Yoko Shimomura - A Twinkle in the Sky · forum

Smoothie

Joined August 2011

Smoothie 2013-02-20T16:37:02+00:00

Gonzvlo wrote:
|Smoothie's Hard|

I think I understand your combo patterns, looks creative and nice. I'm not completely sure about the time when Yellow starts but it should be fine, let's see what other modders think.
00:14:342 (2,3) - Unlike the previous patterns, this part doesn't flow very well, the movement feels too forced. I'd suggest to move (3) around or remove a repeat on (2) and then add a circle to join (2) and (3) Should be better now~
00:51:461 (4) - Whoops, no, this shouldn't happen. Most of the slider is covered by the previous object, you need to move this away. I seriously have no clue what happend there... however, fixed.
00:51:969 (5) - This sudden jump doesn't make much sense, there's no music change or anything. I strongly suggest to fix this spacing. I moved 00:51:461 (4) back where it was supposed to be <.<
00:52:478 (1) - This spinner is too long for the music. The music stops completely by the middle of it. If you wish to map this part, I'd strongly suggest to replace the spinner with a slider from here 00:52:478 - to 00:53:495 Done

Thanks~

http://puu.sh/25Dfv

Loooctav

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Topic Starter

Loooctav 2013-02-20T18:02:11+00:00

:33 Thanks Gonzvlo !

jonathanlfj

Elite Mapper

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Joined February 2010

jonathanlfj 2013-02-20T22:04:15+00:00

m4m~
very short and comfortable song

Black is suggestion
Blue is highly recommended
Red is unrankable

[General]
change audio-leadin to 1500ms on Normal (go into .osu file and manually edit it)
also close letterboxing on Smoothe's Hard
since you can't really search "2" for the tags, why not put "two"?

[Normal]
00:09:747 (3) - add whistle to slider end
00:13:815 (2) - whistle
00:18:900 (4) - take whistle off slider body, sounds unnecessarily loud
00:20:933 (7) - NC here instead of 00:21:950 (1)
00:23:984 (3) - take whistle off slider body
00:26:018 (5,6,7) - try building symmetry here:

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00:28:052 (8,9,1) - as above

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00:40:256 (7) - take whistle off slider body
00:41:272 (1) - ^
00:48:391 (4) - add whistle to slider head

[Smoothe's Hard]
00:05:679 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - make the formation like a perfect hexagon:

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00:30:086 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - this time its a star:

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00:32:120 (5,6) - also swap the whistle onto 00:32:628 (6) to follow what you did at 00:15:849 (4)
00:38:222 (1,2,3,4,5) - like above formation
00:48:391 (5,6) - swap whistle

Thats about it, good luck on ranking ^_^

Loooctav

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Topic Starter

Loooctav 2013-02-20T22:17:10+00:00

Thanks

Waiting Diff of Smoothie (I Love Smoothie!! XD)

Smoothie

558 posts

Joined August 2011

Smoothie 2013-02-20T22:57:46+00:00

jonathanlfj wrote:
very short and comfortable song

Black is suggestion
Blue is highly recommended
Red is unrankable

[Smoothe's Hard]
00:05:679 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - make the formation like a perfect hexagon: Done
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00:30:086 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - this time its a star: Done
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00:32:120 (5,6) - also swap the whistle onto 00:32:628 (6) to follow what you did at 00:15:849 (4) Sounds a bit weird...
00:38:222 (1,2,3,4,5) - like above formation Done
00:48:391 (5,6) - swap whistle Sounds better the way it is imo.

Thanks
http://puu.sh/25Ohy

Mismagius

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Joined July 2008

Mismagius 2013-02-20T23:49:48+00:00

[Normal]

00:04:154 (4) - Maybe remove whistle from slidertrack/end since you did the same thing on 00:02:120 (2)?
00:09:239 (2) - This doesn't need a whistle, since the pitch on the instrument you're following gets lower..
00:11:781 (5) - Add a new combo here and remove it from 00:12:798 (1), seems a bit better
00:13:815 (2) - Add a whistle here, sounds much better. Also, maybe add a new combo so this combo doesn't get too long
00:18:900 (4) - Remove this whistle at the end? Everytime the song did that, before, you didn't put a whistle, so...
00:23:984 (4) - Remove whistle from slidertrack, since you did it in every slider. Also sounds pretty bad.
00:26:781 (7) - Remove whistle? You did the same thing on 00:28:052 (9,10,1), and imo that sounds better.
00:31:611 (4) - Remove whistle since the pitch of the instrument goes down? Sounds a bit better.
00:33:137 (6) - Add a new combo. Combo is a bit too long and also follows music.
00:33:645 (7) - Following the logic you used in hitsounding this map, this shouldn't have a whistle. Sounds a bit too spamish imo.
00:36:950 (3) - same as before
00:40:256 (7,1) - Are sliderwhistles here on purpose? They sound pretty bad. It'd be better if you removed them.
00:43:052 (3) - Maybe remove whistle for the same reasons previously mentioned?
00:45:086 (6) - ^
00:48:391 (4) - Remove sliderwhistle, sounds pretty bad.

Cool difficulty, the hitsounds sound a bit weird in my opinion but that's just my ears.

[Smoothie's Hard]

00:02:628 (4) - Add new combo here? You did it on 00:04:408 (1), and that's pretty much the same thing happening in the music.
00:10:764 (5) - Same as ^.
00:13:306 (1) - In my opinion, this sounds better with the start without hitsounds and the ending with a whistle.
00:18:900 (4) - Same stuff as the other ones
00:25:001 (1,2) - Spacing here plays really weird. You could add a note at 00:25:764 (2) - between these notes to make spacing even.
00:27:035 (5) - Then again, add a new combo here.
00:35:171 (4) - ^
00:43:306 (6) - ^
00:52:459 (6) - Move the slider endpoint to x:52 so it's properly aligned :<

Really nicely mapped diff, has a nice flow. Some shapes like the stars could improve a bit, but that's just nazi.

Loooctav

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Topic Starter

Loooctav 2013-02-21T20:52:35+00:00

Blue Dragon wrote:
[Normal]

00:04:154 (4) - Maybe remove whistle from slidertrack/end since you did the same thing on 00:02:120 (2)? Okay
00:09:239 (2) - This doesn't need a whistle, since the pitch on the instrument you're following gets lower.. ^
00:11:781 (5) - Add a new combo here and remove it from 00:12:798 (1), seems a bit better Nope. Sorry
00:13:815 (2) - Add a whistle here, sounds much better. Also, maybe add a new combo so this combo doesn't get too long Add Whistle
00:18:900 (4) - Remove this whistle at the end? Everytime the song did that, before, you didn't put a whistle, so... Okkiii
00:23:984 (4) - Remove whistle from slidertrack, since you did it in every slider. Also sounds pretty bad. ^
00:26:781 (7) - Remove whistle? You did the same thing on 00:28:052 (9,10,1), and imo that sounds better. ^
00:31:611 (4) - Remove whistle since the pitch of the instrument goes down? Sounds a bit better. ^
00:33:137 (6) - Add a new combo. Combo is a bit too long and also follows music. ^
00:33:645 (7) - Following the logic you used in hitsounding this map, this shouldn't have a whistle. Sounds a bit too spamish imo. Ok.
00:36:950 (3) - same as before ^
00:40:256 (7,1) - Are sliderwhistles here on purpose? They sound pretty bad. It'd be better if you removed them. ^
00:43:052 (3) - Maybe remove whistle for the same reasons previously mentioned? ^
00:45:086 (6) - ^ <-- ^
00:48:391 (4) - Remove sliderwhistle, sounds pretty bad. Delete Whistle

Cool difficulty, the hitsounds sound a bit weird in my opinion but that's just my ears.

Thanks For Mod!!!

Smoothie

558 posts

Joined August 2011

Smoothie 2013-02-21T21:19:15+00:00

Blue Dragon wrote:
[Smoothie's Hard]

00:02:628 (4) - Add new combo here? You did it on 00:04:408 (1), and that's pretty much the same thing happening in the music.
00:10:764 (5) - Same as ^.
00:13:306 (1) - In my opinion, this sounds better with the start without hitsounds and the ending with a whistle.
00:18:900 (4) - Same stuff as the other ones
00:25:001 (1,2) - Spacing here plays really weird. You could add a note at 00:25:764 (2) - between these notes to make spacing even.
00:27:035 (5) - Then again, add a new combo here.
00:35:171 (4) - ^
00:43:306 (6) - ^
00:52:459 (6) - Move the slider endpoint to x:52 so it's properly aligned :<
Fixed all

Really nicely mapped diff, has a nice flow. Some shapes like the stars could improve a bit, but that's just nazi. The star shapes should be better now.

Thanks~

SPOILER

osu file format v12

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AudioLeadIn: 1500
PreviewTime: 8754
Countdown: 0
SampleSet: Soft
StackLeniency: 0.7
Mode: 0
LetterboxInBreaks: 0

[Editor]
DistanceSpacing: 1.2
BeatDivisor: 2
GridSize: 4

[Metadata]
Title:A Twinkle in the Sky
TitleUnicode:A Twinkle in the Sky
Artist:Yoko Shimomura
ArtistUnicode:Yoko Shimomura
Creator:ThoomyyxD
Version:Smoothie's Hard
Source:Kingdom Hearts II
Tags:smoothie disney squarenix kingdom hearts 2 playstation 2 gumi ship
BeatmapID:222457
BeatmapSetID:79775

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CircleSize:4
OverallDifficulty:6
ApproachRate:7
SliderMultiplier:1.3
SliderTickRate:1

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Loooctav

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Topic Starter

Loooctav 2013-02-22T01:31:37+00:00

Thanks Smoothie

I Love You x3

tutuhaha

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Joined October 2010

tutuhaha 2013-02-23T02:49:42+00:00

M4M~

You need add one more easy diff
now normal diff is 3.45 star rating
you need a diff lower than 3.00 star rating

Normal
offest 595
Hard
offest 614
need be same offest in one map

Normal
AudioLeadIn: 1588
Hard
AudioLeadIn: 1500
need have same LeadIn

Now you have two "2" in your tag, delete one please

00:41:272 (1) - this part SB just so hurt my eyes Orz

[Normal]

[Events]
//Background and Video events
0,0,"BG.jpg",0,0
//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples

//Background Colour Transformations
3,100,163,162,255

[Hard]

[Events]
//Background and Video events
0,0,"BG.jpg",1,1
//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples

//Background Colour Transformations
3,100,0,0,0
maybe they need be same number

[Normal]
00:25:001 (5) - NC
00:37:205 (4) - ^

[Hard]
change Sample to S:C1
00:03:666 Object isn't snapped!
00:05:192 Object isn't snapped!
00:05:192 Object's end is not snapped!
00:06:719 Object isn't snapped!

^copy form AiMod~

Loooctav

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Loooctav 2013-02-25T13:00:25+00:00

aiMod? Plz.. x3
Thanks for Mod! Upload :3

Smoothie

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Smoothie 2013-02-25T16:48:18+00:00

Fixed~
Thanks

http://puu.sh/28d8v

Loooctav

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Loooctav 2013-02-26T11:12:42+00:00

Thanks!

Guy

Former osu! Champion: 2014

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Guy 2013-02-26T14:16:43+00:00

finished :3

Guy's Easy

Loooctav

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Loooctav 2013-02-26T14:50:41+00:00

Thaaanks

mancuso_JM_

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mancuso_JM_ 2013-02-26T20:19:56+00:00

I'll Mod the GDs!

IRC Mod in Normal

15:27 mancusojuanmattos: Primero y antes que nada.. aumentaria en 1 tick el Overall Difficulty
15:28 ThoomyyxD: Ok..
15:28 ThoomyyxD: que es eso? x3
15:28 mancusojuanmattos: se hace un poquito mas complicado para hacer 300 y esas cosas
15:28 mancusojuanmattos: y para ser una Normal estaba bastante bajo
15:28 ThoomyyxD: aaahh
15:29 ThoomyyxD: ok
15:29 ThoomyyxD: si 
15:29 ThoomyyxD: sake 98% :C
15:29 ThoomyyxD: no 100 x3
15:29 mancusojuanmattos: xD
15:29 mancusojuanmattos: 00:04:681 (1) - Whistle al final del Slider
15:30 ThoomyyxD: Fixed
15:30 ThoomyyxD: ~
15:32 mancusojuanmattos: 00:06:715 (3,4) - Te propongo unos cambios en este patron
15:32 ThoomyyxD: como cuales?
15:32 mancusojuanmattos: actualmente al final del Slider (4) no hay nada que necesite ser seguido
15:32 mancusojuanmattos: entonces, agrega un Reverse Arrow en (3)
15:33 mancusojuanmattos: luego.. debes arreglar el Spacing entre las Notas..
15:33 mancusojuanmattos: ahora te doy un screenshooy
15:33 mancusojuanmattos: screenshoot*
15:34 mancusojuanmattos: ademas, las Notas (1,2) estan en un patron desprolijo en mi opinion
15:34 mancusojuanmattos: debajo del Slider (3).. 
15:34 ThoomyyxD: espero el screnshot x3
15:34 mancusojuanmattos: buee.. en general hace esto --> http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/630941
15:34 ThoomyyxD: es algo enredado
15:35 mancusojuanmattos: avisame cuando estes listo
15:35 ThoomyyxD: xmm
15:36 ThoomyyxD: x:y: del slider 3?
15:36 mancusojuanmattos: el Slider (3) esta donde estaba antes (x:440 y:136)
15:36 mancusojuanmattos:  La nota (1) esta en x:240 y:228
15:37 mancusojuanmattos: y la Nota (2) esta en x:332 y:168
15:37 ThoomyyxD: Cambiare y vere si esta bien
15:38 ThoomyyxD: Wiii tengo una estrella mas! :D
15:38 mancusojuanmattos: sep :)
15:38 ThoomyyxD: -cloud me la dio :D
15:38 ThoomyyxD: necesito mas estrellas
15:38 ThoomyyxD: si me da una estrella Smoothie
15:38 ThoomyyxD: sirve?
15:39 mancusojuanmattos: sip..
15:39 mancusojuanmattos: pero dale
15:39 mancusojuanmattos: vamos a seguir con el IRC..
15:39 ThoomyyxD: estoy en eso
15:39 mancusojuanmattos: ok..
15:39 ThoomyyxD: estoy arreglando
15:39 mancusojuanmattos: entendiste lo que tenias que hacer
15:40 mancusojuanmattos: no?
15:40 ThoomyyxD: see
15:40 mancusojuanmattos: el Slider (4) tiene que ser eliminado
15:40 mancusojuanmattos: no me acuerdo si lo mencione xD
15:40 ThoomyyxD: si lo menciono
15:42 ThoomyyxD: Listo
15:42 ThoomyyxD: ya la subi con el cambio que me dijo
15:43 mancusojuanmattos: ahora si :)
15:43 mancusojuanmattos: en ese Slider (3) agrega whistle al comienzo y al final del Slider
15:43 mancusojuanmattos: se eliminaron accidentalmente creo
15:43 ThoomyyxD: ya la subi
15:44 ThoomyyxD: a lo siento
15:44 ThoomyyxD: creei que no lo abia escrito
15:44 ThoomyyxD: listo
15:44 ThoomyyxD: Fixed~
15:44 mancusojuanmattos: bien.. sigamos
15:45 mancusojuanmattos: 00:12:817 (1,2) - Yo eliminaria el new combo de (1) y se lo agregaria en (2)
15:45 mancusojuanmattos: por simetria, este cambio hace el patron mas vistoso
15:46 ThoomyyxD: No entendi
15:46 mancusojuanmattos: Simple Remove el New Combo de (1) 
15:46 mancusojuanmattos: y luego agregaselo a (2), es decir la siguiente
15:46 mancusojuanmattos: nota
15:47 ThoomyyxD: aa ok
15:47 ThoomyyxD: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/630959
15:47 ThoomyyxD: así dice ud?
15:47 mancusojuanmattos: exactamente
15:48 ThoomyyxD: :D
15:50 ThoomyyxD: aFK?
15:50 ThoomyyxD: Aloo?
15:50 mancusojuanmattos: no, no
15:50 mancusojuanmattos: estoy
15:51 mancusojuanmattos: 00:15:868 (6,7,1) - Muchas Notas en este patron, ademas que el final del Slider (7) esta sobre un downbeat (Linea blanca grande)
15:51 mancusojuanmattos: 00:15:868 (6,7,1) - Muchas Notas en este patron, ademas que el final del Slider (7) esta sobre un downbeat (Linea blanca grande)
15:51 mancusojuanmattos: lo cual esta tecnicamente mal.
15:52 mancusojuanmattos: quiero que intentes un ritmo mas o menos asi
15:52 mancusojuanmattos: http://up.ppy.sh/files/thom-0.jpg
15:52 ThoomyyxD: 6,7,21?
15:52 ThoomyyxD: cre que ahi algo que no menciono
15:53 mancusojuanmattos: (6,7,1).
15:53 mancusojuanmattos: (6) es un Slider que empieza en 00:15:868 - y termina en 00:16:376 -
15:54 mancusojuanmattos: mientras que (1) empieza en 00:16:885 y termina en 00:17:393
15:55 mancusojuanmattos: acordate que (6) debe comenzar en x:140 y:240 para mantener la simetria
15:55 ThoomyyxD: lo siento
15:55 ThoomyyxD: es que tube que atender un pequeñol
15:55 ThoomyyxD: intervenido x3
15:56 mancusojuanmattos: lol
15:56 mancusojuanmattos: entendiste lo que tenes que hacer?
15:56 ThoomyyxD: No :C
15:57 mancusojuanmattos: viste el screenshoot?
15:57 ThoomyyxD: see
15:57 ThoomyyxD: osea debo eliminar
15:57 ThoomyyxD: 00:17:393 (1)
15:57 mancusojuanmattos: elimina (6,7,1)
15:57 ThoomyyxD: (Tengo 4 Estrellas! :D Faltan menos)
15:57 mancusojuanmattos: y hace de nuevo el patron con el screenshoot que te di
15:58 mancusojuanmattos: (6) es un Slider que empieza en 00:15:868 - y termina en 00:16:376 -
15:58 ThoomyyxD: ok
15:58 mancusojuanmattos: mientras que (1) empieza en 00:16:885- y termina en 00:17:393-
15:58 mancusojuanmattos: Parece reiterativo xD
15:59 ThoomyyxD: Ahora le entendi
15:59 mancusojuanmattos: :).. Avisame cuando este listo, asi sigo
16:02 ThoomyyxD: ya lo subi
16:02 ThoomyyxD: reivse
16:03 mancusojuanmattos: te falto algo..
16:03 ThoomyyxD: queeepe..
16:03 mancusojuanmattos: elimina (1) en 00:17:393
16:03 mancusojuanmattos: y agrega un Slider que empiece en 00:16:885 - y termine en 00:17:393 -
16:04 ThoomyyxD: listo lo elimine
16:04 mancusojuanmattos: este nuevo Slider tiene que tener un New Combo
16:06 ThoomyyxD: En donde le pongo El new combo?
16:06 ThoomyyxD: 00:17:902
16:06 ThoomyyxD: Aqui?
16:07 ThoomyyxD: ?
16:07 mancusojuanmattos:  no, en el nuevo Slider que agregaste en 00:16:885 -
16:09 ThoomyyxD: Listo
16:09 ThoomyyxD: revise
16:09 ThoomyyxD: arregle es spacing
16:09 ThoomyyxD: y me costo x3
16:09 mancusojuanmattos: Ahora si estoy de acuerdo..
16:10 mancusojuanmattos: arreglemos los Hitsounds ahora..
16:10 mancusojuanmattos: 00:15:868 (5,1) - Whistle al comienzo de ambos Sliders
16:11 ThoomyyxD: entonces los circles estan bien?
16:11 mancusojuanmattos: el resto esta bien
16:11 ThoomyyxD: :D
16:11 ThoomyyxD: ok
16:11 ThoomyyxD: me da unos minutos
16:11 ThoomyyxD: debo ayudar a mi hermano en el negocio
16:11 mancusojuanmattos: ok
16:11 mancusojuanmattos: avisame cuando vuelvas..
16:17 ThoomyyxD: uff.
16:17 ThoomyyxD: estubo fuerte la cosa
16:17 ThoomyyxD: x3
16:17 ThoomyyxD: ya liso
16:17 ThoomyyxD: agregue lo que me dijo
16:17 ThoomyyxD: lo de los whistke
16:18 mancusojuanmattos: bien..
16:18 ThoomyyxD: ahora que mas..
16:18 ThoomyyxD: x3
16:19 ThoomyyxD: Veo su estado y dice modding Hard?
16:19 ThoomyyxD: pero si solo ahi smoothie's hard
16:19 mancusojuanmattos: Hard?
16:20 mancusojuanmattos: yo veo Normal xD
16:20 ThoomyyxD: ayayay
16:20 ThoomyyxD: ojala esta cancion se pueda ir al rankingf
16:21 mancusojuanmattos: 00:17:902 (2) - *Un poco Nazi* Este Slider puede ser mejor.. Move el punto medio del Slider a x:428 y:168 y el ultimo a x:388 y:204
16:21 mancusojuanmattos: 00:17:902 (2) - *Un poco Nazi* Este Slider puede ser mejor.. Move el punto medio del Slider a x:428 y:168 y el ultimo a x:388 y:204
16:22 mancusojuanmattos: Luego arregla el Spacing con (3) desactivando el Grid Snap. solo el Distance snap tiene que estar activado esta vez
16:22 mancusojuanmattos: Luego arregla el Spacing con (3) desactivando el Grid Snap. solo el Distance snap tiene que estar activado esta vez
16:23 ThoomyyxD: donde debe estar el (3) en x:y:
16:23 mancusojuanmattos: x:333 y:193
16:24 ThoomyyxD: 333 193?
16:25 ThoomyyxD: http://puu.sh/28Mjn
16:25 ThoomyyxD: qeuda aspu
16:25 mancusojuanmattos: sipi
16:25 ThoomyyxD: okk
16:26 mancusojuanmattos: 00:24:003 (4) -El Whistle en el cuerpo del Slider es molesto, eliminalo..
16:26 mancusojuanmattos: en su lugar agrega el Whistle al comienzo del Slider nada mas
16:26 ThoomyyxD: cuerpo?
16:26 ThoomyyxD: inicio
16:26 ThoomyyxD: o fin
16:26 ThoomyyxD: ?
16:27 mancusojuanmattos: cliquea en el Slider, y elimina ese Whistle
16:27 ThoomyyxD: listo
16:27 mancusojuanmattos: cliquea en el comienzo del Slider y agrega un Slider ahi
16:27 ThoomyyxD: Ahora donde lo djeo?
16:27 ThoomyyxD: ok
16:27 ThoomyyxD: http://puu.sh/28MnW
16:28 mancusojuanmattos: bien :3
16:28 mancusojuanmattos: 00:25:020 (5) - El combo se te vuelve medio largo comparado con el Resto, agrega un New Combo en esta Nota
16:28 mancusojuanmattos: 00:25:020 (5) - El combo se te vuelve medio largo comparado con el Resto, agrega un New Combo en esta Nota
16:29 ThoomyyxD: Listoca
16:30 mancusojuanmattos: 00:40:275 (7) - Whistle al comienzo del Slider
16:30 ThoomyyxD: Ecolecua..
16:30 ThoomyyxD: x3
16:30 ThoomyyxD: listo
16:30 mancusojuanmattos: 00:48:410 (4) - Aca tambien
16:30 ThoomyyxD: Listo :3
16:31 mancusojuanmattos: basicamente ese es mi IRC mod.. no tengo mucho mas para decir..
16:31 mancusojuanmattos: en un rato completo el resto de las dificultades por foro
16:31 ThoomyyxD: la cancion esta bien echa? x33333
16:32 mancusojuanmattos: en general si, mas viendo que sos nuevo en el mapeo
16:32 ThoomyyxD: :DDDDD
16:32 ThoomyyxD: x3
16:32 ThoomyyxD: ojala esto se valla al ranking
16:32 mancusojuanmattos: en un futuro iras aprendiendo mas cosas, pero la verdad que hiciste un buen trabajo

[General:]

• The offset is wrong in 614. But, I also think that the Offset provided by Gonzvlo is wrong too, I think that (-19) is way too much. Testing a bit the offset, I find coherent if you use Offset: 606 (-8 on current)
*Note: I'll mod the map with the current offset, so 1st of all fix the mod and then change the offset.*

[Guy's Easy:]

• 00:05:698 (2) - *Nazi* Around all the curve Sliders, It gives a better transition if you make this Slider curve, in addition you can provide a good Blanket to the next Slider (4). Well, I tried this:

Screenshoot + Code

212,288,5698,2,0,L|316:288,2,90,2|0|2,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

• 00:19:427 (2) - Hmm.. I think that you are missing a Whistle at the Slider end because it sounds really fitting in there
• 00:32:647 (5) - I think that this Whistle sounds annoying, I'd remove it from this Note.
• 00:49:554 (Spin) - I think that a Whistle in this Slider sounds really fitting.

- This diff. is very well done. Well it is a short and constant song, but tho.. Good Job, Guy

[Smoothie's Hard:]

• 00:01:376 (x) - Add a Note here, for 2 Reasons. 1st- fits properly with the song and 2nd - I don't like the spacing that you did between (1,2) just to make a perfect blanket, with the note you will fix that properly
• 00:16:885 (1) - I think that the Whistle fits better at the beginning of the Slider instead of at the end
• 00:28:071 (3,1) - The usage of 1/2 is not correct here, if you listen properly the song, you will notice that there isn't anything to be followed at 00:28:325. So, I suggest you to remove (1) and the move the Slider end (3) till this place (So, (3) will start in 00:28:071 and have to finish in 00:28:580)
• 00:30:105 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - When you do patterns like this one, try making the spacing consistent between the Notes, for example the Spacing between (2,3) plays preety bad since it is minor than the other Notes spacing. (Check the pattern that you did in 00:38:241 (1,2,3,4,5,6) because it is perfectly spaced)
• 00:33:919 (x) - Add a Note as I explained in my 1st suggestion in this diff.

Last Thing: Try adding a Spinner (at least) to make a variety in the Score, it is a Simple Hard, so if the map is ranked we will see a lot of similar scores by players if you don't add a Spinner.

- Good job in this diff too :3

That's all that I have. Good Map in general! :3
Good Luck, Thoomyy!

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Smoothie 2013-02-26T20:46:46+00:00

All fixed
Thanks

http://puu.sh/28QvY

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Loooctav 2013-02-27T01:08:15+00:00

Many Many Thanks Mancuso x3....
Waiting Diff of Guy.

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Guy 2013-02-27T08:31:48+00:00

Thank you for modding mancuso!

All fixed~

http://puu.sh/298z3

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Loooctav 2013-02-27T11:41:28+00:00

Ready, Add you Diff

i need 1 SP MORE

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Loooctav 2013-02-27T11:47:13+00:00

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mancuso_JM_ 2013-02-27T19:02:07+00:00

Como tenes muchas (demasiadas a mi gusto xD) ganas de rankear tu primer map, te dejo esto para motivarte. Probablemente en un futuro le haga Recheck, si no aparece ningun MAT antes que yo

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Como te dije, la Easy esta muy bien, pero igual 1 mod solo es poco (creo)

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Loooctav 2013-02-28T00:31:25+00:00

Thanks for Star!!! Wiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii!!!
Happy happy happy! x3

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TheVileOne 2013-02-28T01:02:58+00:00

Mod

Easy
Looks fine to me

00:34:673 (2,3,4) - Grid snap off, make this perfectly straight/ evenly spaced.

Normal

00:18:911 (4) - My thoughts, maybe try to line up with 00:20:944 (1) -. This part here looks flawed but I can't really figure out what exactly about it could be improved.
00:25:012 (1) - Last points looks like it should be 2 pixels to the right.
00:31:114 (3,4,5) -
Move 00:31:622 (4) - to x143 y 150 and 00:32:131 (5) - to x 70 y 233 It's slightly more consistent that way.
00:43:317 (4) - Slightly more to the left. Once that is done 00:44:334 (5) - should be more down to line up with it.

Hard

I liked the hitsound volumes in the other difficulties better. 70% is quite loud for this song, especially with that sliderslide. I can't really tell with the annoying slider volume, but you may have two many whistles in this difficulty.

00:41:283 (1,2) - This being a slider sounds better, but I guess both work.
00:51:453 (4,5) - Move left to make a straight line from 4,5 to the center of 6?

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Loooctav 2013-02-28T01:07:49+00:00

Normal

00:18:911 (4) - My thoughts, maybe try to line up with 00:20:944 (1) -. This part here looks flawed but I can't really figure out what exactly about it could be improved.

16:21 mancusojuanmattos: 00:17:902 (2) - *Un poco Nazi* Este Slider puede ser mejor.. Move el punto medio del Slider a x:428 y:168 y el ultimo a x:388 y:204
16:21 mancusojuanmattos: 00:17:902 (2) - *Un poco Nazi* Este Slider puede ser mejor.. Move el punto medio del Slider a x:428 y:168 y el ultimo a x:388 y:204
16:22 mancusojuanmattos: Luego arregla el Spacing con (3) desactivando el Grid Snap. solo el Distance snap tiene que estar activado esta vez
16:22 mancusojuanmattos: Luego arregla el Spacing con (3) desactivando el Grid Snap. solo el Distance snap tiene que estar activado esta vez
16:23 ThoomyyxD: donde debe estar el (3) en x:y:
16:23 mancusojuanmattos: x:333 y:193
16:24 ThoomyyxD: 333 193?
16:25 ThoomyyxD: http://puu.sh/28Mjn
16:25 ThoomyyxD: qeuda aspu
16:25 mancusojuanmattos: sipi

00:25:012 (1) - Last points looks like it should be 2 pixels to the right.
00:31:114 (3,4,5) - I'm use Distance Snap
Move 00:31:622 (4) - to x143 y 150 and 00:32:131 (5) - to x 70 y 233 It's slightly more consistent that way. Fixed~
00:43:317 (4) - Slightly more to the left. Once that is done 00:44:334 (5) - should be more down to line up with it. Fixed~

Thanks For Mod

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Guy 2013-02-28T02:02:45+00:00

fixed~ Thank you for modding

http://puu.sh/29wXA

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Loooctav 2013-02-28T02:13:17+00:00

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Smoothie 2013-02-28T02:23:24+00:00

Fixed... Thank you~

http://puu.sh/29xu6

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Gonzvlo 2013-03-01T02:09:28+00:00

Re-checking Timing and new Easy

|Timing|

I was a bit worried about timing, the last time I left the BPM in stand-by and just made a quick check to the offset. I tested again due to Mancuso's observation (thanks for noticing). Timing felt off at the beginning but it felt okay at then end, this is an indicator of wrong BPM. Here's what I got, I'm almost completely sure about this.
BPM: 118.10
Offset: 608 ms
Test

|Guy's Easy|

I don't see major problems, just some New Combos that should be fixed.
00:21:453 (4) - NC
00:22:470 (1) - Remove this one
00:44:843 (6) - NC here
00:45:860 (1) - Remove this one

Leaving a star here. Good luck!

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Loooctav 2013-03-01T21:58:12+00:00

Hola Gonzvlo, bueno me acabo de conectar y me topo con la sorpresa que se esta actualizando x3, 3 cosas:

Cambiaste tu foto de perfil
Gracias Por Hacer El Remod A Guy
Gracias Por Lo Del Timing, Revisare si esta bien

Por desgracia no te puedo dar kudo, ya que ya te dí pero cuando crees una cancion, te dejare una

Thanks :3

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Guy 2013-03-02T05:10:41+00:00

all fixed!
thank you for modding~

http://puu.sh/2aDE8

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Teara 2013-03-04T21:04:20+00:00

A random Kaneko mod <3

[General]

Background bg.jpg is 800x600, which differs from the recommended size of 1024x768.

Here is a 1024x768 version of the same picture.

SPOILER

Missing Skin Files

reversearrow.png

http://puu.sh/2c6KD (Here is a default one)

Tags
Inconsistency in Tags: Please make sure all the difficulties have the same tags.

Guy's Easy: smoothie guy disney squarenix playstation two gumi ship
Normal: smoothie guy disney squarenix playstation two gumi ship
Smoothie's Hard: smoothie disney squarenix kingdom hearts 2 playstation 2 gumi ship

[Normal]

The current new combo placements you have feels really random, try to revisit them maybe. If you don't understand what I mean, I'll re-arrange them for you.

00:08:736 (1) - this part here, I would have started with a slider, since its a drawn out part of the music, something like this

While the flow this normal is quite good, cosmetically it still needs some attention.

A good example would be the following

00:11:276 (4,1,2) - This slight overlap, might seem fine, but in reality it does look a bit ugly. A easy way to overcome it, is to do the following.

Move this slider slightly down and a bit to the left 00:12:801 (2) - See Screenshot

SPOILER

(remember to fix the rest too)

Another part to look at is the following

00:18:643 (3,4) -

4 is beneath 3, if I was you, I'd have placed it a bit higher (above 3), if you listen to the music, it feels like I'm ascending, try to flow with the music a bit more. This is what makes or break good beatmaps. Don't just place hit-circles, live it, try to incorporate it into the beatmap. I wont mention all the parts, since it still your beatmap, but try and think of these things while mapping.

Aka, Something like this.

SPOILER

00:28:042 (5) - for the new combo I mentioned earlier, I'd have totally put a NC here, since it flows with the music.
00:29:058 (1) - remove NC ^ for reason above

[Smoothie's Hard]

The hitsounds are quite loud at the end, try something like this

00:08:736 (1) - You over-mapped here a little bit, As I've suggested in normal I'd have made it a longer slider, since it fits the music better. Aka, in this case, this fits a lot better.