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Hirano Aya - Unnamed World

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Nakata Yuji
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This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Monday, November 09, 2009 at 2:24:23 PM

Artist: Hirano Aya
Title: Unnamed World
BPM: 162
Filesize: 4979kb
Play Time: 02:03
Difficulties Available:
  1. Easy (1.91 stars, 141 notes)
  2. Hard (4.78 stars, 369 notes)
  3. Insane (4.94 stars, 544 notes)
Download: Hirano Aya - Unnamed World
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This song is the first ending from Nijuu Mensou no Musume.

Ok. So I just whipped this up. Please tell me if I'm doing anything wrong, as it is my first map and I'll appreciate criticism. Making maps are almost as fun as playing them :P. I'm working on normal now, and I'll do the other difficulties later.
I'm now done with normal, waiting for some feedback on it, will start hitsounds soon. (Stars are appreciated :3)

If you want quick kudosu, mod this map :]


Removed changelog because no one cares.
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blissfulyoshi
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Nakata Yuji
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Nakata Yuji

blissfulyoshi wrote:

This is actually not bad for a first map.

BPM is fine
Offset: 7213

It seems like the lack of distance snap is not that bad on this map, so I won't complain much about it

00:07:21 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6) - make all of these have the same spacing
00:49:80 (4,5,6) - align these with the end of 3
00:53:41 (7,8) - space these 2 correctly
01:00:73 (4,5,6,7) - y is there an increase in spacing?
01:02:39 (1,2,3) - space correctly
01:05:36 (4) - space correctly

I would recommend you distance snap your streams because 00:23:50 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) has a different spacing than 00:25:54 (1,2,3)

Other than that add some hitsounds.

Since I feel nice this morning, have a star.
I fixed almost everything you found a problem, but I don't quite understand the bolded statement :3.
tieff
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tieff
Spasing between 00:23:50 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) and 00:25:54 (1,2,3) different.

[Timing]
Something bother me with offset... Try 7 189, please.

[Hitsounds]
Don't use so many whistles and finish... And go to the song setup>audio, then decrease sample volume. Too loud.

[Overall]
Not bad for first beatmap, really, but spacing... Use distance snape better.

[Normal]
00:10:18 (9) - Add new combo.
00:10:92 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:12:40 (7) - Clap here.
00:13:30 (break) - Why you put break on vocal part?... It's your map, but...
00:24:96 (9) - Finish.

Please, pm me, then you fixed spacing and finish other diff, and I remod it. Good luck!
Nakata Yuji
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Nakata Yuji
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
eee
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eee
eeemod GO!!!

[Normal]
01:00:70 (4,5,6,7,8) - (4) is a not correctly spaced to (3), I missed here cause I hit the note later than it was, you can move it 2 level three grids up and one to the right, I'm guessing that should fix it enough
01:03:29 (3) - end 1/4 tick back
01:05:33 (4,5,6,7,8) - again, but this time (4) is too close to (3), just move about 1 level 3 grid to the right
01:07:003 (x) - break goes here, k thx
01:20:151 (x) - maybe here too
01:38:85 (4) - got an X here too, move (4) closer to (3) plz, (what's up with these 4s n' 3s?)
02:05:522 (x) - break DEFINITELY goes here, unless it's a WIP and you're planning on mapping here???
02:24:133 (x) - break
03:02:00 (1) - too close to the following (2,3), 4 level 3 grids to the right should make it much better
03:10:70 (8) - kinda like this ^, 4 grids down please

you need more difficulties in order for rankage.

that being said, it's pretty good for a first map, spacing stayed consistent MOST of the time

starring for effort, keep it up
Nakata Yuji
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Nakata Yuji
Thanks eee, I will take care of what you found when I get back from school, then tennis , thanks a lot :].
Sleep Powder
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Sleep Powder
[Normal]
00:09:04 (1) - Remove New Combo Here
00:10:15 (9) - New Combo Here
00:10:89 (1) - Remove New Combo
00:44:04 (7) - I don't like this here...
01:06:63 (8) - Hitsound this?
Hmm needs more hitsounds in some areas
Try to avoid overlapping things unless you make it look nice by making a pattern or something.

Seems good for your first beatmap though.
Fishcaek-Chan
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Fishcaek-Chan
Great Beatmap!!:33
The pace was great, and great choiceon the paths and beat~ :)
Nakata Yuji
471 posts
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Nakata Yuji
Thanks fishcaek :]. I made this map to get reactions like that, lol.
Mukku
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Mukku
Swweeeet :o

When we played it and I didnt know the creator, I actually thought it was a ranked map.
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KaitouKid1412
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KaitouKid1412
Great beatmap dude! It's sweet!!! XD :)
fufe
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fufe
massive whistle overuse imo X.X remember you dont have to put a hitsound on every other note =x (though im guilty of that on some of my maps >.>)
(02:20:52 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - almost makes you forget theres vocals behind this)

01:38:11 (1) - Personally prefer you dont have this under the fading slider. 1 its easily avoidable and 2 i just dont like stuff under fading stuff ^ ^ It plays fine where it is tho, it never broke my combo so theres that too.
01:58:67 (10,1,2) - spacign doesnt reflect timing very well here.
02:21:81 (4,5) - ^
02:26:26 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - strange combo placement compared to the rest of the map?

thats it, hitsounds need some work imo ._. still watching
Nakata Yuji
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Nakata Yuji

fufe wrote:

massive whistle overuse imo X.X remember you dont have to put a hitsound on every other note =x (though im guilty of that on some of my maps >.>)
(02:20:52 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - almost makes you forget theres vocals behind this)

01:38:11 (1) - Personally prefer you dont have this under the fading slider. 1 its easily avoidable and 2 i just dont like stuff under fading stuff ^ ^ It plays fine where it is tho, it never broke my combo so theres that too.
01:58:67 (10,1,2) - spacign doesnt reflect timing very well here.
02:21:81 (4,5) - ^
02:26:26 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - strange combo placement compared to the rest of the map?

thats it, hitsounds need some work imo ._. still watching
Yeah, I know. I suck with hitsounds apparently, I'll work on it when I can, but I have finals so :/
Edit: So I ended up changing all the hitsounds :]
Starrodkirby86
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Nakata Yuji
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Starrodkirby86 wrote:

Whee, WIP...

[Normal]:
01:03:29 (3) - Move closer to (2).
02:03:11 (5) - Fix this slider.

That's off the bat right now...

Some things I really noticed in [Normal] was that it got very cramped when the 1/2 beats were added in, such as 00:59:96 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) . This might confuse a fledgling player...

You might even need an easier difficulty....Never mind, you will need an easier difficulty. :P

Perhaps you can rename Normal to Hard and Hard to Insane sometime later?

I'll wait for your [Hard] to be complete. :3
Ok, I was also thinking of renaming Normal to Hard. I'll probably trust you, and make normal into hard, maybe I'll make the notes smaller, or something to that effect. I need mods like this from well traversed players, so thanks a lot.
Starrodkirby86
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Nakata Yuji
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Starrodkirby86 wrote:

The hitcircle size is fine. I personally dislike small hitcircles, heh.

...Though you may want to up the HP Drain, on [Normal], that is.
Is this regardless if I'm changing the difficulty or not, or if I'm keeping it on normal?
Starrodkirby86
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Nakata Yuji wrote:

Starrodkirby86 wrote:

The hitcircle size is fine. I personally dislike small hitcircles, heh.

...Though you may want to up the HP Drain, on [Normal], that is.
Is this regardless if I'm changing the difficulty or not, or if I'm keeping it on normal?
If [Normal] will be your lowest difficulty, then it's okay to keep the HP Drain. If you're going to have an easier difficulty, but still named [Normal], I think an HP drain around the middle area would work best. If you're renaming it to [Hard], then up the HP drain a lot (So it's more to the right).

(no kds for this post)
Mianki
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Mianki
Good song, but the name of the song is wrong. the real song title is "Unnamed World". Google it if you don't believe me :P
There seems to be missing a break time in Normal 02:05:707 ->

Hard:

-01:00:336 (3) Glitch? I don't see the circle 3
-02:56:077 (2) Shorten this a tick

Star~
Nakata Yuji
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Nakata Yuji

Mianki wrote:

Good song, but the name of the song is wrong. the real song title is "Unnamed World". Google it if you don't believe me :P
There seems to be missing a break time in Normal 02:05:707 ->

Hard:

-01:00:336 (3) Glitch? I don't see the circle 3
-02:56:077 (2) Shorten this a tick

Star~
Holy shit, you're right. I know it's unnamed world, I just named it wrong, thanks a lot :3. I have no clue how I misspelled it, or how I even let it slip for so long, but I'll change it when I get home today.
Ryuukun
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Ryuukun
i could do alot nazi modding here but that not my style.
So i'm only pointing out the obvious.

[Insane]
00:35:52 (2,3) - spacing error
00:44:41() - useless break
00:55:52 (6,7) - spacing error
01:00:33 (3) - spacing error
01:00:52() - add circle
01:10:15 (2,3) - spacing error
01:20:15() - useless break
01:31:14() - ^
01:40:15 (7,8) - put thos 2 further away from 01:39:41 (6)
01:55:52 (6,7) - spacing error
02:19:87() - why iy here nothing but a bunch of breaks?
03:05:52 (7,1) - spacing error

[Hard]
00:44:31() - useless break
01:20:33() - ^

[Hard] is harder then [Insane] right now.
Finish Insane properly

[Hard] lacks a bit creativeness but its ok i guess.
[Insane] needs some more work.

Couldn't star it yet because [Insane] isn't done.
Sleep Powder
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Sleep Powder
[Insane]
00:11:44 (1) - Take out New Combo here
00:11:63 (9) - Add it here
00:24:22 (1) - Spacing here ( move a bit away from 4 )
00:25:89 (1) - Spacing is wrong...move away from 2
00:35:70 (3) - Spacing is wrong...move closer to 2
00:38:85 (1) - ^ move closer to 2
00:55:70 (7) - Move this down a bit like around 2-3 on level 3 grid
00:52:74 (4,5,6,7) - Spacing doesn't seem right...
01:00:33 (3) - o_o delete and replace circle...or whatever you had there lol

Try using the same distance snap throughout the whole beatmap.
Most of this is just spacing errors.
You don't need to space it by hand.
Nakata Yuji
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Nakata Yuji

animask wrote:

[Insane]
00:11:44 (1) - Take out New Combo here
00:11:63 (9) - Add it here
00:24:22 (1) - Spacing here ( move a bit away from 4 )
00:25:89 (1) - Spacing is wrong...move away from 2
00:35:70 (3) - Spacing is wrong...move closer to 2
00:38:85 (1) - ^ move closer to 2
00:55:70 (7) - Move this down a bit like around 2-3 on level 3 grid
00:52:74 (4,5,6,7) - Spacing doesn't seem right...
01:00:33 (3) - o_o delete and replace circle...or whatever you had there lol

Try using the same the distance snap throughout the whole beatmap.
Most of this is just spacing errors.
You don't need to space it by hand.
I am using the same distance snap though.
Also, @RyuuKun, the useless breaks are there on purpose, just thought I'd let you know. Thank you both for the mods.
Ryuukun
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Ryuukun
what purpose could such small breaks with such a small hp drain rate serve?
Nakata Yuji
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blissfulyoshi
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blissfulyoshi
More spacing errors (indicating general locations):
Insane:
00:24:22 (1,2) -
00:28:48 (1,2) -
00:53:29 (6,7) -
00:59:22 (6,7,8) -
01:12:92 (1,2,3) -
01:27:74 (1,2,3) -
01:33:85 (3,4,5,6) -
01:40:15 (7,8) -

I don't really like your lack of distance snap or small circles, but if that is you style, I guess I can go with it.
Nakata Yuji
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Nakata Yuji

blissfulyoshi wrote:

More spacing errors (indicating general locations):
Insane:
00:24:22 (1,2) -
00:28:48 (1,2) -
00:53:29 (6,7) -
00:59:22 (6,7,8) -
01:12:92 (1,2,3) -
01:27:74 (1,2,3) -
01:33:85 (3,4,5,6) -
01:40:15 (7,8) -

I don't really like your lack of distance snap or small circles, but if that is you style, I guess I can go with it.
Again, I have used distance snap on insane, and I don't know how I'm getting these errors, does it have to do with grid size?
EDIT: I'm going to bold the one that you marked as an error that I can't fix with distance snap on. I don't know what is going on but my grid size is at small, as I have no clue what level 3 or whatever means.
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Starrodkirby86
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Pretty much. Sometimes Grid Spacing + some Distance Snapping = Inconsistent spacing...at times...

You just have to use your best judgment, which will come in time. ^^
K2J
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(Aesthetic)
I suggest not using black as a custom color, since it's hard to see it on the background. Perhaps a different shade of grey?

[Easy]
01:00:52 (2) - This is a slider that starts and ends at the same point in time...
01:06:63 (5) - Break after this?
01:38:11 (1) - I don't recommend putting notes behind a slider on Easy.

[Hard]
01:38:11 (1) - Perhaps slightly more acceptable on Hard, but I still am leery of this overlap.

[Insane]
Woah, big jump in difficulty. Perhaps you could rename "Hard" to be "Normal" instead.
01:00:33 (3) - Also a slider that starts and ends at the same point in time.
01:34:04 (4,5) - Hmm - the fact that these overlap when they have the same timing as the notes around them looks odd.

Looks like it's shaping up to be pretty good. I look forward to the non-WIP version.
Nakata Yuji
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Nakata Yuji

K2J wrote:

(Aesthetic)
I suggest not using black as a custom color, since it's hard to see it on the background. Perhaps a different shade of grey?

[Easy]
01:00:52 (2) - This is a slider that starts and ends at the same point in time...
01:06:63 (5) - Break after this?
01:38:11 (1) - I don't recommend putting notes behind a slider on Easy.

[Hard]
01:38:11 (1) - Perhaps slightly more acceptable on Hard, but I still am leery of this overlap.

[Insane]
Woah, big jump in difficulty. Perhaps you could rename "Hard" to be "Normal" instead.
01:00:33 (3) - Also a slider that starts and ends at the same point in time.
01:34:04 (4,5) - Hmm - the fact that these overlap when they have the same timing as the notes around them looks odd.

Looks like it's shaping up to be pretty good. I look forward to the non-WIP version.
Thanks, I will make your changes as fast as possible.

Also, I was told to remove breaks in small areas such as the one you recommended me to put in. I really don't know who to trust at the moment, but for easy, I put it in.
XepherX3
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XepherX3
on insane try filling up the 2nd long break and use soft sound to fill up the 3th

>>> all the things i could have placed here..but they are so small i just fixed them myself :lol:

Download: 7489 Hirano Aya - Unnamed World.zip

i will starthis after you applied the changes

:!: :idea: U mind if i also add my WIP(work in progress) difficulty ^^ :idea: :!:

Hirano Aya - Unnamed World (Nakata Yuji) [x3nsane].osu

not doing this :| ...i will do a diff for you on another song..this is too hard for myself..(i'm no good at insane's :lol: )
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Nakata Yuji
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x3ns0r wrote:

on insane try filling up the 2nd long break and use soft sound to fill up the 3th

>>> all the things i could have placed here..but they are so small i just fixed them myself :lol:

[attachment=0:02217]7489 Hirano Aya - Unnamed World.zip[/attachment:02217]

i will starthis after you applied the changes
Really, thanks a lot for that attachment, it helped a lot :].
Anyways, I'm going to get working on insane, so thanks a lot :]


EDIT: I will add your difficulty when you're done with it, to save me some time. Rest assured, I will add it once you are done.
XepherX3
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XepherX3
went over your new insane and made some changes

Download: Hirano Aya - Unnamed World (Nakata Yuji) [Insane].osu


:arrow: [02:08:670] Removed the long breaks You may need to adjust that part to your own mapping style :lol:

:arrow:[02:38:299] don't repeat the same pattern here...listen and place the hitsounds to the melody is my suggestion

:arrow: [03:04:688](3,4,5] stay on 1/4th on this...sounds better cuz there aren't bpm changes that need 1/6th at this small section
Nakata Yuji
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Nakata Yuji

x3ns0r wrote:

went over your new insane and made some changes

[attachment=0:770f9]Hirano Aya - Unnamed World (Nakata Yuji) [Insane].osu[/attachment:770f9]


:arrow: [02:08:670] Removed the long breaks You may need to adjust that part to your own mapping style :lol:

:arrow:[02:38:299] don't repeat the same pattern here...listen and place the hitsounds to the melody is my suggestion

:arrow: [03:04:688](3,4,5] stay on 1/4th on this...sounds better cuz there aren't bpm changes that need 1/6th at this small section
I looked at it, and I changed back what I didn't like. Looking for your feedback on what I did again though :D
XepherX3
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Very nice :lol:

tieff
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tieff
[Easy]
00:23:85 (2,1) - Spacing.
00:25:70 (1,2) - ^
00:31:63 (1,2) - ^
00:33:29 (3,4) - ^
00:38:85 (1) - This note should be here 00:39:04. Fix spacing, if you do this.
01:11:81 (3,4) - Nazi. Down a bit.
01:32:92 (1) - Place this note here 01:33:11.
01:43:67 (3,4) - Nazi. Down a bit.

[Hard]
00:07:18 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Don't use claps on all notes.
00:51:44 (1,2) - Spacing.
02:32:92 (4,1) - ^
02:56:07 (2,3) - ^

[Insane]
00:07:55 (3,5,7) - Claps.
00:09:04 (3,5,7) - Claps.
00:10:52 (3,5,7) - Claps.
00:11:81 (3,5,7) - ^
00:30:33 (7,8) - Spacing.
01:04:41 (1,2,3) - Fix spacing.
02:07:00 (1,2,3) - Wtf? Sliders bug? Delete notes and place it again.

Star.
Nakata Yuji
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tieff wrote:

[Easy]
00:23:85 (2,1) - Spacing.
00:25:70 (1,2) - ^
00:31:63 (1,2) - ^
00:33:29 (3,4) - ^
00:38:85 (1) - This note should be here 00:39:04. Fix spacing, if you do this.
01:11:81 (3,4) - Nazi. Down a bit.
01:32:92 (1) - Place this note here 01:33:11.
01:43:67 (3,4) - Nazi. Down a bit.

[Hard]
00:07:18 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Don't use claps on all notes.
00:51:44 (1,2) - Spacing.
02:32:92 (4,1) - ^
02:56:07 (2,3) - ^

[Insane]
00:07:55 (3,5,7) - Claps.
00:09:04 (3,5,7) - Claps.
00:10:52 (3,5,7) - Claps.
00:11:81 (3,5,7) - ^
00:30:33 (7,8) - Spacing.
01:04:41 (1,2,3) - Fix spacing.
02:07:00 (1,2,3) - Wtf? Sliders bug? Delete notes and place it again.

Star.
Thanks so much, I think the intro for insane a lot better now. Strange though, I remember not having most of those spacing issues, because I checked them over before :/.
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