1. 去掉widescreen letterbox这两个选项

1. Normal 标题应该是あったかいんだからぁ♪，乱码了
2. aimod有些小问题
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   1. 00:35:343 (1) - 叠好
   2. 00:47:519 (3) - ^
   3. 00:54:047 (3) - 打开ds
   4. 01:02:518 - kial 开始时间
   5. 01:02:460 - kial 结束时间
3. 00:02:872 (3) - 可以包的更好
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4. 00:11:166 (1) - add finish？
5. 01:01:106 (3) - ^
6. 00:20:166 (2,4) - add whistle？
7. 00:57:224 (1,3,5) - ^然后把相邻的whistle去了（相当于鼓里的snare）你看如何呢
8. 01:07:812 (4) - ^
9. 01:15:223 (1) - ^
10. 00:27:225 (2,3) - 这样好看点吗？
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11. 00:33:931 (5) - 01:09:576 (3) - normal不能用两次折返的滑条，对新手不友好，好像是unrank的吧,而且这里这么用很违和，前面那两个长的倒还是可以
12. 01:05:341 (1) - 包好
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1. 00:02:166 (3,4) - 各自ctrl+g下flow更好
2. 00:06:225 (2) - 包好
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3. 00:16:284 (4) - flow有点怪，这个pattern不适合这里的旋律，把它叠428 96怎么样，再把00:16:637 (6,1) - 往左边弯一下？
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4. 00:17:166 (2,3) - 这里做个梗怎么样，就是把00:17:696 (4,5,6,7) - 提到前面，后面再用一次，距离近一点。就是反跳的那种渐入效果
5. 00:17:696 (4,5) - 这个距离有点远flow也不好
6. 00:26:872 (2) - 包好，尾巴往上拉一点
7. 00:28:284 (1,3) - 叠好
8. 00:37:107 (2,3,4) - 试试这个？
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9. 01:01:106 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 虽然有nc提示，还是觉得距离不要一样的好，因为节奏不一样
10. 01:03:929 (5) - NC
11. 01:10:635 (4,5) - flow不是很好试试这个？6叠4滑条尾
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General

1. 请检查AI-mod：kiai time开始和结束的的绿线慢了1毫秒 - - 以及：Normal的标题出错了- -

Insane

1. 00:07:284 (1,2) - 建议把滑条放在下面，圈放在上面。打着会顺手
2. 00:09:401 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,1,2,3,4,5,1,1) - 这一段打下来感觉好挤，甚至有些妨碍读图了。希望重新做一下。
3. 00:18:401 (1,2) - 我个人觉得这个跳有些破坏间距平衡，节奏上也没有明显突出的地方。建议把1往靠近前面那个滑条的位置挪一下。
4. 00:19:460 (5,6,7) - 这个连打方向朝下的话大概会顺一些。
5. 00:24:754 (4,5,6) - 这个三角不是等边的 - -
6. 00:36:931 (1,2,3) - ^
7. 01:01:106 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 这是想做个读图梗嘛？初见杀啊。。。确定rankable吗？（我不太确定）不然就像zj说的那样，避免一样的距离吧。
8. 01:04:106 (6,7,8,9) - 我个人觉得这种直线打着有些卡手。建议改成这样：
   
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Normal

1. 00:20:166 (2,3,4) - 包好
2. 00:16:990 (1,2) - 两次折返的滑条，挺多人不喜欢的，建议不用。
3. 00:40:813 (4,5) - 全曲唯一一处用了1/2拍单点，不太好。建议删去(4)，或者在其他相同节奏的地方都用上这个。
4. 00:55:459 (1,1) - Normal难度下，转盘后必须空出两拍。建议删去这个转盘，改成其他物件。

1. According to the ranking criteria so do you need to add a Hard diff since the difficulty gap will be too big.
2. Turn off the widescreen support. You don't have a storyboard.
3. Offset is wrong. The offset of the timing is 00:01:460

1. 00:02:872 (3) - Blanket
2. 00:16:990 (1,2) - I don't recoomend you to let the player go back and forth in a slider like this since the player may end up getting bored of it. Delete one reverse and put a circle instead.
3. 00:20:166 (2) - Blanket
4. 00:32:519 (3) - Clap on slider tick
5. 00:33:931 (5) - same as 00:16:990 (1,2)
6. 00:33:931 (5) - Clap on the first reverse
7. 00:35:343 (1) - Clap on slidertick
8. 00:35:343 (1,2) - Don't stack them like than especially not when it's 1/2 beat space. If most of the map was 1/2 beat so wouldn't I really mind but the most of the map has 1/1 space and stacking it like that will let people who are not used to play osu to miss. So don't stack them.
9. 00:38:166 - 00:48:754 and 01:02:518 - 01:13:106 - Put a clap on every 2 and 4 wite tick. In case that spot ends up being on a slider put a clap on the slidertick.
10. 00:46:637 (2,3) - Same as 00:35:343 (1,2)
11. 00:50:166 (6) - Delete the circle. I can't hear anything there which make s that note unnesseccary
12. 01:05:341 (1) - Blanket
13. 01:14:518 (5) - Delete

1. 00:02:519 (4) - Blanket
2. 00:09:107 (3,4,5,1) - I don't think it's a good idea to have that "stream" like thst. It's too hard to tap them and confusing to players.
3. 00:12:401 (1,1) - Why two NC's after each other?
4. 00:26:872 (2) - Blanket
5. 00:28:284 (1,2) - Dinstance snap
6. 00:28:637 (2) - Blanket
7. 00:38:166 - 00:48:754 and 01:02:518 - 01:13:106 - same as Normal
8. 00:43:813 (6,1,1,2,3) - This is confusing for the player and the player will believe that all of them are 1/1 beats or 1/4 beats and miss them
9. 00:55:988 (2) - Blanket
10. 01:01:106 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - Let the people know that 01:01:106 (1,2,3,4) are 1/2 beats 01:01:812 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) are 1/4 beats people will miss otherwise.

1. 00:05:343 (2,1,2) - 个人建议避免此类overlap，可以把00:07:107 (1) - 往右然后00:05:343 (2,2) - stack
2. 00:15:578 (2) - 往上一点，让两个滑条的尾巴跟另一个滑条的头尾距离一样（这什么解释...，上图吧
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3. 00:16:990 (1,2) - 避免两次折返？这是最低难度吧，这不太友好，有点危险的说
4. 00:33:931 (5) - ^
5. 01:09:576 (3) - ^
6. 01:10:459 (4) - 弄成折返？正好后面有个音
7. 01:13:812 - 这里没音不适合圈圈，01:13:459 (3,4) - 连起来做滑条吧
8. 01:15:223 (1) - 加whistle，结尾有个 叮~~~~~~

1. 00:02:872 (5) - NC
2. 00:09:578 (2,6) - 歪了吧，00:09:754 (3) - 这也是，看起来难受，摆成这样正正的多好看
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3. 01:15:223 - 建议加个圈，有个打击感好一点
4. 00:14:166 - 小小建议，从这里开始的地方，背景鼓点非常丰富，我觉得可以适当加点1/4节奏进去，比如00:14:431 - 加个圈啊等等等等
5. 00:25:813 (2,3,1,2,3,1) - 这一块overlap看起来不是很好看，而且00:26:166 (1,2,3) - 这个也没有减小间距的理由，所以不如就用下复制旋转，差不多这样
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6. 00:36:931 - 00:37:990 - 这段地方可以减小一下音效音量，跟后面形成一下对比
7. 01:09:576 (3,4,5,6) - 为什么不这样呢
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1. Just some complaints.
2. My personal suggestions.
3. Highly recommended.
4. Unrankable, you have to fix it.

1. I’m not that sure about the current metadata. I found this metadata on youtube: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LDOa-ctda3s
   http://puu.sh/hsB6K/a6ac697acb.png
   So I think the metadata will have to be: HoneyWorks feat. Hatsune Miku – Attakain Dakara
   Maybe you’ll have to add “[cover]” as well but I’m not sure. Just doublecheck your metadata with an expert please.
2. The repeat arrow clashes with the hitcircle-skin a bit, since it’s not that visible when placed on the soft pink colour. http://puu.sh/hsHSL/687568e8ca.jpg I guess your choices are either to change the colours and make sure that the arrow is visible enough or to change the reverse arrow completely to something darker that’s more visible.
3. Combo colour 1 and combo colour 3 are very close to each other. The pink and the pink. I highly suggest that you change combo colour 3 to a different colour since I think it might be unrankable if the two colours are too close to each other. Try green for combo 3.
   
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   That’s just an example of the two combo colours that look too similar.
4. The hitsounding in the Easy could do with work imo. In the Hard and Insane the hitsounds are great but then your easiest diff still lacks that hitsounding. I think you just used whistles in that diff if I’m not mistaken.
5. I think the gap between Normal and Hard might be a problem. Hard is quite difficult and imo Normal can be harder. Try adding more difficult rhythms and patterns in Normal.
6. You didn’t add your GD’er in the tags. “G’s Hard” Who is the GD’er?
7. Uncheck “Widescreen support” in all diffs since you don’t have a SB. Just optional.
8. Use a resolution of 1366X768 or 1024X768 for your BG. Your current resolution is a bit unsatisfying. I managed to fix your current BG’s resolution. It’s 1366X768 now. Here:
   http://puu.sh/hsBP6/3f19df39f4.jpg
9. To be safe, change your audio lead-in to 2000ms. If you don’t know how, just contact me.

1. Imo, I really think you can map that break out since you mapped that section in all the other diffs.
2. 00:02:872 (2) –I don’t really like the placement of this slider. It doesn’t make a nice blanket and it looks a bit crammed. I suggest trying this placement. It will also make the flow nicer imo.
   
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3. 00:04:284 (3) –Rather place a 1/1 slider here. That repeat slider might be a bit confusing for beginners.
   
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4. 00:05:696 (1) –Ctrl+J. To ensure better flow with 00:07:813 (2) –
   
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5. 00:07:107 –I hear a cymbal sound here. Rather place a finish on the tail for better emphasis. You might want to lower the volume then since the sound might be too loud.
6. 00:09:931 –Hm, I hear a cymbal sound on this repeat. I think it would be better then to place a finish on the repeat then instead of the whistle. ^
7. 00:14:166 (2) –Finish instead? It’s quite a loud sound there and I don’t think the whistle really supports it that well. ^
8. 00:32:519 (4) –Again, rather a finish. There’s a cymbal sound in the background.
9. 00:36:401 (4) –The vocals clearly starts here: 00:36:578 – again. So start the slider there as well. Like this:
   
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10. 00:38:166 (1) –Finish on head of slider.
11. 00:38:166 (1,2) –Eh, I don’t really like this pattern: Bad flow and it just looks untidy. Something as simple as this will look better:
    
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12. 00:48:048 –Finish on the tail of the slider.
13. 00:56:871 (2) –Finish please. There’s a clear cymbal sound in the music.
14. 00:55:459 (1,2) –Eh, not best flow. In future, try not to place circles like right under the tail of a slider since it’s not the best flow. Here’s an example like what the best flow would be:
    
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15. 00:58:282 –Again, place a finish here please.
16. 00:59:694 (4) -^ On the head of the slider.
17. 01:02:518 –Finish on the head of the slider please.
18. 01:05:341 (1) –Not the best flow imo. Maybe try something like this instead:
    
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19. 01:08:165 (4) –Finish here.

1. 00:57:576 (1,2) –Can you please just check this spacing again please. 00:58:282 (2) – is too close to 00:57:576 (1) –
2. 00:16:990 (1) –For better flow you can try stacking this slider on the head of this slider: 00:14:166 (1) –
3. 00:33:578 (4) –That clapsound is very loud. I really advise you to lower the volume there a bit. There are other places as well of course, but I’m not gonna point them all out since I trust that you know where they are.
4. 00:35:343 (1,2) –I don’t really approve this stack, since the rhythm here is so fast. Rather unstack.
5. 00:46:637 (2,3) -^
6. 00:55:459 (1) –Add a finish on the tail of the spinner. There’s a clear cymbal in the background.
7. 00:57:576 (1) –I suggest you rather place this circle in the middle of the spinner to make it easier for the player to click it since the reaction time is not that long.
8. 00:58:282 (2) –Finish on the head of the slider.

1. Circle size 4? A hard always looks better with a circle size of 4.
2. 00:14:078 –Hm, rather remove that 5% green line. I’m not sure if it’s really unrankable if placed on the tail of the slider. But just to be 100% safe rather remove it.
3. 00:43:813 (1) –Finish on the head of this slider?
4. 01:05:871 (2) –This circle is placed too high. It’s slightly touching the HP bar.

1. Ehh, not really fond of the whistle sounds that you used in this diff. It’s a really annoying sound and kind of ruins the cute song imo. Try to stick to the Hard’s hitsounding a bit. I kinda like the Hard’s hitsounding the best.
2. 00:43:813 (6,1,1,2,3) –Hm, this placement looks a bit confusing. Can’t you try something like this instead:
   
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3. 01:01:106 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) –This confused me a lot. You used the same spacings, but one part of that stream has a slow rhythm while the other part has a very fast rhythm. The NC’s won’t be enough for distinction imo.