01:44:037 - 01:53:037
Seems unclear on what you're trying to focus on in this section.
Sometimes you follow drums like 01:44:037 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) -
Sometimes you follow vocal like 01:46:704 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) -
Sometimes you follow the guitar 01:50:037 (3,4) -
etc.
It also contradicts with the idea you previously established on a similar section (00:26:704 - 00:35:704), which is to focus on the vocals.
Your rhythm here is also super dense for a not so intense section.
A simple solution would be to just focus on vocals, similar to that previous section.
02:42:704 - Section gets too dense here as well since you try to follow multiple layers and all of the 1/2 vocals.
Would recommend these changes:
01:44:037 - Rhythm focus is pretty unclear in this section since you seem to be switching between multiple layers of the song. Would just focus on vocals like what was done in the first verse.
Some improvements you could do:
01:14:537 & 02:32:204 Sections - It's kinda jarring that you map the hi-hat triples sometimes and not follow it at other times.
Mapping all the hi-hat triples would be objectively better.
Since there are no vocals here, you can more focus on the instruments.
like, variations are fine but doing it inconsistently is weird
01:14:537 - In this section, I think you could just remove all the hi-hat 1/4 when the guitar has melody 01:14:954 (3) - 01:17:621 (2) - etc. Some stuff starts to get more dense than the kiai sections despite being in a less intense part of the song
01:35:704 (6) - to 01:51:704 (9) - needs some 1/1 gaps. This is too calm a section to have no break for the player, especially in the first half of it.
Some places where you could add breaks:
