00:17:786 (1) - How about changing slider velocity of 00:12:707 to 0.8x, this to 0.9x and 00:12:707 to 1.0x, to express volume getting increased?
00:08:898 (1,2) - Considering that the object placements of the first part changes every 8 beats, It would be better to use the 1/2 repeat slider for consistency, in my opinion.