00:17:598 (1,2) - would like to see more activity here as
00:17:598 (1,2,3,4) - this entire pattern doesn't change at all but the drums do change in intensity quite noticeably
you can try something like this: https://i.imgur.com/ZzaWsA3.png
01:13:349 (1,2,3,4) - i'd make these sliderjumps like in 01:12:471 (5,6) - (or stack these similarly 01:11:593 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3) - )
01:56:373 (2,3) - same
02:05:446 (1) - in this kiai (ignoring the end part) i'd reevaluate to make sure you really want some of these jumps as kick sliders or circles (like 02:05:739 (2) - 02:09:251 (2) - ) since it seems kinda inconsistent imo
02:59:007 (7,1) - couple options:
i'd make this a perfect stack, moving the burst(s) down & rotating (maybe also these? 02:59:593 (5,1,5,1) - )
if not then 02:59:593 (5,5) - i'd make these into kicksliders
or maybe something similar with 03:55:495 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) -
04:21:251 (1) - idk if this is too hard, but i'd make this more wavy to match the guitar vibrato (maybe there's something in olibomby's tools??)