1. Guy's Easy (2,41 stars, 55 notes)
2. Normal (3,3 stars, 62 notes)
3. Smoothie's Hard (4,43 stars, 91 notes)

My First Map Ranked!

1. Smoothie: For Guest Diff Smoothie's Hard
2. Guy: For Guest Diff Guy's Easy
3. Gonzvlo: For Timing

1. Lally
2. Zexous
3. Gonzvlo
4. jonathanlfj
5. Blue Dragon
6. tutuhaha
7. mancusojuanmattos
8. TheVileOne
9. Gonzvlo (Remod: Guy's Easy + Timing)
10. Teara
11. -Bakari-
12. TMAstraf
13. Andrea
14. kajiyatta
15. Melt
16. happy30
17. those
18. blissfulyoshi
19. SapphireGhost
20. Frostmourne &
21. Kurai

Lally wrote:

[Hard]
00:08:245 - add a circle it feels empty Done
00:13:333 (1) - this slider touch HP drain Fixed :3

SPOILER

00:52:509 - i think you should add a spinner here is better as hear silenced objekts Done

good luck o3o

Smoothie wrote:

Lally wrote:

[Hard]
00:08:245 - add a circle it feels empty Done
00:13:333 (1) - this slider touch HP drain Fixed :3

SPOILER

00:52:509 - i think you should add a spinner here is better as hear silenced objekts Done

good luck o3o

Thanks for mod :3
http://puu.sh/25mEk

The number of maps by any mapper should not exceed the number of maps by the uploader: this means that if you have 2 diffs, no guest mapper can have more than 2 diffs...

This is a very sharp jump that is not readable by newbies. On my first playthrough with HD DT HR, this was the only part that I almost fumbled (the rest flowed perfectly - I still ended up getting SS on the first try ). Anyway, jumps like this are fun but Normals are not the place for them.

SPOILER

1. Timing is way too off.
2. Offset needs -19ms (595ms)
3. BPM seems a bit iffy, gonna double check it later. (It'd be great if you ask for more opinions)

• 
  New Combos

1. 00:17:393 (8,1) - De acuerdo al patrón que seguiamos de los NC, tienes que agregar un NC en (8) y remover el de (1)
2. 00:20:952 (6) - Luego, si continuamos con esto, tienes que agregar uno aqui.
3. 00:24:003 (1) - A continuacion, remover este.
4. 00:26:037 (5) - Y agregar uno aqui. Pensé que sí habías entendido el patrón.
5. 00:29:088 (6) - Agregar uno en este (6), y luego...
6. 00:30:105 (1) - ... remover este.
7. 00:33:156 (6) - A continuación, agergar uno aqui, y remover este 00:34:173 (1) -
8. Bueno suficiente de New Combo, creo que con esto puedes enteder el patrón en general. Revísalo desde el comienzo, presta atención a los ticks blancos grandes y a la música.
   
   Hitsounds
9. 00:00:614 (1,2,3,4,5) - Los hitsounds que usaste aqui, están perfectos.
10. 00:04:681 (1,2,3,4) - Aquí, también, pero deberías agregar un Whistle al final de (1) y al comienzo de (3) y (4).
11. 00:09:766 (3) - Si sigues tu patrón anterior, deberías agregar un Whistle al comienzo de esto.
12. 00:12:817 (1) - Al igual que al comienzo de este.
13. 00:14:851 (4) - Luego agregar uno aqui y también en ...
14. 00:15:868 (6) - este lugar.
15. El ritmo de la canción es muy simple y repetitiva, creo que con esto puedes entender el patrón que tu comenzaste y que estoy intentando mejor. Simplemente repitelo, no hay problema ya que la canción es una repetición en sí.
    
    Object Placement and Patterns
16. 00:04:173 (4,5,1) - Sugiero que reemplazes el (4) y (5) por un slider para que no sean 2 circulos en 1/2 los que tengas que presionar, de está manera es más fácil y más adecuado para este nivel.
17. 00:24:003 (4) - No es bueno que un slider tenga más de 1 repetición en el nivel más fácil ya que no resulta muy intuitivo a menos de que la música ayude, en este caso no. Por la tanto, es mejor que quites un repeat y luego agregues un círculo en el espacio.
18. En general, el flow está bien, los patrones está limpios, no hay mayor problema. Sin embargo, me gustaría ver patrones más definidos, es decir, intenta "formar" o "diseñar" algo, no simplemente pongas los objetos al azar, no sé si me entiendes. Básicamente te pido que lo hagas un poco más interesante.

1. I think I understand your combo patterns, looks creative and nice. I'm not completely sure about the time when Yellow starts but it should be fine, let's see what other modders think.
2. 00:14:342 (2,3) - Unlike the previous patterns, this part doesn't flow very well, the movement feels too forced. I'd suggest to move (3) around or remove a repeat on (2) and then add a circle to join (2) and (3)
3. 00:51:461 (4) - Whoops, no, this shouldn't happen. Most of the slider is covered by the previous object, you need to move this away.
4. 00:51:969 (5) - This sudden jump doesn't make much sense, there's no music change or anything. I strongly suggest to fix this spacing.
5. 00:52:478 (1) - This spinner is too long for the music. The music stops completely by the middle of it. If you wish to map this part, I'd strongly suggest to replace the spinner with a slider from here 00:52:478 - to 00:53:495 -

Gonzvlo wrote:

|Smoothie's Hard|

I think I understand your combo patterns, looks creative and nice. I'm not completely sure about the time when Yellow starts but it should be fine, let's see what other modders think.
00:14:342 (2,3) - Unlike the previous patterns, this part doesn't flow very well, the movement feels too forced. I'd suggest to move (3) around or remove a repeat on (2) and then add a circle to join (2) and (3) Should be better now~
00:51:461 (4) - Whoops, no, this shouldn't happen. Most of the slider is covered by the previous object, you need to move this away. I seriously have no clue what happend there... however, fixed.
00:51:969 (5) - This sudden jump doesn't make much sense, there's no music change or anything. I strongly suggest to fix this spacing. I moved 00:51:461 (4) back where it was supposed to be <.<
00:52:478 (1) - This spinner is too long for the music. The music stops completely by the middle of it. If you wish to map this part, I'd strongly suggest to replace the spinner with a slider from here 00:52:478 - to 00:53:495 Done

jonathanlfj wrote:

very short and comfortable song

Black is suggestion
Blue is highly recommended
Red is unrankable


[Smoothe's Hard]
00:05:679 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - make the formation like a perfect hexagon: Done

SPOILER

00:30:086 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - this time its a star: Done

SPOILER

00:32:120 (5,6) - also swap the whistle onto 00:32:628 (6) to follow what you did at 00:15:849 (4) Sounds a bit weird...
00:38:222 (1,2,3,4,5) - like above formation Done
00:48:391 (5,6) - swap whistle Sounds better the way it is imo.

1. 00:04:154 (4) - Maybe remove whistle from slidertrack/end since you did the same thing on 00:02:120 (2)?
2. 00:09:239 (2) - This doesn't need a whistle, since the pitch on the instrument you're following gets lower..
3. 00:11:781 (5) - Add a new combo here and remove it from 00:12:798 (1), seems a bit better
4. 00:13:815 (2) - Add a whistle here, sounds much better. Also, maybe add a new combo so this combo doesn't get too long
5. 00:18:900 (4) - Remove this whistle at the end? Everytime the song did that, before, you didn't put a whistle, so...
6. 00:23:984 (4) - Remove whistle from slidertrack, since you did it in every slider. Also sounds pretty bad.
7. 00:26:781 (7) - Remove whistle? You did the same thing on 00:28:052 (9,10,1), and imo that sounds better.
8. 00:31:611 (4) - Remove whistle since the pitch of the instrument goes down? Sounds a bit better.
9. 00:33:137 (6) - Add a new combo. Combo is a bit too long and also follows music.
10. 00:33:645 (7) - Following the logic you used in hitsounding this map, this shouldn't have a whistle. Sounds a bit too spamish imo.
11. 00:36:950 (3) - same as before
12. 00:40:256 (7,1) - Are sliderwhistles here on purpose? They sound pretty bad. It'd be better if you removed them.
13. 00:43:052 (3) - Maybe remove whistle for the same reasons previously mentioned?
14. 00:45:086 (6) - ^
15. 00:48:391 (4) - Remove sliderwhistle, sounds pretty bad.
    
    Cool difficulty, the hitsounds sound a bit weird in my opinion but that's just my ears.

1. 00:02:628 (4) - Add new combo here? You did it on 00:04:408 (1), and that's pretty much the same thing happening in the music.
2. 00:10:764 (5) - Same as ^.
3. 00:13:306 (1) - In my opinion, this sounds better with the start without hitsounds and the ending with a whistle.
4. 00:18:900 (4) - Same stuff as the other ones
5. 00:25:001 (1,2) - Spacing here plays really weird. You could add a note at 00:25:764 (2) - between these notes to make spacing even.
6. 00:27:035 (5) - Then again, add a new combo here.
7. 00:35:171 (4) - ^
8. 00:43:306 (6) - ^
9. 00:52:459 (6) - Move the slider endpoint to x:52 so it's properly aligned :<
   
   Really nicely mapped diff, has a nice flow. Some shapes like the stars could improve a bit, but that's just nazi.

Blue Dragon wrote:

[Normal]

1. 00:04:154 (4) - Maybe remove whistle from slidertrack/end since you did the same thing on 00:02:120 (2)? Okay
2. 00:09:239 (2) - This doesn't need a whistle, since the pitch on the instrument you're following gets lower.. ^
3. 00:11:781 (5) - Add a new combo here and remove it from 00:12:798 (1), seems a bit better Nope. Sorry
4. 00:13:815 (2) - Add a whistle here, sounds much better. Also, maybe add a new combo so this combo doesn't get too long Add Whistle
5. 00:18:900 (4) - Remove this whistle at the end? Everytime the song did that, before, you didn't put a whistle, so... Okkiii
6. 00:23:984 (4) - Remove whistle from slidertrack, since you did it in every slider. Also sounds pretty bad. ^
7. 00:26:781 (7) - Remove whistle? You did the same thing on 00:28:052 (9,10,1), and imo that sounds better. ^
8. 00:31:611 (4) - Remove whistle since the pitch of the instrument goes down? Sounds a bit better. ^
9. 00:33:137 (6) - Add a new combo. Combo is a bit too long and also follows music. ^
10. 00:33:645 (7) - Following the logic you used in hitsounding this map, this shouldn't have a whistle. Sounds a bit too spamish imo. Ok.
11. 00:36:950 (3) - same as before ^
12. 00:40:256 (7,1) - Are sliderwhistles here on purpose? They sound pretty bad. It'd be better if you removed them. ^
13. 00:43:052 (3) - Maybe remove whistle for the same reasons previously mentioned? ^
14. 00:45:086 (6) - ^ <-- ^
15. 00:48:391 (4) - Remove sliderwhistle, sounds pretty bad. Delete Whistle
    
    Cool difficulty, the hitsounds sound a bit weird in my opinion but that's just my ears.

Blue Dragon wrote:

[Smoothie's Hard]

1. 00:02:628 (4) - Add new combo here? You did it on 00:04:408 (1), and that's pretty much the same thing happening in the music.
2. 00:10:764 (5) - Same as ^.
3. 00:13:306 (1) - In my opinion, this sounds better with the start without hitsounds and the ending with a whistle.
4. 00:18:900 (4) - Same stuff as the other ones
5. 00:25:001 (1,2) - Spacing here plays really weird. You could add a note at 00:25:764 (2) - between these notes to make spacing even.
6. 00:27:035 (5) - Then again, add a new combo here.
7. 00:35:171 (4) - ^
8. 00:43:306 (6) - ^
9. 00:52:459 (6) - Move the slider endpoint to x:52 so it's properly aligned :<
   Fixed all
   
   Really nicely mapped diff, has a nice flow. Some shapes like the stars could improve a bit, but that's just nazi. The star shapes should be better now.

osu file format v12

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TitleUnicode:A Twinkle in the Sky
Artist:Yoko Shimomura
ArtistUnicode:Yoko Shimomura
Creator:ThoomyyxD
Version:Smoothie's Hard
Source:Kingdom Hearts II
Tags:smoothie disney squarenix kingdom hearts 2 playstation 2 gumi ship
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