hoLysoup wrote:

^^☆~
Song name is Microcosmos?
http://sugisakiya.blogspot.com/2011/07/cd-info.html

spboxer3 wrote:

[General]
tag要加上Yuki的名子阿
letterbox during breaks 要拿掉 ((F4 → storybroad標籤裡

[Yuki's Normal]
AR用5會比較好讀一些
01:38:603 (2) - 這地方就該放slider了 不然節奏會變的有些奇怪呢 ((放到01:38:915 -
01:39:228 - 在這放1個note
01:39:436 - 這邊放個slider 折返點在01:39:749 - 結尾01:40:061 -
01:41:728 - 這邊用note吧
01:41:936 - 這邊放slider用1/3拍~
結束~這樣節奏就對上了>w<~

[Insane]
00:01:415 (2,2) - 重疊吧:3
00:22:552 (1,2,3,4) - 這4個的間距都不同呢~我認為你可以(1,2)相同 (3,4)相同 這樣~
00:42:978 (7) - 這裡開始NC吧 00:43:603 (1) - 這就拿掉了吧
00:54:749 (3,4) - 靠 這超瞎眼的阿XDD 你看背景和 灰色的note在一起 絕配阿 保證2的人滿臉都是XDDDD
01:09:020 (3,1) - 故意的?? 我覺得重疊比較好呢=w=

1. Hmm I want confirmation on the second offset, I think it should be 35280
2. Wait a minute, shouldn't the title be Microcosmos without spacing? holysoup already post it before but it seems that you haven't change it yet. Read this thread to do a title change. Consult with Colin if you have difficulty on it
3. Use 2 second audio lead in for all diff (Colin's Hard already use it)

1. 00:08:006 (1) - not perfectly symmetry, could you by chance make it more symmetry?
   
   Here is the code if you don't want to trouble yourself

   96,304,8006,6,0,B|152:304|152:304|176:356|256:384|336:356|360:304|360:304|416:304,1,360,6|0

2. 00:11:643 (1) - ^
3. 00:56:728 (2) - this is just me being very picky, but this linear slider are not very good looking. Maybe use a curve or wavy slider instead
4. 00:58:603 (5) - I suggest to move this somewhere else, even if it just a little, this slider still overlapped by 00:56:728 (2) and this ruin all your neat patterns
5. 01:18:395 (1,2,3) - I really think this should have the same rhythm as 01:21:311 (1,2,3) if you're following the background music
   
   Something like this

   1. 01:18:395 (1) - move to 01:18:186
   2. 01:18:603 (2) - move to 01:19:020 then add circles at 01:18:603 & 01:18:811
   3. 01:19:645 (3) - move to 01:20:061 and remove 01:20:270 (4)
      This will make the whole pattern have the same rhythm with the previous & the next combo
6. 01:41:103 (7) - NC (new combo) this

1. 00:18:347 (2,3) - I honestly think this 1/4 beat are to pushing and unexpected (because it's a single circle at 1/4 beat) for this low pace of the song. A simple slider instead of 2 beats like this are good enough, or just use a 1/2 beat like the majority of rhythm you used on this part. The same case for 00:18:916 (4,5) & 00:26:188 (2,3)

1. 00:29:938 (1) - you don't need the timing section to increase volume here because spinner are already have increasing volume so adding another timing section to do it are redundant
2. 00:36:311 (2,3) - this small jump between 2 big jumps, doesn't play very nice. You should give these the same spacing as the previous jump
3. 00:40:686 (1) - I suggest you to use normal spacing for this one, it almost looks like 1/2 beat apart when it's actually a 1/4
4. 00:55:686 (1) - this looks like a spacing infringement no matter how many time I see it, you should use spacing 1x here
5. 01:01:311 (6,7) - this jump are too much. I suggest to use the same jump spacing as on 01:00:894 (4,5)
6. 01:05:894 (6,7) - ^ use the same spacing as the previous jump
7. 01:10:478 - maybe add a circle with soft-whistle here
8. 01:29:020 (1) - same as 00:55:686 (1), it's better to use normal spacing here
9. 01:29:436 - I suggest to add a circle here, there's a beat here if you listen closely to the music
10. 01:45:895 (2) - hmm following your hitsound pattern, shouldn't this be a normal-hit?
11. 01:51:936 (1) - remove the timing section on this spinner, it's redundant. Only use 1 timing section on the end of the spinner just like on Colin's Hard

Sallad4ever wrote:

Hi bakabaka, Colin ask me to mod this so here I am

[General]

1. Hmm I want confirmation on the second offset, I think it should be 35280
2. Wait a minute, shouldn't the title be Microcosmos without spacing? holysoup already post it before but it seems that you haven't change it yet. Read this thread to do a title change. Consult with Colin if you have difficulty on it
3. Use 2 second audio lead in for all diff (Colin's Hard already use it)

[Yuki's Normal]

1. 00:08:006 (1) - not perfectly symmetry, could you by chance make it more symmetry?
   
   Here is the code if you don't want to trouble yourself

   96,304,8006,6,0,B|152:304|152:304|176:356|256:384|336:356|360:304|360:304|416:304,1,360,6|0

2. 00:11:643 (1) - ^
3. 00:56:728 (2) - this is just me being very picky, but this linear slider are not very good looking. Maybe use a curve or wavy slider instead
4. 00:58:603 (5) - I suggest to move this somewhere else, even if it just a little, this slider still overlapped by 00:56:728 (2) and this ruin all your neat patterns
5. 01:18:395 (1,2,3) - I really think this should have the same rhythm as 01:21:311 (1,2,3) if you're following the background music
   
   Something like this

   1. 01:18:395 (1) - move to 01:18:186
   2. 01:18:603 (2) - move to 01:19:020 then add circles at 01:18:603 & 01:18:811
   3. 01:19:645 (3) - move to 01:20:061 and remove 01:20:270 (4)
      This will make the whole pattern have the same rhythm with the previous & the next combo
6. 01:41:103 (7) - NC (new combo) this

[Colin's Hard]

1. 00:18:347 (2,3) - I honestly think this 1/4 beat are to pushing and unexpected (because it's a single circle at 1/4 beat) for this low pace of the song. A simple slider instead of 2 beats like this are good enough, or just use a 1/2 beat like the majority of rhythm you used on this part. The same case for 00:18:916 (4,5) & 00:26:188 (2,3)

[Insane]

1. 00:29:938 (1) - you don't need the timing section to increase volume here because spinner are already have increasing volume so adding another timing section to do it are redundant
2. 00:36:311 (2,3) - this small jump between 2 big jumps, doesn't play very nice. You should give these the same spacing as the previous jump
3. 00:40:686 (1) - I suggest you to use normal spacing for this one, it almost looks like 1/2 beat apart when it's actually a 1/4
4. 00:55:686 (1) - this looks like a spacing infringement no matter how many time I see it, you should use spacing 1x here
5. 01:01:311 (6,7) - this jump are too much. I suggest to use the same jump spacing as on 01:00:894 (4,5)
6. 01:05:894 (6,7) - ^ use the same spacing as the previous jump
7. 01:10:478 - maybe add a circle with soft-whistle here
8. 01:29:020 (1) - same as 00:55:686 (1), it's better to use normal spacing here
9. 01:29:436 - I suggest to add a circle here, there's a beat here if you listen closely to the music
10. 01:45:895 (2) - hmm following your hitsound pattern, shouldn't this be a normal-hit?
11. 01:51:936 (1) - remove the timing section on this spinner, it's redundant. Only use 1 timing section on the end of the spinner just like on Colin's Hard

Nice map. The jump on insane are a bit inconsistent but not all of them.
Good Luck

1. All look fine~

1. 我覺得AR-1會比較好?

1. 00:48:613 (1) - 這個slider有點詭異,建議換一個style.
2. 00:51:946 (1) - ^.
3. 01:02:154 (x) - 這個slider略長,auto都能轉出21000了,主要是因為有一些新手不太會轉圈,然後就在這裏轉的手抽了.而且太長他們也會覺得悶.
4. 01:16:321 (3) - (design)試試stack住?然後打橫和(4.5)-成水平,在調解後面的間距,感覺排版會比較整潔
5. 01:24:446 (x) - 為甚麼不對上音樂呢?把轉盤停在01:27:571 - 然後後面01:28:196 - 加個note.注意要提升音量喔.
6. 01:28:613 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 這堆的節奏我要一些想法,其實都是根據音樂拉,01:29:238 - 加note,01:29:446 (4) - 01:30:071 (5) - 01:30:696 (6) - 全部移後1/2 然後從這裏01:31:321 (1) - 就要調整間距.
7. 01:43:613 (x) - 這裏感覺不應該是spinner的阿,spinner可能不太適合,因為這裏音樂的clap和normal sound沒有停下來..spinner也太長了.

1. 00:08:006 (1) - 感覺finish不太適合這裏,主要原因是太強了,有個鈴聲音聽不錯的,你可以去看看,或者可以只去掉finish.
2. 00:11:643 (1) - ^同
3. 00:22:552 (1) - ^
4. 00:33:234 (x) - 綠線調到5%? 像其他diff一樣
5. 01:51:946 (1) - hitsound 5%.

1. AR-1?Hard用AR8真的大丈夫?而且真的有必要用AR8嗎?

1. 00:26:188 (2) - 我不知道你是不是故意的,但是我還是寫出來把,(2)- 的開頭沒和(1)- 的開頭疊好.
2. 00:42:779 (8,9) - 這裡用2連不太適合把.因為我感覺在00:42:988 - 感覺在這裏加一個note會比較好00:42:988 -
3. 00:44:655 (x) - ^同
4. 01:11:529 (1-14) - 這個combo比起其他都略長了,我建議在01:13:404 (9) - 重新new combo.
5. 01:28:509 (x) - 其他diff都沒有rekiai耶,要考慮刪掉嗎?
6. 01:35:905 (4) - nazi一下,個人認為slider略醜

1. 01:06:321 (1) - 這個難有一點難度(開video的時候)Note的色和video一樣,而且也被之前的comboburst蓋住了,強烈建議修改.
   
   ...

   

1. 00:02:552 (3) - (design)這個slider的折點拉到中間?因為2邊平衡會比較好看,現在看上去像是歪了
2. 00:04:597 (2,3,4) - 3連意義不明,這裡用3連沒達到很好的效果,反而是製造了一層噪音出來了
3. 00:15:279 (1,2) - 這2個slider 2邊歪了,我幫你修了一修,大約就是下面這樣
   
   yo!

   

   240,276,15279,6,0,B|247:224|336:203|384:260,1,149.999995529652,4|0
   471,176,15961,2,0,B|436:215|336:176|344:107,1,149.999995529652,2|0

4. 00:25:734 (1) - 哭了,這裡應該用正常間距的.因為vocal在這裏開始了.
5. 00:47:988 (x) - 加note?我聽到音樂這裏家音會比較好

1. Finish問題同Normal.
2. 00:55:279 (6) - 在slider的尾巴加上whistle?這樣會比較好聽
3. 00:59:238 (x) - 這裡用Normal hitsound?聽起來比較有感覺
4. 01:00:071 (3) - 根據音樂,這裏其實要加上clap?

Breeze wrote:

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Yuki's Normal

1. 00:55:280 (3) - 去掉clap感觉好些, soft clap和finish一起真心不好听
2. 01:31:946 (2,3,4) - 呃, 为什么不跟1在一条直线上, 或者这3个note呈一条斜线? 感觉那样好看些

Breeze wrote:

Timing

1. 我测得timing是
   BPM/Offset
   132/-1081 (+3)
   144/35274 (-6)

Insane

1. 00:36:107 (1,2) - 这个摆放有违人体力学 /o/ 怎么突然跳上面去了, 正常想接下来的note都应该在上个slider结束后指向的90度范围内吧, 现在这个打着太别扭了, 建议(1,2)调换位置, 然后(3,4)往左再放一点, 打着会顺得多
2. 00:44:440 (2) - 感觉跳得略远, 不是什么问题倒是...只是相比(2,3), (1,2)的间距大了些
3. 01:11:732 (2) - 大概是颜色原因, 这个note玩的时候如果是配合video的话不太容易看到, 建议强制换成赭石色
   [attachment=0:db864]2.jpg[/attachment:db864]

osuplayer111 wrote:

[Colin's Hard]

01:53:190 (8) - New combo.
01:53:607 (1) - Remove new combo.

[Insane]

00:14:600 (4) - New combo.
00:15:282 (1) - Remove new combo.

Fix for a sexy rank!