POP IN 2 (TV Size)

00:09:197 - 01:18:742 - melody is pretty high maybe smth like kdkkddk fits more instead of 2 patterns that start with don?

00:19:254 - continue this xxx x xxx rhythm to highlight the repeating vocals and use 5plet in the end to emphasize drums?

maybe move 00:20:021 to 00:20:191?

00:23:515 - fill (don) like 00:18:060 -

00:31:526 - would make this sv higher as a part of the next patterns like x0.92, current looks a bit disconnected

00:34:168 - really quiet sound and confuses rhythm with the next 1/3 doublet just remove

00:42:776 - i dont really get the colouring structure of this stream... since the vocals are in 1/1 and the build up seems to add layers every 4/1 how about colouring like
kdddkkddkdddkkdd...
kdkdkkkkddddkkkk...
ddkdkkdkddkdkkddk
which is similar to yours now but uses different structure to show the layers

I feel I needed do sv on 00:48:060 so I tried to make it better, need opinion, maybe value/idea suggestion

Delete 00:50:873 to separate those vocals.

1. This improvisation is taken out of the structure of improvisation because you don't improvise unions so many chains of vocals. For example, you can look at other moments and see that you often do vocal separations in similar moments (00:53:004, 00:55:901, 00:56:583)

2. Kiai starts with an active rhythm vocal and you only mashed up 3plets, so the huge chain that follows looks weird because of the density disbalance, although the peak moment of the rhythm was just at the very beginning of kiai (since it sounds like a "burst"), but there the player only play 3plets

00:51:640 - vocal is 1/1, sounds better as kkddk

I suggest delete note 00:59:055, to explicitly and cleanly go to rhythm of the instrumental, rather than combining vocals+instrumental into one chain (thereby improving the following of rhythm)

01:02:549 - since this "pop in two" is pretty recognizable how about use kats like kdkdkkddk instead to emphasize just like in 01:01:185 - and 01:03:913 - . Instead turn 01:02:038 - to ddkkd or kkdkd which uses more dons to contrast

if applied
00:56:754 - consider changing this to some other pattern like kdddkkddk
01:08:004 - and consider changing this to kdkdkdddk or similar but optional

01:04:424 00:54:026 updated top a little, @zhuosh if you dont like finishers and svs in kiai I can backup it