04:17:051 (8) - using a reverse slider here sounds better especially with 1/4 drums and the jumps after
04:14:196 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - im not sure here but ill use this structure http://prntscr.com/p4c5n7
Its maybe i dont like the single note on a blue tick but maybe you will use this one :)
04:05:061 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - using here such construction sounds better http://prntscr.com/p4c161