00:12:097 (12097|3,12188|3) - i think you could differentiate this a bit more than just putting it into outer lane cus the sounds here sound much more continuous than the other sounds, instead I suggest a 4321 1/2 roll
00:21:827 (21827|0,21827|1,21917|1,21917|3) - why these doubles? shouldnt the first one be triple and then the second one be single to follow the current structure here?
I was going to map the electronic sounds there, but it would certainly make the whole thing more cohesive.
How about something like this?
https://ul.h3z.jp/ZdSulPCS.jpg
https://ul.h3z.jp/ahR3kD9K.jpg
00:22:818 (22818|1) - make this a jack like the rest of this section, would catch some players off guard cus of that
00:26:422 (26422|3,26422|2,26512|3,26512|0,26602|1,26602|0) - these are way too hard to hit right after a 333bpm stream, for playability I suggest
I'm so embarrassed that I didn't notice the jumptrill....
Like this, ok?
https://ul.h3z.jp/gzkwbmXA.jpg
01:03:088 (63088|0,63088|3,63088|2,63359|3,63359|0,63359|1,63629|0,63629|1,63629|3,63629|2,63899|2,63899|0,63899|3,64170|1,64170|0) - removing those ghost notes like i mentioned earlier could make way for these to be LN. also remove the quad and make it a chord since its the same as what comes before
01:03:989 (63989|1,63989|0,64079|2,64079|3,64260|0,64260|1,64350|3,64350|2,64440|2,64440|3) - ghost notes. you could remove them as i dont think theyre needed
https://ul.h3z.jp/1kaqF3rD.jpg
ok?
https://ul.h3z.jp/E3YwhDf6.jpg
And by the way, this one too.
01:22:548 (82548|1,82728|2,82908|3,83088|3,83224|2,83269|0,83449|0) - i feel like not mapping this is a huge missed opportunity.
the vocals do follow the same sort of rhythm in the kiai if you listen to it. you could do something like this -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/19364963/43fb
01:44:350 (104350|1,104350|0) - is the double intentional? clear snare here and wouldnt make sense for it to be a double
(if not intentional, make the snares chords and kicks double elsewhere)
02:16:602 you could probably do something like this -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/19364984/5d7e
there were some ghost notes (like in 02:16:782)
02:19:305 (139305|1,139440|1,139575|1,139710|1,139845|1) - big bad anchor here
seeing some doubles which dont have real significance, such as 02:19:305 (139305|1,139440|1,139575|1,139710|1,139845|1)
find a way to restructure it and remove unnecessary doubles. i do see what youre trying to do though