1. Hard (2.17 stars, 295 notes)
2. Normal (1.36 stars, 174 notes)

Mods

10/05/2014: First submit.
11/05/2014: New background, combo colours, tweaked hitsounds and volume levels.
11/05/2014: Falling embers storyboard. Awww yeaaahhhh....
11/05/2014: Changed romaji particles to lowercase, as it seems to be "the thing" for Umineko maps.
12/05/2014: Added silent spinnerspin and removed spinner timing points (fixes an occasional "pop" on the end of spinners).
12/05/2014: The parallax embers now fall behind Beatrice + Battler!
19/05/2014: Some snapping and blanketing tweaks.
20/05/2014: Slider snaps, apparently.
22/05/2014: Changed a heap of stuff for flow, etc.
01/06/2014: Some blanket tweaks.
07/06/2014: A bunch of slider flips and flow redirection.
08/06/2014: Remapped normal kiai a bit to remove some stacks.
23/06/2014: Reencoded to 192kbps, fixed offsets etc., silenced some spinners.
01/07/2014: Adjusted storyboard by 56ms.
07/07/2014: Artist changed to zts, sliderbody whistle removed from Hard.
08/07/2014: Removed unnecessary osb file.

CelsiusLK wrote:

Hello I'm still beginner modder
That's ok.

Normal
I think this is OK now not too hard and not too easy

Hard
00:12:239 - I suggest you put a circle here to make it flow better
Trying to make it follow the melody, so no.
00:19:298 - Same as above
^
01:05:180 - Same as above
^
01:40:474 - Same as above
^
01:44:004 - Same as above
^
01:45:768 - Same as above
^
02:13:709 - Start a new combo here the new beat start there
The beat starts on 02:14:298 (1).
02:26:357 - Put a circle here it should flow better
Again, that doesn't follow the melody.
02:36:945 - Put a circle here it sound better for me
^
02:42:533 (1) - I think you should start a new combo here 02:42:533 (1) - that where the new beat start
But that's already a new combo! XD
02:44:592 - Put a circle here the beat should flow better
Doesn't follow the melody.
This is just my suggestions
Also nice song

CelsiusLK wrote:

Hard
02:42:533 (1) - I think you should start a new combo here 02:42:533 (1) - that where the new beat start
I mean here 02:41:651 (5) - sorry my bad

Kuron-Kun wrote:

Aye! M4M

Your map is pretty good, I'll give some suggestions to improve

Normal

00:24:886 (1) - You can improve this blanket a bit
Done.
00:26:062 (2,3) - Same as above: http://puu.sh/8Rbgi.png
Done.
00:49:592 (1,3) - You can improve this stack moving (3) to x368 y291
Done.
00:56:651 (1,3) - Same as above, moving (3) to x408 y285
Looks like it's already stacked properly to me...
01:39:004 (1) - Stacks again D:
Done.
00:59:004 (3,2,3) - And blankets!
Huh? o_O
02:16:062 (3) - Should you NC to keep consistence with 02:10:768 (1,2,1,2) - (?)
Intentional.
02:19:592 (2,3,4,1) - I don't know if it is a straight line but it's not so straight adlksdjaskdhj
Not supposed to be a straight line, it just coincidentally looks slightly like one... <_<
02:21:357 (1,3) - Stacks again, move (3) to x201 y179
Fixed.
02:33:121 (2,3) - You can improve this blanket here, and adjust the stack here 02:31:945 (1,3) - and here 02:33:710 (3,2) -
I think that blanket is close enough. It pretty much perfectly matches the approach circle when viewed at 02:32:533.
Since they removed the ability to set 0x distance spacing, I've been reluctant to resnap sliders, because it's too much of a hassle to remake them just to snap the start.

This diff is love ♥
<3

Hard

01:59:298 (5,6,7) - Change places with (7) and (6) for better flow imo http://puu.sh/8RcEk.png
Agreed.
02:44:004 (4,5) - You can move (4) to x220 y144 and (5) to x306 y142 for better flow and stacking
Think I'll leave these ones.
03:02:827 (7,8,9) - Move (9) to x144 y320 for better triangle
Yep.

Some stacks can be improved, I'll post them here

00:35:474 (1,3) -

00:37:827 (6,1) -

00:47:827 (4,6) -

01:05:474 (4,6) -

01:14:298 (1,3) -

01:16:062 (4,6) -

01:35:474 (1,2) -

01:42:533 (1,3) -

01:44:298 (4,6) -

01:58:415 (4,6) -

02:12:533 (1,3) -

02:17:827 (1,2) -

02:21:357 (1,3) -

02:53:121 (1,3) -

Most of these were autosnapped when I placed the note, so it appears the editor sucks at snapping?

Good luck :3

Yauxo wrote:

o/ coming from your modding q

[Normal]

• 
  
  Nazi

  1. 00:05:621 (4) - Nazi, blanket can be slightly improved by moving the middle tick to 297/180
  2. 00:23:121 (4) - Nazi, same as above, middle tick around 161/248 and last tick to 202/161
  3. 00:35:474 (1) - Nazi, last tick to 264/32
  4. 00:49:886 (1) - Nazi, middle 282/232 last 364/292. If you do this, dont forget to fix the overlaps later on
  5. 01:13:121 (4) - Nazi, move this one ~390/315
  Fixed a few of these.
  
• 00:44:298 (3,1) - This one flows weird. The flow was awesome through the map till here, a sudden change like this hurts the map imo :< Maybe reconsider this combo? Having it overlap with 00:43:710 (2) - could create a good start of a new combo.
  I blanketed (3) with (2) and rotated the next combo around.
• 01:53:121 (1,2,3) - I'd prefer that this combo works its way downwards and not down and up again. (basically let 01:53:710 (2) - overlap with the hit of 01:51:357 (4) - and fix the combo afterwards. That'd improve the flow by alot (like you did here 02:17:827 (1,2,3,4) -
  Hmm... I know what you're saying, but I can't really think of anything that wouldn't cause nasty overlaps or change the flow too much. If I think of something later I might do it.
• 02:20:180 (3,4) - Curve these a bit more, right now it has some weird snakeish pattern. A smooth curve with 02:19:592 (2,1) - would be awesome :3
  Curved it...kinda...
• 02:21:357 (1,2,3,4) - I kinda dislike this combo as well. It'd go better if it would roll towards the bottom of the screen
  Done.
• 02:28:415 (1,2,3) - same issue as some above
  I like this how it is.
• 02:39:004 (1) - Iam not assuming that this is supposed to be a blanket for 02:37:239 (4) - , but if so, fix it
  Not sure how I missed that one, thanks.
  Overall, nicely done :3

[Hard]

1. 00:23:415 (4,5,1) - This combo flows weird. Possible way to fix this is to move 5 towards the bottom right and move 1 abit so that there's a smooth movement
   I curved (5) to sort of blanket 00:22:533 (3).
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:39:004 (1) - move to 226/215 for better overlap
   Sure.
3. 00:42:533 (1,2,3) - This combo would be more enjoyable if you'd move all notes after 2 a little bit to the left side.
   Tweaked this a bit.
   
   SPOILER

   
4. 00:47:533 (3) - 158/166 for better overlap
   Done.
5. 00:56:062 (6,1) - Eventually overlap those two? 00:54:298 (3,4) - is overlapped as well, so it'd have a nice effect
   Might leave this one.
6. 01:03:121 (6) - curve this one a slight bit?
   Done.
   
   SPOILER

   
7. 01:36:357 (2) - 219/200 for better overlap
   Done.
8. 02:18:415 (2) - 356/294 for better overlap
   Done.
9. 02:19:592 (4) - fix this, if you fixed the overlap above
   Done.
10. 02:22:533 (3) - 171/316
    Done.
11. In general, there are quite some sliderend-overlap misplacements. 02:51:357 (4) - 02:54:298 (3) - ctrl+g to see the slider's endpoint. then move the overlapping slider/circle there
    I never thought of doing that... <_<

In the end, it looks well mapped to me, probably couldnt do better myself :3 Gl with your mapset!

NavyYa wrote:

Hello~ from your m4m queue

[Hard]

00:12:533 (4) - opposite slider curve?
Backward curves are kinda my thing.

00:21:357 (1,2) - delete (2) and (1)reverse for better rhythm
I like this shape.

01:38:121 (4,5,6,1) - more round arrangement for pretty shape~
Agreed, I curved them around a bit.


That's all
I can't request m4m because of very short mod .
I can still mod if you want.

song, map, storyboards are so beautiful~~Good Luck!

1. 00:03:710 (1,2,3) - Change pattern, I think this one is better ~ owo

Example

1. 00:05:474 (4) - Clap at the end of the slider ~ ?
2. 00:09:004 (4) - ^
3. 00:14:298 (5) - Make it more curve ~ ?

Example

1. 00:17:827 (1,2,3) - Change pattern ~ To remove stack

Example

1. 00:19:592 (4) - Clap at the of the slider ~
2. 00:23:121 (4) - ^
3. 00:42:533 (1) - More curve ~ ?
4. 00:43:709 (2) - NC ~ ?

1. 00:05:474 (4) - NC ~ ?
2. 00:09:004 (4) - ^

Lapis Aoki wrote:

From your M4M queue ~ ^w^ (Lovely song ~ !)
[Normal]

1. 00:03:710 (1,2,3) - Change pattern, I think this one is better ~ owo
   Nah it's fine how it is, I think.

Example

1. 00:05:474 (4) - Clap at the end of the slider ~ ?
   Trying to keep the hitsounds consistent across both difficulties, with the clap on the 2nd beat of every bar.
2. 00:09:004 (4) - ^
   ^
3. 00:14:298 (5) - Make it more curve ~ ?
   I usually only make a slider that curvy if I'm going to blanket.

Example

1. 00:17:827 (1,2,3) - Change pattern ~ To remove stack
   I like the stack.

Example

1. 00:19:592 (4) - Clap at the of the slider ~
   See above.
2. 00:23:121 (4) - ^
   ^
3. 00:42:533 (1) - More curve ~ ?
   It's fine.
4. 00:43:709 (2) - NC ~ ?
   Doesn't fit, and again I'm trying to match both difficulties.

[Hard]

1. 00:05:474 (4) - NC ~ ?
   Trying to match combos.
2. 00:09:004 (4) - ^
   ^

Good Luck ~ ! :3

1. 00:07:239 (1) - I suggest change this slider into a repeat slider and delete 00:08:415 (2)
2. 00:16:062 and 01:47:827 - how about change the slider velocity multiplier to 0.60? I think 0.50 multiplier is too slow and looks unnatural.
3. 00:34:886 (7,8) - how about change this note into a slider?
4. 00:47:533 (3) - why you not stack this with 00:47:827 (4) ? because the music was same and this part is good to give players double tap feeling
5. 00:50:474 (2,3,4,5,6) - how about this pattern? (00:52:533 (6) - stacked)
   SPOILER

   
6. 01:02:827 (5,6) - change this to a repeat slider? because (5) has same sound with (6) *slider tail
7. 01:08:121 (2) - nazi, move this to x:240 y:360 ?
8. 01:16:945 (5,6) - same with 01:02:827 (5,6) ?
9. 01:39:886 (2,3) - make this same with 01:36:357 (2) for consistency?
10. 01:53:121 (1,2,3) - how about this pattern? this is hard diff, so I wouldn't hurt to add little jump I think.
    SPOILER

    
11. 02:06:062 (6,7) - hmm...I think it would be better if you place (7) further so there is a space between them and preventing too much overlap'
12. 02:19:298 (3) - nazi, move this to x:412 y:116 for better flow?

1. 00:05:474 (4,1) - this can be changed to this
   SPOILER

   
   or
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:10:768 (1,2) - this fits the rhythm better in my opinion.
   SPOILER

   
3. 00:09:004 (8) - this too same with 00:10:768 (1,2) ^
4. 00:16:062 (1) - changing slider velocity multiplier too extreme on normal (I think 0.50 is too extreme) may result miss or combo break for newbie since this kinda unexpected in normal diff. if you want to make it slow, I suggest set to 0.80. this also applies to 01:47:827 (1)
5. 00:19:592 (4) - same suggestion with 00:05:474 (4,1)
6. 00:24:886 (1,2,3) - same suggestion with 00:10:768 (1,2)
7. 00:33:710 (4,5) - make (4) end at 00:34:592
8. 00:35:474 (1) - same suggestion with 00:05:474 (4,1)
9. 00:49:298 - add a note here or change 00:49:004 (4) - to 1/2 slider
10. 00:49:592 (1) - 00:53:121 (1) - 00:56:651 (1) - 01:01:945 (3) - 01:05:474 (4) - 01:16:062 (3) - same suggestion with 00:05:474 (4,1) ?
11. 02:05:474 (4,5) - same suggestion with 00:10:768 (1,2)

raheta_adi wrote:

hi there~ m4m request
ah, I am not sure with my mods. this is the first time since 3 months ago
[General]
fine
[Hard]

1. 00:07:239 (1) - I suggest change this slider into a repeat slider and delete 00:08:415 (2)
   Nice suggestion, but I don't really want to add any more repeat sliders.
2. 00:16:062 and 01:47:827 - how about change the slider velocity multiplier to 0.60? I think 0.50 multiplier is too slow and looks unnatural.
   Sure.
3. 00:34:886 (7,8) - how about change this note into a slider?
   Ok, because it fits with 02:06:651 (7).
4. 00:47:533 (3) - why you not stack this with 00:47:827 (4) ? because the music was same and this part is good to give players double tap feeling
   Looks good.
5. 00:50:474 (2,3,4,5,6) - how about this pattern? (00:52:533 (6) - stacked)
   SPOILER

   
   Yep.
6. 01:02:827 (5,6) - change this to a repeat slider? because (5) has same sound with (6) *slider tail
   Again, I don't want any more repeat sliders.
7. 01:08:121 (2) - nazi, move this to x:240 y:360 ?
   Nah.
8. 01:16:945 (5,6) - same with 01:02:827 (5,6) ?
   ^
9. 01:39:886 (2,3) - make this same with 01:36:357 (2) for consistency?
   Did something similar.
10. 01:53:121 (1,2,3) - how about this pattern? this is hard diff, so I wouldn't hurt to add little jump I think.
    SPOILER

    
    I did something with these.
11. 02:06:062 (6,7) - hmm...I think it would be better if you place (7) further so there is a space between them and preventing too much overlap'
    Overlap is intentional here.
12. 02:19:298 (3) - nazi, move this to x:412 y:116 for better flow?
    Moved it up that way so it's equidistant from the two sliders.

that's it on hard. I don't give suggestion on second kiai (02:31:945 - 02:58:415) because it's already looks good and I personally want you to keep that so there are some differences with first kiai. (creativity ^^)

[Normal]
I see normal has a big gap (based on star rating and test play) with hard. so most of my suggestion will make this map harder but not crossing the line.
It was originally Easy/Normal, but I decided I couldn't really make it any harder without overmapping, so I renamed it to Normal/Hard. I guess Normal stayed a bit too easy.
I'm really hesitant to change this because I'll have to increase the SV and distance spacing if I want to keep all the blankets without overlapping. Given that Hard has no blue ticks, if I increase SV and start adding too many red ticks to Normal, it's not much different to Hard. I'd really have to add another difficulty, and I thought two was enough for this song.

00:16:062 (1) - changing slider velocity multiplier too extreme on normal (I think 0.50 is too extreme) may result miss or combo break for newbie since this kinda unexpected in normal diff. if you want to make it slow, I suggest set to 0.80. this also applies to 01:47:827 (1)
I got rid of the multiplier entirely for Normal.

well, this is indeed a very good song! I love the song! about the map, Hard is the best in my opinion.
sb is simple but effective, fits very well with the song.

that's all. I hope my mod helpful

pkmnyab wrote:

From your m4m queue~

Most of my suggestions for the hard difficulty were regarding flow since rhythm looked good. It's up to you whether or not you apply the changes, but there is a reason why I suggested the changes.

Normal

• 
  Everything looks good to me

Hard

1. 01:01:357 (3) - just a suggestion, I would ctrl+g this, I believe that the flow at 01:01:357 (3,4) - will improve and be fun to play as well. Since the music is also emphasized at 01:01:945 (4) - , the jump will sort of match it and create emphasis.. If you're worried that the flow at 01:01:062 (2,3) - might be a bit weird, I think that it will be fine, but you can always just curve 01:01:357 (3) - a bit like this (but I feel that the flow at 01:01:357 (3,4) - wouldn't be as good):
   
   SPOILER

   
   Everything I said above is said under the assumption that you decide to ctrl+g.
   I initially went through and rejected all your Ctrl+G suggestions, then I decided to actually try playing them and it seems to flow pretty well. Nice work.
   
2. 01:08:415 (3) - for similar reasons as above, I suggest you ctrl+g this slider. Nice circular flow will be created at 01:08:415 (3,4) - .
   ^
   
3. 01:15:474 (3) - I would consider ctrl+g on this, I believe this will improve the flow at 01:15:180 (2,3) - as well as 01:15:474 (3,4) - . Like in the previous suggestion, the jump created at 01:15:474 (3,4) - by applying ctrl+g will also suit the music since the jump will somewhat compliment the emphasis in the music.
   ^
   
4. 01:22:533 (3) - same as before, I suggest you ctrl+g. The tiny jump makes it more fun to play in my opinion.
   ^
   
5. 01:52:533 (6,7,1) - the shape that these objects make looks a bit weird to me, I would have expected 01:53:121 (1) - to be curved more to the right (rotated clockwise a bit) but try something like below to make it more fun:
   
   SPOILER

   
   Ok.
   
6. 01:54:298 (3) - hmm consider ctrl+g here, it will create a nice 'loop de loop' (or upside down roller coaster loop) flow at 01:53:710 (2,3,4) - . I think this change makes this part more fun to play.
   Ok.
   
7. 02:16:062 (5) - I suggest ctrl+g here because 02:15:180 (2,3,4) - suggests an upwards curved flow, and if you ctrl+g 02:16:062 (5) - then it will match that motion. However, I still think it's fine on its own if you don't ctrl+g.
   Ok.
   
8. 02:17:827 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - nice flow
   Thanks. =D
   
9. I'm just going to list a few sliders below where I think you should ctrl+g to improve flow/match emphasis in the music, like the first few suggestions.
   02:33:121 (3) - , 02:40:180 (3) - , 02:47:239 (3) -
   Done.

Good song and good map, have fun mapping!
Thanks! o/

Snaggletooth wrote:

M4M
Here it is~

General

• 
  Well, generally speaking this map seems quite okay. Imo the whistle hitsound was overused but don't
  go and change everything as this is just an opinion of mine. Wont hurt the Quality of the map if you
  don't change it imo.
  I like the whistles. <3

Hitplacement/Hitsounds/Combos

1. 00:47:827 (4,5,6) - I personally find this pattern to be messy/ugly. Maybe not quite fitting for hard as well. I would suggest you a
   diffrent pattern for this.
   
   Example

   
   I tweaked the slider(4) slightly so its a bit higher to maintain the distance. (And turned aproachrate down to see it better.
   Looks good.
   
2. 01:16:062 (4,5,6) - same as above but I dont really have a suggestion about that. Ignore it if you with to.
   Already changed.
   
3. 01:46:062 (1) - Finish instead of whistle?
   Sure, and I changed 00:14:298 (1) for consistency.
   
4. 02:23:121 (5,6) - Just for the looks, maybe curve them slightly? Looks better imo than plain straight ones.
   
   Example

   
   I curved and rearranged them.
   
5. 02:41:651 (5,6,7) - Maybe going zig-zag would look more clean and play smoother.
   
   Example

   
   Already changed.

I can't really find anything wrong with normal. Good job~
Thanks. <3

Good luck :3

Leader wrote:

Replaced mp3 (former one had 199kb/s) and fixed volume on some spinners.

Here have your bubble back, great map!

BeatofIke wrote:

Good map, but the Storyboard is off by 56 ms.
To fix this, go to Design > Move all elements in time.. and put +56ms. ^_^

Lanturn wrote:

Screw consistency when something is wrong. Let's make this correct!

1. 02:44:942 (6) - remove whistle from sliderbody

captin1 wrote:

I agree with Lanturn

[Hard]

1. 02:44:942 (6) - remove whistle from sliderbody

no kd

captin1 wrote:

delete the old .osb file from before the artist change

Lanturn wrote:

Don't forget "far" is lower-cased as well. (look at the VGMDB link from my previous post)

Good luck!

captin1 wrote:

alright, should be good to go now.

ranked

Ibuki Suika wrote:

zts’s best works

Natteke wrote:

yay! you've improved a lot since that shining star map