-[NYAN]- wrote:

[DS's Easy]

00:16:284 (2) - 152|304 Ok.
00:28:079 (4) - 344|120 Nope, this note is following symmetry with 2.
00:37:823 (2) - 268|168 I don't see a reason to move this.
00:46:541 (2) - 392|208 ^
00:47:566 (3) - 200|272 ^, and this is following symmetry.
01:11:156 (3,4) - 112|228 Ok.
01:50:643 (1) - 152|340 No, the tick of slider is in centre of screen.

Laurier wrote:

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00:10:643 (1,2,3) - like this ? http://puu.sh/1y72y Sure.
00:25:515 (2,3) - ^ http://puu.sh/1y73c Nah, I prefer to keep a symmetric pattern.
00:58:848 (2) - this slider is not fit to this song. maybe make more smooth slider ? http://puu.sh/1y74W Ok.

1. Hmm, i think you should increase your clap volume by 10% or 20%. Current clap volume is too low. Barely hear it >.<

1. 00:21:925 (3) - You can improve this slider by makin this slider more rounded like this : http://puu.sh/1zl2p, so it will make this slider blanketed to the next circle properly. After that, copy pasta and ctrl + j + ctrl + h this slider to this slider 00:23:976 (1) - so it will look same. Don't forget to put new combo!
2. 00:28:079 (4) - I guess you miss a whistle on this one. Not consistant with your whistle rythim and sounds awkward when i hear.
3. 00:36:284 (1) - Hmm, same case with slider shape before. Make this slider more rounded and blanket.
4. For kiai time, i suggest you add whistle every 2/1 rythim starting from 01:11:156- until 01:37:823- . The constant rythim of whistle will make the kiai time more interesting to hear. Try it.
5. 01:33:207 (5) - It's better to not skip the heavy beat 01:33:720- since it will a bit ruin your rythim and doesn't very good to hear. So, just make this slider a repeatable slider which has a repeat at 01:33:720-
6. 01:40:900 (1) - Place a whistle on this slider start. It follow the next whistle perfectly.
7. 01:47:053 (4) - Urr, a whistle on this slider end should be clap instead. It really ruin your hitsounds pattern.
8. 01:58:848 (1,2,3) - Umm, please improve this slider shape please. It's not blanketed properly again.

1. 00:18:848- Lower this timing point volume by 10%. With 30% volume, the finish sounds is still too loud compare to the music which is awkward to hear.
2. 00:46:541 (4) - I suggest to add a whistle on this slider start to make your whistle rythim more consistant.
3. 01:00:900 (1) - Hmm, since this time is a beginning of lyrical change, i think you can change the whistle on this slider start to finish instead.
4. 01:40:643 (5) - To make your rythim on this part more synchronized to the rythim and vocal, i suggest you move this slider to 01:40:900- and then shorten this slider length by 1/2. Then you can add another circle at this time 01:40:643-. Don't forget to add a clap at this time : 01:41:412-
5. Nice diff btw~

1. Honestly, this difficulty is just like normal+ with small circle. It's just too easy for a hard diff. There is a lot of 1/4 rythim in this music, you can use that to make this diff more harder. And you can make a little jump too to make thing more interesting.
2. 00:28:079 (1) - A finish sounds at this slider start really doesn't fit in this time. It's too loud. Just remove it.
3. 01:07:566 (3) - Just use soft finish sounds at this one. A normal sounds in the from nowhere is too awkward.
4. 00:41:412 (3) - Nazi, but move this slider to 152 176 please to make this slider blanketed properly.
5. 01:05:002 (1) - Since you add a finish sounds at this time 01:02:951-, it will be good if you continue the finish sounds at this slider start too.
6. 01:58:335 (1) - ^
7. 02:02:438 (1) - ^
8. Oh yes, please review your combo pattern. I think it's a bit inconsistent.

1. 00:27:053 (6) - Same as hard diff, i think a finish sounds is too loud at this time. So, remove the finish sounds from this slider end please.
2. 01:28:848 (6) - I think whistle at this slider start is overused. Better to remove it.
3. Nothing i can found again. Nice job!

Miya wrote:

DS's Easy

1. 00:21:925 (3) - You can improve this slider by makin this slider more rounded like this : http://puu.sh/1zl2p, so it will make this slider blanketed to the next circle properly. After that, copy pasta and ctrl + j + ctrl + h this slider to this slider 00:23:976 (1) - so it will look same. Don't forget to put new combo! Done.
2. 00:28:079 (4) - I guess you miss a whistle on this one. Not consistant with your whistle rythim and sounds awkward when i hear. Added.
3. 00:36:284 (1) - Hmm, same case with slider shape before. Make this slider more rounded and blanket. Improved.
4. For kiai time, i suggest you add whistle every 2/1 rythim starting from 01:11:156- until 01:37:823- . The constant rythim of whistle will make the kiai time more interesting to hear. Try it. Did it until 1:49 :p
5. 01:33:207 (5) - It's better to not skip the heavy beat 01:33:720- since it will a bit ruin your rythim and doesn't very good to hear. So, just make this slider a repeatable slider which has a repeat at 01:33:720- It's not a problem at all and that slider fits nice imo. so I'lll keep it.
6. 01:40:900 (1) - Place a whistle on this slider start. It follow the next whistle perfectly. Done.
7. 01:47:053 (4) - Urr, a whistle on this slider end should be clap instead. It really ruin your hitsounds pattern. Fixed.
8. 01:58:848 (1,2,3) - Umm, please improve this slider shape please. It's not blanketed properly again. Fixed.

1. Source is obviously "IMOUTO NO KATACHI".
   
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1. Honestly I kinda dislike using whistles for percussion instead of clap (ex. 00:11:156 - , 00:12:182 - and 00:20:387 - , 00:21:412 - ), better to use claps for them and whistles for piano or something?
2. 00:15:515 (2) - Follow the bassdrum better? The current rhythm is not wrong, but it's inconsistent with 00:13:464 (3,4) -
3. 00:27:566 - I guess you forget something here!
4. 00:35:387 (8) - Feels a bit noisy to me because there're so many whistles around here, How about removing this one?
5. 00:38:592 (1) - It wouldn't hurt anything to stack this note under the previous (2).
6. 00:43:720 (5,6) - Personally I think a jump here would be nice. I feel a stress on vocal and also the triplet will make the jump nice. but meh it may be just me ><
7. 00:49:105 (4,5) - To be honest, they don't look so good to me, I would place them like this regardless of spacing.
   
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8. 01:02:694 (6) - hmm, I found this placement a bit awkward. Move this note upward for better flow?
   
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9. 01:07:053 (1,2,3) - It would be better to use Normal sampleset for these notes, imo. (and volume should be 50% or so) The clap sounds good too but not strong enough imo.
10. 01:24:618 - Clap sounds nice here
11. 01:28:848 (6) - Same as 00:38:592 (1) -
12. 01:35:771 (1,2,3,4) - Honestly I don't like this rhythm (and the finish spam too...) (considering the level of this difficulty the current one is kinda boring isn't it o.o) I prefer something like this.
    
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13. 01:37:823 (1) - Feels empty here, I suppose some hitsound would fit nicely with this emphasize, maybe finish or whistle
14. 01:50:643 (2,3) - Looks so close and crowded to me, I guess it's because (3)'s position is so close to (1)'s end. Space these notes at 1.4x instead? It will be also more consistent with the others in this combo.
15. 02:05:259 (1) - I can understand why you placed the newcombo here, but it should be on 02:04:233 (4) - imo. It will be more fitting with change of melody.
16. 02:05:643 - Missing clap? I would suggest adding it here even if it's intentional.
17. 02:06:284 (4) - A finish would be great for the end of this difficulty!

1. 00:21:925 (1,2,3) - The spacing is very inconsistent and looks terrible tbh, please even them out.
2. 00:40:387 - Remove clap from here. It doesn't follow anything noticeable and sounds awkward to me.
3. 00:43:464 (3) - Your pattern is not bad at all, but this one flows better imo. and patchouli is hentai...
   
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4. 00:48:592 (1) - I know this spinner follows the vocal correctly, but 00:51:669 - is the best place to end this spinner imo because there's a strong piano sound here.
5. 01:05:771 (3) - This slider should be 1/4 longer to follow vocal correctly.
6. 01:07:566 (3,4,5) - Consider unstacking them. stacking is doesn't fit well with the melody and looks awkward because it's a part of symmetrical pattern.
7. 01:08:848 - A note here would be nice, because there's an extra bassdrum here.
8. 01:15:259 (1,2,3) - It would make more sense if you placed them symmetrically like this
   
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9. 01:17:310 (1,2) - Try making the blanket better
   
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10. 01:26:541 (3,4) - Why are they spaced at 1.25x?
11. 01:30:643 (5,6,7) - Move (7) upward so that (5,6,7) can look like a triangle? like this;
    
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12. 01:48:592 (6) - This section is most characteristic in the song and should be more emphasized. so this repeating slider makes it quite boring. consider removing it and remapping here.

1. 00:23:207 (6) - Personally, I don't like the current flow to be honest. and doesn't even look nice to me. Maybe you can curve the slider in the opposite direction in order to make it look better.
   
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2. 00:28:079 (6) - Add a newcombo here and remove it from the next note. it currently ruins your comboing pattern and doesn't fit well with melody.
3. 00:35:002 (5,6) - Sounds overmapped to me even though it follows music correctly. I think you don't have to follow it strictly, and can simplify the rhythm by making it like this;
   
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4. 01:05:002 - I expected a finish here because new stanza begins from here and you have added finishes every 2/1 downbeat in previous section. add it?
5. 01:08:079 (3) - It would be better to remove the whistle from here, because there's no background music here so it's kinda noisy to me.
6. 01:11:156 (4) - This slider looks awkward because it has different angle from that of (2). make angle of them all the same or make (4) curved one.
7. 01:21:412 (1,2,3) - This rhythm is kinda weird to me, although it fits well with the vocal. but this section is based on 3/2 rhythm so that rhythm isn't suitable here unless you're sticking to vocal. I mean, try this rhythm.
   
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8. 01:33:720 (1) - Would sound nice if you shortened this slider by 1/4 beat. not sure if it can fit well with your taste, but worth a try.
9. 01:49:618 (4) - This section should be more exciting and harder because it's the most characteristic one (and what's more it is the end of kiai time).
10. 02:06:284 - A finish would be more suitable for the end of this difficulty. lower the volume if you think it's too loud.
11. 02:05:259 (1) - Change this slider into just a circle? The 1/2 rhythm makes this pattern look terribly bad and it doesn't really need to be like that.

1. Having 5 spinners for short song is too much isn't it? ><
2. 00:38:335 (3) - Looks much better if you placed this slider like this. It's not so hard to fix this; Rotate it by 15° or so and move to x:200 y:188
   
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3. 00:48:592 (1) - Feels empty here because there's no hitsound around here due to the spinner, I suppose whistle will fit nicely with this spinner.
4. 00:54:746 - Consider removing this finish. The emphasis is not strong enough for a finish and it's inconsistent with 01:02:951 - .
5. 01:05:002 (1,2,3) - This rhythm doesn't follow music very well and maybe confusing for beginners, I afraid. I would prefer something like this (2nd slider is optional)
   
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6. 01:15:259 (3,5) - The end of (3) is quite close to the beginning of (5), and I don't think it looks that great because it's partially overlapped. can you avoid it like this?
   
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7. 01:22:438 (1) - This spinner should end at 01:24:233 - so it can follow vocal better, and also I think the bassdrum is more suitable for the end of spinner. (plus, Add a whistle to the spinner if you want)
8. 01:27:566 (3) - This slider is too close to (1) and looking weird to me. please adjust placement so it looks like this;
   
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9. 01:45:515 (3) - Kinda similar to what I said before.. the beginning of this slider is kinda close to the end of (1), and it looks terrible imo. you can avoid it by changing (3)'s shape and placement. refer to this image;
   
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10. 01:50:130 (3) - Obviously newcombo should be here, not on 01:50:643 - . as the kiai end shows, change of melody does exist here
11. 02:04:489 (1,2,3) - How about this rhythm? It will ruin your symmetrical pattern, but is still worth a try since it fits nicely with the song
    
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Melophobia wrote:

[DS's Easy]

1. Having 5 spinners for short song is too much isn't it? ><
2. 00:38:335 (3) - Looks much better if you placed this slider like this. It's not so hard to fix this; Rotate it by 15° or so and move to x:200 y:188
   
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   Ok.
3. 00:48:592 (1) - Feels empty here because there's no hitsound around here due to the spinner, I suppose whistle will fit nicely with this spinner. Sure.
4. 00:54:746 - Consider removing this finish. The emphasis is not strong enough for a finish and it's inconsistent with 01:02:951 - . Ok.
5. 01:05:002 (1,2,3) - This rhythm doesn't follow music very well and maybe confusing for beginners, I afraid. I would prefer something like this (2nd slider is optional) Nah.
   
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6. 01:15:259 (3,5) - The end of (3) is quite close to the beginning of (5), and I don't think it looks that great because it's partially overlapped. can you avoid it like this?
   
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7. 01:22:438 (1) - This spinner should end at 01:24:233 - so it can follow vocal better, and also I think the bassdrum is more suitable for the end of spinner. (plus, Add a whistle to the spinner if you want) Sounds bad if it finishes on red tick.
8. 01:27:566 (3) - This slider is too close to (1) and looking weird to me. please adjust placement so it looks like this; No, It will ruin a pattern some seconds after this, so I prefer to keep it.
   
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9. 01:45:515 (3) - Kinda similar to what I said before.. the beginning of this slider is kinda close to the end of (1), and it looks terrible imo. you can avoid it by changing (3)'s shape and placement. refer to this image; 2 is blanket with 3, so no.
   
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10. 01:50:130 (3) - Obviously newcombo should be here, not on 01:50:643 - . as the kiai end shows, change of melody does exist here Changed.
11. 02:04:489 (1,2,3) - How about this rhythm? It will ruin your symmetrical pattern, but is still worth a try since it fits nicely with the song Made something like that.
    
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Sekai-nyan wrote:

updated once again =w=

1. Add galgame to tags
2. I don't think the source should be wholely capatilzed
   
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1. 01:05:002 (1) - Start should have finish to be consistent with the previous spots; as you used finish every first downbeat starting from 00:52:694 (1) -

Melophobia wrote:

[Easy]
00:54:746 - Missing whistle? This already has a Whistle on the repeat.
02:06:284 - A finish would be more suitable for the end of this difficulty. lower the volume if you think it's too loud. Nah, a Finish would sound loud, and it doesn't fit with that sound imo.

1. Don't you think, current settings are really too low? I think + 1 on AR, OD and HD are much better; not only that AR + 1 plays better here, but too low OD and HD together with the big circles are really boring to play - even beginners will be nearly impossible to fail
2. 00:48:592 (1) - Considering that the vocal ends on 00:51:412 think about letting it end here as it increases the time players get for the following note and has a better ending point since you started the Spinner on the long vocal aswell. If you follow this suggestion it is recomended to remove whistle from this Spinner or even to mute the end.
3. 01:05:002 (1) - Start should have finish to be consistent with the previous spots; as you used finish every first downbeat starting from 00:52:694 (1) -
4. 01:07:053 (3) - Well, in my opinion you could just use normal hitnormals for this Slider; not only to make it more different from the previous finish parts but to give the following finish on KIAI start a better emphasize - try if you like it :3
5. 01:22:438 (1) - Consider shortening this Slider to 01:24:233 to fit the long vocal like the previous Slider I mentioned; although I thought it could get too short by doing this, I do think now it fits better and length is acceptable considering it gives more time to prepare for the next beat.
6. 01:33:207 (5) - Well, I think this long Slider is on a bad place as you miss a prominent downbeat with it. Changing rhythm up with keeping pattern up is hard, but you should consider to change around here for the sake of rhythm.
   
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7. 01:48:079 (1,2) - As this part is really prominent through music; and two simple Sliders doesn't seem to fit it enough, how is it about thinking about a more unique shape for those two? Just a suggestion but it would increase this part's feeling imo. :3

1. 00:25:259 - In my opinion, here should be a beat to get rid of the odd break and catch the prominent vocal on this part ~
2. 01:32:694 (5) - Move this to the the red tick before this, as it follows vocal here in a better way and having a simple beat here is kinda odd. For keeping flow then I suggest to add a note on 01:33:207
3. 01:49:618 (4) - Having such a strong emphasize in music on the end of a Slider is not really a good idea. I recommend to split them into circles and maybe even to add a note on 01:49:874 for having this part stronger then.

1. 00:11:412 (2,3) - To follow the long melodie given between the red ticks, you should swap the place of 2 and 3 on the timeline as it fits the music much better.
2. 00:21:669 (5,1) - Same as above here, while listening to the music it is clearly heard that the vocal are more prominent and should have a long Slider here.
3. 00:35:002 (3) - Consider adding whistle on end and start here to follow the high tones given here.
4. 00:35:771 (5) - ^at start
5. 00:38:848 (8) - Hm, this Slider doesn't fit good with the long vocal at all, I'd like to suggest a rhythm, which fits the vocal better at this place ~
   
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6. 00:48:592 (1) - Consider to add a whistle to this Spinner as it sounds empty and there is a piano tone on the beat on which the Spinner ends.
7. 00:54:746 (5) - This long Slider doesn't really fit good on this place. I would find it much better if you did the same you did on 00:52:694 (1,2) - As it fits the music really good.
8. 00:57:310 (5) - Again, listening to the instruments and vocals you will notice that it doesn't fit at all, and it's better to shorten this to the previous white tick to fit vocals and instruments.
9. 00:59:361 (3) - Doesn't really fit into here again. The best would be to remove a repeat move it 1 tick further and to add a circle at 00:59:361 -
10. 01:11:669 (4) - To have this fitting better to the music, you should move it on tick further and add a circle on 01:11:412 -
11. 01:15:259 (1) - I highly recommend to delete this finish as it is inconsistent and the emphasize is not strong enough to bear it.
12. 01:20:900 (2) - To keep finish's consistency, you should add one at the end of this Slider.
13. 01:33:720 (6) - Add a finish at the start for same reason as above ~
14. 01:37:823 (1) - Add a finish here for same reason
15. 01:41:412 (3) - Add finish to the repeat for the reason given above.
16. 01:46:028 (1) - Finish on start for same reason as above ~
17. 01:48:592 (6) - Add a whistle to the start to emphasize the high tone in the music and remove it on the end as it is unfiting - I know it breaks consistency, but this part is just a great part in music which should be represented in another way :3
18. 01:49:361 (7,9) - Add whistles to emphasize the high tones ~
19. 01:59:105 (2,3) - Positions on timeline should be swapped to fit the music better as the sliding melody plays on the red ticks.
20. 02:06:028 (5) - Nazi; but anyways, move it one grid up and one right to give it a better symmetry.

1. 00:27:053 (6) - How about adding whistles to start and end for giving the strong vocal a better emphasize? Also this Slider sounds pretty empty without hitsounds so that's why I suggest it.
2. 00:45:259 - Here is a really high tone in the music - I whonder why there is no note. I think placing a note here increases flow alot.
3. 01:30:643 (5) - I guess giving this the same shape as 3 has would increase unity of this pattern and could even increase transition ~
4. 01:59:105 (5,7) - These Slidershapes look a bit wry - I guess you can create neater ones :3 ~

Konei wrote:

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1. 00:11:412 (2,3) - To follow the long melodie given between the red ticks, you should swap the place of 2 and 3 on the timeline as it fits the music much better. No i think it's fine. and it follows the melodie quite well. So i think i'll keep it :3
2. 00:21:669 (5,1) - Same as above here, while listening to the music it is clearly heard that the vocal are more prominent and should have a long Slider here.^ and it follows the voice ~
3. 00:35:002 (3) - Consider adding whistle on end and start here to follow the high tones given here. No, it'll break my whistle consistent~
4. 00:35:771 (5) - ^at start ^
5. 00:38:848 (8) - Hm, this Slider doesn't fit good with the long vocal at all, I'd like to suggest a rhythm, which fits the vocal better at this place ~ Nope i think it's fine as it is, o.o it'll break my patterns~ so i want to keep it~
   
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6. 00:48:592 (1) - Consider to add a whistle to this Spinner as it sounds empty and there is a piano tone on the beat on which the Spinner ends. ok~
7. 00:54:746 (5) - This long Slider doesn't really fit good on this place. I would find it much better if you did the same you did on 00:52:694 (1,2) - As it fits the music really good. no i followed the drum here so that's why~
8. 00:57:310 (5) - Again, listening to the instruments and vocals you will notice that it doesn't fit at all, and it's better to shorten this to the previous white tick to fit vocals and instruments. Nah, I think they fit just fine :3 and i think if you noticed it ifollowed the drums here too~
9. 00:59:361 (3) - Doesn't really fit into here again. The best would be to remove a repeat move it 1 tick further and to add a circle at 00:59:361 - No, it followed the voice quite well~
10. 01:11:669 (4) - To have this fitting better to the music, you should move it on tick further and add a circle on 01:11:412 - ^
11. 01:15:259 (1) - I highly recommend to delete this finish as it is inconsistent and the emphasize is not strong enough to bear it. ok~
12. 01:20:900 (2) - To keep finish's consistency, you should add one at the end of this Slider. I dont hear any finishes on the song so I think it'll be fine without it~
13. 01:33:720 (6) - Add a finish at the start for same reason as above ~ ^
14. 01:37:823 (1) - Add a finish here for same reason ok~
15. 01:41:412 (3) - Add finish to the repeat for the reason given above. ^
16. 01:46:028 (1) - Finish on start for same reason as above ~ I dont hear any finishes so i think it'll be fine without it >.<
17. 01:48:592 (6) - Add a whistle to the start to emphasize the high tone in the music and remove it on the end as it is unfiting - I know it breaks consistency, but this part is just a great part in music which should be represented in another way :3 ok~
18. 01:49:361 (7,9) - Add whistles to emphasize the high tones ~ ^
19. 01:59:105 (2,3) - Positions on timeline should be swapped to fit the music better as the sliding melody plays on the red ticks. No, i think it'll break my patterns and i followed the drums here~
20. 02:06:028 (5) - Nazi; but anyways, move it one grid up and one right to give it a better symmetry. ok~