Zejky wrote:

update !!!

Wreath wrote:

hi, Zejky


Blue : you should fix it, its not so good
Red : its unrankable. you should fix it


I do not know what red. you can talk clear


P/S: sorry for the language I use it from google.

Easy

Normal

00:14:118 (1) - Spacing
00:16:618 (1) - Spacing
00:19:743 (2) - Spacing
00:26:305 (1) - Spacing
00:30:055 (3) - Spacing
00:32:555 (3) - Move like 00:31:305 (1) this note (Fix spacing when you change it)
00:33:493 - Add note, sounds empty >.<
00:40:836 (4) - I'm not sure about this one...
00:46:618 - Spacing change again, i prefer to delete 1,2x and fix spacing, because on 00:56:618 - it's normal again, very confusing (Especially for beginners)
01:06:618 - Change again >.<

Hard

00:28:805 (1) - Delete NC
00:40:368 (5) - Make this slider like this Fix spacing
00:55:368 (5) - This is confusing, better change it
00:56:618 - Spacing changes to normal, at 01:06:618 it's 1,2x again, delete 1,2x or do 1,2x at 00:56:618 too
01:16:618 (3,4) - Stack the ends like this then move 01:17:868 (5,1) - 1 grid down

Insane

00:24:430 (1) - Remove NC
00:55:368 (8) - Move 1 grid down, should stack with 00:53:805 (5)
00:56:618 - Same like Hard
01:10:368 (4) - Ctrl + R
01:25:055 (1) - Remove NC and add NC to the following note

1. 00:06:618 (2) - hm...why not put this slider here, right under 1? http://puu.sh/IOpu might look neater
2. 00:46:618 (1) - add finish at beginning of slider? (edit: maybe you don't need to do this b/c there's not other finish sounds lol)
3. 00:59:118 (5) - NC
4. 01:00:993 (1) - remove NC
5. 01:01:618 (2) - then NC here
   so that the combos follow each line of vocal
6. 01:10:993 (4) - NC?
7. 01:21:618 (5) - NC please(new section of vocals)

1. 00:34:743 (2) - add whistle at beginning of this slider , and then remove the whistle at the reverse..
2. 00:38:805 (1) - remove NC here and NC on the next note

1. 00:10:993 (1) - remove NC here and NC on next note
2. 01:16:618 (3,4) - stack the ends of these 2 sliders more neatly

1. 00:50:680 - add note to keep the flow going~
2. 00:56:305 (2) - stack with 00:55:368 (8) - ? xD
3. 01:17:868 (5) - ctrl+ r might play better

1. 00:26:305 (5) - NC
2. 00:31:305 (5) - ^
3. 00:52:555 (5) - NC
4. 00:58:493 (4) - ^
5. 01:08:493 (4) - ^

1. 00:08:493 (3) - NC
2. 00:18:493 (4) - ^
3. 00:39:118 (5) - NC
4. 00:41:618 (1) - remove NC
5. 00:50:993 (4) - NC
6. 00:55:993 (9) - ^
7. 00:56:618 (1) - remove NC
8. 01:10:993 (4) - NC
9. 01:15:993 (8) - ^
10. 01:16:618 (1) - remove NC
11. 01:21:618 (3) - NC
12. 01:24:118 (1) - remove NC

[Hard]
drain -1 ?
00:03:336 (5,6) - move right 1 grid :3

1. I think as the BPM is very low, the diff can be harder
2. 00:17:243 (2) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/391202 <-- like this..?
3. 00:22:086 - you can add note here
4. 00:24:118 (3) - move down 1 grid
5. 00:42:243 - there are 1/2 sounds in the music from this point, consider spacing increasing jumps here like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/391208
6. 01:14:586 - use triplet..?
7. 01:15:836 - add note?
8. 01:16:618 (1,2) - make it one grid outside

1. I think this diff is a bit jumps, as Insane is relatively easy, the diff spread is not very good imo
2. 00:25:055 (1) - new combo? looks better
3. 00:26:305 (1) - new combo for "yume"?
4. 00:39:743 (4,5) - blanket http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/391236

1. 00:05:993 (2) - move left and up to make it look symmetrical with previous slider
2. 00:14:118 (1) - copy (4) and ctrl+h ctrl+j。。
3. 00:41:618 (1) - good!
4. 00:44:118 (1) - move it farther..?
5. 01:24:118 (1) - 2nd slider point 1 grid down, looks a better circle

1. 0.5 star, good wwwwwww
2. 01:04:743 (4) - maybe make blanket in the latter part better? o.o

1. 00:00:680 (2), 00:01:931 (2), - I suggest you to remove the whistles on these notes since the sound on this note, compared to every next one is far lower. So it's better to make some difference in the hitsounds' pitch too.
2. 00:03:024 (2) - Remove the whistle here? Listen to the music at 50%, there's no whistle sound.
3. 00:06:618 (1) - Move the middle point of the slider a bit left, so it will be centered, to make better shape of the slider. You have this. I suggest this.
4. 00:07:868 (3) - If you move this middle point to the center, it would be better too.
5. 00:09:118 (3,5) - The same thing.
6. 00:13:492 (1) - Whistle?
7. 00:14:743 (2,3) - Ok, if you want to fix such minor things, just check every slider on the map and try to find better middle point position. I'll not point this out anymore.
8. 00:17:243 (2) - But this slider is too curvy, compared to every other slider. Make it like this please.
9. 00:23:805 (1) - One grid down, because the 1-2-3 distances are not equal now.
10. 00:26:461 - You need a note here, because of vocals.
11. 00:27:868 (7,8) - Ok, replace these circles with a slider please, to match the vocal lasting "teeee~mo"
12. 00:29:430 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4) - Too much simple horizontal sliders in a row, boooring, cinsider making some of them curved.
13. 00:34:743 (3,4,5) - You'd better add a slider with repeat instead of this, will fit vocals better. Like this.
14. 00:41:305 (8) - Make the spacing here equal.
15. 00:46:305 (5) - One grid left to make spacing better
16. 00:47:868 (3) - Will look and flow better if you Ctrl+R it. Apply with the next one together.
17. 00:48:493 (4) - Ctrl+R it too if you apply prev. one
18. 00:51:618 (3) - One grid left to make petter square
19. 01:03:180 (2) - Make the spacing equal
20. 01:06:305 (6) - Move it up, because this jump is too big and do not fit the song here imo

1. 00:26:461 - You need a note here
2. 00:26:618 (1,2) - This anti-jump is not very good-looking here, better make a 1/1 slider here. Like this.
   I've also Ctrl+R'd 00:27:868 (2) and moved it middle point to a better position (it was too close to slider's end)
3. 00:32:868 (4) - Reduce this jump, it's unneeded and too big. Moving it like this can work.
4. 00:33:493 (5) - If you apply prev. change, place this circle right between the prev. and next note, to make the spacing consistant. For my last screenshot it's position can be x:272, y:128
5. 00:40:368 (5) - Do not stack it with (3) start, this turn look bad. Placing it like thiswill be better imo. If you fix this, place the 00:41:305 (6) - at x:312. y:160
6. 00:48:493 (1) - You'd better delete the repeat and place a note instead of it to emphasize the downbeat. The best solution is removing the repeat, moving 00:49:430 (2) to 00:49:118 and placing a note at 00:49:743.
7. 00:54:118 (1) - One grid up to make a better triangle
8. 00:55:055 (4,5) - Too confusing for a hard. You'd better remove the jump, placing this note closer to the previous and the next one, delete the circle and add a repeat to the slider.Like this.
9. 01:02:868 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - These jumps are nonsense, the music doesnt call for them. Reduce this please.
10. 01:16:618 (3,4) - Ugly :c This is far better
11. 01:20:055 (5) - Move it to x:272, y:256, because this jump is also unneeded.

1. 00:32:555 (3) - You'd better remove the repeat
2. 00:33:805 (1,2) - If you compare this rhythm to 00:35:993 (1,2), you will see that in mapping they are almost the same, but on the timeline they are not. To remove the confusing pattern like this and also make the rhythm overall better, I suggest you to remake it like this.
3. 00:35:993 (1) - If you change the previous one suggestion, you will have to move this slider a bit closer to the prev. one. I suggest to place it at 392;152, and also better to change it shape so it will not be so close to the previous slider, like in the screenshot!

1. 00:26:618 (1) - Please avoid touching the previos slider. Try tiny grid level.
2. 00:31:618 (1) - Same.
3. 00:37:243 (4) - Will encircle better if you move 2nd point 1 grid left and 3rd point 1 grid up
4. 00:39:118 (5) - Avoid touching please.
5. 00:48:493 (2) - Make the encircling better. Like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/391635. If you want to copy this screened slider, replace the line

   400,24,48493,2,0,B|456:88|416:176|320:176|288:144,1,200,2|2

   in your .osu file with this one:

   408,25,48493,2,0,B|456:89|408:177|320:161,1,200,2|2

6. 00:59:118 (1) - Move the second point one grid down to make better encircling. Like this. Second point is white on this screenshot.