1. Inconsistency in Tags
   

   [Another] :
   [Beginner] : iidx14

1. AR-1 HP-1

1. 00:42:104 (1,2) - Don't look good for me, try this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/345510
2. 01:04:840 (3) - Try this prettehttp://osu.ppy.sh/ss/345512

1. HP-1?

1. 02:10:209 (7) - Overlap with 02:09:577 (5) , I can't read them.

1. The distance between the two difficulty a big difference, I suggest to make a "Hyper" diff (If you need you can call me to make )

Snowy Dream wrote:

Mod request from Snowy Dream's Queue
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[Beginner]
HD-1?随意 hao
00:23:156 - 为毛静音 感觉没理由 :P
00:28:209 - ^ ^
01:02:314 (1) - finish ok
01:06:735 (4) - spacing一点点小 fixed


[Hyper]
01:20:946 (2) - 建议这些都空出距离 因为..感觉是连上的1/4 结果是3/4 很坑啊 改了一下


[Another]
Unsnapped inherited (green) sections at:
00:25:906 - snap to 00:25:893 k
01:56:931 - snap to 01:56:946 k
00:24:419 (1,2,3) - 不来放个正三角？hao
00:42:314 (1) - 这样放0.0 不了

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我总感觉beginner和hyper中间缺少个diff
好图支持顶
Wonderful Mapset
Good Luck

• AR -1? because this is the lowest diff.
  01:02:314 - I think it's better not to change SV in these for-newbie diffs.
  01:52:840 (1) - reduce reverse one time and add circle at 01:54:735?

• AR +1?
  01:02:314 - is this changing of SB necessary?
  01:19:998 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - I want you to reduce stacking, because I feel a little difficult to read rhythm.
  and whistle hitsounds are attached whole of the sliders. is this intention? I think the sliderslide sounds a little noisy.

• HP -1 or -2 we can fail one or two of mistake if drain rate is 8.
  00:26:314 (1,2,3) - more farther? it will be easy to read notes.
  00:42:314 - is this changing of SV necessary? it seems confusing
  00:48:104 (5) - I can't see the start point of this slider well..because it is covered with 1)hit burst of 00:47:472 (3) 2)00:47:788 (4).
  01:00:735 (1,2,3,4,5) - distance looks confusing. I recommend (5) closer to (4).
  00:55:051 (2) - half of start point is covered with previous slider. can you move it to other place?
  01:09:893 (1) - a little more upper?
  01:26:314 (1,2) - hard to read rhythm imo, because the flow is changed here.
  02:11:788 (1,2) - ^

h-728 wrote:

thank you for request

[Beginner]

• AR -1? because this is the lowest diff. no :3
  01:02:314 - I think it's better not to change SV in these for-newbie diffs. daijobu
  01:52:840 (1) - reduce reverse one time and add circle at 01:54:735? okay

[Hyper]

• AR +1? ok
  01:02:314 - is this changing of SB necessary? i think nop :3
  01:19:998 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - I want you to reduce stacking, because I feel a little difficult to read rhythm.
  and whistle hitsounds are attached whole of the sliders. is this intention? I think the sliderslide sounds a little noisy. fixed

[Another]

• HP -1 or -2 we can fail one or two of mistake if drain rate is 8. -1'd
  00:26:314 (1,2,3) - more farther? it will be easy to read notes. no
  00:42:314 - is this changing of SV necessary? it seems confusing it's in kiai and 4c's part lol
  00:48:104 (5) - I can't see the start point of this slider well..because it is covered with 1)hit burst of 00:47:472 (3) 2)00:47:788 (4). by recognizing the slider track,it's an easy job
  01:00:735 (1,2,3,4,5) - distance looks confusing. I recommend (5) closer to (4). add'd a new combo
  00:55:051 (2) - half of start point is covered with previous slider. can you move it to other place? no thanks :3
  01:09:893 (1) - a little more upper? hmm.. it is stacked with previous note
  01:26:314 (1,2) - hard to read rhythm imo, because the flow is changed here. but fit the music :3
  02:11:788 (1,2) - ^ ^ ;w;

great maps and I have nothing to say.
so star and good luck for rank

-Bakari- wrote:

hi!

[General]
map Advanced diff?

[Beginner]
random comboing
01:00:419 - maybe 3/1 slider here? no :3

[Hyper]
OD +2
01:21:893 (3,4) - stack properly +1‘d
01:56:630 (1,1,1) - do not overuse new combos okay ;w;
02:13:051 (1) - put hitsound in the end. it sounds better nop ww

[Another]
00:57:262 (1,2,3,4) - stack properly w
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nice rythm. good luck

1. 00:26:209 (5,1,2) - 要送分么 玩家当三连按下去不就断了 建议break up(分开)
2. 00:55:683 (5) - 略乱 看不清
3. 01:12:419 (1) - 虽然能看出来还是觉得不太好;_;
4. 01:25:051 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - http://tieba.baidu.com/p/1682211370
5. 02:10:525 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - ^
6. 还行就是容易滑条断尾
7. 02:10:209 (7) - 比如这里, 放清楚点吧如果想多送一分的话o.o

1. 00:25:051 (3) - 内涵自重
2. 01:19:998 (1,2,3,4) - 这一段感觉很诡异 都换成2reverse的1/4 slider排开如何
3. 01:51:577 (1) - spacing>_>?
4. 送得好>_>

1. 00:52:209 (1,3) - blanket? ok i no humanity
2. 01:02:314 (2,3) - 这两个都不对称, 中间的点靠中间点 wwww

[CSGA]Ar3sgice wrote:

hi ww


Another

1. 00:26:209 (5,1,2) - 要送分么 玩家当三连按下去不就断了 建议break up(分开) x.x等XAT
2. 00:55:683 (5) - 略乱 看不清 orz
3. 01:12:419 (1) - 虽然能看出来还是觉得不太好;_; buzhidaozenmegai
4. 01:25:051 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - http://tieba.baidu.com/p/1682211370
5. 02:10:525 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - ^ .
6. 还行就是容易滑条断尾
7. 02:10:209 (7) - 比如这里, 放清楚点吧如果想多送一分的话o.o 好

Hyper

1. 00:25:051 (3) - 内涵自重 噗------
2. 01:19:998 (1,2,3,4) - 这一段感觉很诡异 都换成2reverse的1/4 slider排开如何 so guichu
3. 01:51:577 (1) - spacing>_>? 没事啦=w=
4. 送得好>_>

Beginner

1. 00:52:209 (1,3) - blanket? ok i no humanity slider苦手估计拉不好 还是算了
2. 01:02:314 (2,3) - 这两个都不对称, 中间的点靠中间点 wwww 少侠好眼力

好图给个star

Good luck~

Leorda wrote:

Yo


[General]
* The source should be "beatmaniaIIDX 12 HAPPY SKY". Look here for proof okay but where i found this song is in 14's ost
* The 1st kiai time is not fit to the song..... uh..


[Beginner]
* AR +1 okay

00:37:051 (5) - New combo? okay
02:00:419 (3) - ^ ^


[Hyper]
* AR -1 nop :3

00:35:788 (3) - I think this slider needs more curve... eh..?


[Another]
00:48:104 (5) - I would be hurt if head slider is overlapped by sliderpath. Perhaps, move further away from it? nah, it's totally readable :3


Goooooooood luck!

1. 00:08:630 (2) - Try to put this lower (~x:150 y:311)? Uhm, actually I want to emphasize (1,2,3)'s arc here (it helps avoid overlap as well~)
2. 00:14:946 (2) - (optional) Use a slider wave here perhaps? Flows cute with your next (1) :3
3. 00:25:051 (2) - Uhm, I prefer to put the whistle on slider's end as the piano goes with a happy melody there, but if you want to keep consistency it's fine as well (:
4. 00:34:525 (3) - Move the midpoint to ~x:260 y:36, it'll help to balance (4)'s curve (:
5. 00:37:051 (1) - Hmm, not really fond of this slider's direction personally (as you still have a lot of space below)... I prefer:
   
   SPOILER

   
6. 00:54:735 (3) - orz, what happened to the slider's curve >_< - Try this perhaps?
   
   SPOILER

   

   480,184,54735,2,0,B|432:137|373:160|373:160|304:186|265:127|265:127|136:124,1,359.999971389771,2|2

7. 01:01:683 (1) - (optional) I prefer whistle only here to emphasize the finish on (2) (:
8. 01:17:998 - Is the 51% here (instead of 50%) intentional? orz, very minor though :3
9. 01:27:577 (1) - Add circle here (with finish) and start spinner 1/2 after? (really, the cymbal here is very strong to be ignored ._.)
10. 01:47:788 (1) - Why no finish here? T01:52:840 (1) - he cymbals are obvious though >_<
11. 01:52:840 (1,2) - (optional) idk, I prefer something like this here ((2) is stacked to (4)'s end) to get a continuous flow with your next (3) :
    
    SPOILER

    
12. 01:57:262 (4) - Same as 01:01:683, but on this case I prefer to reduce this finish's volume~
13. 02:13:051 (1) - Same as 01:27:577 here - plus a whistle on spinner's end here might help to accentuate the end (:

1. 00:11:472 (4) - Minor stuff... Move the endpoint to ~x:443 y:319 to get a stronger feel from the arc?
2. 00:14:314 (1) - (optional) Maybe create something like this for a continuous flow? :3
   
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3. 00:14:946 (2) - If you followed above suggestion, you can make this slider's first half encircling (1)'s end (: (new red waypoint on ~x:200 y:147 and new bezier waypoint on x:154 y:133)
4. 00:22:525 (1) - Place this in the center (~x:256)? Yes, imo sacrificing the spacing a bit is worth compared to how tidy it will be xD
5. 00:27:577 (1) - Silencing slider's end is unrankable (this map got unranked because a slider's end is silenced) - use ~20% instead?
6. 00:30:419 (5,1) - (optional) I much prefer something moving here - perhaps stack (5) to (1)'s start, and then CTRL+R (1)?
7. 00:44:946 (2) - Curve it downward instead? Flows better with (3,4) imo...
8. 00:55:998 (1,2,3,4) - Apply accelerated spacing here? (also gives a better angle here imo! xD)
   
   SPOILER

   
9. 01:07:367 (1,2) - Move both to ~x:4 y:235 (manual stacking) so it will be perfectly stacked to your purple (1)'s start
10. 01:08:630 (1) - No whistle here, is it intentional? imo it won't hurt for a whistle here~
11. 01:17:472 (1,1) - Here also, I recommend to add whistle for consistency (:
12. 01:47:788 (1,1) - (optional) ...to be honest I think CTRL+R'ing these two actually works well~ Not a must though (:
13. 01:50:314 (1,1,1) - ...of course you can CTRL+R these three as well, but I don't recommend as much as the two above (as the two above's effects are MUCH greater than these three)
14. 02:05:156 (2) - If you listen to the drum sequence carefully the snare actually lands on slider's start, so I recommend a whistle on slider's start as well (:
15. 02:10:525 (1) - (optional) Put in ~x:345 y:303 to encircle (5)'s start? (if you do this, don't forget to move 02:11:788 (1) lower as well)
16. 02:13:051 (1) - Same as Beginner (you've placed the spinner 1/2 later on 01:27:735... Why not here as well >_<)

1. 00:06:314 (4) - Put in ~x:38 y:233 to avoid overlap? o.o...
2. 00:10:840 (3) - Remove the whistle on slider's end here? I can't hear a strong snare as in (4)...
3. 00:14:209 (5,1) - Manual-stack both to ~x:501 y:104 to make (4) encircle these two correctly in play mode? Then, if you do this:
4. 00:14:946 (3) - Move higher (~y:95) to balance the line~
5. 00:30:735 (2) - Why no whistle here (and on (3) as well, if you want)? The vocal goes strong here >_<
6. 00:34:525 (3) - (optional) idk... I think placing the slider's end to (3) flows quite forced imo, perhaps try:
   
   SPOILER

   
7. 00:48:419 (1,2,3) - Uhm... Personally I don't really like the linearity here, perhaps let (2) encircle (4) like this?
   
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8. 00:57:262 (1,2,3,4) - Same as Hyper about the silenced slider end~
9. 01:00:735 (1,2,3) - Hmm, because of how the vocal sounded here and considering (1,2)'s flow as well, I feel an arc flows better here (because your next (1,2) flows in an opposite direction) :
   
   SPOILER

   
10. 01:01:998 (2) - (optional) Use a sudden jump here by placing it above (1)'s start? idk if you feel it'll be too harsh though...
11. 01:14:630 (6) - Just a minor correction here (: - move the midpoint to x:288 y:92 to encircle (1) properly?
12. 01:19:998 (1,2,3,4) - (optional) A gradual volume increase starting on (1)'s repeat would be fitting the piano much imo (as the piano also uses crescendo here as well)... Your call though :3
13. 01:35:788 (3) - ...not really sure if a repeating slider is required here (I don't hear anything strong on the repeat)... I prefer 1/1 slider or two circles separated by 1/1, but currently this slider doesn't sound abrupt though (:
14. 01:40:840 (2) - Again here, quite confused with the rhythm... I prefer to remove one repeat on this slider, then:
15. 01:41:367 (x) - Add note here stacked above (3)'s start - you won't lose your windmill formation this way, though xD
16. 01:46:209 (1) - Add whistle here, as it gives the same vocal pitch as (2) did?
17. 02:05:472 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Same as before about the crescendo starting on (1)'s repeat~
18. 02:13:051 (1) - (optional) Move to ~x:298 y:126 to make this perfectly centered in your "eye" pattern?

Frostmourne wrote:

ww so long ago

requested before I'm a MAT

General
fine !

Beginner
fine~

Hyper
00:15:588 (1) - whistle the head ? I think you forgot yes
00:48:115 (3) - balance this spacing with (2) and (4) like this one 00:49:378 (6) - yes
01:20:851 (2) - add note here I think, it feels empty and people might get missed easily because the previous parts, you didn't let the gap that wide like this
and it also follows the keyboard sound very well ! well, i want to keep these consisted. so keep it :3
02:06:325 (2) - ^ same idea ^

Another
01:33:167 (3) - maybe this slider.. I'm not sure what you are following but eh..
move it 1/6 later (01:33:273) will sound much better I think but it may play a bit strangely , anyways hope you change it ! (you have to shorten this slider also)
something like this (bad flow in this pic imo ._.)

SPOILER

yes changed :3
01:37:062 (3) - prefer finish with whistle here , it combos with 01:37:694 (1) - also this one too ! 01:47:167 (4) - yep

let me know when you have fixed !

Crimmi wrote:

That song didn't appear on IIDX 14 GOLD, so why do you have it in the tags? O.o

spboxer3 wrote:

反震沒人性 人家的處女泡就這樣奪走了/...\

1. Err, source should just be beatmania IIDX or [url=http://vjarmy.com/wiki/index.php/IIDXicon]
   beatmania IIDX 12 HAPPY SKY [/url] imo (not 'beatmania IIDX 12th happy sky') - beatmania doesn't use 'th' suffix anymore, and happy sky are all uppercase o.o
2. Beginner : Please move 01:18:746 (2) - ~x:322 y:145 and 02:04:220 (2) to ~x:190 y:145 regardless of the spacing to avoid overlap (it's not hard to catch at all~)
3. Hyper : 00:15:588 (1) - Remove whistle from slider's body
4. Hyper : 01:19:378 (3,1) - This spacing isn't intuitive at all imo due to (3)'s speed, it'll be a lot better if you used normal spacing here then use the slowdown spacing afterwards, straight line like this should work already (:
   
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5. Another : 00:05:483 (2) - Should be snapped in 1/6!
6. Another : 00:21:167 (6,7) - Should be moved to ~x:267 y:314 though, to avoid overlap with (4) in play mode due to stacking's nature xD
7. Another : 00:28:115 (2) - The vocals are snapped on 1/4 here actually~
8. Another : 01:00:746 (1,2,3) - Hmm I'm having trouble here actually, I tried 1/4, 1/6, and 1/8 and none lands perfectly on the beat for me (current position is too early), perhaps delete these three? (the next red (1) lands perfectly on beat though)
9. Another : 01:40:220 (1) - Should be a 3/8 repeating slider, not in 1/6

Niva wrote:

(no kudosu)

Just mentioning few things here, I saw Frostmourne modding it yesterday orz~

1. Err, source should just be beatmania IIDX or [url=http://vjarmy.com/wiki/index.php/IIDXicon]
   beatmania IIDX 12 HAPPY SKY [/url] imo (not 'beatmania IIDX 12th happy sky') - beatmania doesn't use 'th' suffix anymore, and happy sky are all uppercase o.o fixed~
2. Beginner : Please move 01:18:746 (2) - ~x:322 y:145 and 02:04:220 (2) to ~x:190 y:145 regardless of the spacing to avoid overlap (it's not hard to catch at all~) done
3. Hyper : 00:15:588 (1) - Remove whistle from slider's body okay
4. Hyper : 01:19:378 (3,1) - This spacing isn't intuitive at all imo due to (3)'s speed, it'll be a lot better if you used normal spacing here then use the slowdown spacing afterwards, straight line like this should work already (: yes :3
   
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5. Another : 00:05:483 (2) - Should be snapped in 1/6! fixed..
6. Another : 00:21:167 (6,7) - Should be moved to ~x:267 y:314 though, to avoid overlap with (4) in play mode due to stacking's nature xD yes~
7. Another : 00:28:115 (2) - The vocals are snapped on 1/4 here actually~ fixed :3
8. Another : 01:00:746 (1,2,3) - Hmm I'm having trouble here actually, I tried 1/4, 1/6, and 1/8 and none lands perfectly on the beat for me (current position is too early), perhaps delete these three? (the next red (1) lands perfectly on beat though) i think it's okay now o.o
9. Another : 01:40:220 (1) - Should be a 3/8 repeating slider, not in 1/6

Another thing I would like to mention is that 5% slidertick in Beginner (20% sounds more fitting though :3) yep~

I already talked to Frostmourne and I'd let him to rebubble it again to make sure (I want to instantly rank this actually but not really sure after the snapping errors I found ._.)