对于00:10:008 - ~00:18:108 - ：1/4多少有点随机了，而且作为一个intro的话也没强到需要另添加1/4三连来强调。建议保留所有的1/4二连，然后把1/4三连改成1/2单点，顺便把1/4二连的位置统一一下。比如：
00:10:308 - 原来这里的三连：

改成如图，然后这里：

也就是删掉00:14:058 (53) -
这么改让pattern和谐一点。

Additional:
00:16:758 (69,70) - 如果接受的话，这两个可以ctrl+g，做出一点点变化

对于00:19:908 - 到00:28:158 - ：
00:24:708 - 对于这个坐标之前，建议大nerf一下，因为节奏在逐渐dense而你的pattern没有体现出来。我的建议是这个坐标前的五连全改三连，然后可以依照consistency设一到两个1/1空挡。比如：


呐，不妨试试改成这样？然后给后面的五连part多一点强调

00:06:108 - ~00:07:908 - 连红是不是有点太长了？节奏和音高变化也没有这么平缓，多加几个蓝色呗？我的建议：00:06:108 (19,20) - 蓝，00:07:308 (22) - 蓝

00:27:108 - 这根串多少有点糊弄了。。。ooooxxxxoxoox多好

对于kiai的强调：
个人感觉7连可以留给音调比较高的部分，比如：00:30:633 (13) - 这个note，挪到00:29:883 - 会更好一点，这样的话可以通过1/4串的密度来表现出音调高低。类似的部分：00:33:183 (14) - 挪到00:32:283 - 然后改一改7连配色。
还有诸如00:34:833 (30) - 这个note：考虑挪到00:34:983 - 然后改蓝，个人感觉后面的这个空站的连续音更有理由填上。
kiai后半部分同：00:40:233 (13) - 00:42:783 (14) - 00:44:433 (30) -

00:49:758 (11,12,13,1,2) - 这个五连改xxxxo? 更契合音调一点

00:51:633 - 加个note？跟00:49:233 - 保持一致
01:01:233 - 同

Kantan doesn't have the video bro.. maybe you need to add
Video,0,"video.mp4"
to 'Background and Video events'

For the part after 00:59:646 - :
As you followed the vocal mostly, and the overall pitch and rhythm density are both stronger than parts before this timestamp, but notes didn't show the strength, so i suggest to add more 1/1 5plets to vary from before:
01:04:229 - add a don for the lyric and snare
01:07:562 - add a kat for the same reason
01:12:562 - add a don for drum, also for the continuous vocal here
01:17:562 (6) - this note: move to 01:18:396 - and 01:19:229 - add a don

00:59:645 - 1ms unsnapped
inner same

00:39:085 (5,6,7) - how about change this 1/2 triplet into something start with kat? as the pitch is going down here so i think the ddk pattern isn't such fit here.

00:46:009 (7) - this xxxxx xxx xxx pattern seems made the diff gap too large, i'd suggest to delete this one to make a bit nerf.
00:52:722 (7) - same

00:54:610 (1) - finisher this? for the cymbal background

similar to the general suggestion on Kantan, I think the part after 00:59:645 - this timestamp seems a little undermapped while compared to parts before here. so as the vocal and drums becoming dense, buff somewhere would be more fit this song. my suggestions are:
01:01:729 - add a kat for the snare and optionally 01:01:937 - add here a note for continuous vocal
01:06:104 - add a note for continuous vocal
01:10:687 (8) - move to 01:10:271 - for the dense drum
01:13:187 (5) - move to 01:12:354 - and change the 5plet into ddkkd or ddkdk whatever, for the drum and a better emphasize of 01:13:396 (6) - this vocal stops.
01:20:687 - add a note here for the dense drum?

01:04:646 (1) - 01:07:979 (1) - how about unfinisher them to consistent with Kantan, Oni and Inner Oni? As I can't really see the reason about finishers' usage here.
same for Muzukashii.

01:07:563 (10,11,1) - change the color to dkd? it's clearly the middle one has the highest pitch and you followed the vocal here mainly

00:24:191 - add a note here for high pitch and drum?

00:29:645 (10) - about this note, i think 00:29:855 - this snare should be more noticed to set a note so how about move it to 00:29:855 - ?

00:59:645 - drum here is too dense, also as an intro to the final phase of the song, i'd suggest to buff here a bit, by adding 01:00:271 - a note.

00:29:855 (13) - as this one has only been finishered in oni, consider unfinish this for spread consistency?

00:38:561 - how about insert a note here as you did in inner? this drum seems very hearable.
00:48:631 - same

From 00:59:645 - to the end, I saw you used some long sentences to perform the build up but some breaks like 01:10:271 - seems not that necessary? also 01:15:062 - this sentence seems a bit too long. so i'd suggest:
01:10:271 - 01:10:375 - add here notes as a triplet to connect the continuous vocal here
01:14:854 (2) - remove this one as a break
01:19:750 - add here a kat for the vocal
01:22:771 - 01:22:875 - add here notes as a triplet for the final drums

00:40:869 (20) - move this one to 00:41:288 - and change to blue? i think the vocal here should be more focused, now this note seems standing on somewhere not such necessary.
if accepted 00:42:967 - add a note and make this ddkdk for consistency

01:19:750 - how about adding here a note for continuous vocal?