Just a general suggestion but i feel like the contrast in this part is kinda weird, as LN are over utilized to the point it's a bit too hard.
Some of the LNs like 00:22:327 (22327|2) - 00:26:077 (26077|2) - 00:28:890 (28890|1) - 00:29:157 (29157|0) - 00:29:827 (29827|3) - 00:29:961 (29961|1) - 00:30:363 (30363|2) - 00:33:443 (33443|3) - 00:33:979 (33979|1) - 00:34:113 (34113|3) - 00:34:247 (34247|0) -
You can try making these rice instead of long notes, this will create a nice differenciation between the 1/2 sounds that use rice and the 1/4 sounds that use 1/2 LN for emphasis
would also do the same for 01:54:604 (114604|2) - 01:54:872 (114872|3) - 01:55:407 (115407|3) - 01:55:541 (115541|0) - 01:55:675 (115675|2) - 01:56:077 (116077|1) -