00:03:628 (3628|3,3628|0,3735|1,3843|3,3950|1,3950|0) - LNs feels strange. I think you should change to 00:03:144 (3144|0,3144|3,3224|0,3305|2,3305|1,3386|3,3386|1,3466|0,3547|3,3547|1) - same patterns
00:22:369 - I see that you are using a different variation of jacks https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/17944553/4547
how about using this variation of jacks too? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/17944557/35e5 as an example
00:47:073 - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/17944564/c2a4 I think it will be better, because the sound changes compared to the previous 1 2
01:28:304 - change that part to something like this: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/17325243/7c8b
I think it feels better, because 01:28:304 (88304|3) & 01:29:191 (89191|3) - without vocal