00:08:092 - ~ 00:14:520 - i am bit confused in this part mainly due to the rest moment. Seems that you are trying to create some 1/1 rest moment there but the I get lost on the 1/1 red tick break in this part. Mind telling me more a bit of the reasoning behind? :o
01:47:520 - removes some notes to add a Slider, like this -> https://puu.sh/Izbyt.png
the intermediate without kiai can be used to have a pattern that is not too dense.
02:01:377 - i would suggest making a note here cuz it plays a bit strange to suddenly have a 4-plets there. It technically matches the drum but just a bit strange during gameplay imo