03:13:302 (8) - 
19:12 -Bakari-: oh, and you could set some custom combo colours
19:13 -Bakari-: for example, try [http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/963056 my colors]
19:14 zlfence: lolor?
19:14 zlfence: color?
19:14 zlfence: how to set it?
19:14 -Bakari-: Song Setup > Colours :)
19:19 -Bakari-: oh, and are you sure about your BPM?
19:22 -Bakari-: oh, and are you sure about your BPM?
19:23 zlfence: my poor net    sorry out of link
19:23 zlfence: it is says that i have used Vpn now
19:23 -Bakari-: oh :<
19:24 -Bakari-: oh, and are you sure about your BPM?
19:24 zlfence: yes
19:24 zlfence: 127
19:24 -Bakari-: it feels kinda off in the end of the song, but I'm not sure :D
19:24 zlfence: 。016
19:24 zlfence: 127.015
19:25 zlfence: pls go on !
19:25 -Bakari-: 01:03:160 (2) - NC bug
19:26 -Bakari-: osu! says that the circle is (1) but NC is not enabled
19:26 -Bakari-: it's better to fix it. 
19:26 -Bakari-: http://puu.sh/4heY8.png
19:26 zlfence: you are really a good and kindly person
19:27 zlfence: i see
19:27 zlfence: it is says that i should do NC it
19:28 -Bakari-: well, yea
19:28 -Bakari-: since it's a bug, we should fix it :)
19:28 -Bakari-: by the way, you can use AiBat, too!
19:28 zlfence: it is my first to know this byg
19:28 zlfence: bug
19:29 zlfence: after spinner i should NC it  even it looks like NC yet
19:30 -Bakari-: It's not like you have to do it
19:30 -Bakari-: but it's better to avoid bugs :>
19:31 zlfence: yes
19:31 zlfence: and pls go on
19:31 -Bakari-: nothing else to say about the [Hard] diff :)
19:31 -Bakari-: You can try to make it better visually, tho
19:32 zlfence: thanks for you Mod- -
19:32 -Bakari-: Should I post the log? :)