00:18:469 (1,2,3,4) - k ddk works best for these 4 notes imo. roxan's Oni already is that way so I think you should also map it in your diffs because it fits the pitch more.

Also 00:18:994 - You are missing a note here. You can clearly hear drum there and it's not mapped.

By the way, if you apply any mod which someone else suggested in this discussion, press the like button so they can receive kudosu.

It's also better for people or you to see which mods you applied and which not.

If you have "Camellia" in the song or artist name then there is no reason to put in in the tags. Same goes for Nanahira.

You should find some other names for these artists which are being used a lot (cametek, kamelcamellia, kamel) for example.

Also I suggest to change the Artist title to Japanese because both Camellia and Nanahira are Japanese. Romanized Artist will stay the same as it is currently.

When you change the title, remove their Japanese names from tags.

If the song wasn't made for osu! then Source should be empty.

Overall, there is many random streams, finishers, patterns and also many 1/6s which do not follow the music very well (pretty much most of the map). I personally think that this map need no more mods because it would take very long time to bring it to rankable mapset.

I suggest to map more songs and mod many maps from people. By modding you will understand how patterning works because people usually respond with reason why they changed or didn't change your suggestion.

I also suggest to look at some experienced mapper's maps, either ranked or unranked doesn't matter, if the mapper is experienced, both ranked and unranked maps will be almost the same.

When I started mapping, my first map was horrible. There were random 1/6s, missing 1/6s, random patterns all over the map which didn't follow the song at all, random SV changes, etc. My top diff had 135 suggestions and most of them I applied because the map was basically randomly mapped lol.

Of course you could try and push this mapset to ranked, but it would take VERY long time for you to do so because you basically have to remap the whole map for it to be rankable. By getting MANY mods you will reach the rankable state over time, but still... if you try to focus on one map of yours, getting better at mapping or modding would take you very long time.

Like I said, I really recommend you to look at some modding queues or open your own modding queue and take some maps from there which you can mod.

Also, if you are modding or mapping, please try changing between playback rates, usually 50% and 100% works, but sometimes you could also use 25% if you are very unsure, people usually don't recommend 25%, but I am still using it and it works fine for me.

03:09:724 - 03:17:125 - Wtf is this...

00:28:426 - 00:29:279 - 00:30:132 - 00:30:985 - 00:31:838 - 00:32:691 - 00:33:544 - There are actually sounds you probably should follow at least in top diff.

00:35:179 - 00:36:032 - etc. these patterns are actually the same thing so if you are making these patterns as 5 plets then I think you should do it here as well 00:28:355 - 00:33:757 -

00:11:446 - 00:12:446 - 00:14:112 - 00:15:112 - 00:16:779 - etc.

These sounds are quite loud so I think you should also map them because it's weird not having them mapped. You can clearly hear them, but there are no notes there to follow it.

In some parts of the song you map those as well.