This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on sabato 7 dicembre 2013 at 22.33.50

Artist: Sound Horizon
Title: Yoiyami no Uta
Tags: Revo Märchen German Linked Horizon Fantasie Impromptu Frederic Chopin Respect For Ludwig Van Beethoven Simphony No. 9 9th An die Freude
BPM: 182
Filesize: 16712kb
Play Time: 10:05
Difficulties Available:

1. Hanashi (5 stars, 1982 notes)

Download: Sound Horizon - Yoiyami no Uta
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Still new to modding. ~

The combo colors look dull, and the green doesn't really match the background. Try this:

01:19:315 (4,5) - The start of the sliders don't have hitsounds, which feels weird when playing.

01:20:798 (1) - The syncopation is a little awkward. Maybe add a circle at 01:20:633.

01:22:611 (3,4) - The rhythm here is actually triplets, but you have sixteenth notes. Should be like this.

01:27:556 (6,7,1,2,3,4) - The new combo seems to start too early. (Maybe have it start at the stream.)

01:26:402 (1) - Consider increasing the speed of the slider here. Also 01:31:677 (1) - 01:42:227 (1) - 01:44:864 (1) - 01:47:501 (1) - 02:13:875 (1) - etc. (Essentially whenever you hear that stronger beat.)

01:28:216 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Try removing the circle at 01:28:793.

01:38:765 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The stream should start at 01:39:095. (Replace the slider in the beginning with 2 eigth notes.)

01:44:864 (1) - The shape looks weird.

01:48:820 (7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Should start the new combo at 01:48:820 (7).

02:20:963 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I think these circles look better like this.

02:53:600 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Consider making this section slower. Or maybe the previous section faster.

03:00:194 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The big jumps don't really match this slow section, based on the jumps in the previous, more energetic section.

03:03:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - Move 03:03:902 (10,11,12) to improve the shape. Like this.

03:04:149 (1) - Seems like a good place to put kiai.

03:05:468 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This arrangement seems better.

03:17:337 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Make the sliders progressively faster (maybe 1.2x, 1.3x, 1.4x) so that there's some transition to the 1.5x in the kiai.

03:19:974 (1,2,3,4) - The sliders in this kiai section have weirdly placed hitsounds. When you're listening to it, the hitsounds just seem to come later than they should.

03:28:216 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - This shape seems better.

03:48:655 (3,4,5) - These seem misplaced. A slider that goes with the voice seems to match the rest of the section better.

04:07:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The two sliders should be replaced with circles that jump. 3 and 5 should be removed. Here's a reference.

04:12:721 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - Jumpy circles that go with the melody might be better here. Otherwise, the triple circles you have all start one sixteenth note too early. This rhythm goes with the drum in the background.

04:27:391 - Seems like something's missing.

04:35:798 - Consider putting four circles here that lead into the next slider.

04:48:326 (1) - Increasing the slider speed during kiai would probably make the map more interesting.

04:58:546 (9,10,1) - A good place for a small stream to lead into that slider.

05:12:062 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Try gradually increasing the jump distance and slider speed in order to match the progression in the music.

05:17:337 (1,2,3,4) - Some syncopation here would be nice. Try this.

05:31:677 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - The rhythm here is weird; definitely not just straight sixteenths though. This rhythm sounds a bit better. (Yeah, it's a bit weird...) The rest of the streams in this section is also weird... I went through it at 25% speed and these parts don't really match that well: 05:37:776 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - 05:38:930 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - 05:40:084 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:42:062 (5,6,7,8) - 05:42:391 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 05:43:710 (5,6) - 05:44:205 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 05:45:029 (3,4,5,6,7) - 05:46:348 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:47:172 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 05:47:666 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 05:48:490 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:49:727 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8). Okay, that was a lot more than I expected... maybe I'm just too picky. (I don't know how to put those time things in a list with commas between them, so I'm using dashes instead.)

05:51:622 - Should stop kiai.

06:01:183 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - The stream shouldn't start until 06:01:306, and it should be faster than sixteenths.

06:16:512 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Shape can be improved.

06:41:732 - Fantasie Impromptu is such a good place for a stream. (It starts with 2 measures of triplets, then the rest is sixteenths.) Though it would be pretty exhausting...

06:54:919 - Good place to start a gigantic stream too. And this one would be straight sixteenths.

07:22:282 - For some reason, I was expecting a stream here.

07:28:710 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Shouldn't really start until 3.

07:33:985 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Try turning 7 into a slider.

07:35:139 (1,2,3) - I don't understand these. Should be at 07:35:304, 07:35:633, and 07:35:963?

08:00:853 (1,1,1) - I don't think anyone likes consecutive spinners.

08:16:677 - It feels like there's a measure missing.

08:23:930 (1,2) - Sliders with weird hitsounds again.

08:32:832 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The stream should start and end a beat earlier.

09:14:699 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - These circles sound weird. (Need hitsounds.)

09:22:611 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The stream starts half a beat early. Also, rearrange 09:23:105 (7,8) to improve shape.

09:33:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Half a beat early.

09:48:985 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Seems half a beat early again. Or maybe 09:48:820 (5) is placed in an awkward position.

09:50:304 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The stream seems a bit unnecessary. (There's always that Fantasie Impromptu part that's great for streams...)

Well, that took a long time. I think some of the formatting broke too...

owowowowo

01:43:710 (1,2) - fai in modo che abbiano la stessa forma o una piu' simile
01:55:908 (5) - *te le segnalero' tutte perche' le odio, ti daro' consigli su come cambiarle solo per quelle che secondo me vanno tolte per forza
02:03:820 (2) - *
02:10:084 (5,6,7) - *
03:00:194 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - secondo me e' meglio se lasci il 5 in modo che la stella rimanga intatta, il 6 lo puoi lasciare dov'e'. cosi' sembra una stella mancamentata
03:34:315 (1) - io sposterei lo slider in avanti in modo che starti sul bianco e sul rosso metterei un cerchio http://puu.sh/42Ns8.jpg
03:39:260 (4) - ^
da 04:12:721 (1) fino a 04:15:194 (5) - sostituirei prima e ultima oppure seconda e quarta con uno slider corto con reverse
04:24:342 (5) - eviterei di farlo partire sul blu
04:24:919 (1) - * qua puoi cambiare in http://puu.sh/42NHt.jpg
04:36:128 (1) - parte un po' improvviso, lo accompagnerei da un trillo http://puu.sh/42NOc
06:03:161 (4) - questi stream a 1/3 sono assolutamente troppo spaziati (lo spacing di questi e' almeno 1.10x, contro il 1.00x degli altri, comunque secondo me anche 0.90 non guasterebbe)
06:15:606 (5) - questo lo toglierei
06:16:512 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - questi mi piacciono molto, ma li metterei proprio overlappati in orizzontale e simmetrici rispetto all'asse y
06:32:007 (4,5,6) - http://puu.sh/42Owg.jpg o qualcosa del genere
06:35:798 (7,8,9) - avvicina entrambi gli slider al cerchio, pure qua porterei il distance snap da entrambi a 1.00x
06:37:446 (5,6,7,8) - trovo quella croce un po' storta fuorviante, meglio un arco cosi': http://puu.sh/42OMi.jpg
06:41:732 - dio ti punira' per aver messo la pausa sulla fantasia improvviso
06:54:754 (2) - il salto e' abbastanza grande, anche qualcosa di questo tipo non verrebbe male http://puu.sh/42P1Q.jpg
08:43:051 (6,7,8) - * le tre sviolinate durato esattamente un mezzo ciascuna, a differenza degli altri casi, stavolta usare questo pattern e' una forzatura. porterei questi 3 slider ad un mezzo e li vedrei bene disposti a triangolo e che vanno verso l'esterno, qualcosa di questo tipo http://puu.sh/42PkX.jpg
09:03:326 (3,4) - mi inganna ogni volta e premo (4) in anticipo, probabilmente e' un problema mio, ma NC (4) per sicurezza
09:41:567 (8,9,10) - si legge male per via del 9 nascosto e dello spacing strano.. forse http://puu.sh/42PVs.jpg x:256 y:180

Nephroid wrote:

Still new to modding. ~

The combo colors look dull, and the green doesn't really match the background. Try this:

SPOILER

Combo1 : 128,128,128
Combo2 : 0,128,255
Combo3 : 0,64,128
Combo4 : 248,7,109
Combo5 : 128,0,64
Combo6 : 192,192,192

No i prefer my colors

01:19:315 (4,5) - The start of the sliders don't have hitsounds, which feels weird when playing. I know but i like it

01:20:798 (1) - The syncopation is a little awkward. Maybe add a circle at 01:20:633. Yes

01:22:611 (3,4) - The rhythm here is actually triplets, but you have sixteenth notes. Should be like this. No

01:27:556 (6,7,1,2,3,4) - The new combo seems to start too early. (Maybe have it start at the stream.) Yes

01:26:402 (1) - Consider increasing the speed of the slider here. Also 01:31:677 (1) - 01:42:227 (1) - 01:44:864 (1) - 01:47:501 (1) - 02:13:875 (1) - etc. (Essentially whenever you hear that stronger beat.) Nope

01:28:216 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Try removing the circle at 01:28:793. Nope but i've fixed the shape of stream

01:38:765 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The stream should start at 01:39:095. (Replace the slider in the beginning with 2 eigth notes.) No

01:44:864 (1) - The shape looks weird. I like it ^^

01:48:820 (7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Should start the new combo at 01:48:820 (7). Yes

02:20:963 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I think these circles look better like this. I like disorder in jumps

02:53:600 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Consider making this section slower. Or maybe the previous section faster. No

03:00:194 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The big jumps don't really match this slow section, based on the jumps in the previous, more energetic section. I prefer big jump with slow slider in this section

03:03:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - Move 03:03:902 (10,11,12) to improve the shape. Like this. Ok

03:04:149 (1) - Seems like a good place to put kiai. uhm ok

03:05:468 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This arrangement seems better. Ok

03:17:337 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Make the sliders progressively faster (maybe 1.2x, 1.3x, 1.4x) so that there's some transition to the 1.5x in the kiai. Ok i like this think

03:19:974 (1,2,3,4) - The sliders in this kiai section have weirdly placed hitsounds. When you're listening to it, the hitsounds just seem to come later than they should. Uhm?

03:28:216 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - This shape seems better. Too big

03:48:655 (3,4,5) - These seem misplaced. A slider that goes with the voice seems to match the rest of the section better.

04:07:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The two sliders should be replaced with circles that jump. 3 and 5 should be removed. Here's a reference.

04:12:721 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - Jumpy circles that go with the melody might be better here. Otherwise, the triple circles you have all start one sixteenth note too early. This rhythm goes with the drum in the background. No

04:27:391 - Seems like something's missing. Fixed

04:35:798 - Consider putting four circles here that lead into the next slider. Ok

04:48:326 (1) - Increasing the slider speed during kiai would probably make the map more interesting. Done

04:58:546 (9,10,1) - A good place for a small stream to lead into that slider. nope

05:12:062 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Try gradually increasing the jump distance and slider speed in order to match the progression in the music. No

05:17:337 (1,2,3,4) - Some syncopation here would be nice. Try this. No, low speed now is bad :<

05:31:677 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - The rhythm here is weird; definitely not just straight sixteenths though. This rhythm sounds a bit better. (Yeah, it's a bit weird...) The rest of the streams in this section is also weird... I went through it at 25% speed and these parts don't really match that well: 05:37:776 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - 05:38:930 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - 05:40:084 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:42:062 (5,6,7,8) - 05:42:391 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 05:43:710 (5,6) - 05:44:205 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 05:45:029 (3,4,5,6,7) - 05:46:348 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:47:172 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 05:47:666 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 05:48:490 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:49:727 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8). Okay, that was a lot more than I expected... maybe I'm just too picky. (I don't know how to put those time things in a list with commas between them, so I'm using dashes instead.)

05:51:622 - Should stop kiai. Ok

06:01:183 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - The stream shouldn't start until 06:01:306, and it should be faster than sixteenths. I know but is unrankable with your speed, i prefer to use 1/4

06:16:512 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Shape can be improved. How?

06:41:732 - Fantasie Impromptu is such a good place for a stream. (It starts with 2 measures of triplets, then the rest is sixteenths.) Though it would be pretty exhausting... I do not know how to create streams

06:54:919 - Good place to start a gigantic stream too. And this one would be straight sixteenths. Nope

07:22:282 - For some reason, I was expecting a stream here. 1/6 nope.

07:28:710 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Shouldn't really start until 3. I prefer in this way

07:33:985 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Try turning 7 into a slider. I don't like it

07:35:139 (1,2,3) - I don't understand these. Should be at 07:35:304, 07:35:633, and 07:35:963? Piano part

08:00:853 (1,1,1) - I don't think anyone likes consecutive spinners. 1 spinner is boring and i prefer follow voice

08:16:677 - It feels like there's a measure missing. I know, i did it on purpose

08:23:930 (1,2) - Sliders with weird hitsounds again. ^

08:32:832 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The stream should start and end a beat earlier.

09:14:699 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - These circles sound weird. (Need hitsounds.) ?? they have hitsounds

09:22:611 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The stream starts half a beat early. Also, rearrange 09:23:105 (7,8) to improve shape. Ok

09:33:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Half a beat early.

09:48:985 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Seems half a beat early again. Or maybe 09:48:820 (5) is placed in an awkward position.

09:50:304 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The stream seems a bit unnecessary. (There's always that Fantasie Impromptu part that's great for streams...)

Well, that took a long time. I think some of the formatting broke too...

Thanks

Sephibro wrote:

owowowowo

01:43:710 (1,2) - fai in modo che abbiano la stessa forma o una piu' simile Ok
01:55:908 (5) - *te le segnalero' tutte perche' le odio, ti daro' consigli su come cambiarle solo per quelle che secondo me vanno tolte per forza Ok
02:03:820 (2) - * No
02:10:084 (5,6,7) - * ^
03:00:194 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - secondo me e' meglio se lasci il 5 in modo che la stella rimanga intatta, il 6 lo puoi lasciare dov'e'. cosi' sembra una stella mancamentata Ok
03:34:315 (1) - io sposterei lo slider in avanti in modo che starti sul bianco e sul rosso metterei un cerchio http://puu.sh/42Ns8.jpg OK ma in modo un po diverso
03:39:260 (4) - ^ No
da 04:12:721 (1) fino a 04:15:194 (5) - sostituirei prima e ultima oppure seconda e quarta con uno slider corto con reverseNo
04:24:342 (5) - eviterei di farlo partire sul blu Fixato
04:24:919 (1) - * qua puoi cambiare in http://puu.sh/42NHt.jpg No
04:36:128 (1) - parte un po' improvviso, lo accompagnerei da un trillo http://puu.sh/42NOc No
06:03:161 (4) - questi stream a 1/3 sono assolutamente troppo spaziati (lo spacing di questi e' almeno 1.10x, contro il 1.00x degli altri, comunque secondo me anche 0.90 non guasterebbe) Non tutti ho solo corretto un errore di spacing
06:15:606 (5) - questo lo toglierei No
06:16:512 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - questi mi piacciono molto, ma li metterei proprio overlappati in orizzontale e simmetrici rispetto all'asse y Sarebbero troppo distanti e no nsarebbe bello da vedere :\
06:32:007 (4,5,6) - http://puu.sh/42Owg.jpg o qualcosa del genere Grazie va bene ^^
06:35:798 (7,8,9) - avvicina entrambi gli slider al cerchio, pure qua porterei il distance snap da entrambi a 1.00x Ok
06:37:446 (5,6,7,8) - trovo quella croce un po' storta fuorviante, meglio un arco cosi': http://puu.sh/42OMi.jpg Mi piace più la croce veloce con minijump ma la sistemo meglio
06:41:732 - dio ti punira' per aver messo la pausa sulla fantasia improvviso Non so se riempirla e come
06:54:754 (2) - il salto e' abbastanza grande, anche qualcosa di questo tipo non verrebbe male http://puu.sh/42P1Q.jpg Ho solo otlto la tripletta
08:43:051 (6,7,8) - * le tre sviolinate durato esattamente un mezzo ciascuna, a differenza degli altri casi, stavolta usare questo pattern e' una forzatura. Preferisco cosìporterei questi 3 slider ad un mezzo e li vedrei bene disposti a triangolo e che vanno verso l'esterno, qualcosa di questo tipo http://puu.sh/42PkX.jpg
09:03:326 (3,4) - mi inganna ogni volta e premo (4) in anticipo, probabilmente e' un problema mio, ma NC (4) per sicurezza Ok
09:41:567 (8,9,10) - si legge male per via del 9 nascosto e dello spacing strano.. forse http://puu.sh/42PVs.jpg x:256 y:180 Spostato

Grazie mille ^^

One reason:I feel this playing better
[._.]
01:19:315 (4,5) - don't do this
01:24:589 (4) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934315
02:08:435 (9) - Ctrl+G
>02:09:095 (1) - Ctrl+G
02:17:337 (4) - not fit 3 well,move last point
02:19:150 (1,2,3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934319
>02:20:304 (4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934320
02:27:886 (3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934321
03:34:644 (2,3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934327
03:52:941 (6,7) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934412
03:57:886 (4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934416
04:00:029 (3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934417
04:27:556 (5) - make this bow angle less
04:40:743 (6,7,8,9) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934422
05:01:512 (1) - This can blanket more fits
05:11:732 (7) - Ctrl+G
05:33:161 (1) - 2nd point 340,240
06:25:908 (1) - move to center
Beethoven & miku makes me...lol
08:16:677 (8) - put at 7
08:23:930 (1,3) - I dont think bats will approve this._.
I think some sliders angel is too high,don't make sliders like 09:40:084 (2) - this, It is ugly XD

ts8zs wrote:

One reason:I feel this playing better
[._.]
01:19:315 (4,5) - don't do this Ok
01:24:589 (4) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934315 Ok
02:08:435 (9) - Ctrl+G Ok
>02:09:095 (1) - Ctrl+G Ok
02:17:337 (4) - not fit 3 well,move last point Ok
02:19:150 (1,2,3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934319 Ok
>02:20:304 (4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934320 Ok
02:27:886 (3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934321 Ok
03:34:644 (2,3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934327 Ok
03:52:941 (6,7) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934412 With some changes
03:57:886 (4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934416 Ok
04:00:029 (3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934417 Ok
04:27:556 (5) - make this bow angle less Ok
04:40:743 (6,7,8,9) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934422 Ok
05:01:512 (1) - This can blanket more fits Ok
05:11:732 (7) - Ctrl+G Ok
05:33:161 (1) - 2nd point 340,240 No
06:25:908 (1) - move to cent er Ok
Beethoven & miku makes me...lol xD
08:16:677 (8) - put at 7 No hard to read
08:23:930 (1,3) - I dont think bats will approve this._. :<
I think some sliders angel is too high,don't make sliders like 09:40:084 (2) - this, It is ugly XD

thanks ^^

If it were me I'd rank it just because of the storyboard o/
And, nice job with hitsounds!

02:00:688 (6) - It's hard to get the tempo at this note, maybe try making it New Combo

02:55:578 (9) - I'll point out this one for the whole map: generally I feel uncomfortable with streams right after a slider if the slider ends on the white tick, if it were me I'd make every slider end on the blue tick and make the stream start on the white tick. However this is just my mapping style, feel free to ignore this

05:31:842 (3,1) - Just a suggestion, wouldn't it be better to make these sliders "follow" the stream instead of pointing at the top?

I've looked through the whole map and actually I couldn't find more things to fix, it looks a good mapped Marathon!
Good luck!

Pagno wrote:

If it were me I'd rank it just because of the storyboard o/
And, nice job with hitsounds!

02:00:688 (6) - It's hard to get the tempo at this note, maybe try making it New Combo Ok

02:55:578 (9) - I'll point out this one for the whole map: generally I feel uncomfortable with streams right after a slider if the slider ends on the white tick, if it were me I'd make every slider end on the blue tick and make the stream start on the white tick. However this is just my mapping style, feel free to ignore this Uhm no i prefer this

05:31:842 (3,1) - Just a suggestion, wouldn't it be better to make these sliders "follow" the stream instead of pointing at the top? Oh thanks

I've looked through the whole map and actually I couldn't find more things to fix, it looks a good mapped Marathon!
Good luck!

^^

Ciao! ecco il mod

MARATHON

01:52:941 (3,4) - prova a fare un blancket migliore con questi due

02:36:952 (7,8) - secondo me dovresti eliminare la nota ed allungare lo slider fino a 02:37:282 - così il ritmo sarà uguale a quello che hai usato prima ed inoltre penso che suoni anche meglio

02:47:501 (6) - non mi piace molto la forma di questo slider, io ti consiglierei di farla più in questo modo se ti va

03:07:611 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - quello che penserei di fare in questo punto è dare una forma più definita al tutto... potresti spostare questi 2 03:07:611 (4,3) - a x:340-y:312 (non penso sia un problema visto che lo spacing non viene rispettato, come è giusto che sia) in più poi spostando anche 03:08:765 (5) - a x:200 - y:312 si verrà a formare una forma a M ben definita tra tutti 03:07:611 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5) -

04:02:172 (4) - la forma di questo slider non è proprio il massimo, potresti provare a farla più simmetrica, magari ruotala temporaneamente al dritto così puoi capire bene che forma viene fuori.

04:52:117 (5) - forse è meglio se copi/incolli lo slider precedente così viene qualcosa di più simmetrico

06:36:128 (8,9) - hm... non mi convince molto come viene il ritmo qui... penso che il giusto ritmo verrebbe se cancelli questi due e metti al loro posto uno slider che va da 06:36:128 - a 06:36:457 - ... comunque penso che va bene anche così, perchè la pattern è buona, anche se il ritmo continua a suonarmi un po' strano...

08:36:128 (7) - secondo me è meglio se lo muovi una grid in basso

09:06:457 (6,7) - forse è meglio se c'è prima la note e poi lo slider... secondo me per il ritmo viene meglio

09:44:864 (1,3) - forse potresti evitare di farli toccare

oook! è tutto! la map è ben fatta, ed è anche epica direi! visto che non sono molto bravo con le insane mi sono concentrato più sul ritmo o sull'estetica, trascurando la giocabilità. comunque buona mappa! e buona fortuna per l'approval!

luxoDeh wrote:

Ciao! ecco il mod

MARATHON

01:52:941 (3,4) - prova a fare un blancket migliore con questi due Ok

02:36:952 (7,8) - secondo me dovresti eliminare la nota ed allungare lo slider fino a 02:37:282 - così il ritmo sarà uguale a quello che hai usato prima ed inoltre penso che suoni anche meglio Ok

02:47:501 (6) - non mi piace molto la forma di questo slider, io ti consiglierei di farla più in questo modo se ti va Ok

SPOILER

03:07:611 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - quello che penserei di fare in questo punto è dare una forma più definita al tutto... potresti spostare questi 2 03:07:611 (4,3) - a x:340-y:312 (non penso sia un problema visto che lo spacing non viene rispettato, come è giusto che sia) in più poi spostando anche 03:08:765 (5) - a x:200 - y:312 si verrà a formare una forma a M ben definita tra tutti 03:07:611 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - Ok

04:02:172 (4) - la forma di questo slider non è proprio il massimo, potresti provare a farla più simmetrica, magari ruotala temporaneamente al dritto così puoi capire bene che forma viene fuori. Ok

04:52:117 (5) - forse è meglio se copi/incolli lo slider precedente così viene qualcosa di più simmetrico Ok

06:36:128 (8,9) - hm... non mi convince molto come viene il ritmo qui... penso che il giusto ritmo verrebbe se cancelli questi due e metti al loro posto uno slider che va da 06:36:128 - a 06:36:457 - ... comunque penso che va bene anche così, perchè la pattern è buona, anche se il ritmo continua a suonarmi un po' strano... Seguo la batteria preferisco farlo in 1/3

08:36:128 (7) - secondo me è meglio se lo muovi una grid in basso Ok

09:06:457 (6,7) - forse è meglio se c'è prima la note e poi lo slider... secondo me per il ritmo viene meglio Preferisco finire con la nota

09:44:864 (1,3) - forse potresti evitare di farli toccare Ok

oook! è tutto! la map è ben fatta, ed è anche epica direi! visto che non sono molto bravo con le insane mi sono concentrato più sul ritmo o sull'estetica, trascurando la giocabilità. comunque buona mappa! e buona fortuna per l'approval!

Grazie ^^

hi~ m4m
your mod is faster than mine x_x

[Marathon]
01:20:798(1) this 01:22:611(3,4) same angle?
02:43:710(3) not surround (2) perfect
03:17:337(1,3,5) yeah i like these :3
03:53:435(7) try to same as (6) 03:54:754(2) x308 y144 looks neat
04:15:853(3) less bending
04:25:249(2) this..? looks better i think05:05:963(6) red point two grid right
05:34:397(5) i do not know why this note is not the same as the distance with other o.o
05:51:952(1) less bending?
06:09:095(2) 30 degrees counter-clockwise
07:37:776(4) do you like this ? 09:29:534(2) what about.. 09:52:941(9) straight line plz

wow,what a long song :O
awesome map~! i only can give some suggestions

GL for ranking >w<

bigfrog wrote:

hi~ m4m
your mod is faster than mine x_x

[Marathon]
01:20:798(1) this

01:22:611(3,4) same angle?
02:43:710(3) not surround (2) perfect
03:17:337(1,3,5) yeah i like these :3
03:53:435(7) try to same as (6)

03:54:754(2) x308 y144 looks neat
04:15:853(3) less bending
04:25:249(2) this..? looks better i think

05:05:963(6) red point two grid right
05:34:397(5) i do not know why this note is not the same as the distance with other o.o
05:51:952(1) less bending?
06:09:095(2) 30 degrees counter-clockwise
07:37:776(4) do you like this ?

09:29:534(2) what about..

09:52:941(9) straight line plz

wow,what a long song :O
awesome map~! i only can give some suggestions

GL for ranking >w<

Thanks! ^^

omg ~o.o~

Puncia wrote:

omg ~o.o~ I think is better now ^^ thanks

ヾ(´･ω･｀)

[Marathon]

for preventing my very loong mod consider fixing most of the jumps it makes weird if its too far its too weird if its too close so youll have to focus where you should place it correctly

01:18:655 make this slider into this http://puu.sh/47YK1.pngthis looks good better than the b4 slider besides this is making blanket
01:28:216 compress this slider or remapped the notes make new pattern this pattern is bad very,
01:39:754 place this (1) somewhere else because this note started the nc and it might feel weird for players
02:11:073 nc then delete nc on 02:11:402
02:11:732 then nc on this
02:54:260 not very fond of this slider bend this more so it can blanket 02:54:754
04:56:238 isnt there are more good sliders than this?
04:59:864 move to x:428 y:20 to get blanket
07:33:161 move to x:208 Y:96 cuz of blanket again
07:38:095 nc to remove the 10 and 11 and 12
07:57:721 follow this picture correctly your placing in here is bad http://puu.sh/47Zr7.png
08:15:194 no more sliders like this plz replace this

dun i like the streams only the jumps pls fix them imo.... you should not mapped itself you should perform collab with people this such good song..

YunoFanatic wrote:

[Marathon]

for preventing my very loong mod consider fixing most of the jumps it makes weird if its too far its too weird if its too close so youll have to focus where you should place it correctly

01:18:655 make this slider into this http://puu.sh/47YK1.pngthis looks good better than the b4 slider besides this is making blanket Ok
01:28:216 compress this slider or remapped the notes make new pattern this pattern is bad very, Ok
01:39:754 place this (1) somewhere else because this note started the nc and it might feel weird for players Ok
02:11:073 nc then delete nc on 02:11:402 Ok
02:11:732 then nc on this Ok
02:54:260 not very fond of this slider bend this more so it can blanket 02:54:754 No
04:56:238 isnt there are more good sliders than this? No
04:59:864 move to x:428 y:20 to get blanket Ok
07:33:161 move to x:208 Y:96 cuz of blanket again Ok
07:38:095 nc to remove the 10 and 11 and 12 Ok
07:57:721 follow this picture correctly your placing in here is bad http://puu.sh/47Zr7.png Ok
08:15:194 no more sliders like this plz replace this Ok

dun i like the streams only the jumps pls fix them imo.... you should not mapped itself you should perform collab with people this such good song..

Thanks ^^

Ciao~ M4M via. pm request!

[General]
Capitalize uta --> Uta

[Marathon]
Try OD-1? Since that's a marathon, OD8 might be too harsh or players would just simply rage at dis map Furthermore there are some short spinners, so OD7 would be good
01:23:435 (6) - It might be too far. I did not expect it to be 1/2
01:34:315 (1) - I would move the second red point somewhere to the right to create notable difference with the upcoming note
01:41:073 (1) - I suggest you to make this mirrored from the previous slider, it'll look better
01:46:183 (5) - space this farther so it wouldn't break the flow
01:51:293 (3) - try reversing its direction of curve:
01:58:710 (5) - ^
02:15:359 (5) - it collides with other sliders. Move it further or make a new shape
02:20:304 (4,5) - I don't like this flow. Copy (2) and (3) and put it in the midway?
02:24:260 (9) - add a whistle sound at its tail?
02:47:996 (7) - put it like this for cursor flow:
02:50:633 (6) - love these two :3
03:07:117 (2) - instead of putting it behind (1), you could just put it next to (1), better flow I suppose
04:20:633 (1) - Ctrl+G for this one for flow?
04:47:666 (5,6) - I would make them straight instead, since the vocals is quite agitated
05:19:974 - add a note here?
06:17:996 (1) - add a whistle sound on every upbeat here, it sounds too bland currently
06:37:446 (5,6) - this spacing is not really doable
08:38:271 (6) - move the second anchor point to make a nice blanket with (5)
08:44:864 (3) - space farther for consistency
08:54:342 (6,7) - don't make this turn, it is too hard to follow
09:50:963 (2) - Ctrl+G. hardly catch from previous slider imo
09:52:941 (9) - remove the finish. the "AHHH" starts at 09:52:776 (7) - so add a finish on it instead
^ also NC this for consistency
09:55:578 (1) - ^


Good work on hitsounds, SB and combo colours. Pretty nice map too.
Deserves a star~good luck!

kelvinli wrote:

Ciao~ M4M via. pm request!

[General]
Capitalize uta --> Uta

[Marathon]
Try OD-1? Since that's a marathon, OD8 might be too harsh or players would just simply rage at dis map Furthermore there are some short spinners, so OD7 would be good Ok thanks ^^
01:23:435 (6) - It might be too far. I did not expect it to be 1/2 No
01:34:315 (1) - I would move the second red point somewhere to the right to create notable difference with the upcoming note Yes

SPOILER

01:41:073 (1) - I suggest you to make this mirrored from the previous slider, it'll look better Yes

SPOILER

01:46:183 (5) - space this farther so it wouldn't break the flow Yes
01:51:293 (3) - try reversing its direction of curve: Yes

SPOILER

01:58:710 (5) - ^ Yes

SPOILER

02:15:359 (5) - it collides with other sliders. Move it further or make a new shape Yes
02:20:304 (4,5) - I don't like this flow. Copy (2) and (3) and put it in the midway? No
02:24:260 (9) - add a whistle sound at its tail? No
02:47:996 (7) - put it like this for cursor flow: Yes

SPOILER

02:50:633 (6) - love these two :3 :D
03:07:117 (2) - instead of putting it behind (1), you could just put it next to (1), better flow I suppose Yes

SPOILER

04:20:633 (1) - Ctrl+G for this one for flow? No
04:47:666 (5,6) - I would make them straight instead, since the vocals is quite agitated Yes
05:19:974 - add a note here? No
06:17:996 (1) - add a whistle sound on every upbeat here, it sounds too bland currently Yes Thanks
06:37:446 (5,6) - this spacing is not really doable I know but it's a minijump
08:38:271 (6) - move the second anchor point to make a nice blanket with (5) Yes
08:44:864 (3) - space farther for consistency No
08:54:342 (6,7) - don't make this turn, it is too hard to follow Yes
09:50:963 (2) - Ctrl+G. hardly catch from previous slider imo No
09:52:941 (9) - remove the finish. the "AHHH" starts at 09:52:776 (7) - so add a finish on it instead No
^ also NC this for consistency Yes
09:55:578 (1) - ^ No


Good work on hitsounds, SB and combo colours. Pretty nice map too.
Deserves a star~good luck!

Thanks

M4M richiesta tramite PM.

[Marathon]

01:22:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Dato che nelle parti in cui l'SB è senza colori usi la combo grigia, perchè non la usi pure qui? E parte a colori da 01:23:765 (1) -

Consiglio per gli slider; quando fai qualsiasi tipo di slider fai in modo che l'ultimo punto finisce al centro http://puu.sh/4awUR.jpg , cosi la forma viene precisa e soprattutto ti viene più semplice fare degli slider in successione simili o uguali come in questo caso: 01:42:721 (2,3) - N.B: è solo un consiglio, per rendere tutto più consistente.
Nell'esempio che ti ho linkato sopra dovresti solo sistemare il (2).

01:43:710 (1,2) - Sposta il (2) con DS 1.6x in modo da eliminare l'overlap http://puu.sh/4ax7B.jpg - http://puu.sh/4ax7b.jpg

01:55:908 (4) - Farei finire questo slider su 01:56:073 - , a te la scelta.
02:03:820 (2) - Stessa cosa qui, 02:04:150 (3) - , non mi suona tanto bene con la fine sul tick blue.
02:22:776 (4) - Elimina l'overlap http://puu.sh/4axg4.jpg - http://puu.sh/4axgA.jpg
02:25:249 (2) - Anche qui come per gli altri due slider che finiscono sul tick blue, lo farei finire su 02:25:413 -
02:32:501 (1,2) - Non sono tanto belli da vedere messi cosi , decidi tu se tenerli o cambiare disposizione.
03:52:611 (4) - Spostalo su x:304 y:112 cosi la distanza è uguale agli altri seguenti: 03:52:776 (5) - 03:53:930 (8) -

08:33:573 (4) - Non so se sia voluto (ma non credo), sistemerei lo spacing esattamente come il resto dello stream, quindi sposta direttamente 08:33:573 (4,5,6,7) - con 1.0x DS http://puu.sh/4awsX.jpg

GL

[Marathon]

_ 01:22:529 (2) - Lo sposterei verso> x:296 y:296
_ 01:22:611 (3) - ^> x:340 y:304
_ 01:28:216 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Non so se per te sembra meglio, ma secondo me mettere [9] finire dove c'era [1] è meglio
_ 01:53:765 (6) - Lo sposterei verso> x:476 y:284

_ 02:44:699 (6) - ^ Più o meno> x:52 y:112
_ 02:49:150 (2) - ^> x:476 y:164

_ 03:48:655 (3) - ^> x:188 y:224
_ 03:52:941 (6) - Forse è meglio se lo capovolgi questo slider, capisco il jump, ma il flow ne risente troppo.

_ 05:00:194 (5) - Toglierei questo slider perchè non rappresenta una nota nella canzone
_ 05:38:023 (8,9,10,11,12) - Perchè qui cambi lo Spacing?

_ 06:08:435 (6) - Non sento tanta differenza nella musica tra questo e 06:08:765 (1) questo, quindi perchè lo devi fare 1/8?
_ 07:10:578 (3) - Perchè qui cambi lo Spacing?

_ 09:50:304 (1,2) - Avvicinerei i due slider siccome fanno parte della stessa stream. Uguale per 09:52:941 (1,2) and 09:55:578 (1,2) e 09:58:216 (1,2)

giO- wrote:

M4M richiesta tramite PM.

[Marathon]

01:22:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Dato che nelle parti in cui l'SB è senza colori usi la combo grigia, perchè non la usi pure qui? E parte a colori da 01:23:765 (1) -

Consiglio per gli slider; quando fai qualsiasi tipo di slider fai in modo che l'ultimo punto finisce al centro http://puu.sh/4awUR.jpg , cosi la forma viene precisa e soprattutto ti viene più semplice fare degli slider in successione simili o uguali come in questo caso: 01:42:721 (2,3) - N.B: è solo un consiglio, per rendere tutto più consistente.
Nell'esempio che ti ho linkato sopra dovresti solo sistemare il (2).

01:43:710 (1,2) - Sposta il (2) con DS 1.6x in modo da eliminare l'overlap http://puu.sh/4ax7B.jpg - http://puu.sh/4ax7b.jpg

01:55:908 (4) - Farei finire questo slider su 01:56:073 - , a te la scelta. No seguo il vocal ^^
02:03:820 (2) - Stessa cosa qui, 02:04:150 (3) - , non mi suona tanto bene con la fine sul tick blue. ^
02:22:776 (4) - Elimina l'overlap http://puu.sh/4axg4.jpg - http://puu.sh/4axgA.jpg
02:25:249 (2) - Anche qui come per gli altri due slider che finiscono sul tick blue, lo farei finire su 02:25:413 - ^
02:32:501 (1,2) - Non sono tanto belli da vedere messi cosi , decidi tu se tenerli o cambiare disposizione.
03:52:611 (4) - Spostalo su x:304 y:112 cosi la distanza è uguale agli altri seguenti: 03:52:776 (5) - 03:53:930 (8) -

08:33:573 (4) - Non so se sia voluto (ma non credo), sistemerei lo spacing esattamente come il resto dello stream, quindi sposta direttamente 08:33:573 (4,5,6,7) - con 1.0x DS http://puu.sh/4awsX.jpg

GL

Ho messo in rosso solo quello che non ho corretto ^^

Panino103 wrote:

[Marathon]

_ 01:22:529 (2) - Lo sposterei verso> x:296 y:296
_ 01:22:611 (3) - ^> x:340 y:304
_ 01:28:216 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Non so se per te sembra meglio, ma secondo me mettere [9] finire dove c'era [1] è meglio Rovinerei il flow se lo faccio, lo stream deve partire dal basso
_ 01:53:765 (6) - Lo sposterei verso> x:476 y:284

_ 02:44:699 (6) - ^ Più o meno> x:52 y:112
_ 02:49:150 (2) - ^> x:476 y:164

_ 03:48:655 (3) - ^> x:188 y:224
_ 03:52:941 (6) - Forse è meglio se lo capovolgi questo slider, capisco il jump, ma il flow ne risente troppo.

_ 05:00:194 (5) - Toglierei questo slider perchè non rappresenta una nota nella canzone Segue il violino
_ 05:38:023 (8,9,10,11,12) - Perchè qui cambi lo Spacing? Perchè sono uno scemo

_ 06:08:435 (6) - Non sento tanta differenza nella musica tra questo e 06:08:765 (1) questo, quindi perchè lo devi fare 1/8? Segue la chitarra ma forse può confondere, per ora lo lascio così
_ 07:10:578 (3) - Perchè qui cambi lo Spacing?

_ 09:50:304 (1,2) - Avvicinerei i due slider siccome fanno parte della stessa stream. Uguale per 09:52:941 (1,2) and 09:55:578 (1,2) e 09:58:216 (1,2)

Idem per l'altra mod ^^

Grazie a tutti