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Toshinobu Iida - Hikyoumono no Elegy (Short Ver.)

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Leorda
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Leorda
Hi there

[Easy]
00:48:836 (1) - Remove new combo
00:49:693 (3) - New combo
00:51:408 (1) - Remove new combo


[Normal]
00:57:836 (2) - New combo, since this note is after spinner. Is this intentional or you forgot it?


[Hard]
00:50:765 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Having a circle-only pattern are tiring, perhaps change the pattern?
01:10:265 (1) - Why new combo?
01:19:265 (8) - New combo


[Sakuya's Insane]
01:16:908 (7) - Move 1 grid left for fix a curve pattern?
02:07:158 (1) - New combo? Is this intentional or you forgot it?


Good luck
Konei
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Konei
Thanks Leorda <3

All done~
Colin Hou
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Colin Hou
M4M/

[Insane]
  1. 00:40:265 (2,3) - odd to ignore the drums here suddenly
  2. 01:01:693 (3) - make 01:02:122 this heavy beat a sliderend is a bad choice. consider another pattern to make it something can be hit.
  3. 01:17:550 (1) - out of music. the reverse is too early
  4. 01:36:622 (1,2,3) - considering the spacing next, make the order right, left, up?
  5. 02:24:408 (1) - missing new combo, if this is not intented
[Hard]
  1. 02:14:122 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - out of music.
  2. 02:24:193 (4) - make this a slider and ends at 02:24:300.
  3. 00:43:693 ~ 01:10:265 - claps on this part is all wrong place. 00:46:265, 00:48:193 are how it should go. 4th white tick, 4th red tick, 4th white tick, 4th red tick...
  4. 01:10:693 - normal default claps after this is not a good choice. refer to how Insane done.
[Normal]
  1. the clap things mentioned in Hard and 02:24:193 (4) - slider.
  2. 00:55:479 (1) - lost new combo on spinner.
[Easy]
  1. 01:05:550 (2) - ugly slider, copy (1) can be easier and better.
  2. and the clap things
need more work on hitsounds and use more fun patterns.
Konei
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Konei
Ok~

Thanks fixed~



Colin Hou wrote:

M4M/

[Hard]
  1. 02:14:122 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - out of music. I think it's fitting the high notes
  2. 02:24:193 (4) - make this a slider and ends at 02:24:300. fix
  3. 00:43:693 ~ 01:10:265 - claps on this part is all wrong place. 00:46:265, 00:48:193 are how it should go. 4th white tick, 4th red tick, 4th white tick, 4th red tick... fix
  4. 01:10:693 - normal default claps after this is not a good choice. refer to how Insane done.
fix

[Normal]
  1. the clap things mentioned in Hard and 02:24:193 (4) - slider.Not sure what you mean by slider
  2. 00:55:479 (1) - lost new combo on spinner.
fix

[Easy]
  1. 01:05:550 (2) - ugly slider, copy (1) can be easier and better.fix
  2. and the clap things
fix

need more work on hitsounds and use more fun patterns.

Thanks for mod >.<~
Colin Hou
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Colin Hou
replace the note with a slider ends at 02:24:300/

sorry for that missing
Konei
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Konei
Also fixed.
LunarSakuya
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LunarSakuya

Colin Hou wrote:

[Insane]
  1. 00:40:265 (2,3) - odd to ignore the drums here suddenly Fixed
  2. 01:01:693 (3) - make 01:02:122 this heavy beat a sliderend is a bad choice. consider another pattern to make it something can be hit.Fixed
  3. 01:17:550 (1) - out of music. the reverse is too early Fixed
  4. 01:36:622 (1,2,3) - considering the spacing next, make the order right, left, up? Fixed
  5. 02:24:408 (1) - missing new combo, if this is not intented There's already one
Thanks Colin!
http://puu.sh/ZDY1
Konei
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Konei
Will update. Thanks.

EDIT: Updated.
Kenezz
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Kenezz


[General]
  1. You need add a SliderBorder for the skin, add a white default in all diffs like this. http://puu.sh/ZFws


[Easy]
  • Settings
  1. Don't make the super difference but HP and OD+1 is best because the settings between [Normal] and this is a bit huge.
    Hitsound
  2. 00:46:265 (1) - Add clap, fits perfectly with the track, if you agree, add this in [Normal] & [Hard].
  3. 00:46:693 (2) - Same as before but here at the end of the slider.
  4. 00:49:693 (1) - Here at the start, check the track and add the missing claps.
  5. 00:52:693 (4) - Well I don't want make a longer mod of claps then only check the parts when a claps sounds in the track and put the clap, here in the repeat, you know what I mean.
  6. 02:01:693 (1) - Missing finish at the end.
  7. 02:14:122 (1) - Add a finish like the others diffs at the start.
    Beatmap Suggestions
  8. 00:53:979 (5) - New combo time.
  9. 01:24:408 (2) - According with your pattern, the new combo should start here and not here 01:23:550 (1). After this if you want add a new combo in 01:22:265 (5). 01:51:836 (1) Check this part to rectify.
[Normal]
  • Settings
  1. Just like a suggest, check the SV here and in [Easy] woah is really huge compared with this and [Hard], try to be consistent because is too notable the jump in spacing and velocity of the slider between the most easy diffs.
    Hitsound
  2. 00:39:836 (1) - Missing finish at the start.
  3. 01:01:693 (8) - Rememeber the suggestion about the claps in [Easy], here at the end.
  4. 01:44:979 (4) - Missing finish at the repeat.
    Beatmap Suggestions
  5. 00:46:693 (6) - New combo timee.
  6. 01:00:408 (6) - Maybe new combo and remove the new combo in 01:02:122 (1).
  7. 01:14:550 (6) - Just if you want add a new combo here, delete this 01:16:693 (1) and finally add a new combo in 01:17:979 (4). Imo is best because fits with the patterns of sliders and the voice.
  8. 01:41:550 (4) - New combo time.
  9. 01:42:408 (2) - I prefer a Ctrl+R here for the sequence of the sliders, or well the directions, to right, left, to up, down, you know, if you agree then Ctrl+r this 01:43:265 (3).
  10. According with the before point (obviously if you agree) then stack this circle 01:44:122 (1) in the start of the next slider, plus: move the slider and circle to the start of this slider 01:42:408 (2). Here the shoots http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/416903 and http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/416904, imo looks great.
  11. 01:51:836 (3) - Maybe new combo.
  12. 02:13:265 (2) - I prefer this here http://puu.sh/ZZi6.
  13. 02:24:193 (5) - This slider should be shorten by 1/4 and end in the blue tick, just listen the track, after this move the spinner 1/4 backward and extend by 1/4. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/416914, The same thing in [Hard].
[Hard]
  • Hitsound
  1. Just to remind the point about the hitounding 00:46:265 (2) at the start here.
  2. 00:48:193 (3) - And here, etc etc.
    Beatmap Suggestions
  3. 01:30:836 (1) - This new combo no sense here, maybe for the voice but is too short, try this: 01:29:765 (6) Add new combo here and delete the new combo 01:30:836 (1).
  4. 01:48:836 (1) - Please remove this new combo.
  5. 01:52:908 (4) - This slider sound a bit weird here, imo this should start after the first slider (just check the voice), look my suggestion http://puu.sh/100bm, I prefer change other things like the next 1/1 slider, Shoot 1 Shoot 2 & Shoot 3, try it!
  6. 01:58:158 (1) - The new combo not is neccesary, remove it.
  7. 02:08:979 (5) - Imo the new combo should start here, if you agree then make the same here 02:12:408 (5).
  8. 02:24:193 (4) - Same as [Normal].
[Sakuya's Insane]
  • Hitsound
  1. 01:08:979 (1,3) - Maybe whistle at the start.
  2. 01:17:550 (1) - Missing finish at the start.
    Beatmap Suggestions
  3. 02:07:158 (1) - Add a new combo.
Well I hope to helps you with this, good luck! ^__^
LunarSakuya
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Kenezz wrote:

[Sakuya's Insane]
  • Hitsound
  1. 01:08:979 (1,3) - Maybe whistle at the start. Fixed
  2. 01:17:550 (1) - Missing finish at the start. lol shit
    Beatmap Suggestions
  3. 02:07:158 (1) - Add a new combo.Fixed
Thxs Kenezzzzzzzzz
http://puu.sh/1011b
Konei
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Konei
Thanks so much Kenezz <3

All fixed~
Kataliis
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Kataliis
its so beautifull :D i like it :D
Last edited by Kataliis , edited 1 time in total.
Konei
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Kataliis wrote:

its so beautifull :D i like it :D

Thank you~

Let's try to get this ranked :o
Kawayi Rika
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Hi ~ Konei ~ :)

Mod time for my luck Queue ~



Red : Must be fixed
Pink : Should be fixed
Purple : Just suggestions

[Sakuya's Insane]


  1. 01:35:979 (4,5,6,3) - Move 1 grid right.
  2. 01:46:479 - Add finish sound better.

[Hard]


  1. 00:46:050 (1) - Move 1 grid left.
  2. 01:05:336 - Add clap.
  3. 01:06:836 - ^
  4. 01:32:765 (2,3,4) - Spacing error.
  5. 01:46:479 - Add finish.
  6. 02:24:515 (1) - should start on 02:24:408 and Remove finish and Add clap.

[Normal]


  1. AR-1 much better with play.
  2. 00:42:193 - Add a circle sound much better.
  3. 01:06:836 - Add clap.
  4. 02:24:515 (1) - should start on 02:24:408 and Remove finish and Add clap.

[Easy]


  1. 02:23:979 (1) - should start on 02:24:408 and Remove finish and Add clap.

Hope this can help you ~

Good luck and fight ~ ;)
Konei
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Thanks Rika~

All fixed.
Jenny
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Jenny
Just noticed this has become quite high in SP - short note: You should try to replace redtick sliders with circles and mainly use (short) ones (meaning sliders) on white ticks, longers are somewhat more fine on reds.
Aditionally: I don't really find the current preview time very fitting, 00:43:265 sounds better to me, the current one just breaks completely into the song and cuts the soundpattern which leads there so if you want to keep it around where you already got it, use 01:37:265 as a preview time.
Konei
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Konei
You're actually right about the preview time.

Fixed~
Yuukari-Banteki
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Yuukari-Banteki
[Easy]
01:03:408 - add a note here

[Normal]
00:43:693 - a note here might help people not miss 2. I know there isn't any music here but it helps to gloss over the awkwardness in the song
00:59:550 - ^
01:22:050 - ^
02:01:265 - ^
02:19:265 (1) - center it over 4 like so: http://puu.sh/1lkn2

[Hard]
01:47:979 (2,3) - use copy-paste-reverse to make these two have the same angle

[Saku]
looks good
Konei
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Thanks :3

Fixed all but the adding notes on Normal, as I dislike the Notes being on unsounded parts.
Lally
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Lally
Hi from My Q :3

well after 10 pages of mods i hope to not find something °-°

[Easy]
01:15:408 (3) - stalk it with 01:18:408 (2)

[Normal]
00:51:622 (3,4) - (4) looks bad you can make it in better so to have 2 same slider :V copy paste work please http://puu.sh/1mGzr
00:53:122 (6) - ^ same
01:17:336 (4,5) - ^

[Hard]
00:39:836 (1,2) why not a blanket (?)
02:20:979 (1,2) - copy paste slider

[Insane]
01:35:979 (4,5,6) - stalk with 01:37:479 (1)


sorry for so small mod ;_;
Konei
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Thanks, Lally, fixed some ~
wcx19911123
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wcx19911123
here's your ticket

[General]
fine

[Easy]
01:15:408 (3) - this sldier's shape can be better, try something like this http://puu.sh/1n7KL

[Normal]
01:01:908 (7) - I suggest not stack it under slider end, kinda hard to read the rhyme for newbie
01:21:622 (4) - ^
ignored same suggestions from now on
02:27:622 - why not silence it? volume up a bit to fit the drum in the music is better, and add clap

[Hard]
00:34:265 (6,1,2,3,4,1) - this rhyme is good, hope you can do all parts as good as this one
00:49:908 (3,4) - slider start at red line is really odd to play, try to start them at white line?
00:53:550 (4) - try to make this slider symmetrical, it'll looks much better
01:03:408 - you missed a clap here
01:10:265 - add a note to follow the drum, sound better imo
01:47:979 (2,3,4,5) - this parts' spacing is really strange.. and they don't fit the song. hope you can use normal spacing here
02:27:622 - same as Normal here

[Sakuya's Insane]
00:56:550 (5,6,7,1) - this maybe kinda hard to read, hope you can move (1) away not stack on (7), or the rhyme is kinda hard to read with the stack. in fact add a note at 00:56:872 - is another suggestion, but this doesn't fit the song, so this's not recommended
01:16:479 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - please try to fix the arc a bit to make it looks better
02:15:408 (5,6,7,8,1) - try to move it right a bit, the spacing from (4) is kinda huge now
02:21:836 - add newcombo here, to make the stream easier to read?

[Overall]
map still need more works now. the rhyme can be much better than now in Easy, Normal and Hard diff.
and some tiny things, like slider shape and blanket, this all can be better if you try to fix them
that's all for now, it doesn't touch my standard now but never give it up
Konei
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Thanks wcx, fixed them.
dragon8
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dragon8
Easy level
Form great. Slider and circle are very synchronized with my clicking xd. And so is awesome skin and rest things works fine.
Konei
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Thanks for feedback :3
NatsumeRin
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[Easy]
00:31:265 (1) - maybe try to find a better way to place it, and blanket with the previous slider better.
01:17:550 (1) - a bit nazi but you may like to place it without grid snap.
02:06:836 (1) - make this 1/2 earlier.
02:08:979 (1,2,1) - http://puu.sh/1xJwG I think you could try to make the flow better.
Not bad but i hope you could pay more attention to minor things like slider shape etc. They won't be a big deal when you check certain places, but may affect the feeling in general.

[Normal]
00:39:836 (1) - this part sounds a bit strange to me, maybe try http://puu.sh/1xJzc
00:53:550 (1) - honestly i feel it's ugly = =|||
00:53:550 (1) - add a beat?
01:43:693 (5,6,7) - keep them in a more organized shape...
01:49:908 (4,5) - just make them a 3/2 slider.

[Hard]
00:29:550 (1) - I'd try beats like this, more fit with the rhythm http://puu.sh/1xJCQ
00:53:550 (4) - ...in fact this is not good looking (because of spacing), you should try to get a balance between spacing and the slider shape, not just force it there.
01:08:979 (1,3) - clap at the beginning may fits well.
02:02:765 (2,3,4) - the spacing is strange here...
02:14:122 (1,2) - http://puu.sh/1xJEY or whatever, but it seems too short to draw a crossed slider.

[Sakuya's Insane]
00:41:979 (7,10,3) - try to clap at those places (and 5's end too)
00:56:658 (6) - this may have better effect at 00:56:872 -
01:31:265 (3) - not a big deal but for lyric it should be 1/1+1/2
01:32:979 (4) - ^
01:37:050 (3) - try to make it a 1/2 slider (with the end silenced) and may have a better feel?
02:24:086 (5) - remove?
Konei
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NatsumeRin wrote:

[Easy]
00:31:265 (1) - maybe try to find a better way to place it, and blanket with the previous slider better. Sure
01:17:550 (1) - a bit nazi but you may like to place it without grid snap. sure
02:06:836 (1) - make this 1/2 earlier. Yeah
02:08:979 (1,2,1) - http://puu.sh/1xJwG I think you could try to make the flow better. Current is really good imo
Not bad but i hope you could pay more attention to minor things like slider shape etc. They won't be a big deal when you check certain places, but may affect the feeling in general.

[Normal]
00:39:836 (1) - this part sounds a bit strange to me, maybe try sure http://puu.sh/1xJzc
00:53:550 (1) - honestly i feel it's ugly = =||| Actually like this shape
00:53:550 (1) - add a beat? How is this possible?
01:43:693 (5,6,7) - keep them in a more organized shape... Fixed
01:49:908 (4,5) - just make them a 3/2 slider. done

[Hard]
00:29:550 (1) - I'd try beats like this, more fit with the rhythm done http://puu.sh/1xJCQ
00:53:550 (4) - ...in fact this is not good looking (because of spacing), you should try to get a balance between spacing and the slider shape, not just force it there. done
01:08:979 (1,3) - clap at the beginning may fits well. done, also added one more
02:02:765 (2,3,4) - the spacing is strange here... fixed
02:14:122 (1,2) - http://puu.sh/1xJEY or whatever, but it seems too short to draw a crossed slider. fixed
Thanks Rin.
lovhin456
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Hi.

[General]
- Fine

[Skin]
- Flip the comboburst horizontally.
- You're missing the sliderscorepoint and the sliderpoint10 and sliderpoint30.

[Easy]
- 00:35:979 (3,1) Spacing
- 02:03:836 (4,5) Spacing

[Normal]
- 00:40:265 (2,3) Spacing
- 01:33:408 New combo?
- 02:05:122 The new combo should start here.
- 02:08:765 Same as above

[Hard]
- 00:46:693 Something like this http://puu.sh/1GBG4 would be better imo.
- 01:18:193 (4,5) Spacing

[Sakuya's Insane]
- Fine, I think.
Konei
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Updated :3
lovhin456
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Bubbled
Konei
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Yeah, thanks o3o ~
Aurele
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Woot! Congratulation Konei♥
Sushi
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Sushi
Hi there.

There are only few things that bother me :

[Hard]
01:46:265 (3,4,5) - Fix spacing of (5), so (4,5) looks like (3,4)
01:47:550 (1) - This really lacks a repeat. having only one repeat feels... empty.
If you want to avoid having a jump that may be higher than what you wanted, you can flip the slider upside down (after adding the repeat) and/or put it a little down.

Apart of these two, it looks good.

Call me back if you update and you might get some candies
Aurele
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<3 !!!
Go Konei!
Konei
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Both fixed :3

Waiting for candy.
Sushi
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Things were fixed, and were minor fixes. Time to get some candy

~
-Neipezi
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Very nice :D
Konei
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Thanks for the candy ~
Aurele
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KONEI, CONGRATULATION♥
tutuhaha
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CongratulationXD！！！！！！！！
Elsie_old
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Gratz Konei!
Laharl
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Congrats, Konei!
Konei
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Thanks guys :3
LunarSakuya
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Sushi wrote:

Things were fixed, and were minor fixes. Time to get some candy

~
oh my god 8Q_______________________________________________________________________


& ofc congrats Konei!!
meiikyuu
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\o/
Stefan
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Yaaaay
lovhin456
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Congratulations!
Flask
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osu needs more yaoi <3

congratz Konei :3


EDIT: Gabey :V
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Aurele
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Flask wrote:

osu needs more yaoi <3
I see what you did there, Flasky.
BeatofIke
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Congrats! :D
meiikyuu
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meiikyuu

Flask wrote:

osu needs more yaoi <3
Konei
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meiikyuu wrote:

Flask wrote:

osu needs more yaoi <3
Agree.

Thanks again, guys :3
YuZuKi Kenny
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Congraz. Long time ~
cmn_891127
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Love love Konei~
shikyu
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Flask wrote:

osu needs more yaoi <3
^This XD
Anyway, congratz Konei~ :3
BCI
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Gabe wrote:

Flask wrote:

osu needs more yaoi <3
I see what you did there, Flasky.
HAHAHA.jpg /agree with him

btw grats Konei! (~*w*)~
Konei
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BCI wrote:

btw grats Konei! (~*w*)~
Osu! needs more yaoi !

And thanks :3
Hetalia_Italy
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Amazing job, Konei!

The game was one of my favorite H-games (Yaaaaaoi~ Osu needs it XD) and I flipped out when I saw that there was an Osu map for this.

I really enjoyed this map! Keep up the awesome work!

-Feli
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