1. Hard (4,8 stars, 299 notes)
2. Normal (2,95 stars, 149 notes)

Xinely wrote:

from pm request

• 
  Normal
  how about AR+1? since Hard AR 8, better use AR 4 in Normal Changed
  00:15:155 (1,2,3) - you can try simple rhythm for this, try http://puu.sh/46gjE.jpg ? Want to keep this, shouldn't be too hard
  00:32:462 (3,4) - try make this become one slider? Changed
  00:33:155 (5) - spacing issue (1,07x) Dont see any
  00:33:155 (5,1) - should be swap NC for consistency Fixed
  00:46:309 (2) - move in 00:46:078 - , make easier and follow vocal too But the circle goes identically to the vocal
  01:00:847 (3,1) - remove (1) and make (3) repeat? Changed
  01:10:770 (3,4) - try http://puu.sh/46gKQ.jpg ? Mh, doesn't really fit to my patterns
  01:16:539 (3) - remove, give a little break for newbie Changed
  01:27:155 (2) - remove it, to avoid much 1/2 in normal Shouldnt be too hard again
  02:09:155 (1) - use drum? soft whistle seems odd to me Ups, fixed that

• 
  Hard
  00:09:155 (3) - ctrl+G to make jump? Changed
  00:12:847 (5) - ^ Changed
  00:31:539 (6) - NC for consistency? Changed
  00:38:347 - no sound here but have sound in 00:38:232 - , so 00:37:309 (1) - remove one repeat and add note in 00:38:232 - There is, i dont follow the drum here
  00:47:809 (5) - keep consistency spacing please since this is 1/4 Changed
  00:51:501 (3) - spacing 0,94x Changed
  01:16:539 (6) - move to 84, 288 and then 01:16:770 (7) - 176,240 for branket and neat? Changed
  01:15:847 (5) - btw NC for consistency Changed
  01:26:347 (2) - spacing issue here Fixed
  01:32:001 (2,3) - try https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/937882 for more neat Changed
  01:46:886 (5) - same as 00:47:809 (5) -
  01:50:578 (3) - same as 00:51:501 (3) -
  02:06:847 (2,3,4) - make like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/937889 ? Changed

Good Luck ~

Tari wrote:

:3

[Normal]

Fixed everything here!

[Hard]

1. 00:35:232 (1) - Can you someway distinguish this slider from the next? the rhythm here is pretty different from 00:37:309 (1) - . I think you can try to change the shape of this slider oh and you can also do a different rhythm, I thought they double reverse sliders are only for 00:37:309 (1) - and 00:39:155 (1) - Fixed
2. 01:10:078 (3) - Don't understand why you added a jump here, your switching back and forth from jumps around this part of the rhythm, and this jump breaks that back and forth consistency. I know, i do this very often, it's my kind of style. I make such jumps to create more action to the gameplay, also it just fits to my pattern i wanted to make. I switched from bg music to vocal and that should also be a hint for the change.
3. 01:14:232 (1) - Ctrl+G seems to fit this part better to me I adjusted this to the following slider, i wanted actually a jump here as well, but this was a better and more flowy solution (:
4. 01:28:078 (1,2) - I don't think jumps like these fit for this certain part, sure they do for the kiai, but I think you can make some variation here

Same as above with that jumpMap is pretty good, the copy-paste is meh but its hard to mod those parts Yes, i know that At some maps i just copy some parts for the reason of; it fits or just because i'm lazy. In this case, it's both :'D

1. The song is 2min long and it's rather short so why have you done only 2 diff? I understand that an Insane isn't needed since the song is pretty quiet but maybe you could do an Easy or ask for a GD, that would be great imo.
   Besides, you used a lot of copy paste besides the fact that you have only 2 diff of a short song.... Why?

1. 02:08:693 - You have a finish+whistle in the Normal diff but only a Finish in the Hard diff.

1. 00:07:539 - Add a note here? Look at your whistles, they point out important note that deserve to be played and you actually paly all of them (between the start and 00:07:770) except this one so i would suggest you put a note here. You stop doing it after but since you follow another rythm it doesn't matter imo.
2. 00:16:770 (1,2) - I think that this rythm might be more appropriate:
   
   Because you follow the vocals and i think you should put a note on the vocal at 00:17:693 just like you did with 00:16:539 (3) instead of just the end of a slider.
3. 00:36:847 (2,2,4,2) - All these notes are really confusing to play for beginners because they are 3/2. That why i would suggest you to turn them into 1/2 beat-long slider starting 1/2 beat earlier. The rythm is still great and it solves the issue.
4. 00:47:232 (4) - Shorten it by 1/2 and add a note at 00:47:693? The "let" and "it" of "Let it wash away" are sung very strongly and need to be played instead of being just then end of a slider (for the "let"). (You did that at 01:54:155 (1,2,3) for example)
5. 00:50:924 (5) - ^
6. 01:00:155 (1,1,1) - Same as 00:36:847 (2,2,4,2).
7. 01:46:309 (5) and 01:50:001 (5,1) and 01:59:232 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - Same suggestion as their copypaste antagonist.

1. 00:39:155 (3) - NC? Seeing how 00:37:309 (1,2), 00:39:155 (3,4) and 00:41:001 (1,2) are the same things they all deserve a NC imo and since 2 out of 3 already have one why not putting one on the third?

1. 00:09:155 (2,4,2,4) - I think you could add a hitsound on these notes. Maybe your custom whistle? Or anything else but i like them.
2. 00:16:770 (1) - This finish feels a little bit out of place imo. But if you keep it maybe. Actually if you followed my suggestion for 00:16:770 (1,2) i would suggest that you put the finish at 00:17:578 at the end of the shortened slider instead.
3. 00:15:155 (1,2) - These 4 finish are a little bit too much imo. Why did they represent? If it's the vocals why there isn't one at 00:16:539 (3) and 00:18:155 (2)?

1. 00:03:155 (2,4) - Make them parallel. It will look better imo.
2. 00:05:693 (5,1,2,1) -That's weird. 00:05:693 (5) and 00:07:770 (1) are symétrical (well, nearly symétrical) but 00:06:847 (2) and 00:06:386 (1) not at all.
3. 00:11:001 (3) - CTRL+G? You did it at 00:09:155 (3) and 00:12:847 (5) but not here. Why?
4. 00:15:847 (4) - Move the 3rd slider point to x=80 y=260 for a more smooth curve of 00:15:847 (4) (i think it's better looking this way). And if you agree do the same for 00:16:770 (6).
5. 00:27:155 (3) - Why not orientating the slider towards 00:27:616 (4) like you did for 00:28:078 (1) and 00:26:232 (1).
6. 00:44:001 (1,2,3) - Rotate this triangle by 120° for a better flow because imo it flow better when you enter the slider coming from x=464 y=128 than from x=456 y=32.
7. 00:47:232 (4,5,6) - The flow of this is not really good. You don't really need to stack 00:46:770 (2,6) because they are too far apart too matter. Try changing it into a more smooth flow like you did for 00:50:924 (2,3,4).
8. 00:57:386 (4) - Move it to x=316 y=304. The pattern 00:56:924 (2,3,4,1) will look better imo.
9. 01:43:078 (1,2,3) and 01:46:309 (4,5,6) and 01:56:001 (2,3,4,1) - Same suggestion as their copypaste antagonist.

rezoons wrote:

Hi Haai (:

[General]

1. The song is 2min long and it's rather short so why have you done only 2 diff? I understand that an Insane isn't needed since the song is pretty quiet but maybe you could do an Easy or ask for a GD, that would be great imo. The Hard was actually Insane, but nowadays it's classed as a Hard, so i renamed it to Hard. An Easy was never planned.
   Besides, you used a lot of copy paste besides the fact that you have only 2 diff of a short song.... Why? For the reason it either fits or i was lazy. And this time i was both. Said that in the last mod i got (: I just liked the patterns too much, and tbh, the chorus is EXACTLY the same, so why not use the same patterns?

[Normal]
[*]00:36:847 (2,2,4,2) - All these notes are really confusing to play for beginners because they are 3/2. That why i would suggest you to turn them into 1/2 beat-long slider starting 1/2 beat earlier. The rythm is still great and it solves the issue. Fixed only one of them, want to keep the others since it's still a Normal and not an Easy. I want to keep some action (: Trying to always have a little more different parts and easy parts mixed
[*]00:47:232 (4) - Shorten it by 1/2 and add a note at 00:47:693? The "let" and "it" of "Let it wash away" are sung very strongly and need to be played instead of being just then end of a slider (for the "let"). (You did that at 01:54:155 (1,2,3) for example) I think the slider should end where it ends now. It wouldnt fit much to have a circle on the ending, imo.

Hitsound
[*]00:09:155 (2,4,2,4) - I think you could add a hitsound on these notes. Maybe your custom whistle? Or anything else but i like them. I want to keep this part silent, since it's only the beginning


[Hard]

Placement/Aesthetic
[*]00:05:693 (5,1,2,1) -That's weird. 00:05:693 (5) and 00:07:770 (1) are symétrical (well, nearly symétrical) but 00:06:847 (2) and 00:06:386 (1) not at all. Blame the spacing ._.
[*]00:11:001 (3) - CTRL+G? You did it at 00:09:155 (3) and 00:12:847 (5) but not here. Why? Because this slider 00:14:693 (3) - is the same, i made jump, normal, jump, normal (:
~Good Luck~ ^^ Thank you

1. Song is so soft and relaxing, sliderslide sound here kinda bugs me. Try to mute it?
2. You could map a great [Easy]! Song is short and [Normal] is pretty hard to be the easiest diff. I know, you can make a great [Easy]!
3. Your combo colours are so bright, they may hurt players' eyes. How about fading them a bit?
   
   Anyway, try my colors!

   
   

   Combo1 : 241,158,243
   Combo2 : 215,215,215
   Combo3 : 191,247,247
   Combo4 : 244,221,138
   Combo5 : 249,210,172

4. Disable letterboxing! You have no breaks, therefore letterboxes aren't needed!
   Note: probably you will have to edit it manually. How? Don't worry, it's easy! Open your .osu files and set LetterboxInBreaks to 0 (0 = Disabled / 1 = Enabled) Probably you already know it..but..meh.
5. How about adding more tags? Like Metamorphosis (name of the album) and maybe Mix (just in case..)

1. 00:09:616 (3,4,1) - nazi - shape of (3) is begging for some cute blanket sliders! What's more it will make this pattern more readable! So, yeah, try to use some blanket-sliders here!
2. 00:16:770 (1,2) - ultranazi - your blanket is bad and you should feel bad! Well, you could make it better :<
3. 00:21:616 (1,2,1) - try to unstack them. It looks like (1) turns into a slider before you click it D: example + it doesn't fit with your regular pattern.
   Note: 01:20:693 (1,2,1) - same
4. 00:26:693 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - this non-stop clicking gets boring too fast. Try to replace some of the circles with a slider, for example 00:27:155 (2,3,1). It'd fit with vocals and make your patterns a bit more interesting.
5. 00:38:232 - 00:40:078 - 00:41:924 - whydo you ignore beats here? It feels really weird because beats with similar sound on 00:38:693 (2,4) - 00:42:385 (2) - are not ignored. Placing circles on 00:38:232 - 00:40:078 - 00:41:924 would make rhythm more consistent.
6. 01:00:847 (3,3,2) - try to replace them with 1/1 sliders. It sounds much better and makes your flow a bit smoother, I think.
7. 01:36:386 (1) - honestly, finish hitsound doesn't fit here. Try to use normal-hitnormal sound here, it will sound much better!
8. 02:09:155 (1,2,3,1) - I'd replace them with a spinner started on 02:09:155. And maybe you'll have to increase volume of the spinner on 02:13:770 - to emphasize the sound in music. It will fit much better than 1/1 sliders

1. How about increasing your HP Drain by one tick? It'd make your diff a bit more balanced and interesting?
2. 00:37:309 (1,1) - beats here coild be mapped in a very interesting ways! Try to be a bit more creative, I know, you can make this pattern more interesting! example
3. 00:41:001 (1) - whoops, I think you've missed a new combo on this one! It's a bug and it should be fixed!
4. 00:59:924 - this tricky part bugs me a lot. Mostly because you ignore pretty loud and important beats like 00:59:924 - 01:01:770 - 01:02:232 - try to mix vocals and music and make this part a bit more catchable, please! :<
   Note: I'd put some screenshot with my patterns here, but you can do it even better than I.. so.. it's up to you
5. 02:09:155 - same as on [Normal]. Starting a sinner here would be a good idea!
   
   Well, as I said, non-kiai parts are too hard. But kiais are amazing. ♥

UnderminE wrote:

ahhh my childhood

[General]
01:00:847 - Somewhere around here I'm looking at the Lyrics, and I noticed that the last sentence in the chorus "I'm coming clean" is fading to early. 01:02:693 is where you hear the vocals say the last word "Clean", but it's already like this by the time I look back:

Try adding in a space between the two last sentences of the chorus. The last sentence should come and go a bit later, and it should look good ^^'
[Normal]
00:46:539 (3,4) - Try removing all the hitsounds on their tails? I feel that the hitsounds are sort of being overused on this part ><
00:50:232 (4,5) - ^
01:34:309 (2) - Move it to 01:34:539, and shrink it so its tail ends at 01:35:924? Sounds better imo.
01:49:309 (4,5) - Same suggestion as 00:46:539 (3,4).
01:54:616 (3,4) - ^

[Hard]
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UnderminE wrote:

ahhh my childhood

Gero wrote:

Bonce \:D/

BounceBabe wrote:

haha, i'm Bone not Bonce.... what was that mistake for.. haha xD