00:11:985 (1,2,3,4) - i'd suggest you to make this square bigger to emphaze pitch transition
00:15:735 (1) - can you make it a little more spaced to 00:15:547 (8). it doesn't feels spaced much as 00:09:735 (1).
i'd suggest you to switch spacings in 9 735 and 15 735. 9s is quieter, but have more spacing, kinda sus