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[General]
I think it has a bit too many notes, so there is very little contrast between sections. I won't tell you to remove or add anything though, it's up to you if you want to bring more contrast (removing some notes from less active parts).
[Stuff]
I might have not pointed out all the things because the map repeats a lot, so if some suggestions apply to one spot, the same apply to the spot where stuff repeats.
Lets get this going. :3
[General]
I think it has a bit too many notes, so there is very little contrast between sections. I won't tell you to remove or add anything though, it's up to you if you want to bring more contrast (removing some notes from less active parts).
[Stuff]
- 01:31:074 (41,42,43) - I would prefer if this was kkd. I think it's too soon to end things with kdk because the song progression doesn't imply intensity just yet. (compared to 01:32:347 (51,52,53) - which is perfectly fine and fits nicely). Goes for 03:59:438 (1137,1138,1139) - as well, and any other occurence like this.
- 02:00:529 (246) - Finish fits nicely.
- 02:04:892 - You have this currently http://puu.sh/49dl5/66352ad3d9.jpg.
I would suggest a change which would bring more dynamics. Try this: http://puu.sh/49dsd/0e4aafa803.jpg
The reason I am suggesting this because there were just too many dons around, and trying to make interesting kat patterns out of the existing structure was near impossible.
This applies to 02:48:529 (605,606,607,608,609,610,611,612,613,614,615,616,617) - as well and other similar occurences. - 02:32:529 (487) - Finish fits nicely.
- 02:33:529 - consider adding a don, else the kdd before doesn't fit that well if you ask me.
- 02:35:620 (506,507,508) - dkd? I know ddk fits the vocals a bit better, but dkd brings balance between the drums and the vocals here since the drums are located at the first note. Also dkd here kicks ass if you ask me especially cause dkd k is much more fun to play than ddk k if you ask me (at least in circumstances like this). :p
- 02:43:801 (569,570,571,572,573,574) - Not sure if you did this for DT purposes, but I think kddkddk at 1/6 fits the best here instead of (kdd)ddd.
- 03:29:983 (918,919,920,921,922,923,924) - Instead of ddkdkkd I would recommend dkddkdk instead because the song builds up here so having the pattern end with kdk is quite intense. kdkkd is a nice way to finish a stream or a pattern but in this case I think it lacks intensity.
- 03:36:529 (971) - Should add a finish perhaps.
- 03:42:074 (1016) - d?
- 03:42:529 (1020,1021,1022) - Instead of ddk, tried using dkd? If you do this, you should also do it at 03:43:983 (1030,1031,1032) -, 03:45:438 (1040,1041,1042) - , etc, there are many of these (03:48:347 (1058,1059,1060) - as well, etc).
- 03:53:983 (1095) - Finish fits nicely.
- 03:59:801 (1140) - ^
- 03:59:983 (1141,1142,1143) - You should swap this with 04:01:438 (1152,1153,1154) so it's ddk the first time and dkk the 2nd time because the intensity rises later.
- 04:00:710 (1147) - I think this should be a d. 04:01:074 (1150) - as well, these don't strike me as that important to be kats and you get a lot better contrast in the next section if these are dons. I forgot to mention, but that applies to 01:31:620 (45,46,47) - and this section here as well.
- 04:20:710 (1276) - Should be a don imo, the pitch is significantly lower so it sounds better.
- 04:28:892 (1309) - Finish fits nicely.
- 04:48:983 (1471) - d? kdkkd ending here is awesome imo.
- 04:51:438 (1484,1485,1486) - Should stick with d d k imo. Having 04:54:347 (1500,1501,1502) - as d k d fits, but not here.
- 05:12:347 (1564) - I strongly recommend to remove this finisher, it brings emphasis to something that shouldn't be emphasized because the rhythm is not heavy here.
- 05:35:801 - Add a kat? It stabilizes the rhythm plus there is piano here.
- 05:48:892 - Drag the starting point of the break towards here in my opinion. It fixes how dim works.
- 06:17:438 (134,135,136,137,138) - kkddk fits much better because it transitions much better into the next section because the intensity rises again.
- 06:23:529 - d? It finishes a very nice stream here then which is kinda appropriate.
- 06:27:256 - Consider adding a d here and adding a k to 06:27:438. This stabilizes the rhythm and it doesn't feel empty.
- 06:33:074 - However, consider adding a k here and then another k at 06:33:256. Same reasons but this one is more intense so double kat is appropriate.
- 06:46:892 (327) - This should be a don for consistency reasons making it kkd (or having kdk at the end works too). It is also somewhat expected because you were exchanging patterns from kkk into kkd, so having it here would fit nicely. However, I can see that kkd D might be a bit awkward, so for variety instead of keeping kkk or changing to kkd, you could actually consider kdk as well.
- 06:50:710 (355) - It feels and sounds so much nicer if you have this as a don. The vocals have much more emphasis then and then you have a perfect 5 note stream ending that phrase.
- 07:09:983 (508) - Consider changing this into a kat. Again, kdk ending is better here because of the intensity it brings (in my opinion).
- 07:11:347 (519) - Consider changing this into a don. The main reason is that 07:10:892 (515,516,517) - creates a distinct rhythm that should repeat here I think and kkd is a bit too intense.
- 07:22:165 (611,612,613) - Refer to 03:42:529 (1020,1021,1022) - in this mod.
- 07:32:892 (682,683,684,685,686,687) - Instead of ddk kdk try d kdk k. I think it fits much better because it brings emphasis to the note at 07:33:074 - which is kinda the same as the note at 07:32:347 - which was expressed as kkd.
- 08:02:710 (905) - Finish fits nicely.
- 08:08:529 (944) - ^
- 08:42:529 (1196,1197,1198) - Instead of ddd I would prefer D D. There are more drums here which you can't map due to finishers and they make this ddd quite awkward.
I might have not pointed out all the things because the map repeats a lot, so if some suggestions apply to one spot, the same apply to the spot where stuff repeats.
Lets get this going. :3