Mellann

00:00:155 (1) - Please lower the volume for the intro calm part ;3

00:07:012 - perhaps add a circle here and start the spinner 1/8 afterwards instead? considering that you've been following the piano all the way here for the intro imo it would be nice to have something clickable here (for player feedback) as the piano still goes on at this point :P

00:09:869 (3,4,5) - i feel like all this type of rhythm should be ctrl+g'd because you start these measures with an 1/1 slider 00:09:297 (1) - following one specific sound which is repeated but in 1/2 snap on things like 00:10:154 (4,5) -

00:17:297 (1,2,3) - can you group these a bit more? because it's a bit tricky to follow due to the slidertail covering part of the head giving the idea of the spacing being small but actually it's high http://prntscr.com/o9ty7z

00:17:583 (1,2) - should end on the 1/8 tick rather than the 1/12, the sound stops there

00:17:869 (1,2,3) - i'd replace these with a 3/8 reverse slider because of how difficulty is to hit 00:17:297 (1,2,3,1,2) - then keep in track with 3 notes snapped differently

00:18:083 (1,2) - the 1/2 gap between the two sliders here is rather unpredictable and hard to interpret tho imo especially considering that elsewhere on the map this kind of spacing is used for 1/4s :(

i think it would be better if you could simply change it into a repeating slider tho, or if you want something more active here using three circles like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/13423084/9423 would work nicely as well i suppose c:

00:20:369 (1) - snapped to the 1/12 tick before it

00:27:297 (1) - silence sliderend here? not sure why this one isn't silenced compared to the rest

00:31:869 (1) - can you ctrl+g this? i feel like the jump to hit it is a bit unnecessary when 00:31:583 (1) - has to be more impactful than it because of the snare

00:33:297 (1,2,3,4) - Make it a proper square

00:35:583 (1) - snapped to the 1/6 tick, not the 1/8

00:35:869 (2,3,4,1) - you honestly could probably space out 2 3 and 4 here since they're pretty compact right now and at a glance looks more like a 1/8 triple than a 1/6 rhythm, at least imo, same goes for 00:36:440 (1,2,3) - this

00:36:154 (3) - hmm, i don't think that there's a sound being snapped on 1/12 here though... i think it would be better if you made the surrounding 1/12s into an active three-circle burst and then add a 1/4 slider on 00:36:154 (1) - (lik in http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/13423212/2dbc for example) so that the map follows all the distinct sounds around here (including that bass thump on 00:36:297 - that you currently skipped) instead c:

00:36:630 (3,1) - i was expecting something more interesting here to emphasize the transition, having it the same ds is just boring, specially when you have a jump for the snare before 00:36:059 (4,1) -

00:38:083 (2) - Didn't hear anything noticeable here

00:41:297 (1) - Pretty sure this is 1/6

00:41:583 (2,3,4) - silence sliderends here like you did 00:42:726 (1,2) - on these since nothing lands on the 1/8 ticks here (as far as i can hear at least)

00:44:726 (1,1,1,2) - ehh stacking all these four here made this pattern looks weird in-game really D:

perhaps add a slight offset tho the last (1,2) like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/13423146/da5e here? aside from making the stack between the two sliders look correct in-game here the slight movement to the from the slider to the circle also helps to emphasize that one sound on 00:45:297 (1) - imo :3

00:47:297 (2,3) - as the sound isn't really different from 00:47:012 (1) - , i'd recommend to just make it a reverse as well, then 00:47:583 (4,5) - can have a constrast by having the snare on (4)

00:49:012 (2) - last note of this should really be soft sampleset 50% or something since it starts going back into normal music at this point

00:49:297 (1) - 1/12 snap here rather than 3/8, basically move this to the 1/12 tick immediately before where it is rn

00:49:583 (2) - Should not be a reverse slider as music is much like a short slider as 00:49:654 literally has not distinct sound.

00:49:726 (3,1) - can you space them a bit more? i think (1) deserves a bit more spacing due to the snare

00:51:012 (1,2,3) - This part is still very confusing in reading imo. 00:51:012 (1,2) - they should be spaced further to let player differentiate from 00:51:297 (2,3) - . And the current placement indicates a sequence of 1 - 3 - 2 intuitively...

00:51:154 Should be clickable as 00:51:012 and 00:51:440 (3) -

00:51:440 (3) - was it supposed to be 5% volume?

00:51:440 (3) - snapped to to the 1/12 tick before it

00:51:440 (3) - Cant hear anything noticeable enough

00:51:869 (1,2) - Should be like 00:51:583 (1,2) - .. don't think music is substantially different for these two

00:55:726 (2) - This reverse arrow should not be hidden under previous sliders..

00:55:904 (3) - this is a 1/8 rhythm not a 1/16 snap bruh

00:55:726 (2) - remove a repeat from this while you're at it

00:57:869 (3,4) - Consdiering #1055410 , There two should actually be mapped different due to actual music change.

00:57:869 (3,4) - The last two is different than their previous two. And there is no 1/3

00:57:869 (3) - Should add an NC for the slowdown SV

00:58:440 (1,2) - Would see 3-like rhythms (like reverse sliders or w/e) instead of 2 sliders which is not intuitive according to music..

00:58:797 (3) - can you reduce the sv a bit here? the angle and the speed doesn't favor to hit it properly

00:58:797 (3) - Snapping might need double-check.. currently slider starts quite early

01:00:726 (1,2,3,4) - it's a bit misleading to have it the same as things like 00:21:869 (1,2,3,4) - when the sound is completely different, i'd suggest something like http://prntscr.com/o9uak4 instead as a variation which plays the same

01:05:012 (3,1) - would map the 1/8 tick inbetween here, no real reason not to tbh

01:05:297 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - This stream is questionable... Beats on 1/4 are significantly stronger than 1/8 but they were all mapped with circles. Actually the 1/8 ones are pretty passive rhythms which works better with slider-ends instead of circles..

01:09:297 (1) - making this a circle and having a 1/16 silenced repeat on the blue tick feels way better than what you have rn for the sudden pause in music here that happens out of nowhere

01:11:583 (1) - sounds like this is snapped to the 1/12 tick before it and there's a note on 01:12:059 - instead? not sure

01:13:869 (1,2,3,4) - not too sure why this section is snapped to 1/12 when it's pretty clearly 1/8 or 1/16 rhythm here, would make way more sense to rework this into 1/8 and 1/16 rhythm instead (also 01:14:154 (3,4) - would just make these kicksliders in 1/8 as well)

01:14:012 (2) - This is too abrupt and there is no buffer for this fast 1/16. Consider 1/8.

01:14:154 (3) - make this into a 1/8 kickslider instead maybe, the sound is pretty distinct here compared to 01:14:012 (2) - this before it

01:14:297 (4) - can you remove one reverse of this? i feel like there should be a higher gap to introduce a different snap with 01:14:440 (1,2,3,4) -

01:14:869 (2) - i'd space it a bit more because it seems to have the same snap as 01:14:440 (1,2,3,4) - but it doesn't

01:17:297 (1) - Should end on red tick

01:17:726 (1) - umm, is this perhaps missing a single repeat? (idk whether this is intentional or not but there's a sound on 01:17:869 - that you missed btw o.o)

01:17:726 (1) - maybe you forgot to add one reverse here

01:17:726 (1) - Not sure but this sounds like 1/12

01:21:012 (1) - Maybe 1/8? Needs double-check

01:23:583 (1,2,3) - 1/6?

01:24:440 (1) - Sounds like 1/12 more

01:24:440 (1) - move this in between 01:24:154 (1,1) - these two a bit more, especially considering the gap is more lenient 01:24:154 (1,1) - here than it is 01:24:440 (1,1) - here in terms of the rhythm

01:32:726 (1,2) - would use a different rhythm to represent these two notes since 01:33:012 (3,4) - these are noticeably different rhythm than the 2 before it, feels much better representation-wise that way

01:35:726 (2) - missing whistle + normal-sampleset?

01:37:869 (1) - Not sure why ending on 1/8, the sound here is extended.

01:38:440 - leaving this downbeat unmapped makes me sad considering it's a pretty important note here before a break :c would just extend the sliderend here instead

01:41:583 (1) - should be 1/12

01:42:154 (4) - 1/8 is enough, really nothing on 1/16

01:42:726 (2) - reverse -1 times (end it at 01:42:869 - )

01:43:940 (1) - Nothing can be heard here

01:44:011 (2) - make both of these clickable since there's a pretty distinct difference between 01:43:797 (2) - this and the former (i.e. something actually lands on it)