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00:09:622 - you should split this LN, you did this at 00:03:222 -
in addition, split at 00:09:697 - is better, also 00:03:297 - . 00:09:972 - split this LN at here

00:13:579 - snappening I think:
00:13:979 (13979|1) - 1/12th earlier
00:14:091 (14091|2) - 1/12th instead of 1/16th
00:14:179 (14179|1) - 1/12th earlier
00:14:179 (14179|1) - sound better on the nearest 1/16th tick I think
00:15:012 (15012|1) - 1/12th earlier

00:14:022 - i think note here should be 1/8th later

00:15:522 - suggestion to nerf the pattern here like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769561/d36c since the outer long jacks are really hard compared to anything else in the intro

00:21:679 (21679|3,21679|1,21679|0) - different pitch from 00:21:479 (21479|0,21479|3,21479|1) - so different chord as well? It forces a jack but you don't seem to care too much considering you also have 00:20:779 (20779|1,20879|1) -

00:28:022 (28022|3) - This LN sounds more fit to end at 00:28:322 , since the long snap which corresponding the note end at this place. In this way, maybe 00:28:422 could add a note in column 3 to make a shield and a double in this C like the next several C with doubles.

00:28:822 - started from this part, I aware that some kick sound at red line are has variation between single to double and vice versa, while I think there's nothing so much different happening at the music itself, I would prefer to make it all single or double equaly but I think single is works well too proportionate with the song, for example 00:29:122 (29122|2,29122|0) - has double 00:29:322 (29322|1,29522|0) - single, 00:29:722 (29722|2,29722|1,29922|0,29922|2,30122|3,30122|0,30322|2,30322|3) - more doubles and 00:30:922 (30922|2,31122|0) - back to single again. Those variation I think is a bit overlayed and kinda confusing because I can't determined what is actually emphasized there and simpler layering is more appreciated.

00:37:922 (37922|2,37922|3,38122|2,38122|1,38322|0,38322|1) - Maybe these 3 doubles use single is better? They are more similar with the previous W with singles instead of those with doubles. Maybe change all of these is too radical, I recommend to use single in the last one at least.

00:39:122 - i feel like double should be here, single feels really off

00:40:822 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15768227/7176 suggestion to rotate some of the streams to avoid notelock on inner columns with 1/4 mini jacks, it's cheesable like this though which may not be intended

I think make this part 00:47:322 (47322|0,47322|1) - 00:47:622 (47622|3,47622|2) - 00:47:922 (47922|1,47922|0) - to single is better, considering this part is quite calm compared to the rest of it, and also it will give some moment to take a short break between denser part before and after. So focusing on anchor to do the job for emphasize the chord progresion of string instrument is more than enough imo.

00:47:422 (47422|0,47722|3) - These 2 snaps sounds more fit to use doubles like their pervious snap. Since they're very similar, I do recommend to use longjack in this rhythm, this array are very convenient for this rhythm.

00:48:722 - This part I think is a little monotonous with only drums notes, since the previous part is also full of drums jacks. So what about add some short LNs to fit the piano snaps like here, 00:50:422 and so on? And in this way many empty part will get a few notes to balance the array.

00:52:222 (52222|1) - suggestion to move this note to 3rd column so 00:51:622 - becomes mirror pattern of 00:50:022 -

00:54:422 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15768532/94d6 suggestion to use this pattern template instead(right playfield is original, left with applied changes), the current one is visually odd with the use of [123] and [234] hands and the two empty adjacent columns, no difficulty reasons just for visuals
for the rest of the section it would look like this 00:56:422 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15768556/fa70 - 00:58:022 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15768558/06be
for the 4th part i suggest using the last possible combination of the two mirroring patterns instead of repeating same pattern on 00:56:422 - like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15768561/a864

01:01:579 (61579|1,61579|0,61779|2,61779|1) - in the previous section you always had these like stacked (01:00:379 (60379|2,60379|1,60579|2,60579|1) - ), in this section you do it only sometimes (01:04:779 (64779|3,64779|0,64979|0,64979|3) - ), is there a reason for when you do and when you don't?

01:10:422 - for this section and repeat of it i'd like to suggest this pattern template too https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15768580/3875 to avoid the odd transitions here https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15768575/773f , they're really hard to hit for me
it's not as difficult which may be the intention but it plays a lot more naturally with the same structure, on 01:11:822 - it would be mirrored by this transition https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15768589/dfec
rest of transition:
01:13:222 - would turn into a hand which seemed to be missing http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15768603/6a7f
01:16:022 (76022|1) - moved to 4th column

01:10:422 - this still plays rly badly and i rly think u should change it. 01:10:722 (70722|1,70722|0,71122|2,71122|3) - there's no reason for these to be doubles. i get that it looks aesthetically pleasing but it plays really disorientating and not fun. you should definitely represent 01:12:022 - this change in pitch somehow because its extremely prominent and not doing anything to represent it feels incredibly weird.

01:10:622 (70622|0) - Same as the previous suggestion, I suggest to use longjack here. The array here is much more difficult than the previous one, and much longer than previous one, use longjack will slightly decrease the difficulty of this part.

01:11:822 - What about add LNs here, like arrays in 01:13:322 (73322|1,73422|2,73522|3) , to fit the rhythm better. Meanwhile, such a long jack is a little boring and very tiring, add some LNs is a chance to do some adjustment while playing.

01:16:179 (76179|1,76179|0) - snare here which is a change from the previous sounds like at 01:15:279 (75279|3,75279|1,75279|0,75379|1,75379|0,75479|2,75479|3) - but it's mapped the exact same way, maybe a little change? Either through using a different double or straight up making it a triple?

01:16:822 - i tried following a consistent structure for this section with pattern mirroring with these following suggestions:

01:19:422 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769217/4c05 the selected part was mirrored from original map so 01:21:022 - becomes mirror of 01:17:822 - and 01:19:422 - mirror of 01:22:622 - without the quad, changed the piano notes in 01:19:022 - to https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769232/c1d3 in same way for 01:22:222 -

01:25:622 - suggestion to move this note over to 3rd column since all other piano notes were each on different columns 01:19:022 - 01:22:222 -

01:18:222 (78222|0,78322|3,78322|2) - 01:21:422 (81422|3,81522|1,81522|0) - 01:24:622 (84622|0,84722|3,84722|2) - I think there's effective way to represent the guitar part instead making it double, since you already layered double for kick and stuff. I highly suggest to just simply make it single and stacked instead, just something like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/16024877/709c, applied to other section that has similar issue.

On second part I curious why this guitar part is not filled by a note 01:31:122 - 01:34:322 - etc, I can still catch some guitar sound but if you decided to just layered the justified sound then I can fully understand.

Edit: may apply to other part that looped from this one like 04:21:127 - etc

Actually these 01:19:022 (79022|1,79222|2) - 01:22:222 (82222|2,82422|1) - 01:25:422 (85422|3,85622|2) - is on same pitch, I aware that you intended to make it that way for diferentiate it with guitar. but I think it's just better to rely on pitch a bit more to emphasize the pitch relative on piano part which for me is icing on cake. You still able to do more variation to separate the guitar part from piano part and also follow pitch more accurately as well, for example I would stick to centre part of finger for guitar like 01:17:422 (77422|1,77522|2,77622|1) - 01:20:622 (80622|1,80722|2,80822|1) - 01:23:422 (83422|1,83522|2,83622|1) - -etc and 01:19:022 (79022|1,79122|3,79222|2) - for piano is like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/16021304/3287

01:28:022 - i think this is the same situation as before where you sacrifice playability for the sake of aesthetics. theres no reason for 01:28:122 (88122|3,88122|2) - this to be a double, and hitting 01:28:122 (88122|2) - this note to a non-existent sound is so uncomfortable and easy to trip up on when its not really justified.

01:28:179 (88179|3,88279|3,88379|3) - 01:28:579 (88579|0,88679|0,88779|0) - I think it'd be cute to move these to column 2 and 3 respectively, as it kinda shows they are different pitch from 01:28:979 (88979|3,89079|3,89179|3,89379|0,89479|0,89579|0) -

same here 04:32:383 -

01:29:622 - i'd like to suggest changing this into a [234] hand for difficulty of hitting it, could be i'm just bad with jacks but decided to suggest in case other people had trouble on it too

01:32:222 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769318/373e suggestion to mirror this pattern so the following mid column trills starts off on left hand opposite to first one 01:29:822 - allowing same set of patterns to be used mirrored over 01:33:022 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769328/635c
01:34:222 - i think this should be double solely for structure consistency, i can't hear much there in terms of song
01:35:622 - note here preferably on 1st column

01:43:222 (103222|3,103222|0,103322|2,103322|1,103422|1,103422|0,103522|3,103522|2) - I think it would be nice to differentiate this part from 01:43:622 (103622|3,103622|0,103722|2,103722|1,103822|1,103822|0,103922|3,103922|2) - which has guitar sound along with the drums, it can be done it various way but I think stacking double is works pretty good, something like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/16026245/a323 for example. Giving some different pattern to different section will not only give more accurate detail to express the song, but also give clearer structure in general.

01:45:622 - this is huugely subjective but i think it would be much more fitting if you represented these sounds with anchors somehow instead of dumping it. u know i'm a huge advocate of dumping but i think anchors fits a lot well with this file and doesn't ruin the flow of the jacks, not to mention that there's not really any other dumping in this file to the guitar so this feels really out of place here.

01:47:822 (107822|1) - i think this note should be on 3rd column instead following same pattern in the rest of kiai

01:53:222 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15768328/2133 when playtesting i was expecting change of direction here which threw me off since same happens on 01:45:622 - suggestion to change it as in the screenshot

01:54:122 (114122|2) - the chord after is the triple so this note could be moved up to 4th column in 01:54:222 -

01:55:922 (115922|3) - could LN be shortened by 1/8th to avoid early releases, replying with other similar cases in the map since it's unimportant detail

02:08:222 (128222|1) - this LN could be moved to 1st column instead so the 02:06:722 (126722|1,126822|2) - two LN theme stays visually present

02:36:747 - https://gyazo.com/aa1e850585769582e4a2ef1c31ba3bcc this is how it sounds to me

02:36:839 (156839|1) - sounds more accurate on 1/12 here 02:36:855 - because the peak of the sound is come latter than the current note

02:38:426 (158426|0,158426|2) - sounds more accurate to move one note at 1/6 right after that, it may looks like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/16021390/d616

02:39:739 - this a piano sweep indeed, but sweep time is very short(even less than 1/32 here), i suggest change this sweep to double is better, or you can change a higher bpm for this(143*1.5 or another)

02:55:384 (175384|2) - move this to column 2 to replicate the double snare like 02:55:060 (175060|3,175060|2,175141|3,175141|2) - ? Also should make 02:55:303 (175303|3,175303|2) - a single I think like 02:55:546 (175546|2,175628|3) -

03:05:925 (185925|2,185925|1,186006|1,186006|0) - I really think these should be in different columns since they definitely are different sounds from 03:05:438 (185438|2,185438|1,185519|1,185519|0) - as well as it potentially removes column 3/right hand bias. (this section is the only 185 jack section, and you have 3 - 3 note stacks in a row on column 3

03:06:031 (186031|2) - could be moved to 2nd column to stay in theme with the one handed double jacks https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769407/2a76

03:13:815 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769426/8479 the way the 1/4 jack mixes in with the 1/6th trill makes it look really odd here, a slight re-patterning to avoid that would look nicer http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769436/b3fc

03:36:193 - missing note on 1st column

03:39:031 (219031|1) - What about use a double here since the snap is really heavy and the previous similar snap use double(though with a LN).

04:01:727 (241727|2) - you can split this LN to express this vibrato

04:05:927 - a hat sound and a violin sound at here, i think single is better

04:14:727 - I think this pattern, and former same patern's repeatability is too high, maybe need some idea to reduce this.
example 1 or 2 measures after, move 04:15:727 (255727|0) - to col2，04:16:127 (256127|3) - move to col3

04:17:127 (257127|0,257227|0,257327|0,257427|0,257527|0) - maybe need to move this LN

04:34:027 - missed sound?

04:35:327 (275327|1,275327|2) - I curious whether it's intentional or not, but I think this should be single compare with 04:38:527 (278527|3) - is single too since they were similar

04:47:927 (287927|3) - I think this LN is a bit ambiguous to me, I was initialy though it was for crash cymbal-ish sound but that sound is still there until next bar and it's longer than the LN, so It might be good idea to simply treat it as normal note instead, unless you had something to say about it, I will be glad to hear that.

04:55:027 (295027|1,295227|2,295427|3) - I quite curious with these stacking note with LN for short time. Actually I like this idea to give more emphasize to violin sound i think? But this one 04:55:627 (295627|1,295727|2) - is not stacked like the other, I assume it may meant to make consistency with 04:54:827 (294827|1,294927|0) - since they are exactly above the new bar (thick whiteline 04:55:527 - and 04:54:727 - ) but I think since they has different condition because the first one here 04:54:727 (294727|0,294827|1) - are very stricted because the triple so its imposible to make it stacked, and second one has more column to expressed, I think it's fine to make this 04:55:627 (295627|1,295727|2) - stacked to follow up the layering.

05:01:083 (301083|3,301083|2,301183|1,301183|3) -

• 05:07:483 (307483|3,307483|2,307583|1,307583|3) - I think you should stack these like the other pianos

05:17:827 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769491/e13a some stream re-patterning to avoid the back to back minijacks on same hand https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769486/2524

05:20:927 - double here i think

05:30:727 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769518/66a6 re-patterning to remove hand bias and keep the pattern somewhat in similar difficulty to rest of section with use of minijacks and in theme with one handed doubles, if too hard the notes on 05:30:877 - 05:31:177 - could be moved outwards

05:33:827 (333827|1,333877|0) - would change this to 1 2 instead of 2 1 so that the trill starts on the double instead of the note before

05:33:927 - i wanna suggest a nerf to this pattern, https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15769548/f9b0 shortening the trill and changing the hand before quad into a double for ease of transitioning