00:05:712 (8) - putting a slider here for the vocal sounds kinda awkward when the instruments stop in the song, would be better to just delete this imo
00:07:672 (7,1) - having a 1/1 gap like this is hard to read when all of your other stacks so far in this section have been 1/2 stacks, would just be a lot more friendly to read if u spaced it out instead
00:37:370 (1,2) - this should really be like 00:38:576 (5,6) - this not only to be consistent, but for the same reasons above
00:59:682 (9,10,1,2,3) - if you want to do a pattern like this it would be better if u made it like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/16203470/ccc4 so u don't mix 1/2 stack and a 1/1 stack
00:10:687 - 00:15:511 - could add circles here because they skip the high pitch guitar making it inconsistent with stuff like 00:09:481 (5) - and gives better differentiation to 00:13:099 - which is lower
00:24:104 (1,2) - could try a different position instead of continuing 00:24:104 (1,2) - to give emphasis on the new vocal
00:36:014 (6) - the spacing could be increased as you often emphasize this as 00:36:014 (6) -, 00:36:014 (6) -, 00:36:014 (6) -, etc.
00:36:315 (7) - would add an nc here to be consistent with 00:26:667 (1) - , and to denote that there are 2 reverses instead of 1 reverse
00:57:873 (1,2,3) - 01:06:315 - feels weird to suddenly make the density go baby-mode here despite the intensity still remaining the same
try more 1/2 filler rhythms to make the density more balanced across
00:58:174 (2) - the vocal here is much stronger than the others, it would be nice to vary it by doing this in two 1/2 sliders, giving contrast in 00:57:270 (3,1) -
01:04:657 (1,2) - 00:55:009 (1,2) - it would be better if you swapped the nc's as you use the nc to highlight the higher pitched vocal, and the downbeat is where the high vocals start specifically
01:15:963 (1,2,3,4,5) - feels a bit too empty here I think adding filler 1/2 like you did 01:11:139 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - is better.