Yoko Shimomura - A Twinkle in the Sky · forum

Loooctav

Joined January 2012

Topic Starter

Loooctav 2013-02-19T18:40:13+00:00

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on domingo, 24 de marzo de 2013 at 11:21:20

Artist: Yoko Shimomura
Title: A Twinkle in the Sky
Source: Kingdom Hearts II
Tags: smoothie guy disney square enix playstation two gummi ship
BPM: 117,99
Filesize: 1258kb
Play Time: 00:49
Difficulties Available:

Guy's Easy (2,41 stars, 55 notes)
Normal (3,3 stars, 62 notes)
Smoothie's Hard (4,43 stars, 91 notes)

Download: Yoko Shimomura - A Twinkle in the Sky
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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My First Map Ranked!
Special Thanks

Smoothie: For Guest Diff Smoothie's Hard
Guy: For Guest Diff Guy's Easy
Gonzvlo: For Timing

Mapset
Guy's Easy By:Guy
Normal By:ThoomyyxD
Smoothie's Hard By:Smoothie
Important Dates

: 27 February 2013 By mancusojuanmattos & Frostmourne

: 24 March 2013 By Frostmourne

: 24 March 2013 By Kurai
Modders

Lally
Zexous
Gonzvlo
jonathanlfj
Blue Dragon
tutuhaha
mancusojuanmattos
TheVileOne
Gonzvlo (Remod: Guy's Easy + Timing)
Teara
-Bakari-
TMAstraf
Andrea
kajiyatta
Melt
happy30
those
blissfulyoshi
SapphireGhost
Frostmourne &
Kurai

Last edited by Loooctav 2013-03-24T15:17:04+00:00, edited 91 times in total.

Smoothie

558 posts

Joined August 2011

Smoothie 2013-02-19T20:12:34+00:00

Alright, here is your requested hard diff~
I hope you like it x)

http://puu.sh/25dbQ

Loooctav

1,070 posts

Joined January 2012

Topic Starter

Loooctav 2013-02-19T20:16:22+00:00

Many Many Thanks!!!

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-02-19T23:23:06+00:00

normal irc mod

23:48 ThoomyyxD: hiiiii
23:48 ThoomyyxD: You can't create a mod for me plz
23:48 *ThoomyyxD is listening to [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/222435 Yoko Shimomura - A Twinkle in the Sky]
23:48 ThoomyyxD: Or IRC?
23:49 Lally: in 15 min irc ok? :3
00:06 Lally: ok first thing i don't like personally this color http://puu.sh/25iv0
00:07 ThoomyyxD: change=
00:07 ThoomyyxD: ?
00:07 Lally: if you want it's up to you
00:08 Lally: i say you the thinks that are for first obv and then i do a precise mod with spacing and hitsound ok? :3
00:08 Lally: 00:53:526 - add a 5% volume here
00:08 Lally: 60% volume in all diff is to much for me try with 50%
00:08 ThoomyyxD: Normal?
00:08 Lally: yap normal
00:09 ThoomyyxD: ok
00:09 ThoomyyxD: ok
00:09 ThoomyyxD: 50%
00:10 Lally: 00:36:991 (2) - only 1 clap in all diff remove it for costency
00:10 ThoomyyxD: ok
00:10 ThoomyyxD: sorry
00:10 ThoomyyxD: xd
00:11 Lally: 00:43:351 (4) - curve this slider because in all diff you don't have straight form
00:11 ThoomyyxD: more concerned with the whistle than with claps and sounding better
00:11 ThoomyyxD: I replace it with a curved?
00:12 Lally: uguu
00:12 ThoomyyxD: uguu=
00:12 ThoomyyxD: ?
00:12 Lally: yes
00:12 ThoomyyxD: ok
00:14 ThoomyyxD: http://puu.sh/25iJ4
00:14 ThoomyyxD: ?
00:14 Lally: you have a inconstency on leadin in your diff normal is : 1588 and hard : 1500 fix it on your diff
00:14 Lally: yup looks better
00:15 Lally: remove letterbox
00:15 Lally: no break = no letterbox
00:16 ThoomyyxD: fixed
00:17 Lally: 00:36:991 (2) - the next slider is a little bit to far
00:17 ThoomyyxD: idu
00:18 ThoomyyxD: i don't understand
00:18 Lally: 00:49:456 - i think you should add a 20% here because musig is going to be softer
00:18 Lally: i mean http://puu.sh/25iQE
00:18 Lally: the 00:36:991 (2) -
00:20 ThoomyyxD: ok fixed 2 errors :3
00:20 ThoomyyxD: What else?
00:20 Lally: 00:02:140 (1,2) - try something like http://puu.sh/25iTu
00:21 ThoomyyxD: I can ask you a favor? Other errors can leave a Mod forum please .. I have no more time, then when I check again and I give the mod kudosu
00:21 Lally: well i think is no much to say all other is fine
00:21 Lally: i post the log

[Hard]
00:08:245 - add a circle it feels empty
00:13:333 (1) - this slider touch HP drain

SPOILER

00:52:509 - i think you should add a spinner here is better as hear silenced objekts

good luck o3o

Smoothie

558 posts

Joined August 2011

Smoothie 2013-02-20T01:41:28+00:00

Lally wrote:
[Hard]
00:08:245 - add a circle it feels empty Done
00:13:333 (1) - this slider touch HP drain Fixed :3
SPOILER
00:52:509 - i think you should add a spinner here is better as hear silenced objekts Done

good luck o3o

Thanks for mod :3
http://puu.sh/25mEk

Loooctav

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Joined January 2012

Topic Starter

Loooctav 2013-02-20T01:46:38+00:00

Smoothie wrote:
Lally wrote:
[Hard]
00:08:245 - add a circle it feels empty Done
00:13:333 (1) - this slider touch HP drain Fixed :3
SPOILER
00:52:509 - i think you should add a spinner here is better as hear silenced objekts Done

good luck o3o
Thanks for mod :3
http://puu.sh/25mEk

Upload o3o

Zexous

713 posts

Joined July 2012

Zexous 2013-02-20T02:49:13+00:00

OMG it's the song that played when you were flying around worlds with the gummi ship ahhh nostalgia :')

Anyway modding.
This color denotes opinions that probably branch from my specific mapping style.
This color denotes issues that should really be solved (strong suggestions).

[General]
More difficulties? I don't think the BATs will look kindly on a relaxed 00:52 song with two difficulties. Also, since your Hard is from Smoothie, that makes only half of your entire mapset yours, and as per the ranking criteria:

The number of maps by any mapper should not exceed the number of maps by the uploader: this means that if you have 2 diffs, no guest mapper can have more than 2 diffs...

Which also doubles to say, the majority of the mapset should be yours.

[Normal]
The volume was kind of jarring, this mostly affected me at parts like 00:18:929 (3) - where you have the whole slider set to whistle, the "sliderslide", as it is named, kind of ruins the feel of the map. It's almost how old maps feel, with their overwhelming hitsounds.
00:02:649 (3) - Probably just me, but, although I love creative slider shapes, this shape kind of looks ugly and not neat to me, with the slider before it. I'd want to round that out.
00:36:991 (2,3) - This is a very sharp jump that is not readable by newbies. On my first playthrough with HD DT HR, this was the only part that I almost fumbled (the rest flowed perfectly - I still ended up getting SS on the first try

). Anyway, jumps like this are fun but Normals are not the place for them.
Other than that it's great

[Smoothie's Hard]
This is awesome ^_^

SPOILER

The volume really does feel too loud to me though, same issue as Normal, but kind of worse.
I literally cannot come up with anything else, very nice diff

I love Kingdom Hearts so good luck getting it ranked <3
(and when it gets ranked I'll be sure to improve that HD DT FL rank to SS

)

Gonzvlo

osu! Alumni

2,896 posts

Joined January 2010

Gonzvlo 2013-02-20T06:21:52+00:00

Continuando con el IRC mod...

|Timing|

Timing is way too off.
Offset needs -19ms (595ms)
BPM seems a bit iffy, gonna double check it later. (It'd be great if you ask for more opinions)

|Normal|

New Combos

00:17:393 (8,1) - De acuerdo al patrón que seguiamos de los NC, tienes que agregar un NC en (8) y remover el de (1)
00:20:952 (6) - Luego, si continuamos con esto, tienes que agregar uno aqui.
00:24:003 (1) - A continuacion, remover este.
00:26:037 (5) - Y agregar uno aqui. Pensé que sí habías entendido el patrón.
00:29:088 (6) - Agregar uno en este (6), y luego...
00:30:105 (1) - ... remover este.
00:33:156 (6) - A continuación, agergar uno aqui, y remover este 00:34:173 (1) -
Bueno suficiente de New Combo, creo que con esto puedes enteder el patrón en general. Revísalo desde el comienzo, presta atención a los ticks blancos grandes y a la música.

Hitsounds
00:00:614 (1,2,3,4,5) - Los hitsounds que usaste aqui, están perfectos.
00:04:681 (1,2,3,4) - Aquí, también, pero deberías agregar un Whistle al final de (1) y al comienzo de (3) y (4).
00:09:766 (3) - Si sigues tu patrón anterior, deberías agregar un Whistle al comienzo de esto.
00:12:817 (1) - Al igual que al comienzo de este.
00:14:851 (4) - Luego agregar uno aqui y también en ...
00:15:868 (6) - este lugar.
El ritmo de la canción es muy simple y repetitiva, creo que con esto puedes entender el patrón que tu comenzaste y que estoy intentando mejor. Simplemente repitelo, no hay problema ya que la canción es una repetición en sí.

Object Placement and Patterns
00:04:173 (4,5,1) - Sugiero que reemplazes el (4) y (5) por un slider para que no sean 2 circulos en 1/2 los que tengas que presionar, de está manera es más fácil y más adecuado para este nivel.
00:24:003 (4) - No es bueno que un slider tenga más de 1 repetición en el nivel más fácil ya que no resulta muy intuitivo a menos de que la música ayude, en este caso no. Por la tanto, es mejor que quites un repeat y luego agregues un círculo en el espacio.
En general, el flow está bien, los patrones está limpios, no hay mayor problema. Sin embargo, me gustaría ver patrones más definidos, es decir, intenta "formar" o "diseñar" algo, no simplemente pongas los objetos al azar, no sé si me entiendes. Básicamente te pido que lo hagas un poco más interesante.

|Smoothie's Hard|

I think I understand your combo patterns, looks creative and nice. I'm not completely sure about the time when Yellow starts but it should be fine, let's see what other modders think.
00:14:342 (2,3) - Unlike the previous patterns, this part doesn't flow very well, the movement feels too forced. I'd suggest to move (3) around or remove a repeat on (2) and then add a circle to join (2) and (3)
00:51:461 (4) - Whoops, no, this shouldn't happen. Most of the slider is covered by the previous object, you need to move this away.
00:51:969 (5) - This sudden jump doesn't make much sense, there's no music change or anything. I strongly suggest to fix this spacing.
00:52:478 (1) - This spinner is too long for the music. The music stops completely by the middle of it. If you wish to map this part, I'd strongly suggest to replace the spinner with a slider from here 00:52:478 - to 00:53:495 -

If you follow these suggestions the map should be free of major errors and it'd need a little more polishing before being eligible for a bubble.

Good luck!

Last edited by Gonzvlo 2013-02-20T06:22:10+00:00, edited 1 time in total.

Smoothie

558 posts

Joined August 2011

Smoothie 2013-02-20T16:37:02+00:00

Gonzvlo wrote:
|Smoothie's Hard|

I think I understand your combo patterns, looks creative and nice. I'm not completely sure about the time when Yellow starts but it should be fine, let's see what other modders think.
00:14:342 (2,3) - Unlike the previous patterns, this part doesn't flow very well, the movement feels too forced. I'd suggest to move (3) around or remove a repeat on (2) and then add a circle to join (2) and (3) Should be better now~
00:51:461 (4) - Whoops, no, this shouldn't happen. Most of the slider is covered by the previous object, you need to move this away. I seriously have no clue what happend there... however, fixed.
00:51:969 (5) - This sudden jump doesn't make much sense, there's no music change or anything. I strongly suggest to fix this spacing. I moved 00:51:461 (4) back where it was supposed to be <.<
00:52:478 (1) - This spinner is too long for the music. The music stops completely by the middle of it. If you wish to map this part, I'd strongly suggest to replace the spinner with a slider from here 00:52:478 - to 00:53:495 Done

Thanks~

http://puu.sh/25Dfv

Loooctav

1,070 posts

Joined January 2012

Topic Starter

Loooctav 2013-02-20T18:02:11+00:00

:33 Thanks Gonzvlo !

jonathanlfj

Elite Mapper

2,568 posts

Joined February 2010

jonathanlfj 2013-02-20T22:04:15+00:00

m4m~
very short and comfortable song

Black is suggestion
Blue is highly recommended
Red is unrankable

[General]
change audio-leadin to 1500ms on Normal (go into .osu file and manually edit it)
also close letterboxing on Smoothe's Hard
since you can't really search "2" for the tags, why not put "two"?

[Normal]
00:09:747 (3) - add whistle to slider end
00:13:815 (2) - whistle
00:18:900 (4) - take whistle off slider body, sounds unnecessarily loud
00:20:933 (7) - NC here instead of 00:21:950 (1)
00:23:984 (3) - take whistle off slider body
00:26:018 (5,6,7) - try building symmetry here:

SPOILER

00:28:052 (8,9,1) - as above

SPOILER

00:40:256 (7) - take whistle off slider body
00:41:272 (1) - ^
00:48:391 (4) - add whistle to slider head

[Smoothe's Hard]
00:05:679 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - make the formation like a perfect hexagon:

SPOILER

00:30:086 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - this time its a star:

SPOILER

00:32:120 (5,6) - also swap the whistle onto 00:32:628 (6) to follow what you did at 00:15:849 (4)
00:38:222 (1,2,3,4,5) - like above formation
00:48:391 (5,6) - swap whistle

Thats about it, good luck on ranking ^_^

Loooctav

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Topic Starter

Loooctav 2013-02-20T22:17:10+00:00

Thanks

Waiting Diff of Smoothie (I Love Smoothie!! XD)

Smoothie

558 posts

Joined August 2011

Smoothie 2013-02-20T22:57:46+00:00

jonathanlfj wrote:
very short and comfortable song

Black is suggestion
Blue is highly recommended
Red is unrankable

[Smoothe's Hard]
00:05:679 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - make the formation like a perfect hexagon: Done
SPOILER

00:30:086 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - this time its a star: Done
SPOILER
00:32:120 (5,6) - also swap the whistle onto 00:32:628 (6) to follow what you did at 00:15:849 (4) Sounds a bit weird...
00:38:222 (1,2,3,4,5) - like above formation Done
00:48:391 (5,6) - swap whistle Sounds better the way it is imo.

Thanks
http://puu.sh/25Ohy

Mismagius

9,239 posts

Joined July 2008

Mismagius 2013-02-20T23:49:48+00:00

[Normal]

00:04:154 (4) - Maybe remove whistle from slidertrack/end since you did the same thing on 00:02:120 (2)?
00:09:239 (2) - This doesn't need a whistle, since the pitch on the instrument you're following gets lower..
00:11:781 (5) - Add a new combo here and remove it from 00:12:798 (1), seems a bit better
00:13:815 (2) - Add a whistle here, sounds much better. Also, maybe add a new combo so this combo doesn't get too long
00:18:900 (4) - Remove this whistle at the end? Everytime the song did that, before, you didn't put a whistle, so...
00:23:984 (4) - Remove whistle from slidertrack, since you did it in every slider. Also sounds pretty bad.
00:26:781 (7) - Remove whistle? You did the same thing on 00:28:052 (9,10,1), and imo that sounds better.
00:31:611 (4) - Remove whistle since the pitch of the instrument goes down? Sounds a bit better.
00:33:137 (6) - Add a new combo. Combo is a bit too long and also follows music.
00:33:645 (7) - Following the logic you used in hitsounding this map, this shouldn't have a whistle. Sounds a bit too spamish imo.
00:36:950 (3) - same as before
00:40:256 (7,1) - Are sliderwhistles here on purpose? They sound pretty bad. It'd be better if you removed them.
00:43:052 (3) - Maybe remove whistle for the same reasons previously mentioned?
00:45:086 (6) - ^
00:48:391 (4) - Remove sliderwhistle, sounds pretty bad.

Cool difficulty, the hitsounds sound a bit weird in my opinion but that's just my ears.

[Smoothie's Hard]

00:02:628 (4) - Add new combo here? You did it on 00:04:408 (1), and that's pretty much the same thing happening in the music.
00:10:764 (5) - Same as ^.
00:13:306 (1) - In my opinion, this sounds better with the start without hitsounds and the ending with a whistle.
00:18:900 (4) - Same stuff as the other ones
00:25:001 (1,2) - Spacing here plays really weird. You could add a note at 00:25:764 (2) - between these notes to make spacing even.
00:27:035 (5) - Then again, add a new combo here.
00:35:171 (4) - ^
00:43:306 (6) - ^
00:52:459 (6) - Move the slider endpoint to x:52 so it's properly aligned :<

Really nicely mapped diff, has a nice flow. Some shapes like the stars could improve a bit, but that's just nazi.

Loooctav

1,070 posts

Joined January 2012

Topic Starter

Loooctav 2013-02-21T20:52:35+00:00

Blue Dragon wrote:
[Normal]

00:04:154 (4) - Maybe remove whistle from slidertrack/end since you did the same thing on 00:02:120 (2)? Okay
00:09:239 (2) - This doesn't need a whistle, since the pitch on the instrument you're following gets lower.. ^
00:11:781 (5) - Add a new combo here and remove it from 00:12:798 (1), seems a bit better Nope. Sorry
00:13:815 (2) - Add a whistle here, sounds much better. Also, maybe add a new combo so this combo doesn't get too long Add Whistle
00:18:900 (4) - Remove this whistle at the end? Everytime the song did that, before, you didn't put a whistle, so... Okkiii
00:23:984 (4) - Remove whistle from slidertrack, since you did it in every slider. Also sounds pretty bad. ^
00:26:781 (7) - Remove whistle? You did the same thing on 00:28:052 (9,10,1), and imo that sounds better. ^
00:31:611 (4) - Remove whistle since the pitch of the instrument goes down? Sounds a bit better. ^
00:33:137 (6) - Add a new combo. Combo is a bit too long and also follows music. ^
00:33:645 (7) - Following the logic you used in hitsounding this map, this shouldn't have a whistle. Sounds a bit too spamish imo. Ok.
00:36:950 (3) - same as before ^
00:40:256 (7,1) - Are sliderwhistles here on purpose? They sound pretty bad. It'd be better if you removed them. ^
00:43:052 (3) - Maybe remove whistle for the same reasons previously mentioned? ^
00:45:086 (6) - ^ <-- ^
00:48:391 (4) - Remove sliderwhistle, sounds pretty bad. Delete Whistle

Cool difficulty, the hitsounds sound a bit weird in my opinion but that's just my ears.

Thanks For Mod!!!

Smoothie

558 posts

Joined August 2011

Smoothie 2013-02-21T21:19:15+00:00

Blue Dragon wrote:
[Smoothie's Hard]

00:02:628 (4) - Add new combo here? You did it on 00:04:408 (1), and that's pretty much the same thing happening in the music.
00:10:764 (5) - Same as ^.
00:13:306 (1) - In my opinion, this sounds better with the start without hitsounds and the ending with a whistle.
00:18:900 (4) - Same stuff as the other ones
00:25:001 (1,2) - Spacing here plays really weird. You could add a note at 00:25:764 (2) - between these notes to make spacing even.
00:27:035 (5) - Then again, add a new combo here.
00:35:171 (4) - ^
00:43:306 (6) - ^
00:52:459 (6) - Move the slider endpoint to x:52 so it's properly aligned :<
Fixed all

Really nicely mapped diff, has a nice flow. Some shapes like the stars could improve a bit, but that's just nazi. The star shapes should be better now.

Thanks~

SPOILER

osu file format v12

[General]
AudioFilename: A Twinkle In The Sky.mp3
AudioLeadIn: 1500
PreviewTime: 8754
Countdown: 0
SampleSet: Soft
StackLeniency: 0.7
Mode: 0
LetterboxInBreaks: 0

[Editor]
DistanceSpacing: 1.2
BeatDivisor: 2
GridSize: 4

[Metadata]
Title:A Twinkle in the Sky
TitleUnicode:A Twinkle in the Sky
Artist:Yoko Shimomura
ArtistUnicode:Yoko Shimomura
Creator:ThoomyyxD
Version:Smoothie's Hard
Source:Kingdom Hearts II
Tags:smoothie disney squarenix kingdom hearts 2 playstation 2 gumi ship
BeatmapID:222457
BeatmapSetID:79775

[Difficulty]
HPDrainRate:6
CircleSize:4
OverallDifficulty:6
ApproachRate:7
SliderMultiplier:1.3
SliderTickRate:1

[Events]
//Background and Video events
0,0,"BG.jpg",0,0
//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples
//Background Colour Transformations
3,100,163,162,255

[TimingPoints]
614,508.474576271186,4,2,0,70,1,0
49427,-100,4,2,0,60,0,0
50444,-100,4,2,0,50,0,0
51461,-100,4,2,0,40,0,0
52478,-100,4,2,0,30,0,0


[Colours]
Combo1 : 240,5,5
Combo2 : 137,139,105
Combo3 : 255,255,0

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320,256,16885,6,0,P|292:308|308:380,1,130,0|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
376,320,17902,2,0,L|440:192,1,130,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
464,132,18664,1,0,0:0:0:0:
392,112,18919,6,0,L|356:176,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
284,156,19427,2,0,L|324:88,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
260,48,19936,2,0,B|216:40|216:40|188:68|120:68,1,130,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
64,40,20698,5,0,0:0:0:0:
64,40,20952,2,0,P|60:76|80:120,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
4,144,21461,2,0,P|32:172|72:180,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
132,168,21969,6,0,P|196:144|260:184,1,130,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
348,296,22986,2,0,P|284:320|220:280,1,130,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
368,216,24003,2,0,P|420:259|418:334,1,130,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
292,236,25020,6,0,P|303:168|369:133,1,130,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
428,124,25783,1,0,0:0:0:0:
392,56,26037,2,0,P|324:64|268:96,1,130,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
208,140,26800,1,0,0:0:0:0:
148,188,27054,6,0,P|132:152|136:120,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
184,68,27563,2,0,P|216:64|268:92,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
284,144,28071,2,0,P|276:176|248:204,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
196,248,28580,5,2,0:0:0:0:
196,248,28834,1,0,0:0:0:0:
148,308,29088,2,0,P|124:280|120:240,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
156,184,29597,2,0,P|188:172|236:188,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
308,231,30105,5,2,0:0:0:0:
414,362,30613,1,0,0:0:0:0:
471,274,31122,1,2,0:0:0:0:
313,335,31630,1,0,0:0:0:0:
406,194,32139,1,2,0:0:0:0:
414,362,32647,1,0,0:0:0:0:
144,284,33156,6,0,B|132:236|132:236|156:200|144:148,1,130,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
88,88,34173,2,0,P|152:68|224:100,1,130,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
224,164,34936,1,0,0:0:0:0:
224,164,35190,6,0,P|232:204|232:236,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
272,296,35698,2,0,L|316:240,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
308,168,36207,2,0,P|376:192|388:256,1,130,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
356,312,36969,5,0,0:0:0:0:
356,312,37224,2,0,L|308:380,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
272,296,37732,2,0,L|232:352,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
172,300,38241,5,2,0:0:0:0:
75,161,38749,1,0,0:0:0:0:
72,330,39258,1,2,0:0:0:0:
173,195,39766,1,0,0:0:0:0:
12,245,40275,1,2,0:0:0:0:
172,300,40783,1,0,0:0:0:0:
292,96,41291,5,2,0:0:0:0:
292,96,41546,1,0,0:0:0:0:
292,96,41800,2,0,L|364:96,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
424,144,42308,2,0,P|448:204|416:272,1,130,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
372,204,43071,1,0,0:0:0:0:
372,204,43325,6,0,L|308:204,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
240,168,43834,2,0,P|232:200|240:236,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
296,284,44342,1,2,0:0:0:0:
156,216,44851,6,0,P|164:180|152:136,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
88,180,45359,2,0,P|76:152|48:128,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
12,200,45868,6,0,B|0:248|0:248|24:284|8:348,1,130,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
168,332,46885,1,0,0:0:0:0:
256,204,47393,1,2,0:0:0:0:
344,332,47902,1,0,0:0:0:0:
176,244,48410,1,2,0:0:0:0:
336,244,48919,1,0,0:0:0:0:
196,172,49427,6,0,P|256:152|320:176,1,NaN,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
256,356,50444,2,0,L|256:208,1,130,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
196,172,51207,1,0,0:0:0:0:
160,240,51461,2,0,L|120:300,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
104,368,51969,2,0,P|76:356|48:320,1,65,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
52,252,52478,2,0,P|108:148|52:16,1,260,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

Loooctav

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Topic Starter

Loooctav 2013-02-22T01:31:37+00:00

Thanks Smoothie

I Love You x3

tutuhaha

3,000 posts

Joined October 2010

tutuhaha 2013-02-23T02:49:42+00:00

M4M~

You need add one more easy diff
now normal diff is 3.45 star rating
you need a diff lower than 3.00 star rating

Normal
offest 595
Hard
offest 614
need be same offest in one map

Normal
AudioLeadIn: 1588
Hard
AudioLeadIn: 1500
need have same LeadIn

Now you have two "2" in your tag, delete one please

00:41:272 (1) - this part SB just so hurt my eyes Orz

[Normal]

[Events]
//Background and Video events
0,0,"BG.jpg",0,0
//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples

//Background Colour Transformations
3,100,163,162,255

[Hard]

[Events]
//Background and Video events
0,0,"BG.jpg",1,1
//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples

//Background Colour Transformations
3,100,0,0,0
maybe they need be same number

[Normal]
00:25:001 (5) - NC
00:37:205 (4) - ^

[Hard]
change Sample to S:C1
00:03:666 Object isn't snapped!
00:05:192 Object isn't snapped!
00:05:192 Object's end is not snapped!
00:06:719 Object isn't snapped!

^copy form AiMod~

Loooctav

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Loooctav 2013-02-25T13:00:25+00:00

aiMod? Plz.. x3
Thanks for Mod! Upload :3

Smoothie

558 posts

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Smoothie 2013-02-25T16:48:18+00:00

Fixed~
Thanks

http://puu.sh/28d8v

Loooctav

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Loooctav 2013-02-26T11:12:42+00:00

Thanks!

Guy

Former osu! Champion: 2014

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Guy 2013-02-26T14:16:43+00:00

finished :3

Guy's Easy

Loooctav

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Loooctav 2013-02-26T14:50:41+00:00

Thaaanks

mancuso_JM_

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mancuso_JM_ 2013-02-26T20:19:56+00:00

I'll Mod the GDs!

IRC Mod in Normal

15:27 mancusojuanmattos: Primero y antes que nada.. aumentaria en 1 tick el Overall Difficulty
15:28 ThoomyyxD: Ok..
15:28 ThoomyyxD: que es eso? x3
15:28 mancusojuanmattos: se hace un poquito mas complicado para hacer 300 y esas cosas
15:28 mancusojuanmattos: y para ser una Normal estaba bastante bajo
15:28 ThoomyyxD: aaahh
15:29 ThoomyyxD: ok
15:29 ThoomyyxD: si 
15:29 ThoomyyxD: sake 98% :C
15:29 ThoomyyxD: no 100 x3
15:29 mancusojuanmattos: xD
15:29 mancusojuanmattos: 00:04:681 (1) - Whistle al final del Slider
15:30 ThoomyyxD: Fixed
15:30 ThoomyyxD: ~
15:32 mancusojuanmattos: 00:06:715 (3,4) - Te propongo unos cambios en este patron
15:32 ThoomyyxD: como cuales?
15:32 mancusojuanmattos: actualmente al final del Slider (4) no hay nada que necesite ser seguido
15:32 mancusojuanmattos: entonces, agrega un Reverse Arrow en (3)
15:33 mancusojuanmattos: luego.. debes arreglar el Spacing entre las Notas..
15:33 mancusojuanmattos: ahora te doy un screenshooy
15:33 mancusojuanmattos: screenshoot*
15:34 mancusojuanmattos: ademas, las Notas (1,2) estan en un patron desprolijo en mi opinion
15:34 mancusojuanmattos: debajo del Slider (3).. 
15:34 ThoomyyxD: espero el screnshot x3
15:34 mancusojuanmattos: buee.. en general hace esto --> http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/630941
15:34 ThoomyyxD: es algo enredado
15:35 mancusojuanmattos: avisame cuando estes listo
15:35 ThoomyyxD: xmm
15:36 ThoomyyxD: x:y: del slider 3?
15:36 mancusojuanmattos: el Slider (3) esta donde estaba antes (x:440 y:136)
15:36 mancusojuanmattos:  La nota (1) esta en x:240 y:228
15:37 mancusojuanmattos: y la Nota (2) esta en x:332 y:168
15:37 ThoomyyxD: Cambiare y vere si esta bien
15:38 ThoomyyxD: Wiii tengo una estrella mas! :D
15:38 mancusojuanmattos: sep :)
15:38 ThoomyyxD: -cloud me la dio :D
15:38 ThoomyyxD: necesito mas estrellas
15:38 ThoomyyxD: si me da una estrella Smoothie
15:38 ThoomyyxD: sirve?
15:39 mancusojuanmattos: sip..
15:39 mancusojuanmattos: pero dale
15:39 mancusojuanmattos: vamos a seguir con el IRC..
15:39 ThoomyyxD: estoy en eso
15:39 mancusojuanmattos: ok..
15:39 ThoomyyxD: estoy arreglando
15:39 mancusojuanmattos: entendiste lo que tenias que hacer
15:40 mancusojuanmattos: no?
15:40 ThoomyyxD: see
15:40 mancusojuanmattos: el Slider (4) tiene que ser eliminado
15:40 mancusojuanmattos: no me acuerdo si lo mencione xD
15:40 ThoomyyxD: si lo menciono
15:42 ThoomyyxD: Listo
15:42 ThoomyyxD: ya la subi con el cambio que me dijo
15:43 mancusojuanmattos: ahora si :)
15:43 mancusojuanmattos: en ese Slider (3) agrega whistle al comienzo y al final del Slider
15:43 mancusojuanmattos: se eliminaron accidentalmente creo
15:43 ThoomyyxD: ya la subi
15:44 ThoomyyxD: a lo siento
15:44 ThoomyyxD: creei que no lo abia escrito
15:44 ThoomyyxD: listo
15:44 ThoomyyxD: Fixed~
15:44 mancusojuanmattos: bien.. sigamos
15:45 mancusojuanmattos: 00:12:817 (1,2) - Yo eliminaria el new combo de (1) y se lo agregaria en (2)
15:45 mancusojuanmattos: por simetria, este cambio hace el patron mas vistoso
15:46 ThoomyyxD: No entendi
15:46 mancusojuanmattos: Simple Remove el New Combo de (1) 
15:46 mancusojuanmattos: y luego agregaselo a (2), es decir la siguiente
15:46 mancusojuanmattos: nota
15:47 ThoomyyxD: aa ok
15:47 ThoomyyxD: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/630959
15:47 ThoomyyxD: así dice ud?
15:47 mancusojuanmattos: exactamente
15:48 ThoomyyxD: :D
15:50 ThoomyyxD: aFK?
15:50 ThoomyyxD: Aloo?
15:50 mancusojuanmattos: no, no
15:50 mancusojuanmattos: estoy
15:51 mancusojuanmattos: 00:15:868 (6,7,1) - Muchas Notas en este patron, ademas que el final del Slider (7) esta sobre un downbeat (Linea blanca grande)
15:51 mancusojuanmattos: 00:15:868 (6,7,1) - Muchas Notas en este patron, ademas que el final del Slider (7) esta sobre un downbeat (Linea blanca grande)
15:51 mancusojuanmattos: lo cual esta tecnicamente mal.
15:52 mancusojuanmattos: quiero que intentes un ritmo mas o menos asi
15:52 mancusojuanmattos: http://up.ppy.sh/files/thom-0.jpg
15:52 ThoomyyxD: 6,7,21?
15:52 ThoomyyxD: cre que ahi algo que no menciono
15:53 mancusojuanmattos: (6,7,1).
15:53 mancusojuanmattos: (6) es un Slider que empieza en 00:15:868 - y termina en 00:16:376 -
15:54 mancusojuanmattos: mientras que (1) empieza en 00:16:885 y termina en 00:17:393
15:55 mancusojuanmattos: acordate que (6) debe comenzar en x:140 y:240 para mantener la simetria
15:55 ThoomyyxD: lo siento
15:55 ThoomyyxD: es que tube que atender un pequeñol
15:55 ThoomyyxD: intervenido x3
15:56 mancusojuanmattos: lol
15:56 mancusojuanmattos: entendiste lo que tenes que hacer?
15:56 ThoomyyxD: No :C
15:57 mancusojuanmattos: viste el screenshoot?
15:57 ThoomyyxD: see
15:57 ThoomyyxD: osea debo eliminar
15:57 ThoomyyxD: 00:17:393 (1)
15:57 mancusojuanmattos: elimina (6,7,1)
15:57 ThoomyyxD: (Tengo 4 Estrellas! :D Faltan menos)
15:57 mancusojuanmattos: y hace de nuevo el patron con el screenshoot que te di
15:58 mancusojuanmattos: (6) es un Slider que empieza en 00:15:868 - y termina en 00:16:376 -
15:58 ThoomyyxD: ok
15:58 mancusojuanmattos: mientras que (1) empieza en 00:16:885- y termina en 00:17:393-
15:58 mancusojuanmattos: Parece reiterativo xD
15:59 ThoomyyxD: Ahora le entendi
15:59 mancusojuanmattos: :).. Avisame cuando este listo, asi sigo
16:02 ThoomyyxD: ya lo subi
16:02 ThoomyyxD: reivse
16:03 mancusojuanmattos: te falto algo..
16:03 ThoomyyxD: queeepe..
16:03 mancusojuanmattos: elimina (1) en 00:17:393
16:03 mancusojuanmattos: y agrega un Slider que empiece en 00:16:885 - y termine en 00:17:393 -
16:04 ThoomyyxD: listo lo elimine
16:04 mancusojuanmattos: este nuevo Slider tiene que tener un New Combo
16:06 ThoomyyxD: En donde le pongo El new combo?
16:06 ThoomyyxD: 00:17:902
16:06 ThoomyyxD: Aqui?
16:07 ThoomyyxD: ?
16:07 mancusojuanmattos:  no, en el nuevo Slider que agregaste en 00:16:885 -
16:09 ThoomyyxD: Listo
16:09 ThoomyyxD: revise
16:09 ThoomyyxD: arregle es spacing
16:09 ThoomyyxD: y me costo x3
16:09 mancusojuanmattos: Ahora si estoy de acuerdo..
16:10 mancusojuanmattos: arreglemos los Hitsounds ahora..
16:10 mancusojuanmattos: 00:15:868 (5,1) - Whistle al comienzo de ambos Sliders
16:11 ThoomyyxD: entonces los circles estan bien?
16:11 mancusojuanmattos: el resto esta bien
16:11 ThoomyyxD: :D
16:11 ThoomyyxD: ok
16:11 ThoomyyxD: me da unos minutos
16:11 ThoomyyxD: debo ayudar a mi hermano en el negocio
16:11 mancusojuanmattos: ok
16:11 mancusojuanmattos: avisame cuando vuelvas..
16:17 ThoomyyxD: uff.
16:17 ThoomyyxD: estubo fuerte la cosa
16:17 ThoomyyxD: x3
16:17 ThoomyyxD: ya liso
16:17 ThoomyyxD: agregue lo que me dijo
16:17 ThoomyyxD: lo de los whistke
16:18 mancusojuanmattos: bien..
16:18 ThoomyyxD: ahora que mas..
16:18 ThoomyyxD: x3
16:19 ThoomyyxD: Veo su estado y dice modding Hard?
16:19 ThoomyyxD: pero si solo ahi smoothie's hard
16:19 mancusojuanmattos: Hard?
16:20 mancusojuanmattos: yo veo Normal xD
16:20 ThoomyyxD: ayayay
16:20 ThoomyyxD: ojala esta cancion se pueda ir al rankingf
16:21 mancusojuanmattos: 00:17:902 (2) - *Un poco Nazi* Este Slider puede ser mejor.. Move el punto medio del Slider a x:428 y:168 y el ultimo a x:388 y:204
16:21 mancusojuanmattos: 00:17:902 (2) - *Un poco Nazi* Este Slider puede ser mejor.. Move el punto medio del Slider a x:428 y:168 y el ultimo a x:388 y:204
16:22 mancusojuanmattos: Luego arregla el Spacing con (3) desactivando el Grid Snap. solo el Distance snap tiene que estar activado esta vez
16:22 mancusojuanmattos: Luego arregla el Spacing con (3) desactivando el Grid Snap. solo el Distance snap tiene que estar activado esta vez
16:23 ThoomyyxD: donde debe estar el (3) en x:y:
16:23 mancusojuanmattos: x:333 y:193
16:24 ThoomyyxD: 333 193?
16:25 ThoomyyxD: http://puu.sh/28Mjn
16:25 ThoomyyxD: qeuda aspu
16:25 mancusojuanmattos: sipi
16:25 ThoomyyxD: okk
16:26 mancusojuanmattos: 00:24:003 (4) -El Whistle en el cuerpo del Slider es molesto, eliminalo..
16:26 mancusojuanmattos: en su lugar agrega el Whistle al comienzo del Slider nada mas
16:26 ThoomyyxD: cuerpo?
16:26 ThoomyyxD: inicio
16:26 ThoomyyxD: o fin
16:26 ThoomyyxD: ?
16:27 mancusojuanmattos: cliquea en el Slider, y elimina ese Whistle
16:27 ThoomyyxD: listo
16:27 mancusojuanmattos: cliquea en el comienzo del Slider y agrega un Slider ahi
16:27 ThoomyyxD: Ahora donde lo djeo?
16:27 ThoomyyxD: ok
16:27 ThoomyyxD: http://puu.sh/28MnW
16:28 mancusojuanmattos: bien :3
16:28 mancusojuanmattos: 00:25:020 (5) - El combo se te vuelve medio largo comparado con el Resto, agrega un New Combo en esta Nota
16:28 mancusojuanmattos: 00:25:020 (5) - El combo se te vuelve medio largo comparado con el Resto, agrega un New Combo en esta Nota
16:29 ThoomyyxD: Listoca
16:30 mancusojuanmattos: 00:40:275 (7) - Whistle al comienzo del Slider
16:30 ThoomyyxD: Ecolecua..
16:30 ThoomyyxD: x3
16:30 ThoomyyxD: listo
16:30 mancusojuanmattos: 00:48:410 (4) - Aca tambien
16:30 ThoomyyxD: Listo :3
16:31 mancusojuanmattos: basicamente ese es mi IRC mod.. no tengo mucho mas para decir..
16:31 mancusojuanmattos: en un rato completo el resto de las dificultades por foro
16:31 ThoomyyxD: la cancion esta bien echa? x33333
16:32 mancusojuanmattos: en general si, mas viendo que sos nuevo en el mapeo
16:32 ThoomyyxD: :DDDDD
16:32 ThoomyyxD: x3
16:32 ThoomyyxD: ojala esto se valla al ranking
16:32 mancusojuanmattos: en un futuro iras aprendiendo mas cosas, pero la verdad que hiciste un buen trabajo

[General:]

• The offset is wrong in 614. But, I also think that the Offset provided by Gonzvlo is wrong too, I think that (-19) is way too much. Testing a bit the offset, I find coherent if you use Offset: 606 (-8 on current)
*Note: I'll mod the map with the current offset, so 1st of all fix the mod and then change the offset.*

[Guy's Easy:]

• 00:05:698 (2) - *Nazi* Around all the curve Sliders, It gives a better transition if you make this Slider curve, in addition you can provide a good Blanket to the next Slider (4). Well, I tried this:

Screenshoot + Code

212,288,5698,2,0,L|316:288,2,90,2|0|2,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

• 00:19:427 (2) - Hmm.. I think that you are missing a Whistle at the Slider end because it sounds really fitting in there
• 00:32:647 (5) - I think that this Whistle sounds annoying, I'd remove it from this Note.
• 00:49:554 (Spin) - I think that a Whistle in this Slider sounds really fitting.

- This diff. is very well done. Well it is a short and constant song, but tho.. Good Job, Guy

[Smoothie's Hard:]

• 00:01:376 (x) - Add a Note here, for 2 Reasons. 1st- fits properly with the song and 2nd - I don't like the spacing that you did between (1,2) just to make a perfect blanket, with the note you will fix that properly
• 00:16:885 (1) - I think that the Whistle fits better at the beginning of the Slider instead of at the end
• 00:28:071 (3,1) - The usage of 1/2 is not correct here, if you listen properly the song, you will notice that there isn't anything to be followed at 00:28:325. So, I suggest you to remove (1) and the move the Slider end (3) till this place (So, (3) will start in 00:28:071 and have to finish in 00:28:580)
• 00:30:105 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - When you do patterns like this one, try making the spacing consistent between the Notes, for example the Spacing between (2,3) plays preety bad since it is minor than the other Notes spacing. (Check the pattern that you did in 00:38:241 (1,2,3,4,5,6) because it is perfectly spaced)
• 00:33:919 (x) - Add a Note as I explained in my 1st suggestion in this diff.

Last Thing: Try adding a Spinner (at least) to make a variety in the Score, it is a Simple Hard, so if the map is ranked we will see a lot of similar scores by players if you don't add a Spinner.

- Good job in this diff too :3

That's all that I have. Good Map in general! :3
Good Luck, Thoomyy!

Smoothie

558 posts

Joined August 2011

Smoothie 2013-02-26T20:46:46+00:00

All fixed
Thanks

http://puu.sh/28QvY

Loooctav

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Loooctav 2013-02-27T01:08:15+00:00

Many Many Thanks Mancuso x3....
Waiting Diff of Guy.

Guy